高中英语教学：读后续写语言

环境：感官

OnSundaymyfatherandIwenttolookattheocean.Wesawtheenormous

wavescrashingontothesteepcliffbelowus.Wecouldfeelthecoldwindchillingour

handsandfaces,andblowingourumbrellasinsideout.Therewasasaltytasteinthe

airandafishysmellasthewindblewfiercelytowardsusfromacrossthewater.All

arounduswecouldheartheseagulls.Igrabbedmyfather'shandandsaid,“Ithink

it'stoocoldtogoswimmingtoday.”

方位：Behindhimwerethewavesofthesea,endlesslyrisingandsinking,and

aheadofhimweretheimmovableforests,reachinguptowardsthesunshine.

总分：Everythingisunfriendly:thetemperature,thedarknessandthewind.Iwas

numbedbythecoldandexhaustion.

具体：Afullmoonwasshininginadarkblue,starlesssky,andtheairwassoft

andwarm.

比喻：Moonlightisconfusingandmysterious;itmakesrealthingslookshadowy

andshadowslookreal.章子杨

对比：Outsideitwasfoggyanddark,buttheroomwasbrightandwarm.

重复：Thedeadsilencewasbrokenonlybyaregulardrip,dripdrip.

Therewerebrightlycoloredflowersinthegardensandwarm,softairblewin

throughtheopenwindow.

Acrashofthundermademeliftmyhead,andlightningsuddenlylitupthenight.A

fewmomentslater,wewereinthemiddleofastorm,withanangrywindshakingthe

windows.

闪电：Thefiercelightingisscratchingtheskywithitsnails.

树木：Thethintreeswereblowingwildly,anduntidygreycloudswassailingpasta

palemoon.

听:Therainwasstillbeatingonthewindow,andIcouldhearthewindinthetrees.

Astrongwindwasblowingandtherewasalargecrackofthunder,suddenlyrain

poureddown.

丰杨：

Tired,hungryandthirstyashewas(although),hestillwore(had)afaintsmileonhis

face,whichgiveseveryoneafeelingofsafety.Abdulsaidthatifwetookonemore

step,maybewewouldfindthewatertodrinkandthefirewoodtocookthefood.

Hearingthis,theyrosetotheirfeetandstaggeredon.Withoutcamels,thepilotled

theminsearchofanexit,Suddenlythereseemedtobeanoasisinfrontofthem.

徐B日：Otherswerearguingindespair,buthesaidnothing,merelywatchingthem.

Minutestickedby,andtheskywasslowlyenvelopedindarkness,asifhopesintheir

heartswereswallowedupbydespair."Nothingisimpossibletoawillingheart,ifwe

sitaroundindespair,weareboundtodie^^Abdulebrokethesilence.

邓孝思：Hopeandyouthfulenergyroseupinthemagain,likeleavesonayoungtree

inspring.

罗方:wherethereisgrass,thereiswater.Soheaskedeveryonetodigtherock.

徐璐珈；

Theystaggeredonthedesertstepbystep,nooneknewhowlongtheyhadwalked.

P2:“Listen,Ihaveheardthesoundofwater!heshoutedwithshiningeyes.Their

bitternesssuddenlychangedtoabsolutedelight.

叶秀珍

Butthirsthadcomeasawildbeast,ashadtiredness.

惊讶：

Theylookedateachotherwithoutjoyandwithouthope,desperatelywaitingtobe

shelteredfromreality他们面面相觑,没有欢乐也没有希望，只是竭力地希望躲

避这严酷的现实。

Withpartedlipsoveronetwitchingshoulder.(痉挛的肩膀)

Stoleawaytowardsthedoorwithouttakinghiseyesoff.

沉思：bedeeplyoccupiedinthinging.

日寸间：MinutestickedbybeforeIknew

饥饿：Hestruggledtohisfeetandlimpedon.Hehadnoteatenfortwodays.He

pickedsomesmallround,tastelessfruits.Theydidnotsatisfy,butheknewhemust

eatthem.

(又寸比)Hisfoothurt,butitwasnothingcomparedwithhishunger,whichmade

himgoonuntildarknessfell.Hisblanketwaswet,butheknewonlyhewashungry.

Inhistroubledsleep,hedreamedofrichmeals.(梦境)Hewokeupcold,sickand

lost;

Herosetohisfeetandstagedon.

利用形容词，动作，表情，对话，强调句，虚拟语气，相像等表达情感。

羞愧

Paragraphl:Asshereachedinherbaggage,shegasped(喘气)withsurprise.She

tookitoutcarefullyandwassurprisedtoseeherownpacketofcookies.Atthat

moment,thewomanwassoashamed(adj.)thatshecoveredherfacewith

mouthopenwidelyandfaceturningredinstantly(actions).Theplaneseemedto

stopthere,rootedtothespot(metaphor).*WhyhadIridiculouslyconsideredhim

asacookiethief?Iowehimasincereapology*(dialogue),shethought.Justas

shewasblankinherhead,suddenly,asoftandclearvoice,*Excuseme,Lady',

wokeheruptotherealworld.Shelookedbackinstinctivelytoseewhohewas.

尴尬

Paragraph2:Surprisingly,shefoundthemansittingjustbehindher.Itwasthe

manwho,shethought,wasrudnandatehercookies,smilingather.(stress)She

loweredabitofherbodyshamefully,hesitatedforamoment,andintroducedherself

nervously.(adv.)Afterfurthercommunication,shewassurprisedtofindthatthe

gentlemanwasactuallyhisnewbossinLondon.Shewasstruckdeadwith

embarrassment,withheartbeatingpainfullyfastandbangingagainstherribs(with).

Alltheairseemedtodisappearandshefeltasifthewholeworldwerewatching

her.(subjusctive)Seeingherembarrassmentandnervousness,theconsiderateboss

calmedherdownpatientlyandaskedhertodiscusshernewjobaheadoftime.'What

acoincidence!Whatanunforgivablemistake!1,shethought.

惊讶和尴尬：surpriseorembarrassment

1.Adjectives

Shestoodbesideherchair,suiprisedandembarrassed.

Soembarrassedwasshethatshestoodthereclumsily,feelingthebloodrushingtoher

face.

2.Bodylanguages(actions)

Shecuppedherfacewithherhands,scrached(挠)herhead,breathedandbreathed

untilshefeltcalmer.

Sheloweredabitofherbody,hesitatedforamoment,wonderinghowtohideher

innerembarrassment.

3.Facialexpresions

Sheopenedhermouthwithhereyeswideningandfaceturningred.

Suddenly,sheleaptup,embarrassmentwritteninherredface.

4.Otherindirectdescriptions

Alltheairseemedtodisappearandshefeltasifthewholeworldwaswatchingher.

(sceneandrhetoric修辞)

Shewasstruckdeadwithembarrassment,heartbeatingpainfullyfastandbanging

againstherribs(肋骨).(rhetoric修辞)

Aminahwasveryangry.

Grabbingakey,shestormedoutslammingthedoorclose.

ActionShejumpedintohercar,startedtheengine,andwassetto

leave.

Dialogue“1willneverbelieveyouagain!”shebarkedathimat

thetopofherlungs.

Thoughts/1amnotgoingtoallowhimtotreatmelikeaslave.

Monologue

Shewasshakinglikealeaf.Herwholebody

Descriptive/quiveredwithanuncontrollablerage.Saltywarm

Sensorytearsstreameddownherpalesoftcheeksonly

detailsstoppingwhentheyreachedhersvjollendrylips.

Herfootstompedontothesmallaccelerator,tyres

squealingasshespedawayleavinganodourof

burntrubberlingeringintheair.

眼神：Hiseyesflashingfire/Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.

动作：Hechargedoff,hisfaceasredascranberrysauce.

Hiseyesflashedfire,asshejumpedupfromseats.

Heinstantlystared,hiseyebrowsraised,hisfacebristling（被激怒）withanger,andhe

staredangrilyatme.

Helenpressedherhandsflatonthetable,sothattheendsofherfingerswentwhite.

Hewasfumingwithrage.

Angereruptslikeavolcano.

悲伤：过程

Shesobbed,hereyessuddenlyblurred（眼眶红了）,strugglingtearsgushedout

theeyesocket,likeabrokenlineofbeads,tearsstreamdowntodripdown,wetly

acrosshercheek,dropbydropflowdown,afterawhile,shewascrying,tears

poweringdownlikeawaterfall.关B晶妮

表情：Thenewscastacloudofgloomoverhisface.

Thecoldinsidehimmadehiseyesred,andhisthinlipsblue,andhisvoicehighand

cross.Thefrostinhisheartmadetheairaroundcold,too.郑梦晴

动作：Butaminutelaterhefellbackintohischair,andsatthereshakingwithaface

nowaswhiteasdeathitself,hesaidnotaword.Ifeltdeeplysorryforhim.徐俊B日

Overwhelmedbysorrow,heletoutacry.

Myhandsshock,myhearthurtandmysoulleftdead.

比喻：Shelookedstraightinfrontofher,andherfacewasascoldandhardas

marble.

惊讶：

对话:"That9sincredible.^^

反衬：Foraminute,shewastoosurprisedtospeak.

比喻：Amazed,hefeltlikeatravelerwhosuddenlyseesflowersbetweenthestones

ofthedesert.

Istaredathiminshock,andasmallsoundofdismayescapedmythroat.不禁沮丧地

叫了一声。

Hestared,blushed,doubtedandwassilent.瞪大眼，涨红脸,难以置信地样子，一

句话也说不出。

快乐

眼神：Shefeltthrilled,hereyestwinkledwithexcitementandherheartwas

thumpingwithexcitement.两眼放光，激动地心怦怦直跳。

声音：Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom.

HisfaceoftenbrokeintoaflowerofHappiness,andthesilverringoflaughterstill

reverberatedinmyears,likeapianothatwouldneverbefinished.王千千

Hesmiledsuddenly,exposingasetofamazinglywhiteteeth.

BarelycanIconcealmyexcitement,Iopenedtheboxsoftly,asifitwasmyprecious

treasure.

Heartbrimmingwithwildjoy,Iunpackedthegiftboxcarefully.

动作：Irantotheboxwithacharmingsmileonmyface.IwonderifCinderella

stayedinthegiftbox.

"MybeautifulCindereIla!^^Iyelledinsideandpickedupthebeautifullypackedgift

box,dreamingofhercrystalshoes.

动作：Ijumpedthreefeetintheair.AlthoughIwantedtoopenthegiftbox

immediately,Istillcontrolledmyeagerness.Iwenttothekitchenwithmyface

brokenintoflowerandsaidtomymother.

表'情：Reliefbroughtasmiletoherlips.

Asmileofjoyandsatisfactionlituphereagerface.

Arushofexcitementsentcolortohercheeks.

Hiseyesnarrowedindelight.

Iamnowinarelaxedmood,likethewhitecloudsofthebluesky.

比喻：Unforgettablewerehereyesthatshonelikediamondsandlipsheldina

steadysmile.

Hiseyestwinkledwithpleasure.

Sheworeshiningsmileonherface.

失望

IstayedrootedtothespotthemomentIfoundit.

余小婷：

AsItookapartthegiftbox,whatcameintomysightwasanuglydoll,nocrystal

shoes,notiaraandnoshiningredsilkonher.Ithrewmyselfintoachair,crying.

Suddenly,Isawanoteatthebottomofthebox,reading:"Mydear,TmsorryI

4munabletogiveyoutheuniquedollliketheononeintheshoppingwindow——〃

・ButwhenIsawthedollinthebox,myheartsanktothebottom------Itwasanugly

dollmadeofroughclothanditshairwasnotgoldenbutblack.Theclothesitwas

wearingwerejustjustapieceofredpaper.IwassodisappointedthatIdidn'trealize

thegiftboxIhadhaddroppedtotheground.------罗方

章子杨：ThemomentIsawthebox,Irantowardsit,jumping,dancingandyelling,

justlikealittleflyingbird.Heartbrimmingwithjoy,IcircledtheChristmastreesand

thensatunderthetreequietlyandopenedtheboxgently.IknewmyCinderelladoll

waslyinginsideit.However,myheartsanktothebottomtheinstantIopenedthebox,

therelayadollwithoutsilkygoldenhairorcrystalshoes.Ihadalumpinmythroat

andtriedhardtofightbacktears.Myheartmusthavebeenbrokenthen.

AtthattimeInoticedthecallusesonherhand,whichremindedmeofallthosedays

shehadbeenworkingonthedoll.Suddenly,IhadtearsinmyeyesbutIfoughtback

tearsandyelledwithabigsmile:"Mum,Ilikethedollverymuch,Everyoneloved

Cinderella,butIloveheruglysister.1wouldneverforgetthisuniqueChristmasgift.

——江欣建

感激：GeorgeandIstoodthere,dumbfounded,watchinghimfinishingthewhole

job,gratitudeandadmirationrushinginmyheart.

人物：Ihadneverheardassweetasoundasthisgirl'svoice,notseenanythingas

beautifulasthelargedarkeyesthatwatchedme,fullofcareandwonder.

Herhairisbrownandcurly.Myfacewasfilledwithsmile,allcornersofthe

mouth.

Hewastallandstronglybuilt,withadeepvoiceandaconfidentwayoftalking.

Hewastallandthin,withasympathetic,intelligentface,andwhitehairbrushed

backfromahighforehead.

Theyoungwomanwastallandperfectlyshaped.Shehadlongdarkhairwhich

shoneinthesunlightandabeautifulfacewithdeepblackeyes.

渴望：hiseagerblackeyesfollowedtheoaktreewithsucheagerinterestthathe

sometimesstoppedbreathingforasmuchashalfaminute.

绝望：

Hearingthenews,hefrozewithshock,asifrootedontheground

希望：Hopeandyouthfulenergyroseupinheragain,likeleavesonayoungtreein

spring.

春天：Flowersarebloomingandthebirdaresingingafreshnewmelody.

EverythingIsawremindedmethatSpringiscomingandalongwithit,atimefornew

beginning.

Intheearlyspring,frostfellduringthenight,andthinmisthungonthetreeandlawn.

夏天：Iwasgreetedbybrightsunlightandviewofblueseathroughthewind.

Therewasnocloudinthesky,nowind,onlyaflamesun.allthetreesstoodthere

lazily.

秋天：thegentlebreezebroughtthecharmingfragranceofpeachblossomsalong

withitandthewholeworldseemedtoturnpink.

冬天：thebitingwindwasmakingmecold,Icouldn'tfeelmynoseandmybreath

formedathickfogintheair.

Thedaypassed,theweekspassed,andsummerchangedintoagoldenautumn.

Theairwasheavyandchilledustothebone.

孤独：

Shefeltleftoutandwasdesperatewithloneliness.

Itwasnotonlytheroomthatdepressedhim.Hefeltlonelywithnofriendsandnoone

tocarefbrhim.

Uponhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn'thelp

cryingbitterly,herheartached,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.

宽慰：

AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane's

mind.

Reliefbroughtasmiletoherlips

痛苦

WhenIgotbittenbyasnake,Istoppedthewoundbyusingbandagetopreventthe

otherorgansfrombeinginfected.Theskinwasswollenandmyheadthrobbedwith

pain,andgradually,aspasmofpaincontortedmyface.

Desperateandhopeless,shekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.

Whataface——sowhite,sowild,sodespairing.

Aspasmofpaincontortedhisface.

害怕

Timeseemedtostandstill,thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthree

minutes.

Iwasfrightenedalmostoutofmymind.Ifelldownandmybodystartedshaking.

MybodyfeltemptyandIwashotinside,likeafire,mybodyachedandmyskinwas

wetallover曾雨欣

Ibegantofeelfrightenedandhopeless,asIlaythereinthedark.徐梦婷

Herfingerstrembledandherfacewentdeathlypale.

Fearimmediatelydescendedonhim一阵害怕向他袭来。

Awaveofterrorwashedoverhim.

Suddenlyhiseyesnearlyjumpedoutofhishead,andhismouthopenedinfrightened

surprise.

Herheartbeatsoviolentlythatshenearlysuffocated.窒息.

Iwantedtospeak,butIstoodtheretongue-tied.

Frozenwithfear,shestoodrootedtothespot.

虚弱：

Helayonthepavement,shaking,hisfeetbleeding.

恐惧：

Hewassuddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.

Acoldfeelingoffearpassedoverhim.

Shewaspale,breathlessandtrembling.

Hestoodstill,frozenwithfear.

Whenherealizedwhathadhappened,hisfacelookedlikeanoldman's.露出了沧桑

的表情。

Hisfacewentpaleandhewasclearlystrugglingtocontrolhimself.

Hejumpedbackasifhehadbeenstung,andbloodrushedintohiswrinkledface.

后悔：

Hadn'tIquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'tbetrappdinthisawfulplace,confronted

withthedangerofdying.

愤怒

Helenbangedherfistonthetable.王建顺

Withhispale,wrinkledfaceandhisred,staringeyes,helookedlikeadeviloutof

hell.

Thensuddenlyheseemedtoexplodewithanger.

Hefrownedangrilyattheman,andaskedsharply.

不安：

Iwanderedaboutfbranhourlookingforalikelyspot,

feelingasthoughIwereabouttocommitacrime.ThenIstoppedatlastundera

bridgenearthestationanddecidedtostartperformance.

Ifeltnervousandshaky.Itwasthefirsttime,afterall.Idrewtheviolinfrom

mycoatlikeagun.Itwashere,inSouthampton,withtrainsrattlingoverhead,thatI

wasabouttodeclaremyself.OnemomentIwaspartofthehunyingcrowds,the

nextIstoodhere,mybacktothewall,myhatonthepavementbeforeme,theviolin

undermychin.

Shesankintothechair,herheaddroppedonherarms.

Shewalkedfeverishlyupanddowntheroom.焦躁不安地走。

MrHydehesitatedforamoment,徐璐珈

Hisheartlikeasevenortenginintherotation.好像有7-80个牯辘在转。

Hisenthusiasmfaded,hisvoicehesitated,hislipstrembled,hiseyesdroppedin

confusion.

Sheetsofflameshotintotheair,drivingcloudsofsmokeinhisdirection.—片片火焰

喷向空中，浓烟向他袭来。

Inastateofagitation.心慌

Panicspreadacrossherface.

Hefeltlikeacatonahotbrick.

比喻：

Thestarssparkledlikediamonds.

Thenightskywasasdarkasthedeepestocean.

Thesnakemovedlikearippleonapond.

惊慌：

Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmy

horse.AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,I

automaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.However,itbecame

scaredandstartedtorunlikecrazy.Allthiscoming,withoutwarning,

Iwasseizedbyfear."Don'tletgotherope!Keepcalm!"yelledDad.I

followedwhathetoldmeto.Tomyrelief,itstoppedslowly.But

beforewejumpedoffthehorses,wefoundthatwehadbeenoffthe

beatentrackandgotlost.（81字）

担心：

Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgot

dark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourway

back.Ikeptshoutingforhelp,hopingmyshoutscouldbeheard

bysomeone,buttherewasnoreply.Dadsoundedalittleworried

asheremindedmetocalmdown.Itwasthenthatmymindraced.

"Listen,Dad,therushingriverwater,"Ishoutedexcitedly,"we

canreturntothefarmhousedowntheriver."Beforelong,we

caughtsightofthelightsinthedistance.Weknewweweresafe.

Whatathrillingvacation,likeneverbefore,wehad!(93字)

惊吓

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.①

Instinctively,Iyelledoutloud,pullingbackthereinshardinorderto

stopthehorsefromhurtingthelittlecreature.②Badlystartledby

thesuddenincident,thehorsespedoffthetrackintoanother

direction.③Dadfollowedcloselybehind,callingouttotellmehow

tosoothetheterrifiedhorseandIdidastold.©Finally,thehorse

calmeddown,butweseemedtoqetlost,unabletogobacktothe

mountainroado

哭：

Therimsofhereyeswereredwithcrying.

Shesobbed,hereyessuddenlyblurred,strugglingtearsgushedouttheeyesocket,

likeabrokenlineofbeads,tearsstreamdowntodripdown,wetlyacrosshercheek,

dropbydropflowndown,afterawhile,shewascrying,tearspouringdown,likea

waterfall.

Sheswallowedhardandforcedbackhertears.

Havealumpinone'sthroat哽咽

Nosoonerhadshesaiditthansheburstintoadryhardsobbing.

Overwhelmedbysorrow,heletoutacry.

Tearsmistedhiseyes.

疲惫：

Hislegsweresoweakthattheyshookbeneathhim.

紧张：TimeseemedtobeagainstmeoIkeptlookingatmywatch,staringatthe

slowlymovingofthesecondhand.

Sheshookallover,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.

如：(Paragraph1)课文中有关灾后场面的描写，SanFranciscoisgone.

Itsbusinessesaregone.Thefactories,hotelsandpalacesareall

gonetoo.Allofthewaysmanhadmadetokeepthecitysafewere

goneinthethirtysecondstheearthmoved.这里的四个“gone”运用重

复(repetition)修辞,在语气上层层递进，给人言语上的压迫感，体现地羸

给这座城市带来的全方位破坏瓦解。

再如：(Paragraph2)AlistofbuiIdingsundestroyedwasnowonlya

fewaddresses.Alistofthebravemenandwomenwouldfillalibrary.

Alistofallthosekilledwillneverbemade.运用排比(Parallelism)修

辞，使地震给这座城市带来的巨