人教版江西省中考英语专题复习之书面表达课件

Writing书面表达专题复习LearningGoals学习目标1.能理解、分析题目，正确审题并根据题目要求列出作文提纲。

2.能了解过程性写作的各个环节及关注点。5.能描述自己对未来的规划，了解应该怎样自我提升，为祖国的发展贡献一份力量。3.能辨识语篇中的衔接手段，并能将合适的衔接词运用在语篇写作中。4.能按照评价表，评价自己或他人生成的语篇，并说明理由。在课件中会闪出魔法棒，请数一数有多少个？明确书面表达要求

新课标三级语言技能对九年级学生写的能力做了以下要求:1.根据写作要求，收集、准备素材，独立起草、修改和完成语篇；2.为所给图表或自己创作的图片写出简单的说明；3.围绕相关主题，用所学语言，以书面语篇的形式描述和介绍身边的人和事物，表达情感、态度和观点；4.在书面表达中使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑关系，连接信息，做到意义连贯;5.在书面表达中进行适当的自我修正，用语得当，沟通与交流得体、有效。审题布局生成秘诀一

审题（examinethetopic）审人称、审时态、审要点2023年江西初中学业水平考试英语作文

学校决定开展向航天女英雄王亚平学习的英文演讲活动，请你按下面表格要求写一篇演讲稿。先简单介绍王亚平的个人信息，再谈谈你从本卷完形填空B篇中感受到的她的优秀品质（personality），最后说说你打算如何向她学习。人称时态要点sheI一般现在时一般将来时1.介绍王亚平的个人信息(年龄、出生地、爱好)；2.描述她的优秀品质；3.谈论你的计划。写作要点具体内容1.Personalinformation●Age:42●Birthplace:asmallvillageinShandongProvince●Hobby:sports2.Personality根据完形填空B篇概括（不得照搬原文）3.Yourplans①__________②__________

…1.按点分段内容包括：1.介绍王亚平的个人信息；2.描述她的优秀品质；3.你的打算。Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.Thankyou.

Personalinformation第二段：介绍个人信息Personality第三段：描述优秀品质Yourplans第四段：

谈论计划秘诀二

布局（decidethelayout）Howtointroducepersonalinformation?QuestionsaboutwritingHowtodescribethepersonality?Howtotalkabouttheplan?2.词-句-段-篇秘诀二

布局Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentenceparagraphpassageWangYapingPersonalinformationAgeBirthplaceHobby42bebornininasmallvillageinShandongProvincesports(exercise)artping-pong/basketball...dokungfudrawgobikeridingPersonalityYourplanvocabularysingplaytheguitar/piano...readingdance...丰富性Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage语言的丰富性---句式多样性策略Sheis42.Sheis42yearsold.Sheisa42-year-oldastronaut.Sheisanastronautof42.Sheisattheageof42.sentenceHowtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage丰富性多样性

WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.第二段：介绍个人信息introducepersonalinformation连词成句：主语+谓语+其他(一般现在时）sentenceHowtointroducepersonalinformation?QuestionsaboutwritingHowtodescribethepersonality?WangYapingisanastronaut.In2013,shebecamethesecondChinesewomantotraveltospace.Sheisalsofamousforaphysicsclasstelevisedformorethan60millionpeople.Wangtrainedveryhardformanyyearstobeanastronaut.Thehardestpartwasdeserttraining.Wearingaspacesuitandcarryingspecialandheavyequipment(装备),shewalkedseveralkilometersthroughthehotandsandydesert.“Sometimesitwassowindyanddusty(布满灰尘的),”shesays,“thatwecouldn’tseeeachothereventhoughwewerejustafewmetersaway.”Wanglovesherjob.SherememberswatchingthefirstChineseastronautgointospace.“Iwassoproudandalsoveryexcited.ButwhenIwatchedit,athoughtcameintomymind:Wehavemen

pilotsandwomenpilots,andthenamanastronaut.Whenwilltherebeawomanastronaut?Andtoday,it’smebecomingoneofthefirstfew.”Findoutthepersonalityaccordingtothethingsshedoes.loveherjobovercomethedifficultiesnevergiveupfacetheproblemsbeproudofChinaloveourmotherlandtrainhardconfidentvocabulary2.词-句-段-篇describethepersonality第三段：描述优秀品质•连词成句：主语+谓语+其他(一般现在时）sentenceWatchyouractions,theybecomeyourhabits;

行为决定习惯Watchyourhabits,theybecomeyourvalues;

习惯决定性格Watchyourvalues,theybecomeyourdestiny.

性格决定命运

---美国哲学家、心理学家威廉·詹姆士《习惯论》Howtotalkabouttheplan?1.Whatdoyouwanttodo/bewhenyougrowup?2.Howareyougoingtodothat?Dreams/JobsActionsvocabulary2.词-句-段-篇Howtotalkabouttheplan?sentence连词成句：主语+谓语+其他

Iwanttodo...Iplantodo...Iamgoingtodo...Iwilldo...

WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.WangYapingisveryconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.

Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctortomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.paragraphWangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.FindoutthedifferencesParagraph1Paragraph2Underline

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paragraphParagraph1Paragraph2WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronaut.HerbirthplaceisinasmallvillageinShandongProvince.WangYapingisveryconfident.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.Shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Iwanttobeadoctortomakemycontributiontoourcountry.I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.IwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.◆adverb◆example◆clause◆conjunction◆…Whichoneisbetter?What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.◆infinitive表顺序first,second,then,next,finally

firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally

ontheonehand,ontheotherhand

foronething,foranotherthing表转折but,however,though表列举forexample,suchas表递进what’smore,besides,notonly..butalso表因果so,therefore,asaresult,thanksto,because表观点inmyopinion,asfarasIknow表总结inaword,inshort,inconclusion,allinall常见的连接词：

练一练：BeautifytheparagraphHowtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage丰富性多样性连和美WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.passageHead

BodyTailWangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.AddagoodbeginningandagoodendingtofinishthecompositionpassageBeginningEnding请结合内容主题连线导出句和结尾句Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.IhavelearnedalotfromWangYaping.I’msurethatIwillachievemydreamandbeausefulpersonlikeher.

WangYapingisanexampletousall.IbelieveIcanbringoutthebestinmebylearningfromher.DoyouknowourastronautheroWangYaping?Letmetellyousomethingabouther.Howtowriteagoodcomposition?vocabularysentence

paragraphpassage丰富性多样性连和美有始终Hello,everyone!It’smyhonortointroduceanastronauthero—WangYaping.WangYapingisa42-year-oldastronautwhoisborninasmallvillageinShandongProvince.Herhobbyisdoingsportssuchasplayingping-pongandgoingbikeriding.Asweallknow,WangYapingisquiteconfident.SheisproudofChinaandlovesourmotherlandverymuch.Toachieveherastronautdream,shealwaysfacestheproblemsandovercomesthedifficultiesintrainingandnevergivesup.Inthefuture,IamgoingtobeconfidentandIwanttobeadoctorlikeZhongNanshantomakemycontributiontoourcountry.Iwillmakeaweeklyplanandstudyhard.Iwillalsoeathealthilyanddomoreexercise.What’smore,nomatterhowharditis,I’llsticktomydreamandnevergiveup.WangYapingisanexampletousall.IbelieveIcanbringoutthebestinmebylearningfromher.Thankyou.秘诀三

生成introducepersonalinformationdescribethepersonality查要点，查语言(拼写，时态，语句逻辑)wasborntalkabouttheplan(Generatethepassage)

江西省中考作文评分标准第一档（13-15分）

信息完整，表达流畅，无语言错误或基本无语言错误。第二档（10-12分）

信息基本完整，表达较流畅，有少量语言错误，但不影响意思表达。第三档（7-9分）

能传达部分信息，表达不够流畅，语言错误较多，但句子基本可读。第四档（4-6分）

只能传达少量信息，表达不流畅，语言错误多，只有少量句子可读。第五档（1-3分）

只能传达个别信息，表达不清楚，只有个别句子可读。Pleaseexchangeyourwritingsandmakethembetter.Peer-assessment(同伴互评）yesno1.结构清晰Didhe/shehaveaclearstructure?2.分段写Didhe/shewrite3or4paragraphs?3.情感丰富Didhe/sheexpressrichfeelings?4.好词好句Didhe/sheusegoodwordsandsentences?5.行文连贯Didhe/sheuselinkingwords?6.书写美观Didhe/shewritebeautifully?7.80词以上Didhe/shewriteover80words?秘诀一

审题1.审人称

2.审时态

3.审要点秘诀二

布局1.按点分段2.词-句-段-篇秘诀三

生成查要点，查语言(拼写，时态，语句逻辑)词---丰富性句---多样性段---连和美篇---有始终Summary总结审认真审题，确认文体、人称、时态和要点。列确认文章结构，用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。美适当使用一些短语或通过改变句式来美化文章。连恰当运用关联词语，使其层次清晰，衔接自然。加加首尾，使结构完整。开头结尾句子要简洁。查查拼写、标点、语法、逻辑、完整度。Great(20分)Good(10分)Tryharder（5分）Icananalysethetaskandexaminethetopic.Icanwritethepassagewithfoursteps(vocabulary,sentence,paragragh,passage).Icanusethelinkingwordstomakemypassagemorelogical.Icanmakethestructureofmypassagemoreclearbyparagraphingandaddingthebeginningandtheending.Icantalkaboutmyplansforthefutureandknowhowtoimprovemyself.Self-assessment(自评）Let'sdoit!

2024年11月29日，神州十五号成功发射。本次乘组航天员之一的江西籍航天员邓清明为了实现他的飞天梦，坚守了近25年从未放弃。宁可备而无用，不可用而无备，9000多个日夜坚持不懈的训练只愿为祖国的载人航天事业奋斗终身。假如你是李华，请给凯旋归来的邓清明写一封信，包括以下内容：1.谈谈你对邓清明的了解；2.说说你打算如何向他学习；3.向他表达祝福，期待他的凯旋。要求：1.短文应包含以上所有写作要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，书写工整，可适当发挥；2.词数：80-120。参考词汇：ShenzhouXV神州十五号launch发射HomeworkDearMr.