2021届 高中英语 老人与海the old man and the sea读后续写

TheoldmanandtheseaErnestHemingway

——ContinuationWritingReadforwritingmaterials—细读原文，探寻写作素材VSStoryWhenWhereWhoWhatAtsea（intheGulfofMexico)TheoldfishmannamedSantiagoandahugefishReadforwritingmaterials—细读原文，探寻写作素材WritingmaterialsTheoldmanis__________withthefishbattlingAftercominginempty-handedforeight-fourdays;

At85thdayTheoldmanis________withthefishTheoldmanThefishround1(回合）round2round3Theoldmanpulledonhimallthathecouldtobringhimcloser.Thenhestraightenedhimselfandbegananothercircle.Heheldonthegreatfishallthestrainthathecould....putallofhisefforton......pullingwithallhisstrengthThefish...rightedhimselfandswamaway...Thefishrightedhimselfandswamslowlyaway.Yesyouare,hetoldhimself.You'regoodforever.battling

CharactersofthemainfiguresTheOldmanSantiagotough(坚韧的）determinedconfidentstrong-willed（意志坚强的）positiveambitious(雄心勃勃的）CharactersofthemainfiguresUsefulexpressions:

beautifullooking看起来美丽的straighten挺直，使变直/weave迂回进行，穿行Vividdescription:

holdon抓紧/pullon用尽全力拉…turnalittleonhisside稍微侧身putallofhisefforton尽全力righthimself摆正自己的身子feelhimselfgoing觉得自己快不行了…

WritingMaterials——原文中的写作素材

Pull,hands.Holdup,legs.Lastforme,head.Lastforme.Yesyouare.You'regoodforever.Doyouhavetokillme?Youarekillingme.Comeonandkillme.Idonotcarewhokillswho.Clearup,head!Clearup.I'lltryitagain.I'lltryitonceagain.uniquewritingstyle:short,simple,repeated

WritingMaterials——原文中的写作素材

新高考模式下的续写要求：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Para1:Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.____________________Para2:Apackofsharksfollowedafterthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark._____________________ContinuationWriting

Focusontwogivensentences

Para.1Afterthestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.

Para.2ApackofsharksfollowedthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainstthesharkWhy?Hesucceededincatchingthehugefish.Howdothemanfeel?Didhesucceedagain?Howdidhedealwiththem?Para.1Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.

Writeandpolishpara1

♦The

old

man'sreaction?♦Whatdidtheoldmandonext?

♦Theappearancedescriptionofthehugefish

Tip1：Adddetaileddescription♦Howdidtheoldfeel?

Usedetaileddescription&advancedsentencesExcitement1.Hisfacelitupwithexcitement.2.Unabletocontainhisexcitement,hejumpedwithjoy.3.Whenhesawthefish,hisheartpoundedwithexcitement.4.Lookingatthebeautifulhugefish,hecouldhardlyconcealhisexcitement.Happiness1.Relieffilledhisheart,withabrightsmilespreadingacrosshisface.2.Theoldmanwassohappythathealmostjumpedupandtearsfilledhiseyes.Onepossibleversion:

Aftertheintensestruggle,theoldmanfinallycaughtthefish.____________________Para.2Apackofsharksfollowedafterthehugefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark.衔接首句事件Practicemakesperfect♦Whydidothersharksfollow?♦Didtheywanttosavethefish?♦Howdidtheoldmanfightagainstthesharks?Tip2:UseadvancedsentencepatternsUsedetaileddescription&advancedsentences1.pointto指着……2.reachintosb'spocket把手伸进口袋3.liftthelid打开盖子4.gathersbintoarms把……抱在怀里

5.smashone'sfistdownonthedesk把拳头砸在桌子上6.rubone'shandstogetherafewtimes搓了几下手7.makeone'shandballintofist攥起拳头8.hideone'sfaceinone'shands用手捂住脸Usedetaileddescription&advancedsentences1.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hefeltsoscaredthathisthroattightenedandhiskneesfeltweak.(嗓子发紧，膝盖发软)2.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hefrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.(吓呆了，不敢动弹)3.Atthesightoftheferocioussharks,Hewasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorrorandhispalmsweresweating.(被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗)4.Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.(他因恐惧而呆住，站在那儿一动不动)Onepossibleversion:Apackofsharksfollowedafterthefishandtheoldmanfoughtagainsttheshark._____________________SummaryTip1细读原文，探寻线索（5W1H）Tip2充分利用段首句Tip3

提升句型Tip4

细节描写①巧用原文，构造情节②衔接首句