读后续写动作描写课件高考英语作文复习专项

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读后续写专题之构建动作链和动作面STARTLookatthetwopictures:Whichoneisbetter?Whatproblemsdothesentenceshave?Leadin

START1.Whichoneisbetter?2.Whatproblemsdothesentencesinpictureonehave?①②Inthisclass,wewill:1.Knowsomeusefulskillstoperfectcontinuationwritingbymakingactionsmorevivid,mainlyfromtwoaspects:actionchainandactionscene.2.Appreciateandimitateexamplesofdescriptionsentences.3.Learntocooperatewitheachotherandjoininclassactivitiestoimproveourselves.Learningaims:STARTHowtopolishourwritingbyusingactionchainandactionscene读后续写微技能，构造动作链与动作面START01

Theywenttotheamusementparkbycar.或Theydrovetotheamusementpark.

Warmingup简单描述描述一：他们开车去游乐园。START02Childrenjumpedintothewaterforfun.

描述二：孩子们跳入水中玩耍START03描述三、妈妈沉迷于玩手机。Motherwasaddictedtohersmartphone.START04描述四、她抱住她的孩子Shehuggedherkid.读后续写作为记叙文，其核心只有一个，那就是“人”。因此一切的笔墨，都是为了塑造人物形象，使人物更加饱满。想把我们的人物塑造得更饱满，就必须要有支撑他/她的各类描写，其中，动词是英语语言的主角，很多句子肯定都包含动作描写。但是我们在描写动作的时候往往会犯一个毛病，那就是太过于单薄。那么该如何将动作构建得饱满?要想把动作写得生动有画面感，其中的两个思路:构造“___________”。前言动作链、动作面Pre-writing在描写动作时，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性Pre-writing:Howtomodifyandbeautifyyoursentences?

Skill1.Buildtheactionchain构建动作链乐园1

如何延长这句话：拆解动作，构造动作链跳上车向着游乐园出发

Hejumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.

用副词增加色彩他们开车去游乐园。前

后

对

比一般表达：

Theywenttotheamusementparkbycar.提分表达：Theyjumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.

表示连续的或者并列的动作2

如何延长这句话：拆解动作，构造动作链孩子们跳入水中玩耍跳进水里爬上池边用副词增加色彩Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedintothewaterhappilyforfun.前后

对

比一般表达：Childrenjumpedintothewaterforfun.提分表达:Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedinto

thewaterhappily

forfun.1.Theyjumpedintothecarand

drovetotheamusementpark

excitedly.2.Childrenclimbedontheplatformand

jumpedintothewaterhappily.用法总结，使用2个并列的______________0102动词主语+谓语动作A+and+谓语动作B.

表示连续的或者并列的动作3

如何延长这句话：拆解动作，构造动作链妈妈沉迷于玩手机坐在椅子上玩手机拿出手机用副词增加色彩Mothersatinachair,took

outhersmartphoneandwas

completelyaddictedtoplayingit

.

前

后

对

比一般表达：Motherwasaddictedtohersmartphone.

提分表达：

Mothersatinachair,took

out

her

smartphoneand

wascompletely

addictedtoplayingit

.3

如何延长这句话：拆解动作，构造动作链她抱住她的孩子她冲向前把儿子揽进怀里跪了下来用副词增加色彩Shedashedforwardinahurry,kneltdownand

heldhersonintoherarms.

前

后

对

比一般表达：

Shehuggedherkids.提分表达：

Shedashedforward

inahurry,kneltdown

andheldhersonintoherarmstightly.1.Mothersatinachair,took

outhersmartphoneandwasaddictedtoplayingit.2.Shedashedforward

inahurry,kneltdown

andheldhersonintoherarmstightly.

用法总结，使用3个并列的______________010203动词主语+谓语动作A,谓语动作Band谓语动作C李煜句型1:1.突然，小男孩被沙滩上的玩具车吸引，离开了水池。

Suddenly,thelittleboy____________byatoycaronthebeachand____thepool.2.我走近我爸爸，骄傲地拿出我自己的钱递给他。(2021年浙江高考)

I__________Dad,proudly_________ownmoneyand_______ittohim.3.双胞胎准备好早餐托盘，加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片，走出厨房。

Thetwins_______thebreakfasttray,________________theyhadmade,and____________________.

(2021新高考卷1)4.老师走上前，拍了拍我的肩膀，温柔地说:“有志者，事竟成。”(2023)

主语+动作Aand动作B/主语+动作A,

动作B

and

动作C

（三个/两个并列动词的连接）preparedaddedabeaitifulcardTheteachersteppedforward,pattedmeontheshoulder,andsaidsoftly,"wherethereisawill,thereisaway."stepped

outofthekitchenapproachedtookoutofhandedwasattractedleftExerciseASkill2Buildanactionscene构建动作面

Pre-writing:Howtomodifyandbeautifyyoursentences?321EmotionsDialoguesInnerthoughts4Actions动作面=动作+情感，环境，语言，心理等5Surroundings

情绪

动作

语言

DialogueAction

Emotion“我去给你们拿点咖啡，”她笑道，朝厨房走去。Appreciationandimitation“我去给你们拿点咖啡，”她笑道，朝厨房走去。“I'llgetyousomecoffee,”shesmiled,headingforthekitchen.AppreciationandimitationHe

wasoverwhelmedwithjoy,

singinganddancing

intherain.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。EmotionAction

Appreciationandimitation站在海边,他们仰望天空,享受着这份珍贵的平静。Standing

attheseashore,they

lookedupinto

thesky,enjoying

thepreciouspeacefromwithin.SurroundingsActionInnerthoughtAppreciationandimitation被老师的话鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说：“我来试试。”Encouraged

bytheteacher'swords,Lucy

raised

herhand,whispering,”Iwanttohaveatry”.Appreciationandimitation

句型二：句型三：句型四：

小结主语+谓语，doinganddoing（伴随动作）Doing，主语+谓语,doing(主动动作)Done，主语+谓语,doing(被动动作)1.Onasunnyafternoon,Peter_________(参观)thescenicspot,_________(欣赏)themagnificentwaterfalland______(拍照)countlesspictures,relaxed

and

overjoyed.

ExerciseBvisitedtakingappreciating

2.面对这四个强壮的人，狼可能会感到受到威胁，开始撤退。

(2017.浙江高考卷）

Facingthefourstrongmen,thewolfmightfeelthreatened，startingtowithdraw.

高考链接3.听完后深受鼓励，David伸出双臂抱住了我并微笑着说：“我可以做到！”

(2022年新高考I读后续写)Deeplyencouragedafterhearingthis,Davidheldouthisarmsandhuggedme,replyinginadelightedvoice“Icandoit！”

高考链接ExerciseC

Rewritethesentencesusingthesentencepatternswejustlearned.

1.Theoldmansatunderthesunset._______________________________________________________________________

2.Thechildrenbegantocry.______________________________________________________________

3.Hesteppedontothestage._______________________________________________________________

Theoldmansatunderthesunset,reading

thenewspaperandlisteningtotheradio.Deeplymovedbythemovie,thechildrenbegantocry,feelingthemovieasuccessFeelingfullofenergy,he

steppedontothestage,beginningtorecitethearticlebravely.Output:IntegratedSkillsThescene:reunion(重聚)Tomwasseparatefromhisdogforalongtime.Whenhewentbackhome,……(40-60words)While-writing

Tips:UsingthemethodofactionchainandactionscenetowriteactionThesimplepasttense(一般过去时)

Showandshare

ShowyourdraftandPolishitcarefully!Evaluation(评价):Judgingbytense,content,writing,goodwords/phrases/sentences好词，短语结构，句式波浪线画出PostwritingPostwriting

Possibleanswer:WhenTomwent

backhome,thedogrushedtohim,waggedhertailand

barkedwithjoy.HappinesstookholdofTomassoonashesawthedog.Tombentdown,givingherabearhugandsaying:“Imissyorsomuch!"Then,tearsofjoyflowed