人教版高考英语一轮复习读后续写第5讲5步建构,考场作文速成写作专项课件

第五讲5步建构,考场作文速成典型例题(2021新高考全国Ⅰ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhentheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.This

time,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jenna

panicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Oh

dear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________When

Mrs.Meredith

heard

of

John’s

idea,she

thought

it

was

a

good

one,too.SoshepraisedJohnforhisproposal,andofferedhimsomeadvice.Verysoonthechildrenwerebusypoppingthecorn,whiletheirmotherwentouttobuythepaperbags.Whenshecameback,shebroughtBernardwithher.AllthechildrencamesurroundingBernardandtheygaveabaskettoBernard.Thebasketwasfullofpaperbagswhichwerefilledwithpopcorn.With

everything

ready,Bernard

started

out

on

his

new

business.Andmuchsoonerthancouldbeexpected,Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket.Neverbeforehadheearnedsomuchmoneyinhislife.Whenhefoundthatitwasalltobehis,hewassohappythathecouldhardlyspeak,buthisbrightsmilingfacespokeforhim.Peoplebegantowatchforthe“littlepopcornboy”,whoearnedsomemoneytotakehomeeveryweek.AllthiswasbecauseofJohn’sbrightidea.5步建构,续写成功第一步

抓大意,定主题速读所给信息,了解文章大意,确定写作主题。文章大意一对双胞胎在母亲节为母亲做早饭,给母亲惊喜写作主题表达孩子对母亲的爱第二步

理双情,思细节梳理文章情节和情感两条线索,确定续写情节和情感。Parts情节情感已给信息计划为母亲做早饭excited如何准备做早饭curious/pleased做早饭遭到失败anxious/panicky/calm续写第一段父亲了解孩子的意图delighted/proud父亲和孩子共同做早饭excited/delighted续写第二段孩子带早饭上楼excited母亲惊喜moved第三步

四句话,建框架借助四句话,建构续写框架,明确续写方向。位置与功能内容Para.1第二句承上启下“Don’tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.段尾句Everythingsettled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Para.2第二句Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid,“HappyMother’sDay!”段尾句回扣主题WhatabigsurpriseonMother’sDay!第四步

活表达,定语言原文使用了定语从句、感叹句、非谓语动词、名词性从句、状语从句、并列复合句等高级表达手段,在续写部分要灵活沿用这些手法为自己的写作增光添彩。第五步

巧衔接,保流畅在叙述事情的发展时可采用时间状语从句、非谓语动词、副词等形式进行连接,以使行文流畅自然。【满分作文】As

the

twins

looked

around

them

in

disappointment,their

father

appeared.“Don’tpanic!”hehandedeachoneawettowel,helpingthemcleanthemessquickly.After

that,Jeffstammeredouttheirplan,withhisfaceflushing.However,Father

laughed,“Sounds

great!Let’sdoittogether!”Hearingthis,JennaandJeffalmostjumpedtotheirfeet,joyineyes.Underhiscarefulguidance,itdidn’ttakelongbeforetheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Everything

settled,Fatherleftthekitchen,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.The

twins

carried

the

breakfast

upstairs

and

woke

their

mother

up.Meetingtheirsmilingeyes,Motherfeltconfuseduntiltheypresentedthebreakfastandsaid,“HappyMother’sDay!”Mothergavethematighthug,saying,“Unbelievable!Youcancook!It’sthebiggestsurprisethatIhavereceived.”Herfacelitupwithhappiness.“Theyhaveknownhowtotakecareofothers,”Fathersaidinresponsetoherexcitement,winkingatJennaandJeff.Theycouldn’thelpgiggling.WhatabigsurpriseonMother’sDay!跟踪训练1(2020新高考全国Ⅰ卷)TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,his

wife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy—hisnamewasBernard—hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,and

Clara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon’tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”said

Clara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”said

Harry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“Itellyouwhatwecando,”said

John.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意:续写词数应为150左右。WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2(2023黑龙江齐齐哈尔二模)Myteenagedaughter,Jane,alwayscomplainedabouthavingtobehomeearlierthanallherfriends.Shewouldtellmethatshewasalreadyseventeen.Shebelievedthatshewasalreadyanadult,yetstillhadacurfew(宵禁).“Butyouarestillinhighschool,”Isaidonedaywhenshewascomplainingagain.“Youwillnevertrustme!”sheyelled.BeforeIcouldcontinue,sherolledhereyes,enteredherbedroomandshutthedoor.“HowcouldImakeJaneseethatIonlywanttokeephersafe?”Isighed.Idecidedtogoforawalk,hopingthecoldairwouldclearupmymind.Iopenedthefrontdoorandnearlysteppedonoursmallblackcat,whichseemedlikeameatball.“Hi,Meatball,”Isaid,takingitintomyarmsandtouchingitgently.Meatballsneezedinmyarms.Realizingitwastoocoldoutside,Iwentinside.Meatballseemedhappyenoughtostayinthewarmhouse.Butafteranhourortwo,itwenttothedoorandwantedtogooutsideagain.“Whywon’titjuststayinwithusallthetime?”Nathan,myyoungestdaughterasked.Iexplainedtoherthatitwashappytobeherebutitlikedbeingabletocomeandgoasitpleased.“Thatmustbenice,”Jane,whohappenedtocomeoutforacupoftea,cut

in,“Whythecat,not

I,couldcomeandgo?WhynotgiveMeatballacurfew,too?”Iturnedadeafeartohercomplaint.Laterinthenight,temperaturesdroppedunusuallylow.Meatballstoodatthedoor,meowingtogooutside,again.Ishookmyheadatit,beingafraidthatitmightfreezetodeath.Itlookedatmeandkeptmeowing.“Iknowyou’renothappy,butit’sforyourowngood,”Isaid,pattingitshead.“Mom’snotbeingmeantoyou,”Janetoldthecat.“She’sjusttryingtokeepyoufromturningintoafrozenmeatball,”saidJane,lookingatmemeaningfully.Wealllaughedatthejoke.Thenextmorning,Icouldn’tfindMeatball.Iaskedthekidsifanyonehadseenher.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式作答。“Iletitoutlastnight,”Janesaidcalmly.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AsIdrovetotheanimalhospital,JaneheldMeatballinsidehercoat.____________________________________________