读后续写语篇练习(等货车一起助人为乐)2024届高三英语写作专项

高考英语读后续写语篇练习1——等货车一起助人为乐题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part1题目呈现3续写原文Tome,whatThanksgivingreallymeansisgivinggoodthanks,noteatingturkey.BythetimeIwas18IhadcreatedmyThanksgivingritual(惯例).Iwouldgooutshoppingandbuyenoughfoodforoneortwofamilies.ThenIwoulddresslikeadeliveryboy,gotothepoorestneighborhoodandjustknockonadoor,andwouldalwaysincludeanotesaying“AllthatIaskinreturnisthatyoutakegoodenoughcareofyourselfsothatsomedayyoucandothesamethingforsomeoneelse.”IhavereceivedmorefromthisannualritualthanIhavefromanyamountofmoneyI’veeverearned,especiallyonesuchexperienceinNewYorkCity.SeveralyearsagoIwasinNewYorkCitywithmynewlymarriedwifeduringThanksgiving.Shewassadbecausewewerenotwithourfamily.NormallyshewouldbehomedecoratingthehouseforChristmas,butwewerestuckhereinahotelroom.Isaid,“Honey,look,whydon’twedecoratesomelivestodayinsteadofsometrees?”WhenItoldherwhatIalwaysdoonThanksgiving,shegotexcited.Isaid,“Let’sgosomeplacewherewecanreallyappreciatewhoweare,whatweareabletodoandwhatwecanreallygive.Let’sgotothepoorneighborhoodHarlemandfeedsomepeoplethereinneed.We’llgobuyenoughfoodforsixorsevenfamiliesfor30days.We’vegotenough.Let’sgodoit!”4续写原文Westartedbygettingavan(货车),butthereseemednovansinallofNewYorkCity.Therent-a-carplaceswerealloutofvans.Mywifewasdisappointed,andIsaid,“Look,thebottomlineisthatifwewantsomething,wecanmakeithappen!Allwehavetodoistakeaction.ThereareplentyofvanshereinNewYorkCity.Lookdownatthestreet.Doyouseeallthosevans?Let’sgogetone!”Mywifeagreedandwetookaction.5续写段首语Paragraph1:Wetriedstoppingvansastheyweredrivingdownthestreet.Paragraph2:Eventuallyavandroveupandthedriversaidyes.6续写原文分析感恩节到了,我继续和往年一样,这一天会开车送礼物如食物给穷人。但是有一年,我和妻子呆在纽约的旅馆里,不能回家团圆,我告诉妻子我的往年的做法,妻子非常开心。但我们需要货车（van）才能购物。于是我们准备在街头上拦一辆车,妻子同意了。7续写思路分析第一段：1.（写司机的反应）然而，司机们要么对我们疯狂挥舞的手视而不见，要么从我们身边飞驰而过，将我们的希望淹没在震耳欲聋的引擎轰鸣声中。然而，他们来了，锯子，他们加速了，只留下灰烬和泥土在空中跳舞。2.（我和妻子的情绪）手指被寒风麻木，喉咙被尘土飞扬的空气窒息，我们在纽约拥挤的街道上感到如此孤独——“我们能求助于谁？”我的妻子皱着眉头喃喃自语。3.（突然有了想法）凝视着妻子红框的眼睛，我们发现自己濒临放弃，直到我突然恍然大悟——希望总是在最后一刻落下，耐心是试金石。4.（开始做）几乎熄灭的希望火花立即重新点燃，鼓励我们继续寻找一辆可以传递我们内心美好意愿的面包车。8续写思路分析第2段：1.（我们的心情）听到简单的是，我们都高兴地跳了起来。2.（更加意外的是）令我们大吃一惊的是，司机甚至主动提出加入我们。3.（开始做）给他一连串的感谢，我们立即出发购买，然后前往哈莱姆。4.（具象还是抽象写故事过程？答曰：都可以，根据你的写作水平来定，稳妥些抽象）原文用抽象：我们一起把它们打包好，抬上面包车，去了甚至有人没有电的建筑物。我们用具象：那天晚上，我们目睹了这座看似迷人的城市的另一面——家庭在贫困的边缘拼命挣扎，孤儿头上没有屋顶，父母在他们身边......然而，当我们把食物交给我们时，在那些苍白和饱经风霜的脸上可以看到发自内心的感激之情，散发出足够的温暖来融化最寒冷的冬天。5.(我们的心情)眼泪变成了冰霜，覆盖了我们的脸，但我们感到内心世界在燃烧。6.照应主旨（尤其是标题）9Part2题目分析10点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点11Part3范文呈现12范文呈现Paragraph1:Wetriedstoppingvansastheyweredrivingdownthestreet.

1.（写drivers的反应）Yetthedriverseitherturnedablindeyetoourfranticly-wavinghand,orspedpastus,drowningourhopeinthedeafeningroarofengines.其它写法：However,theycame,thesawandtheyspedup,onlytoleaveashanddirtdancingintheair.2.(我和妻子的情绪)Fingersnumbedbythechillywind,throatchokedbydustyair,wefelteversoaloneonthecrowdedstreetsofNewYork–“Whocanweturnto?”mywifemurmuredwithafiercefrown.3.(突然有了想法)Staringintomywife’sred-rimmedeyes,wefoundourselvesonthevergeofgivingup,untilitsuddenlydawnedonme–Hopealwaysfellatthelastminuteandpatiencewasthetouchstone.4.（开始做）Thenearly-extinguishedsparksofhopeinstantlyrekindled,encouragingustogoonwiththesearchforavanthatcoulddeliverthegoodwillbrimminginus.13范文呈现Paragraph2:Eventuallyavandroveupandthedriversaidyes.1.（我们的心情）Hearingthesimpleyes,wealljumpedwithjoy.2.（更加意外的是）Toourbigsurprise,thedriverevenofferedtojoinus.3.（开始做）Showeringhiminastringofthanks,weimmediatelysetouttopurchase,andthenheadedforHarlem.4.（具象还是抽象写故事过程？答曰：都可以，根据你的写作水平来定，稳妥些抽象）原文用抽象：Togetherwepackedthemup,carriedthemontothevanandwenttobuildingswheretherewereevenpeoplelivingwithoutelectricity.我们用具象：Thatnight,wewitnessedtheothersideoftheseeminglyglamorouscity–familiesstrugglingdesperatelyontheedgeofpoverty,orphanswithneitheraroofovertheirheads,norparentsbytheirside…Yetwhenwegaveourthefood,heart-feltappreciationcouldbeseenonallthosepaleandweather-beatenfaces,radiatingenoughwarmthtomeltthecoldestwinter.