2024届广东省高三下学期二模英语读后续写精讲讲义素材

广东省二模读后续写精讲Step1：阅读材料-找出矛盾（要解决的问题），主线情节-找到主人公的诉求，主线情节-找到可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质的句子-找到值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情-找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的）话，在续写中呼应-找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形-掠过次要情节材料WhenIwassevenyearsold,myfamilymovedfromMexicotoAmerica.InMexico,Iwasacheerfulgirlwholovedmakingpeoplelaughwithmyjokesandinventingfungamestoplaywithmyfriends.However,whenIarrivedinAmerica,Ifoundithardtofitin【矛盾、问题所在：难以融入】,andIbecamequieter.Welivedinasmallhousewithamodestyardwherewegrewvegetables—myresponsibility.WhileItookprideinwatchingthemgrow,thereweretimeswhenIdreamedofhavingabeautifulgardenlikemyschoolmateLuella's【主人公诉求】,withitsdelicatetulips(郁金香).AlthoughLuellalivedinthesameneighborhoodasme,webarelykneweachotherItwasafteratornadothatLuellaandIfinallybecameclosefriends.【联想：作者想要一个和Luella‘s家花园一样的花园，经过了tornado两个人还成为了好朋友——那么两个人大概率是在花园这件事上互相帮助，或者其中一方帮助了另一方】ThetornadostruckonaSundayafternoon.Thegentlebreezetransformedintoastrongwind,andthickgraycloudsfilledthesky.Gradually,thetornadotookshape,startingasathinropeandgrowingintoalargeblackfunnel(漏斗).Myentirefamilygatheredinthebathroom,seekingshelterfromthestorm.Terrified,Isatclosetomymom,kneesinmychest.Afterthestormhadpassed,ourworriesandfearswerereplacedbyreliefthatwewereunharmedandthatourhousehadremainedundamaged.【掠过次要情节：灾难前后过程，不重要，因为重点写的是“aftertornado两个人如何成为好朋友”】AsIsteppedoutside,Iwitnessedtheextentofthedamagethetornadohadcausedtoourneighborhood【是Luella的花园遭受了损失，所以大概率是主人公帮助了Luella】.Acrossthestreet,atalltreehadfallen,crushingLuella'sgardeninfrontofheryellowhouse.Wehurriedovertocheckonit.Fortunately,herfamilyseemedtobeawayatthetime,andnoonewasinjured.However,heronce-beautifulgardenwasinruins,withthefallentreedestroyingthetulipsanddebris(碎片)spreadeverywhere.Icouldonlyimaginehowheartbrokentheymustfeelseeingthis.1.Thenmymom'susualwordsranginmyear,"Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive,”【值得主人公牢记的话-一般需要在续写中呼应——但是考虑到这句话和本文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系，所以可以呼应，也可以不呼应——我个人觉得还是不呼应好，不然太刻意了——但如果真的点了，写通顺也可以】andmyfamilystartedtothinkabouthowwecouldhelp.Justatthatmoment,Luella'sfamilyreturnedintheircar.Evenafterthedebriswascleared,IcouldstillsenseLuella'ssorrowforherlostgarden.Step2：分析续写两句话1.第二段第一句“afterthedebriswascleared”，说明第一段“我”帮助了Luella’sfamily清理院子2.第一段，Luella回来之后看到什么？心情如何？看到的是残破不堪，感到震惊、难过、悲伤类似（如果没有描写Luella看到的景象和感受，我认为是不合理的）3.第一段，“我”看到Luella的反应，我又是什么表现？应该是同情、安慰4.第一段，但是我又因为没有fitin而感到害羞，所以我不可能一下子就主动上去帮忙5.第一段，我们是怎么帮助他们的呢？可以是妈妈先去，然后我受到了鼓舞之后再去6.第二段，要以“我和Luella成为好朋友”“我成功fitin”为最终目标，至于“Itismoreblessedtogivethantoreceive”，我觉得可点可不点，因为这句话和全文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系7.第二段，我怎么鼓励Luella并和她成为了好朋友呢？我主动提出和她一起种花，培育植物和友谊Step3：设计两段情节第一段：1.Leulla一家开始收拾废墟Luella满脸震惊、难过2.妈妈走过去，安慰、拥抱他们3.我受到了鼓舞，也加入他们。并和Luella在合作中交流4.描写清理打扫的过程第二段：1.环境描写：破败不堪的景象2.我提出和她一起种花3.Luella现出笑容4.我们不仅在培育花草，还在培育友谊5.这个花园是我们友谊的见证Step4：写作第一段：Justatthatmoment,Luella'sfamilyreturnedintheircar.Theirwereshockedandsaddenedbythescenewheretherewereruinsandbrokenbrancheseverywhere.Astheysurveyedthewreckage（残骸）,Luellaweptandgroaned（叹息）.BeforeIcoulddosomething,mymotherapproachedthem,comfortingthemandgivingthemawarmembrace.Inspiredbyherexample,Ibashfully（害羞地）cameforwardtoLuellaandofferedtohelp.Shelookedatme,withaffectioninhereyes,andnodded.Together,wepickedupfallenbranchesandflowers,clearingthedestroyedflowerbeds.第二段：Evenafterthedebriswascleared,IcouldstillsenseLuella'ssorrowforherlostgarden.Theemptyspacewheretulipsandotherflowersonceflourishedseemedbadlyhurt.Asthesunshinesagain,IinvitedLuellatojoinmeinplantingnewflowersinbothouryards.Witheachseedplanted,hersmilesl