读后续写七彩阳光再见狐狸溯恩课件高三英语作文复习专项

再见，狐狸原文本ReadthefollowingpartsquicklyformainideasmainideaMyfirstencounterwiththefoxintheforestThroughoutthedayatschool,Icouldonlythinkofthefoxatthebigbeech(山毛榉）tree.Atmyreturntotheplacewherewemet,IwassureI'dfinditthere.AndIdid.ThistimeIgatheredalittlebitmorecourageandcalledouttoit,"Fox!"Ofcourseitescaped.butthatonlymademelongtomeetitagain.IdecidedthatifIcouldfinditskennel(洞)andcatchit,Iwouldtryandtame(驯服)it,makingitmyfriend.mainideaTheinteractbetweenmeandthefoxMydreamoftamingandmakingfriendswiththefoxThus,Ispentmostofmyfreetimeintheforeststryingtofindthefoxduringthefollowingmonths.ButIneversawitagainbeforewintercame.Duringthewinter,Ifolloweditsfootprintsfaracrossthefields.SuddenlyIwasalarmedbythehowlingofwolvesnearme.Iranawayfrightened,stumbledandhurtmyankle.Ithealedveryslowly,sothatIhadtostayathomeduringthewinter,readingabookaboutanimalsoftheforestandfoxes.mainideaIdidn’tseethefoxallthewinterasmyanklewasinjuredintheforest.Whenspringarrived,Iwasfreeagain.Ilookedforfoxkennelsandwaitedformyfox.Tomyamazement,ithadgotyoungonesbutkeptmovingbecauseofmyobservations;thereforeIdecidedtoobservethefoxfromalongerdistance.mainideaThefoxbecameamotherofyoungfoxes.Butshehidfromme.Iobservedherinthedistance.

Mystorystartedoneautumnmorning,atthebendonapath.(回扣：始于秋天的一个早晨，终于秋天的另一个早晨。）FascinatedtothepointthatIforgotallfear,Idaredtogouptoit.Ihadnevercomesoclosetoawildanimal.

Readforcluesandechoescluesechoes1.Oneautumnmorning,thefoxeventuallyfollowedmetomyhome.2.Thewildfoxwhichfascinatedmesomucheventuallybecameclosetome.

IdecidedthatifIcouldfinditskennel(洞)andcatchit,Iwouldtryandtame(驯服)it,makingitmyfriend.(结合P2…,itfled.推知最终狐狸没有被驯化，狐归森林。）.

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Whenspring

arrived,Iwasfreeagain.Ilookedforfoxkennelsandwaitedformyfox.Tomyamazement,ithadgotyoungonesbutkeptmovingbecauseofmyobservations;thereforeIdecidedtoobservethefoxfromalongerdistance.(我与狐狸开始有近距离接触的时间是春天。思考：春天可以描写森林里的什么景象呢？可以渲染美丽的春天的森林里，我和狐狸一家其乐融融呀！）

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whowhereWhenThecauseTheprocessTheresultI,fox,herlittlekidsIntheforest,athomeSpring

orautumnIencounteredafox.Idevelopedaclosebondwiththefoxfamilyandtookithome.Thefoxfled.Guess:Why?

SixelementsSixdetailedelementsofthetext定四句1.结合原文本最后一段定首段第一句2.结合第二段首句定首段尾句3.结合第二段首句定第二段第一句4.结合故事结局或立意主旨定第二段尾句Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.Whenspring

arrived,Iwasfreeagain.Ilookedforfoxkennelsandwaitedformyfox.Tomyamazement,ithadgotyoungonesbutkeptmovingbecauseofmyobservations;thereforeIdecidedtoobservethefoxfromalongerdistance.根据原文的故事情节，结合第二段首句前半句Itookithome,可知第一段是重在构建如何获得狐狸的信赖，最后带狐狸回家。写动物比较难写，可以考虑童话故事中对动物的处理方式：把动物当人看，拟人化的叙事口吻会降低写作难度。首段情节设计Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.Whenspring

arrived,Iwasfreeagain.Ilookedforfoxkennelsandwaitedformyfox.Tomyamazement,ithadgotyoungonesbutkeptmovingbecauseofmyobservations;thereforeIdecidedtoobservethefoxfromalongerdistance.可以追问一下为什么狐狸要逃跑呀？表现一下我的情感，假定带狐狸回家的季节辗转来到了秋季，则可以描述一下秋天的森林，美丽的森林是狐狸永远的家，最终小作者我明白了，狐狸属于大自然属于森林。我们保护森林，拯救地球，呵护他们的家园。这才是朋友我、我们应该做的。狐狸逃离而去，未曾郑重告别。梦境中实现告别及祝福。二段情节设计WheneverIvisitedherfamily,Iwouldtooksomefoodlikemilkandmeatandputitbesideherkennel,signaling

herthathercubscouldfeast.

Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.I；狐狸已经有小狐狸了。

结合年龄特点，我小孩子心性体现一下，带零食去和小狐狸们示好。

Whenspring

arrived,Iwasfreeagain.Ilookedforfoxkennelsandwaitedformyfox.Tomyamazement,ithadgotyoungonesbutkeptmovingbecauseofmyobservations;thereforeIdecidedtoobservethefoxfromalongerdistance.Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.2:首段尾句/句群：.结合第二段前半句，我把狐狸带回家。

Myworkeventuallypaidoff.NotonlycouldIplaygameswiththecubsonthegreengrasslandbutalsoshesometimessniffedmyhandsasiftosay,“Hi,wearefriendsnow.”Astimetickedby/Timetickingby,thebondbetweenmeandthefoxfamilybecamemoreandmoreintimate.Thenoneautumnafternoon,Itookherhome,alongwithheryoungones.Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.3二段首句/句群：结合主语I+

it进行首句创作：虽然我为狐狸提供了避风港，但狐狸野性难驯。

Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.4：

二段尾句/句群：结合主语I+狐狸

进行结尾句创作WhatIcoulddoforherwastodomybesttoprotecttheforestforher.Afterall,theforestwasherdreamhome.Inmydream,IdreamedofherroamingwithherkidsinthedenseforestandenjoyingthefreedomthatIcouldn’toffer.习作句式及逻辑拆解主语切换方便行文1Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.（When从句，二连动，doingsth：我怎么去亲近狐狸，带吃的)WheneverIvisitedherfamily,Iwouldtooksomefoodlikemilkandmeatandputitbesideherkennel,signaling

herthatsheandhercubscouldfeast.

(并列句：环境描写+结果：为何带吃的东西，养娃艰辛哇！）

Itwasearlyspringsoitwastoughforhertosupportheryoungkidsonherown.(并列句：渲染春天的森林)Spring

wasawonderfulseasonandtheforestwasvigorous.

（无灵主语句：渲染春天的森林鲜花处处。）

Colorfulandfragrantflowerswerebloomingeverywhere.

6.（独立主格，主句：欢乐的森林景象）Birds

chirpingcheerfully,squirrelsrunningupanddownthetrees,thelittlefoxeswereplayinghappilywitheachotheraroundtheirkennel.(时间状语从句，主句：春去秋来，狐狸一家依恋我。）Asspringwentandautumncame,thefoxfamilybecameattachedtome.（倒装句：具体表现如何依恋我，亲近我）NosoonerhadIapproachedtheirkennelthantheyoungonespokedtheirlittlefurryheadsoutasiftogreetme.（感叹句：被狐狸信赖的感觉真好，带狐狸回家喽！）Whatafabulousfeeling!Icouldn’twaittotakeithome,alongwithherkids.习作句式及逻辑拆解主语切换方便行文Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.（Done短语，sbdidsth：我好难过）Overwhelmedbyanenormoussenseofsadness,Icouldn’thelpburstintotears.（Doingsth,sbdidsth:我看着空荡荡的狐狸新窝，大叫狐狸，只听到回声激荡。）Seeingtheemptynewkennelinouryard,Icalledout“fox”onlytohearmycallsechoinginthesilentwoods.（with结构，sbdidsth:我心情沉重，终于明白一切驯化狐狸的努力终成泡影。）

Withaheavyheart,Icametounderstandthatmyattemptstotameherasmypet/myfriendwerefutile.习作句式及逻辑拆解主语切换方便行文4.(What主从wastodo…：我能为狐狸做的事情是保护好森林.）

WhatIneverexpectedwasthatmyhomewasnotattractivetoher.5.

（Doingsth,sbdidsth)小孩子哭，妈妈安慰）Hearingmycries,momwrappedmeinherwarmembraceandconsoledmesoftly,“Shebelongedtotheforest.”6.（Since时间状语从句，主句：狐狸再也没有见到过了。）Sinceshedisappearedfrommyteenagelife,Ihavenevermetheragain.7.（But转折：诉说对狐狸美好的希望。）

Thatnight,Ihadadream,whereshewasroamingwithherkidsinthedenseforestandenjoyingthefreedomthatIcouldn’toffer.8.(二连动+时间状语从句：梦里说再见，互相祝福。）AndinthedreamI

saidgoodbyeandwishedthebesttoher.习作句式及逻辑拆解主语切换方便行文习作欣赏注意叙事主语的切换1Para1:Finally,itwouldletmegetclose.WheneverIvisitedherfamily,Iwouldtooksomefoodlikemilkandmeatandputitbesideherkennel,signalingherthathercubscouldfeast.Itwasearlyspringanditwastoughforhertosupportheryoungkidsonherown.Springwasawonderfulseasonandtheforestwasvigorous.Variousflowerswerebloomingeverywhere.

Birds

chirpingcheerfully,squirrelsrunningupanddownthetrees,thelittlefoxeswereplayinghappilywitheachotheraroundtheirkennelAsspringwentandautumncame,thefoxfamilybecameattachedtome.NosoonerhadIapproachedtheirkennelthantheyoungonespokedtheirlittlefurryheadsoutasiftogreetme.Whatafabulousfeeling!Icouldn’twaittotakeithome,alongwithherkids.Para2:Tomysurprise,thedayafterItookithome,itfled.Overwhelmedbyanenormoussenseofsadness,Icouldn’thelpburstintotears.Seeingtheemptynewkennelinouryard,,Icalledout“fox”onlytohearmycallsechoinginthesilentwoods.

Withaheavyheart,Icametounderstandthatmyattemptstotameherasmypetwerefutile.）

WhatIneverexpectedwasthatmyhomewasnotattractivetoher.Hearingmycries,momwrappedmeinherwarmembraceandconsoledmesoftly,“Shebelongedtotheforest.”Sinceshedisappearedfrommyteenagelife,Ihavenevermetheragain.Thatnight,Ihadadream,where