题型精析17.读后续写之宏观设计策略突破

17.读后续写之宏观设计策略突破【题型总览】【考情分析】课标解读读后续写主要关注学生以下四个方面的能力:1.把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力;2.语言运用的准确性和丰富性;3.对语篇结构的把控能力;4.创造性思维能力。类别文体主题语境话题2023新高考卷Ⅰ、Ⅱ故事类记叙文人与自我作者在老师的鼓励下写作成功2022新高考卷Ⅰ、Ⅱ故事类记叙文人与自我David战胜自我,勇敢奔跑的故事2021新高考卷Ⅰ、Ⅱ故事类记叙文人与社会双胞胎在母亲节为妈妈准备惊喜早餐八省联考故事类记叙文人与社会爸爸带儿子去朋友家玩,结果迷路的故事【考向回顾】体裁特点主要考查叙事类文体。材料主要涉及考生的实际生活或考生关心的话题题型特点续写要彰显人性光辉,体现人与自然和谐相处。这样的文章才更适合考查考生的逻辑思维、评判性思维和创新思维能力语篇特点主题语境命题围绕人与自我、人与社会、人与自然三大主题,题材涉及故事类以及夹叙夹议类材料来源高考语篇一般选自各大主流英文报刊和媒体网站,语言地道,原汁原味提示特点所给出的段落开头与上下文联系紧密,对续写故事的发展有提示、衔接、引导和一定程度的限制作用续写特点读写并重,也就是要读透所给材料,对本篇文章线索做到精确理解,这样才能使续写内容不偏离主题考查特点该题型通过读写结合,检测考生的英语书面语言理解与表达能力。要求考生能够梳理故事的结构、分析故事发展的线索、想象故事发展的情节以及续写故事的发展和结局【题型精析】【真题示例】典例(2023·浙江高考·1月卷)Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspiderwebs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspiderwebsthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberrylinedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthaveetosaygoodbye.”注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

____________________________________________________________Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

____________________________________________________________【宏观策略】考场答题突破必备第一步：读懂故事情节,把握情感线索,确定故事走向人物主角:作者与蜂鸟配角:东道主、朋友地点一个有破窗户的挤奶房、我朋友的农场时间在野餐之前和野餐期间情节被朋友邀请去一个农场野餐→走过挤奶房时发现一只蜂鸟被蜘蛛网困住了→救了蜂鸟→放飞蜂鸟,蜂鸟不肯马上飞走,盯着作者看后飞走→野餐中作者告诉朋友此事→野餐后朋友为作者送行→作者正要离开时,蜂鸟飞来再次盯着作者看,好像在说再见情感发现蜂鸟被困时的怜悯→帮助蜂鸟脱困时的友善与细心→蜂鸟没有从作者手中飞走时的好奇与猜测→蜂鸟飞走前盯着作者看时的惊奇→与朋友分别时蜂鸟再次飞来盯着作者看时的喜悦第二步：研读每段首句,结合已知内容,确定两段情节根据弘扬正能量,结尾需要圆满的原则,并依据情节走向,作者见到蜂鸟,结尾可写蜂鸟恋恋不舍地飞走,并写出此时作者感悟,以升华主题;第一段的尾句起承上启下作用;根据第二段首句内容“我正要离开时,蜂鸟出现了。”可知,第一段结尾处可以描写作者没有见到蜂鸟时,作者对蜂鸟的担心,然后准备离开挤奶房;根据第一段首句内容“几周后,我又去了农场。”和已经确定的该段尾句内容可知,第一段可以写“经过”挤奶房,想起自己所救的蜂鸟,作者于是就到挤奶房再去看一看,此时可描写在那里的所见和所想,对蜂鸟现状的担心。根据第二段首句内容,此时第二段可写蜂鸟向作者飞过来的动作和神态,接着写蜂鸟如何对作者的以及作者看到蜂鸟时愉悦的心情以及感悟。续写线索:想起救蜂鸟的时候→回到那个房子→想到那只蜂鸟→看见蜂鸟→蜂鸟的表现→作者的感想第三步：优化写作语言,完善续写逻辑,秀出出彩文章Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.AsmycarapproacheditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthehummingbirdfromspiderwebs.HardlyhadIparkedmycarwhenIrushedbacktothedesertedhouse.Itwasagreatfortthattheoriginalholeinthewindowwasnowheretobefound.Leavingthehouse,Icouldn’thelpwonderinghowshewasgettingonnow.Hadshemanagedtofindherwaybackhome,orwasshestillouttheresomewherestrugglingtosurvive?Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.Aflashofmovementcaughtmyattention.Iturnedaroundtoseethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.Itseemedthatthebirdwaswaitingforme,herbeadyeyeslockedonmineasiftryingtoconveysomedeep,unspokengratitude.Ifeltasurgeofreliefandaweatthesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasIclimbedintomycaranddroveaway.【题型精练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasacoldwintermorningwhenLilywokeupfromherdeepsleep.Shestretchedherarmsandyawnedlazily,feelingasenseofemptinessdeepwithin.Asshelookedoutthewindow,shenoticedthattheoncelivelyandcolorfulgardenoutsidewasnowcoveredinablanketofsnow.Lilyhadalwaysbeenfascinatedbythebeautyofnature.Shelovedwatchingtheflowersbloominspring,feelingthewarmthofthesuninsummer,andappreciatingthegoldencolorsofautumn.Butnow,withwinter’sarrival,thereseemedtobeemptyinherheart.Determinedtobringbackthelostspiritofspring,Lilydecidedtotakemattersintoherownhands.Sheputonherwarmestcoat,wrappedascarfaroundherneck,andwentoutintothefrozenworld.Witheachstepshetook,sheimaginedthescentoffreshflowersfillingtheairandthesoundofbirdssinginghappily.Asshewalkedthroughthesnowcoveredgarden,asmallrayofsunlightbrokethroughtheclouds,castingasoftglowonthebarrenlandscape.Lily’seyeswidenedwithwonderasshecameacrossatinysprout(嫩芽)growingfromtheground.Itwasasignofhope,apromiseofnewlife.Eagertoraisethisfragilelittlelife,Lilycarefullydugasmallholeandgentlyplaceditinthesoil.Shewatereditwithtenderness,whisperingwordsofencouragement.Daysturnedintoweeks,andthesproutgrewintoayoungplant,itsleavesunfoldinggradually.Onemorning,asLilystoppedintothegarden,shewasgreetedbyabreathtakingsight.Theoncelifelessgardenwasnowbloomingwithrowsofcolorfulflowers.Theairwasfilledwiththesweetfragranceofnature,andthesoundofbuzzingbeesandsingingbirdscreatedasymphony(交响乐)ofjoy.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Oneday,theweathertookanunexpectedturn.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Throughthispainstakingprocess,Lilywitnessedherowngrowthandtransformation._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】

Oneday,theweathertookanunexpectedturn.Theskywascoveredwithdarkclouds,andaheavyrainwasontheway.Lilyknewthatsheshouldprotectthefragileflowersinthegarden.Shequicklygottowork,takingthetoolsandthewaterproofcoverfromhergarage.Despitebeingthinandtiny,sheusedallherstrengthtosetseveralpolesintotheareaaroundthegarden,putthecoverabovetheflowersandfixitontothepoles.Asthewindblew,Lilyworkeddiligently,regardlessoftheapproachingrain.Throughthispainstakingprocess,Lilywitnessedherowngrowthandtransformation.Shehadlearnedtopersevereinthefaceofadversityandtobelieveinthepowerofnature.Asspringarrived,thegardenbloomedwithcolor,andLily’sheartwasfilledwithjoy.Shebroughtlifebacktothegarden,andinturn,thegardengaveherexcitingrewards.Shelearnedthatwithpatienceanddedication,anythingwaspossible.AsLilysatinthegardenonawarmday,shesmiled,enjoyingthebeautyofnature.【写作分析】本文是一篇记叙文，以人物为线索。Lily是一个非常热爱大自然的女孩，但冬天的到来让她的心里很空虚。她决心要把失去的春天带回来，于是她走了出去。当她穿过白雪覆盖的花园时，她发现了白雪下覆盖的一个绿芽。在她日复一日的精心照料下，绿芽长成了一株鲜嫩的植物，展开了叶子。一天早上，她突然发现花园里出现了五颜六色的花朵，充满了生机。后来有一天天气骤变，即将下大雨，她要保护这些娇嫩的花朵，于是她努力给花园盖上防水布。在这个过程中，她见证了自己的成长和蜕变，在春天里，她尽情享受着大自然的美丽。【解析】1.续写线索：①由续写第一段首句“一天，天气发生了意想不到的变化。”可知，第一段可以描写天气的突变让Lily知道有必要保护花园里的花朵，于是她凭借自己的努力把花朵遮盖起来。②由续写第二段首句“在这个艰辛的过程中，Lily见证了自己的成长和蜕变。”可知，第二段可以描写Lily在这次经历中的感悟，以及她后来欣赏到了花园中的自然之美。2.段落续写：3.词汇激活行为类①保护：protect/safeguard/safeguard②坚持：persevere/stickitout③欣赏：enjoy/appreciate情绪类①高兴：joy/delight②令人兴奋的：exciting/thrilling【高分句型1】Despitebeingthinandtiny,sheusedallherstrengthtosetseveralpolesintotheareaaroundthegarden,putthecoverabovetheflowersandfixitontothepoles.(使用了动名词作宾语、不定式作目的状语)【高分句型2】AsLilysatinthegardenonawarmday,shesmiled,enjoyingthebeautyofnature.(使用了As引导时间状语从句、现在分词作状语)2.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Everyfewyears,humpbackwhalesetothewaterareainSanLuisObispo,California,forafewdayswhilemigrating,whichattractshundredsofvisitorsandwhalelovers.InNovember2020,over20whaleswerearound,feedingonsilverfish.Eachoneishuge,about15metreslong.Atthattime,IlivednearbyandIwasalwayscrazyaboutwhalessoIinvitedmyfriendLizCottrieltogooutonashiptocheckthemoutthenextmorning.“Noway,”Lizhesitated.Shewasscaredofwhalesandsharks,andwasworriedthattheshipwouldoverturnwhilewewereinit.ButItoldhertherewasnothingtoworryaboutandweprobablywouldhaveanunforgettableexperience.Convinced,Lizjoinedmeandwesetoffat8:30thenextmorning.Forthefirsthalfhourwedidn’tseeanything.ThenIspottedtwopairsofwhales,swimmingtowardsusatfastspeed.Thoughitwasthefirsttimewehadseenthelargecreaturesatsuchaclosedistance,weintendednottoturnaroundimmediatelywemetthem.Instead,wechosetowaitfortheirapproaching.Oneofthewhalesbreached(跃出水面),thenwentdownandhitthewaterreallyhard,leavingwhatlookslikealayerofoilandalsolargewaves.Theboatstartedrockingwildly.Atthatmoment,werealizeditwastooclose.Allofasudden,alargegroupoffishstartedjumpingoutofthewaterintoourship.Theirmovementsoundedlikecrackingglassaroundus.Iwasterrified.ThenIfeltourshipliftedoutofthewater–abouttwometres,welaterlearned.Ifiguredthewhalewasgoingtodragusdownsomehow,andIhadnoideahowdeepwe’dbesuckedunderwater.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。Paragraph1:WhatIdidn’trealiseatthemomentwasthatLizandIwereinthewhale’smouth._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Itsuddenlystruckmethatwhaleshavehugemouthsbuttinythroats._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】

WhatIdidn’trealiseatthemomentwasthatLizandIwereinthewhale’smouth.Butsoonitwaspatheticthatwehadtofacetheterriblereality.Itthenengulfedmyentirebodyexceptformyrightarmandpaddle.Liz,meanwhile,waslookingupdirectlyintothewhale’sjaw–itwaslikeabigwhitewall.Shealmostbrokedownandstartedtoscreamhysterically.Istrainedeverynervetryingtoeupwithanidea—I’vegottogetup.I’vegottofightthis.I’vegottobreathe.However,inthefaceofimmensity,thewillpowerofasmallhumanwouldbenotworthmentioning.Thewhitewallkeptpressing,andwewereeventuallysubmergedunderwater.

Itsuddenlystruckmethatwhaleshavehugemouthsbuttinythroats.Anythingtheycan’tswallow,theyspitout.Atthoughtofthis,Ifeltaheavystoneslightlyliftedfrommyheartandrelievedlygainedasenseofsecurity.Asexpected,withaviolentsway,LizandIbothpoppedupoutofthewateraboutmetresapart.Thoughtheentireordeallastedonlyseconds,itfeltlikeaneternityforus.Whenwegotbacktoshore,wegaspedinatremblingandshockedvoice.“God,thatwasanarrowescape!”.There’snowaywearegettingthatclosetothewhalesagain.Peopleshouldrespectthenatureanddonotinvadethespaceofotherspecies.【写作分析】本文以“看鲸鱼”为线索展开，讲述了作者说服朋友Liz和她一起去观看鲸鱼，结果离得太近被鲸鱼攻击，掉进了鲸鱼嘴巴里。幸亏作者沉着应对，才最终脱险。【解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“我当时没有意识到的是，我和Liz其实正处于鲸鱼的嘴里。”可知，第一段可描写作者和朋友在鲸鱼嘴里的经历。②由第二段首句内容“我突然想到，鲸鱼的嘴很大，但喉咙很小。”可知，第二段可描写作者他们如何得救以及感悟。2.续写线索：说服朋友看鲸鱼——被鲸鱼攻击——掉进鲸鱼嘴里——恐惧万分——鲸鱼喉咙小——脱险——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①使某人想起：strike/hit②崩溃：breakdown/fallapart③想出：eupwith/thinkof情绪类①宽慰地：relievedly/withrelief②震惊的：shocked/stunned【高分句型1】Itsuddenlystruckmethatwhaleshavehugemouthsbuttinythroats.(运用了it作形式主语)【高分句型2】Thoughtheentireordeallastedonlyseconds,itfeltlikeaneternityforus.(运用了though引导的让步状语从句)3.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。TurtlesCrossingOnespringafternoon,Alexrodehisbikealongthecountryroadleadingtohishouse.Asheroundedabend,asigncameintohisview—Johnson’spond.Hisdadtookhimcanoeing(皮划艇)theresometimes.Alexlovedit.Nowitwasspringtimeandthepondwasalwayssoalive.There,hecouldfindfrogscroaking,dragonflieshuntingandturtlesbasking(晒太阳)onsunnyrocks.Alexwascuriousabouttheturtleshesaw.Daysearlier,hehadgonetothelibrarytocheckoutbooksonturtles.Alexlearnedthatturtlesdon’thavewarmbloodlikepeopledo.That’swhytheyhavetositinthesuntowarmthemselves.Healsolearnedthatinspringturtleslayeggsonthelandawayfromthewater.Nowitlookedliketomorrowmightbeanothersunnyday.HedecidedhewouldaskDadiftheycouldgocanoeingandlookforturtlesagain.JustthenAlexsawsomethingintheroadupahead.Itlookedlikeabiggrayrock.Butitwasafunnyplaceforarocktobe.AsAlexwatched,therockstartedtomove.Whenherodehisbikeuptogetacloserlook,hesawthatitwasn’tarockatall.Itwasalargeturtlecreeping(爬)itswayacrosstheroad.Ithadabony,beakshapedmouthandalong,jaggedtail.Alexsuddenlyrealizedwhatshewasgoingtodo.Healsoknewnottogettooclose.Hehadreadthataturtlehasapowerfulbiteeventhoughitdoesn’thaveteeth.Itcouldevenbiteoffsomeone’sfinger.Hestoodatadistanceandwatched.Outofthecornerofhiseye,hesawacarapproaching.Theturtlewasstillonlyhalfwayacrosstheroad.Alexknewhecouldn’tpickituptomoveitsafelytothegrass.Whatcouldhedo?Thinkingfast,hestartedjumpingupanddownandwavingbothhandswildly.”Stop!Stop!“hecried.Thecarslowedtoastop,andthedriverstuckherheadoutofthewindow.Itwashisneighbor,Mrs.Ramos.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。”Areyoualright,Alex?“askedMrs.Ramos.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________SuddenlyAlexgotanideahowtoprotectthemfromcardanger._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________