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分析材料哪些信息可以呼应-筛选可以使用的词汇：一般是和线索、引起矛盾出现的事物、导致矛盾升级的事物有关的词汇-找出矛盾（要解决的问题）-明确氛围和环境-找到“续写两句话”没有提到的情节，但是却可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质，比如值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情-找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的话，可以在关键情节时激励主人公）-找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形读后续写原题目呈现：ThenoticewaspostednexttothemailboxesintheapartmentbuildingIhadjustmovedinto.

“AMitzvah(善行)forMrs.Green,”【主题词】

itread,“SignuptodriveMrs.Greenin3Bhomefromherchemotherapy(化疗)treatmentstwiceamonth.”【Mrs.Green是谁？】SinceIwasn’tadriver,Icouldn’taddmyname,buttheword“mitzvah”wasalwayswanderinginmythoughtsafterIwentupstairs.It’saHebrewwordthatmeans“todoagooddeed”.Butaccordingtomygrandma,italsohadanothermeaning.ThiswastheoneshewasalwayspointingouttomebecauseshenoticedthatIthoughtitashametoletpeopledothingsforme.

“Linda,it’sablessingtodoamitzvahforsomeoneelse,butsometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou.”【融洽-呼应材料“引起主人公思考和启发的话语”】【思考：为什么让别人帮你的忙也是一种善意？】Oneevening,snowflakeshadbeenfallingpastmywindowforseveralhourswhenthetimetoleaveforclasscame.Ilaboredtothebusstop,reachingitjustasabuswentby.Foranhour,Iprayeddesperatelythatabuswouldcome.ThenIgaveup.Thewindatmybackpushedmetowardshome.EvenifIwantedtoasksomeoneforagooddeed,whichIdidnot,therewasn’tasoulonthestreet.【你会注意到：到这里都没提到MrsGreen】ButasIpushedthedoorofmyapartmentopen,Ifoundmyselffacetofacewithawomanatthemailboxwithasetofkeysinherhand.Obviouslyshehadacarandwasgoingout.Inthatsplitsecond,desperationovercamemyprideandIblurted(脱口而出),“Couldyoupossiblygivemealift?”Anoddlookcrossedherfaceandsheagreedwithouthesitation.l【融洽

-呼应了前文“sometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou”】l【你会注意到：到这里都没提到MrsGreen，但是却提到了这个awoman，还不是可以猜测她就是MrsGreen】Onourwaytomyschool,shespokesowarmlythatIfeltcomfortable.“Youremindmeofmygrandmother.”Isaid.Aslightsmilecrossedherlips.“JustcallmeGrandmaAliceasmygrandchildrendo.”Whenshedroppedmeoff,Ithankedheragainandagain.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”“我”是一个自认为有能力而独立的大学生，从来不愿意想他人求助。一个大雪纷飞的晚上，我怕迟到赶不上考试，终于鼓足勇气求助，而这次开车送我去学校的，竟然是身患癌症的Green太太。因为此次经历，我学会了向他人求助，而老太太也为再次像个正常人那样去帮助他人而很高兴。

【第一段续写】BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.思考【融洽度、衔接度与内容丰富】l【这里知道GrandmaAlice

就是

MrsGreen】l【融洽：她怎么了？-cancer】l【衔接：我第一次知道MrGreen就是Alice，想到什么？-

一个得了癌症的人竟然看起来这么健康】l【融洽与衔接：把所有线索、引起作者思考的话语、引起作者心情变化的情节、人物关系，整合到一起

——

it’sablessingtodoamitzvahforsomeoneelse,butsometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyou.奶奶说的这句话和MrsGreen的行为有什么关联？——因为她得了癌症，身体虚弱，让她帮我的忙会让她感觉她依旧对他人有帮助、依旧健康、依旧充满生命的活力】第一段范文BackhomeIheardaneighborsaying“Goodnight,MrsGreen.”toGrandmaAliceonthestairs.

Mrs.Green,thewomanwithcancer【融洽度：呼应开头的cancer】.

“GrandmaAlice”wasMrs.Green【融洽与衔接度：呼应开头和续写首句的MrsGreen的真正身份】.Istoodonthestairs,myhandcoveringmymouth【内容丰富：反映作者思考、情感变化的动作，细节描写】:Ihadaskedapersonstrugglingwithcancertogooutinasnowstormtogivemealifttoschool.“Oh,Mrs.Green,”I

stammered（结结巴巴地说）【内容丰富：用词生动，反映作者情绪变化的动作】,“Ididn’trealizewhoyouwere.Pleaseforgiveme.”【衔接度】

I

forcedmylegstomovemeupthestairs.【内容丰富：表达生动，反映作者情绪变化的动作】

Inmyapartment,Istoodstill,nottakingmy

coatoff.HowcouldIhavebeensoinsensitive?

Inafewseconds,someonetappedonmydoor.【衔接度：衔接下文】【第二段续写】Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”思考【融洽度、衔接度与内容丰富】【融洽与衔接：什么内容会与主题

“itisablessingtoletothersdosthforyou”相关呢？】第二段范文Mrs.Greenvisitedmelaterandsaid,“MayItellyousomething?”

Inoddedslowly,motioninghertowardachair,sinkingdownontomycouch【衔接度/融洽度/内容丰富】.“Iusedtobesostrong.”shesaid.Shewascrying.

“Iusedtobeabletodothingsforotherpeople.Noweverybodykeepsdoingthingsforme,givingmethings,cookingmymealsandtakingmetoplaceswhereIwanttogo.It’snotthatIdon’tappreciateit,butIdon’thavechances.TonightbeforeIwentouttogetmymail,IprayedtoGodtoletmefeellikepartofthehumanraceagain.Thenyoucamealong...”【融洽度/衔接度/内容丰富：交代上文内容，为什么“让别人帮助你也是对他人的善意？”】ItwasnotuntilthenthatIunderstoodthetruemeaningofmygrandmum’sremarks:

sometimesit’sablessingtoletanotherpersondosomethingforyoubecausetheyneedyoutoletthemfeelyouneedthem.【点明主旨】好词好句1.

Ipulledontwosweaters,acoat,awoolhatandboots,

bundling

upforthe

trek

tothebusstopthattherealestateagenthaddismissedasashort

stroll.

我穿上两件毛衣、一件外套、一顶羊毛帽和一双靴子，准备长途跋涉到巴士站，房地产经纪人说那只是短途散步。2.

Foranhour,I

craned

myneck,prayingdesperatelythatabuswouldcome.整整一个小时，我伸长脖子，绝望地祈祷公交车会来。3.

AsIpulledGrandma’sscarfmoretightlyaroundmyneck,againIseemedtohearthatwhisper:

Asksomeoneforalift!Itcouldbeamitzvah.当我把奶奶的围巾更紧地围在脖子上时，我似乎又听到了那句低语:找人搭车!可能是成年礼。4.Inthatsplitsecond,desperationovercamepride,andwithmybreathcomingoutinwhite

puffs

inthefreezinghallway,I

blurted,

“Couldyoupossiblygivemealift?”

Ihurriedlyexplained,endingwith,“Ineveraskanybodyforalift,but...”

在那一刹那，绝望压倒了骄傲，我在