技巧03 如何设计高潮-高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练

高一英语读后续写基础技巧与整体演练技巧03如何设计高潮故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点。有时候，它只是达到了关键时刻或者转折点，发生了一些事情，或者主角必须做出决定，从而导致一个结果或其他。我们在分析叙事类故事或者小说故事的时候常常用下面的图表来表示故事情节。故事高潮设计策略1．增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。(1)角色之间的冲突【例如】Onthefourthorfifthnight，wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime，Momsuddenlygotagreatidea：Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupatentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.【分析】开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议在他人后院搭帐篷——David和“我”倍感紧张，心有不悦(母子的观点不一)(2)角色与环境之间的冲突【例如】ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim...hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall，butawolf，quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped...hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal，andtoMac’srelief，itfellback，shakingitshead.Butaminutelater...Thenit...，tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime，andagain，itfellback...【分析】Mac骑车独行，路遇恶狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。[人(角色)——狼(环境)大战](3)角色与时间的冲突【例如】Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.“Getintothecar.”PaulshoutedatMac.MacjumpedoffthebikeandslidintothecarwithoutdelayasthewolfwasjusttwostepsawayandwasabouttotearMacintopieces.Whatanarrowescape!【分析】汽车突停面前——急喊上车——Mac上车避险——恶狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容缓)2．放大内心冲突放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)也有助于建立一个高度紧张和不确定的时刻。现在我们再来看高考读后续写中的内心冲突是如何体现的。【例如】(原文见2016·浙江10月)Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewassotired，hungry，andextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself，“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow，Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream，shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly，sheheardtheshoutsoftigers，whichmadeherscaredtodeath.Aftersheheldherbreathforafewminutes，everythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness，shesleptagain.【分析】夫妇争吵——妻子独自行走——荒野走散，夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)——内心独白(往昔对比＋虚拟语气的使用＋旁白描写是常见技巧之一)1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ijoinedasummercampjustafewweeksago.Ourfirstdaywasfullofgetting-to-know-each-othergamestohelpuslearnourwayaroundthecampground.Ourseconddaywasveryhot,soateachertookustothebestplaceforcoolingdown.“Woo-hoo!”theteachershoutedasheledthewayintotheshallowpartofthelake.Weallranafterhimlikeducklingsandhappilysplashed(拍水)around,exceptforonekidnamedMax,whosatonthedock(码头)lookingsad.Here’sthesurprisingthingaboutthat.Thedaybefore,whenwetookteststoseewhatlevelswimmerswewereinthepool,Maxturnedouttobethebestswimmer.Sowhywashejustsitting?Iswamoverandsaid,“Whyaren’tyouinthewater?Wefoundoutyesterdaythatyou’reabitlikeahalffish.”“OK,I’lltellyou,butit’salittleembarrassing(尴尬的),”hesaid.“EventhoughI’mkindofahalffish,I’malsoafraidofrealfish-andofanythingelsethatmightbeswimminginthedirtywater.”“Don’tbeembarrassed,”Isaid.“We’reallafraidofsomething.I’mtotallyscaredofsnakesandthedark,um,avocados(牛油果).”“Avocados?”Maxsmiled.“Iknowitsoundsstrange,”Isaid.“Butthey’rejustsoslimy(黏)!”“Lookout!”Maxjoked.“Thebigavocadomonster(怪物)iscomingtoslimeyou.”“Youlookout!”Ireplied.“Agiantfishmonsterisheadingyourway.”Soon,wewerebothlaughing.Thatbroketheiceenoughformetosay,“Youmightfeelbetterifyoutakealookatwhat’sactuallyunderthewater.”Igrabbedtwopairsofgoggles(护目镜)fromabinandputonepairon.“I’llgofirst,”Isaid,thenwentunderforafewsecondsbeforecomingup.“Nothingscary,”Ireported.Maxhesitated,thenputontheotherpair,tookadeepbreath,andwentunderthewaterforaboutthreeseconds.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Anylakemonsters?“Iaskedwhenheappearedfromthewater._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。InthevillagewhereCharleslived,highintheFrenchAlps,Decemberusuallybroughtgarlandsscentedwithpine.EachSunday,villagerswouldwalkdowndecoratedstreetstotheoldstoneWishingHouse.There,forthefourweeksbeforeNewYear,theywouldlightcandlesinthehouseandsharetheirstoriesandprayforthenextnewyeartogether.Charleslovedtheglowofthecandles.Butthisyear,WorldWarⅡchangedeverything.Charles’sfatherandbrotherwenttodotheirmilitaryservice.Familiesneededrationcouponsforthingslikebutterandsugar.Becausecandleswerecostlyandhardtofind,thehousewouldnothaveanycandlesthisyear.Charleswasthinkingaboutallofthisashesteppedslowlyoutofbedonemorning.Heputonhiswarmestclothesandheadedouttodohischores.Heopenedthebigbarndoor,sunbeamsstreamingintothebarn.Helookeduptotheloftwherehistreasureboxhid.Theboxheldfishingline,adriedsnakeskin,awhistleandhisbirthdaycandles.Eachyearonhisbirthday,onenewcandlewouldappearonhiscake.Aftermakingawish,he’dquicklyblowoutthecandles,cleanthemoff,andcarefullyputthemintotheboxfornextyear.Whenhischoresweredone,Charlesclimbedtheladderandopenedhistreasurebox.Hecounted10candles.Thecoolwaxwithalreadymeltededgesgavehimanidea.Charleswrappedthecandlesinhishandkerchiefandputthemcarefullyintohispocket.Hehurrieddowntheladderandrantothehouse.“Mama!Grandpa!IknowhowwecanhavecandlesfortheWishingHouse!”hecriedashethrewopenthedoor.“How?”hismotherasked.“Icouldcollectpeople’susedcandlesandmakenewones.Maybewecouldmeltthemdown.”“It’sawonderfulidea,”saidgrandpa,“I’llhelpyou.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Charlesandhisgrandpavisitedeveryhouseandshopinthevillage.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________IntheWishingHousewerethefourcandlesCharleshadmade.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Brutushadeverythingintheworld:goodfood,goodtoys,andgoodclothes.Buttheproblemwasthathehadtosharethemallwithhisthreeotherbrothers,Mack,JackandRobert.BrutushadtosharehisfavoritecookieboxwithMack,whoalwaysfinishedthewholeboxbeforeBrutuscouldtakeabite.HealsohadtosharehistoyswithhisyoungestbrotherJack,whoalwaysendedupbreakingthem.BrutusalsohadtheunfortunateprivilegeofbeinggivenhisolderbrotherRobert’shand-me-downsofoldclothes.Brutushatedsharingandwishedhehadnobodytosharehisbelongingswith.“Whycan’tIbetheonlychild?”Brutussighedashestaredatthestars.“IwishIhadnostupidbrothers,”Brutusdemandedatonesparklingstar.Tohissurprise,thestarsuddenlytwinkledandfelltowardshisdirection.Thestarinchedcloserandclosertohisbedroomwindow.Hescreamedandtriedtowakehisbrothersupbutitwastoolate.Thestarcrashedinsidetheirroom,followedbyanear-splittingexplosion.Thenextday,Brutuswokeupwithabadheadache.Herushedtohisbrothers’bedstoaskthemiftheywereokaybutwasquicklyshockedtoseethattheirbedshadbeenempty.Theywerenowheretobefound.Brutushadthefortuneofspendingthewholemorningplayingwithhistoys.Heputonhisbrother’sbrandnewclothesandsneakerswhichfithimperfectly.Ashewascheckinghimselfinthemirror,hesuddenlyrealizedthathiswishhadcometrue.Hisbrothersweregoneandhehadthewholeworldtohimself.“Icangetusedtothis,”hesaidtohimselfhappily注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Whenhefelthungry,hismothercamebackwithafullboxofcookies._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Inthisway,hespentfivedaysasanonlychildbeforehefelttheemptyhousewastooquiet.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasaSaturdayafternoon.IwashavinglunchwhenDadtoldmetogetready.Ibecameunhappy.Idon’tlikeSaturdays!Eventhoughit’saholidayformostchildren,itisnotformebecauseIneedtogotofootballclub.Manykidslovesports,butIamnotoneofthem.Iprefertostayathomeandread.Idon’tlikerunning.soinateamamabadplayer.ThecoachistiredofmeandmyteammatessometimesthinkI’museless.Ihavenoideahowtoplayfootball.Usually,afterpracticemyteammateswouldaskmetostayoutofthegameandIwouldjustnod.LastThursday,thecoachtoldusthatwewouldbecompetingwithsomeotherteaminamonthandmanypeoplewouldcometoseethegame.Ouropponents(对手)werethelastwinnerandIfroze(呆住)atthethoughtoftheembarrassment()Iwouldfaceiftheteamlostbecauseofme.SoIdecidedtopracticehardforthematchandIwenttopracticeeverysingleday.Afteronemonth,whenthegamedaycamemyteammateswerereluctant(不愿意的)totakemeintheteam,andIalsowishedtostayawayfromthegroundaswell.Butasluckwouldhaveittheywereshortofoneplayerandhadnochoicebuttotakemeintheteam.OurteamwasnamedtheBigBlues.Therewasagreatcheeronourarrivalinthefield.Igotverynervous.Thegamestartedandwithintwominutes,Igotabluecard.BythetimeIwasallowedbackthescorewastwogoalsforeachteamandthenextgoalwoulddecidethewinningteam.注意:1续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Whentheballcametowardsme,Ifroze.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Allmyteammatesrantowardsmetoliftmeintheair.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“Wakeup,Mom!”Ifeltalittlehandonmyfaceandreluctantlyopenedmyeyes.Therewasmyson,readytostarttheday.Ialsoheardmybabiesawakeinthenextroom.Readyornot,thedayhadbegun!Ilovedbeinghomewithmylittleones,butIfelttheweightoftheworldonmyshoulders.MyhusbandandIhadjustboughtahouse,andsomeunexpectedexpensesmadeourbudgettighterthanithadeverbeen.Iwaswearyofspendingmorepennies.Weweren’tfoolishwithourmoney.Weworkedhard.Weweredoingalltherightthings,butwehadhadonefinancialdisappointmentafteranother.Iwasgoingtopickupmykids’photoportraitsfromthestudioatthelocalmall.Despiteoursmallbudget,itwasimportanttometohavepicturesofmychildrenastheyweregrowingup.Thepreviousweek,Ihadfoundacoupon(优惠券)andusedsomechangefromthecartobuya$7.99portraitpackage,andtodaywasthedayIwastopickuptheportraits.Sinceweweregoingtothemall,Idecidedtomakeitanoutingandpackedsomesandwichesforustoeatatthefoodcourt.What’smore,therearemanyride-ontoycarsinthemall’sfoodcourtforfunandforfree.Afterbreakfast,wewentoff.Afterweparked,wewalkedintotheportraitstudioatthemall,andIapproachedthecounter.Theyoungwomansmiled.“MayIhelpyou?”“Yes,I’mheretopickupourphotos.”Thewomanaskedmynameandopenedherdrawer.“Ah,yes,heretheyare.Aren’ttheyjustsoadorable?”Shetookoutthephotos,andthesmilingfacesofmykidswarmedmyheart.“Yes,theyaregreat.Thankyou,”Isaid.Sheputthephotosintoanenvelope.ThenshespreadoutadditionalphotosofmykidsthatIhadn’tordered.Iknewwhatthatmeant.Theupsellpitch(推销)wascoming.“Wouldyouliketopurchasetheseextraportraits?Theyareonlyfifteendollarsapiece!”shesmiledsweetly.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Myheartturnedcold.“Idon’thavefifteendollars.”________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aswewerehavingourlunch,theyoungwomancameupandpressedsomethingintomyhand.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案1.【参考范文】

“Anylakemonsters?”Iaskedwhenheappearedfromthewater.Helaughedandpointedatsomeharmlesslittlefish.“Onlysmallfish.”Maxdecidedtowaititoutonthedockthatday,buthewasactuallyswimminginthelakebeforetheendofthecamp!Seeinghimswimminghappilyinthelake,Iwasrelievedandrelaxed.Inthemeantime,Iwaslostinmythought:NearlyeveryoneI’vemetisafraidofsomethingandhowtogetoveritmeansalot.Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.Andthentakingbabystepstolearnmoreaboutthethingforinstance,lookingintodirtywaterwithgogglesoncanactuallybeabighelpinovercomingthefear.Theproblemisthatmostpeopleholdtheirfearsclosely,becauseit’spartofwhotheyare.Ifyouaren’treadytofaceyourfear,youprobablywon’tovercomeyourfear.Ifyou’rereadytomoveforward,facingyourfearbravelyisthefirststeptotake.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者几周前参加了一个夏令营，第二天由于天气炎热，老师带大家去玩水降温，作者发现游泳水平最好的Max却悲伤地坐在码头上，作者询问Max才得知他害怕水里的一些鱼和其他一些小生物，作者不断鼓励Max，并率先跳下水告诉他没什么可怕的，Max犹豫了一下也潜入水中。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“‘湖里有怪物吗？’他从水里出来时我问他”可知，第一段可描写Max的回答以及作者看到Max在水里游泳的感悟。②由第二段首句内容“根据我的经验，对让你害怕的事情笑一笑可以让你更容易谈论它。”可知，第二段可描写作者对克服恐惧的感悟，勇敢面对恐惧是第一步。2.续写线索：Max决定坐在码头等——感到轻松——陷入沉思——感悟——勇敢面对是克服恐惧的第一步3.词汇激活行为类①出现：appear/turnup②陷入沉思：belostinone’sthought/fallintothought③克服：overcome/getover情绪类①快乐：happily/delightedly②放松的：relieved/eased【典型句式】[高分句型1].Inmyexperience,laughingalittleaboutthethingthatscaresyoucanmakeiteasiertotalkaboutit.（由关系代词that引导的定语从句）[高分句型2].Theproblemisthatmostpeopleholdtheirfearsclosely,becauseit’spartofwhotheyare.（由that引导的表语从句、because引导的原因状语从句和who引导的宾语从句）[高分句型3].Ifyouaren’treadytofaceyourfear,youprobablywon’tovercomeyourfear.（由if引导的条件状语从句）2.【参考范文】Charlesandhisgrandpavisitedeveryhouseandshopinthevillage.Chillywindandsnowpushedagainstthemateveryturn,butCharles’sheartwasconsumedwithhappinessandwarmth,imaginingthenewcandleshecouldmake.“Madam?Sir?CouldyouspareafewoldcandlesfortheNewYear?”saidCharles,holdingoutabasketfromdoortodoor.Whenthelastdoorhadclosed,theyheadedhomewithawidevarietyofcandlesofdifferentcoloursandsize.Lookingatthegoodharvest,Charlesbreathedasighofrelief.Withoutdelay,heandhisgrandpasettowork,droppingthevillagers’candlestogetherwithallhisowntreasuredonesintoameltingpot.IntheWishingHousewerethefourcandlesCharleshadmade.Theyweresmall,andtheywerenottheregularNewYearcandles.Eachwasablendofdifferentcolours,glowinginthehouse.Charlessmiled,knowinghisfriendswouldseeitandbelieveNewYearwascomingafterall.Asitturnedout,thevillagerswhowenttothehouseandwitnessedthecandlescheeredup,surprisedandteary-eyed.“Thecandlesarebeautiful,aren’tthey,Grandpa?”Charleswhispered.“Beautiful!”grandpanodded.Sometimes,difficultiesandadversityareunavoidable,however,wecanbringsunshineandhopewithawarmheart.Maybe,thisiswhatNewYearisallabout.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了查尔斯的父亲和哥哥去服兵役了。家庭需要黄油和糖等食品的定量配给券。因为蜡烛很贵，而且很难找到，所以今年家里不会有蜡烛。于是他提议收集人们用过的蜡烛，制作新的。最终在爷爷的帮助下，查尔斯制作并点亮了蜡烛。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“查尔斯和他的爷爷参观了村里的每家每户。”可知，第一段可描写他们收集蜡烛的经过。②由第二段首句内容“许愿屋里放着查尔斯做的四支蜡烛。”可知，第二段可描写村民看到点燃蜡烛之后的反应和感悟。2.续写线索：参观——收集蜡烛——制作蜡烛——点亮蜡烛——感悟3.词汇激活行为类开始：setto/startto制作：make/produce松了口气：breatheasighofrelief/letouta(long)sighofrelief情绪类快乐：happiness/joy无法避免：unavoidable/inevitable【典型句式】[高分句型1]Withoutdelay,heandhisgrandpasettowork,droppingthevillagers’candlestogetherwithallhisowntreasuredonesintoameltingpot.(运用了现在分词作状语)[高分句型2]Asitturnedout,thevillagerswhowenttothehouseandwitnessedthecandlescheeredup,surprisedandteary-eyed.(运用了who引导定语从句)3.【参考范文】Whenhefelthungry,hismothercamebackwithafullboxofcookies.“They’reallforyou,mydearson,”saidMomwithacaringsmile.Momtoldhimthathisbrothershadgonetovisithisgrandparentswithhisdad.Thinkingthathecouldenjoyallthecookiesalone,Brutuswaswildwithjoy.Withmouthwatering,Brutuswolfeddownfourcookiesbeforehefelttoofulltohavemore.EverydayBrutusenjoyedplayingtoys,havingdeliciousfoodandwearingnewclotheswithouthisbrothersbothering.Inthisway,hespentfivedaysasanonlychildbeforehefelttheemptyhousewastooquiet.Heneededsomeonetoplaywith.Althoughhewaswelldressed,fooddidn’ttastegoodwithnobodytosharewith.Hebegantomisshisbrothers.Herealizedtheircompanywaswhatheneededmost.“IwishIwouldn’tbetheonlychildanylonger,”hethought,fallingasleep.Thenextmorning,apillowhitBrutusonthehead,wakinghimup.Tohisgreatdelight,Brutussawhisbrothersback!Hesatupimmediatelytohugthemandwouldneverwishtoseparatefromthem!【写作指导】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述Brutus有好吃的，好玩的，穿的也好，但这一切都不得和其他三个兄弟分享。他厌倦这样的生活，一天晚上对着星星许愿，希望自己是家里唯一的孩子。第二天起床后他发现其他三个兄弟都不见了踪影，感觉自己的愿望实现了，整个早上享受着不用和他人分享的生活。1.段落续写①根据第一段首句“当他感到饥饿时，他的母亲带着一整盒饼干回来了”可知，下文可描写妈妈告诉Brutus其他兄弟的去向，以及他独自享受美食、玩具和衣物的场景。②根据第二段首句“就这样，他作为独生子女度过了五天，才觉得空房子太安静了”可知，下文可描写他开始想念兄弟们，明白了有他们的陪伴他才会快乐。2.续写线索：妈妈回家——独自享用一切——五天后感觉无聊——意识到兄弟的陪伴很重要——兄弟们回来3.词汇激活行为类①拜访：visit/payavisitto/callonsb./dropinonsb②看见：see/spot③狼吞虎咽：wolf/takebigbits情绪类①关爱的：caring/considerate②快乐：joy/merriness【典型句式】[高分句型1]Thinkingthathecouldenjoyallthecookiesalone,Brutuswaswildwithjoy.（运用了现在分词作状语，和that引导的宾语从句）[高分句型2]Althoughhewaswelldressed,fooddidn’ttastegoodwithnobodytosharewith.（运用了although引导的让步状语从句）4.【参考范文】Whentheballcametowardsme,Ifroze.Myteammateswereverytiredandseemedworried.Theopponentsrushedtowardsme.Withoutthinkinganymore,Ifoundcourage,andwithallmymight,Ikickedtheball.Theopponentsdidn’tthinkhighlyofme,sotheydidn’tthinkthatIwouldbeabletokicktheballsopowerfully.AsIkicked,thegoalkeeperjumpedtowardstheball.Astheballhitthebackofthenet,Iheardabigcheer.TheBigBlueswonthematch!AllmyteammatesrantowardsmetoliftmeintheairSincethatday,IhavegainedsomeconfidenceandstartedtoplaybetterMycoachandteammatesarealsohappywithmeandtheytrytoimprovemyskillseverytimeIplay.NowIhaverealizedthatIalwayslikedthissport,butmyproblemwithithadsomethingtodowiththelackofencouragementIgot.NowIcanbuildonmyconfidenceandI’verealizedIcanalsoplaythissportverywell.【写作指导