2024届高三英语二轮复习：2022年青岛一模读后续写姐弟情之-飞跃操场的吻 讲义

题目阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。"I'mgoingtoschooltoday!”announcedmylittlebrother,Trevor,bouncingtothebreakfasttable.Momlookedatme."Isn'titgreat,Annie?You'llbothbeatthesameschool!AndIcan'thelprememberingyourfirstdaytoschoolwhenIhadtocalmyoudownbyblowingkisses.”Actually,itwasnotgreatatall.Schoolusedtofeellikemything.Butnowhewouldsitinmyoldclassroom,withmyoldteacher.Enough!IhatedtoseethenaughtyTrevoraspartofmyschoollife.Aswearrivedattheschoolgate,Trevorturnedtomeandaskedwhetherhecouldplaywithmeduringthebreak,worriedandhesitant.Ishookmyheadandremindedhimoftheschoolrules:Yousmallkidsplayinthekindergartenarea.Istayonthebigplayground!IpulledTrevorforwardandledhimtohisclassroom,wherehewasgreetedbyhisteacher,Mrs.Morena,“Hello,Trevor!Wanttocomeandmeettheotherkids?''Trevornoddedandletgoofmyhand.Idisappearedinaflash,excitedtojoinmyfriends.Whenthebellrang,IwasgivenaseatbyanopenwindowwhereIcouldseethekindergartenroomifIlookedoutside.Ifacedforward,tryingtofocusonwhattheteacherwassaying.Fornoreason,aquestioncontinuouslycrossedmymind:HowwasTrevor?Duringthebreak,IforgotallaboutTrevor.Itwasgreattobebackatschool!Iwasrunningtotheslide

（滑梯）whenaloudcryrangoutacrosstheplayground.Itsoundedfamiliar.Ilookedtothekindergartenarea.TherewasTrevorsittinginthesandbox,tearsonhisface.“Iwanttogohome!”hehowled.Mrs.Morenawastalkingtohim,buthewasstillcrying.

Itookanothersteptowardtheslide.ThenTrevorcriedagain.Myfeetturned,andIwasrunningtowardhim.Buttherewasafencebetweenthekindergartenareaandthebigplayground,andIcouldn'tgowherehewas.注意：1.

续写词数应为150左右；2.

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para1:Then,IdidthebestthingIcouldthinkofPara2:Soonthebellrangandtheschoolwasover.故事讲述的是新学期弟弟Trevor刚入学且跟我在同一所学校，尽管弟弟很渴望跟我一起玩，而我却很排斥很不满，不愿意跟他共享学校和老师。但后来看到弟弟在学校因为想家嚎啕大哭的时候，我还是不由地上前安抚弟弟，尽管隔着操场和栅栏，我还是想办法让弟弟开心了起来并帮助弟弟度过了开学第一天。故事传递的主题是姐弟情深。续写部分1.IdothebestthingIcanthinkof.2.Thenthebellring.读后续写文本分析：同学们在第一段基本都能想到围绕Idothebestthing展开叙述。学生设计的具体情节主要有两种:一是我隔着栅栏抚摸弟弟的头并且承诺陪他玩，然后弟弟开心了起来。二是我用妈妈曾经在我刚入学时安抚我的做法--blowkisses来安抚弟弟，结果同样起到了神奇的作用，弟弟不再哭了。讨论这两种情节的合理性：大家认为虽然两种情节都合理，但是更好的续写文本应该在情节设计和语言表达上都与原文相协同。原文写到了我小时候第一天上学也是哭闹，妈妈通过blowkisses安抚我焦虑的情绪并帮我度过了这一难关。所以第二种情节更合理。重要的续写策略---挖掘文本伏笔，构思续写情节伏笔，是文学创作中叙事的一种手法，就是上文看似无关紧要的事或者物，对下文将要出现的人物或事件预先作的某种提示或暗示，或者说是前文为后文情节埋伏的线索。是否关注到原文中的这些伏笔关系到续写文本的情节能否成为一个完整的故事链，很大程度上影响着续写文本质量的高低。伏笔1---原文提到了我的朋友跟我一起玩的场景，那么下文续写时也可以写我的朋友用了我使用的方法一起安抚弟弟。这也正是原著续写的情节。伏笔2---原文当中我和弟弟活动的区域之间有个栅栏，那么在续写最后我跟弟弟之间的关系更近了，我们之间无形的隔阂消除了，这可以与真正存在的栅栏进行对比。伏笔3---原文中妈妈问我跟弟弟在一个学校是不是很棒的时候，我最初的想法是否定的。续写时可以对应写我思想的转变或者我现在积极的想法。发现了这些伏笔后，大家果然思如泉涌。伏笔不仅可以让情节与原文更贴切，还能帮助大家创造出与原文融为一体的结尾。参考范文：Then,IdidthebestthingIcouldthinkof.

Runningtothefenceandmyclawsclutchingthenet,Ishoutedatthetopofmylungs,“Trevor,justtakeiteasy.Whentheschoolisover,Iwilltakeyouhome,Ok?”Atthis,Trevor'showlingcametoahaltandhistearyfacebrokeintoahugegrin.“Yeah.Thankyou,Annie.”Wipinghistearsaway,thisnormallynaughtyboysuddenlyturnedintoaheartwarmingandthoughtfulangel.Pattingdustoffhispants,TrevorlockedhishandswithMrs.Morena'sandthetwovanishedintothekindergartenarea.Seeingthis,Iheavedaheavysighofrelief.Soonthebellrangandtheschoolwasover.

Dashingtothekindergartengate,Icouldglimpse,atadistance,thatTrevortalkedandcackledwithhisnewly-madefriends.Itseemedhispreviousgrievancesandunpleasantfeelingsallevaporated,replacedbypurejoyandfreshexcitement.“Hi,naughty,areyoufeelingbetter?”greetedI.Biddinghisfriendsgoodbye,Trevorbeamedandanswered,“Couldn'tbebetterandthankyou,Annie,forcomfortingmeatthefence.Actually,Ifeelsafeatthethoughtofyour