读后续写之无灵主语句课件-高三英语写作专项

Whatis“无灵主语句”无灵主语句：指用无生命的事物做主语,用人或社会团体的行为或动作做谓语，因此这类句子常带有拟人化（personification）的修辞色彩。

inanimatesubject(无灵主语)

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animateverb(有灵动词)无灵主语inanimatesubject

：物品、动作、情感、时间、地点等有灵动词animateverb：有生命的事物的动作和行为例如：Romewitnessed

manygreathistoricevents.

(在罗马发生过许多重大历史事件)它的主语Rome罗马，是无生命的事物，但谓语witness目击，是人的动作。这种“无灵主语+有灵谓语”的句式，就是无灵主语句。普通句

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无灵主语句普通句：Shehadagoodidea.无灵主语句：Agoodideacameacrosshermind.同样是表达“她有了个好主意”，比起普通句式中的常见句子，无灵主语句中这种“想法跑到脑中”的拟人化表达，在写作中更加形象具体。无灵主语句的作用1、丰富主语的表达2、丰富修辞手法“无灵主语句”分类1

情感状态的抽象名词+谓语在续写中写到人物的情绪或心理时，别总用sb.feelxx，不如试试无灵主语句，来个高级的情绪描写。“情感状态的抽象名词+谓语动词”的描写有：①Fear

gripped

thevillage.(整个村庄笼罩在恐怖之中)②Courage

deserted

him.

(他失去了勇气)③Anger

choked

mywords.

(我气的说不出话)④Awaveof

nervousness

washedover

him.

(一阵紧张的情绪涌上他的心头)

⑤Achillof

horror

suddenly

sweptover

him.

(他突然感到不寒而栗)⑥Excitement

seized

him.

(他好兴奋)常见的情绪名词：happiness,joy,delight开心快乐；surprise,astonishment惊奇惊讶；shame羞耻羞愧；anger愤怒；despair绝望；regret遗憾后悔；sorrow悲伤；horror惊恐；anxiety焦虑；disappointment失望沮丧；satisfaction满意满足；puzzlement困惑不解；等等。常见的谓语动词：seize侵袭；choke噎住堵住；flood充满；creep不知不觉产生；grip紧抓；givewayto被xx代替；washover洗涤侵袭；deserted丢弃遗弃；等等。2

思考/动作行为的名词+谓语在续写中描写人物动作或思考行为时，也可以整一个无灵主语句，更不错!“思考/动作行为的名词+谓语动词”的描写有：①Thesightofthescene

filled

me

with

horror.

(看到这个情景我心中充满了恐惧)②Aterriblethought

suddenly

struck

me.

(我突然想到一个可怕的想法)③Atenminutes’walk

brought

ustothehotel.

(我们步行十分钟就到了旅馆)④Thethoughtofseeing

herson

verysoon

filled

herheart

with

greathappiness.

(想到不久就要见到她的儿子，她心中感到十分快乐)这些句子皆是将人的动作和思考行为拟人化，而不是简单的sb.feel/doxx，让续写的表达更多样生动。

Tip：常见词汇补充，可根据文中人物动作或思考的行为，挑恰当的词自行搭配：常见的人物行为词汇有：sight看到，thought想法，glance一瞥，look看到，idea想法，feeling感受，walk走路；等等。常见的谓语动词：overwhelm压倒；strike打击侵袭；arouse唤起；remind想起；fill...with充满xx；change改变；bring带来；等等。3

身体部位/音容类名词+谓语在续写中描写人的外貌和性格时，不用一直写sb.isxx，可以试着写无灵主语句。“身体部位/音容类名词+谓语动词”的描写有：①Smile

crumpled

hisface.

(他笑得一脸皱纹)②Herface

brightened

whenIgaveherthepresent.

(我给她礼物时，她的脸上焕发出了光彩)③Hiswords

sent

meaquiverthroughmybody.

(他的话让我全身不寒而栗)④Laughter

lingeredaround

theroom.(笑声在房间里萦绕)

⑤Tears

welledup

inAnni’seyes.

(泪水从安妮的眼中涌出)Tip：常见词汇补充，可根据文中的人物的外貌或性格，挑恰当的词自行搭配：常见的身体部位/音容的名词有：face；laughter；smile；tear；words说的话；等等。常见的谓语动词：lightup，brighten照亮；linger继续存留；wellup涌出；flash闪烁；crumple弄皱；等等。

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时间/地点/场景类名词+谓语续写中交代故事的时间或背景时，也可以用上无灵主语句去表示xx发生了xxx。“时间/地点/场景类名词+谓语动词”的描写有：①Ahush

fellupon

theclassroom.(教室一片寂静)②Beijing

haswitnessed

greatchangesinrecentyears.

(北京见证了最近几年的的巨大变化)③Dusk

found

thechildcryinginthestreet.

(黄昏时，孩子在街上哭)④Thatchilly

afternoon

witnessed

himtrudginginthesnow.

(那个寒冷的下午，他在雪地里跋涉)⑤Night

hasfallenover

thecountry.

(夜幕已经笼罩着乡间)Tip：常见词汇补充，可根据文中需要交代的时间或地点背景，挑恰当的词自行搭配：常见的时间/地点/场景类名词：slience，hush安静沉默；dusk黄昏；dawn黎明破晓；morning；afternoon；night；等等。常用的谓语动词有：see看见；witness见证；find发现；fall降临进入；等等。5自然现象类名词+谓语要是续写时想来个环境描写烘托氛围，也可以用一个无灵主语句。“自然现象类名词+谓语动词”的描写有：①Asuddenshower

killed

thewind.

(突然下了一阵雨，风停了)②Aheavyrain

visited

thecity.

(这个城市刚下过一场大雨)③Thesun

hascomeout.(太阳出来了)④Thethickfog

blanketed

thefield.

(浓雾笼罩着整个大地)

Tip：常见词汇补充，可根据续写所需的环境描写，挑恰当的词自行搭配：常见的自然现象名词：sun；sunshine；moon；moonlight；fog，mist雾；rain；earthquake地震；等等。常见的谓语动词：blanket覆盖；come；bring；prevent妨碍阻止；strike打击侵袭；threaten

威胁/即将来临；等等。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。HaveyoueverhadtoovercomeanextremechallengeinyourlifeMyteenageyearshadbeeninsane.Fromschoolworktoathletics,Ihadalwaysbeenrunningaround.Everythingwassodifficult.ThroughoutmyhecticteenageyearsIhavebeenfacedwithmanyextremechallengesthathaverequiredextremefocusandhardworktoovercome.Ifithadn’tbeenforhardwork,noneofthesechallengesthatIfacedwouldhavebeenconquered.Twoyearsago,whenIwasafreshmaninhighschool,Idealtwithanextremelysignificantinjury.ThistookplaceinmytennistournamentinJanuary.Intheclimaxofmymatch,Ijoltedmybacktotheleftandsoonafterfeltasharp,painfulshockrunthroughmyspine.IknewatthatdifficultmomentIseriouslyinjuredmyback.Iwasrushedoffthecourtandmyparentsmadeanappointmentwithanorthopedist(矫形外科医生)forthenextmorning.Iwalkedintotheofficeextremelynervousandsufferingfromexcruciatingpain.MytennisseasonforschoolstartedinthreemonthsandIabsolutelyneededtobuildupthestrength.Afterabouttwentyminutesofwaitingintheoffice,whichfeltlikeaneternity，thedoctorwalkedintoexaminemyX­rays.Withasorrowfulface,thedoctorlookedintomineandmymother’seyesandsaid,“Thereisa50/50chancethatLucaswillbeabletoparticipateinthisyearstennisseason.LucasbrokehisL5vertebraeinhislowerback.”MyheartdroppedandIfeltasadnesscomeoverme.ThedoctorsaidthatIwouldbesittingoutofphysicalactivityfortwoandahalftothreemonths.Thosethreemonthswerethelongestthreemonthsofmylife.Iwassoeagertogetbacktopracticesfortheseason.Everyday,IwouldthinkabouthowitwasgoingtobewhenIwasfullyhealthy.Iaskedmyself,“AmIgoingtobeoutofshapeShouldIevenplaythisyearIprobablywon'thaveasuccessfulseason.”Fromthatdreadfuldayon,IdecidedthatIwasgoingtoputintheworktobebackintopformandhaveasuccessfulseason.Paragraph1：After

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effective.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了青少年时代的作者在学业和体育等方面都很困难。雪上加霜的是在一-次网球比赛中他的背部受了伤，医生的诊断使他十分郁闷，但参赛的强烈欲望迫使他不断地进行康复训练而回到赛场。经过艰苦的努力最终取得回报的故事。【详解】段落续写：①根据续文第一段首句“在我的骨科医生告诉我“一切都好”之后，我就要开始训练了”可知本段可描写作者回到球场去训练，通过训练恢复到了受伤前的体质等。②根据第二段首句“我的努力训练证明非常有效”可知本段可描写作者可描写作者的努力训练有什么样的好结果以及自己的感受。续写线索：球场训练——增强体力——艰苦努力——得到回报词汇激活：行为类①下定决心：bedeterminedto/makeone’smindtodo②增强体质：buildupthestrength/enhancephysicalfitness③实现：achieve/realize情绪类①渴望：hungerfor/aspiration②有成就的：accomplished/achieved【点睛】［高分句型1］Throughpractices,IwouldhitthegymandtrytobuildupthestrengththatIhadbeforetheinjury.（运用了限制性定语从句）

［高分句型2］AlthoughItrulywantedtowin,Iknewthatitwasagreataccomplishmentformetobeinthatpositionevennotinthefirstplace.（运用了although引导让步状语从句和that引导宾语从句）［高分句型3］TheinjurywasalmostagoodthingbecauseIprovedtomyselfthatIamcapableofachievinggoalsthatIstrivefor,throughhardworkofcourse.（运用了because引导原因状语从句，that引导宾语从句和that引导限制性定语从句）Paragraph1：AfterIgotthe“allclear”frommyorthopedistIwasgoingtogettowork.Pr