读后续写人和动物类+Emma和小鹿+讲义 高三英语一轮复习

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Inhersmalltown,Emmawasknownforherloveandrespectforalllivingcreatures,andshebelievedthathumansandanimalsshouldcoexistpeacefullyandharmoniously.Oneday,whilehikinginthenearbywoods,Emmaspottedawounded(受伤的)deercaughtinahunter'strap.Withouthesitation,shecarefullyfreedthedeerandnurseditbacktohealth.Overthenextfewweeks,Emmadevotedhertimeandenergytocaringforthedeer.Shevisitediteverydayafterschool,bringingfreshfruitsandvegetables.Shecarefullyexamineditswounds,applyingsomemedicinetohelpitgetbetterandpreventinfection.

Asthedayswentby,thedeerbegantoregainitsstrength,andEmmawasoverjoyedtoseeitstandonitslegsonceagain.Emmaalsotookthetimetolearnaboutdeerbehaviorandtheirnaturalhabitat.Sheresearchedthebestfoodstofeedthedeerandcreatedacomfortableplaceforittorestinduringtheday.Sheevenmadeasmallwaterfountaintoensurethatthedeerhadaccesstocleandrinkingwater.Astheweeksturnedintomonths,Emmawatchedasthedeergrewstrongerandmoreconfident.Itwouldoftenfollowheraroundthebackyard,nudging(轻推)herplayfullywithitsnose.Emmafeltadeepsenseofsatisfactionknowingthatshehadplayedapartinsavingthisbeautifulcreature'slife.Onesunnyafternoon,asEmmasatinherbackyardreadingabook,sheheardafamiliarsound.Shelookedupandsawthedeerstandingnearher,lookingatherwithgentleeyes.Itwasclearthatthedeerhadfullyrecoveredandwasreadytoreturntothewild.Emmafeltasenseofsadnessbutalsoknewthatitwastimeforthedeertogobacktoitsnaturalhabitat.Sheopenedthegateandwatchedasthedeerboundedaway,disappearingintotheforest.Fromthatdayon,

Emmacontinuedtocareforanimalsinneed,knowingthatshehadmadeadifferenceinthelifeofatleastonecreature.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.重点词汇：livingcreatures

生物coexist

共存harmoniously

和谐地(be)

caughtin

遭遇，陷入freev.

释放，使自由nursev.看护，照料carefor

照顾，喜欢haveaccessto

接触，进入，有使用......的权利Astheweeksturnedintomonths,

随着时间的推移，adeepsenseofsatisfaction

深深的满足感lookatsb.withgentleeyes

用温柔的眼神看着某人boundaway

跳着离开makeadifference

产生影响，有所作为anunexpectedvisitor

不速之客aregularvisitor

常客续写分析：读完文本之后，考生需厘清以下几个方面：①艾玛有爱心，非常喜欢小动物；②艾玛照顾受伤的小鹿，投入了很多的时间、精力和金钱，甚至愿意研究它的习性，尽可能地给它提供舒适的居住环境；③小鹿在艾玛的悉心照顾下，康复良好，关心变得亲密；④小鹿回复了体力之后，有了回归自然的欲望；⑤艾玛做出正确的决定，放小鹿回归自然，继续践行自己的爱心。

通过续写第一段开头语Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.可知本段续写的主要内容为主人公再次见到小鹿时的惊喜以及与它的一系列互动。考生可借助原文内容，用自己的话paraphrase一些句子，既避免摘抄原文，同时又有话可说。例如：喂食物、喝水、艾玛情绪激动与小鹿拥抱、小鹿的外表等，都是可利用的点。只要言之有理，情节连贯，都可以成为写作的素材。当然，原文提到第一次小鹿离开时，艾玛很伤心，而此时如果考生能想到小鹿再次离开时，艾玛更多的是祝福，而不是悲伤，个人感觉是加分项。通过续写第二段开头语

Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.可知，小鹿成为了艾玛家的常客，不定时地回来。说明艾玛和小鹿之间的关系更加牢固了。此段仍然可以写小鹿回来时，艾玛的反应，一如既往地关爱小鹿。另外，本段属于全文的结尾，考生还可以借助艾玛有爱心的性格特点进行发挥。升华部分，可以是人与动物的和谐共存、艾玛的无私奉献亦或是小鹿通人性并体现出感恩的灵性，都可以拿来做文章，只要巧妙地与文本主题衔接，都是不错的选择。

本续写的难点在于，原文本只提供了艾玛和小鹿两个角色，考生读懂文章后，感觉没得写。如果考生没有良好的共情能力，能与主人公感同身受；如果没有平时语料的积累，把简单的情感用复杂的语言描述出来的能力，恐怕部分考生很难凑够字数。参考范文：Monthslater,Emmahadalmostforgottenaboutthedeerwhenoneday,shereceivedanunexpectedvisitor.Shenoticedaflashofwhitedartingthroughthetrees.Tohersurprise,itwasthesamedeerthatshehadrescuedearlierthatyear.ThedeerstoppedinfrontofEmmaandbegantonuzzlehergentlywithitsnose.ItseemedasifthedeerwantedtothankEmmaforallthatshehaddoneforit.Emmafeltawarmsenseofhappinesswashoverherassherealizedthathereffortspaidofffinallyandwerenoticed.Fromthatdayon,thedeerbecamearegularvisitortoEmma'sbackyard.Itwouldoftenaccompanyheronherwalksorstayedinhergarden.Thebondbetweensheandthedeergrewstrongereachday,provingthatkindnessandcompassioncancreatecloseconnectionsbetweenhumanandanimals.Sheknowsthatnomatterwherelifetakesher,shewillstrivetoliveinharmonywiththew