2021届高考英语作文高分突破概要写作（四）课件

作文高分突破概要写作

42021届高考英语浙江省新高考英语写作

概要写作真题剖析1

TheBoomingChineseEcommerceSummarywritingprocess:Step1:Readforthemainideaofthewholepassage

Step2:Analyzethestructureofthewholepassage

(What'stherelationshipbetweeneachparagraph?)

Step3:Locate(确定)themainideaofeachparagraph

Keepimportantdetails/LeaveoutunimportantinformationStep4:Writethesummaryinyourownwords(language)阅读下面的文章，确定文章的主题及结构：

Chinaispreparedtobecomethebiggestonlinemarketplaceintheworldwithinthenextfewyears,accordingtomultipleestimates.ThesizeofChina'secommercemarketisexpectedtomorethantripleoverthenextthreeyears,withsalesreaching$420billionby2015.That’s20%morethanwhattheU.S.'secommercemarketisforecasttobringinthatyear.Chinahasanestimated193milliononlineshoppers,morethananyothercountry.By2015,thoseconsumerswillbespending$1,000peryearonline---thesameamountthatU.S.'s170milliononlineshopperscurrentlyspendannually.Bythattime,ecommercecouldaccountformorethan8%ofallretailsalesinChina.Anumberoffactorsaredrivingthegrowth.OneistheincreaseofChina'smiddleclass,whichisexpectedtoballoonfrom200millionto800millionpeopleoverthenext20years,accordingtoAcquityGroup.Thespreadofgovernment-supported,high-speedInternetaccessandInternet-connectedcellphoneshavewidenedthepoolofpotentialshoppersto513million---orabout40%ofthepopulation.BroadInternetaccesscostsaround$10permonth,comparedto$30permonthinIndiaand$27%permonthinBrazil.Shippingpricesandreliabilityhavealsobeenimproved,particularlyinurbancoastalcities:ShippingcostsChinesecorporationsaboutasixthofwhattheirAmericancounterpartspay,accordingtoBCG.Impressively,China'smajoronlinemarketplace,Alibaba-ownedTaobao,isestimatedtoaccountforhalfofallpackagesshippedinChina.PeopleinChinashoponlineforthreemainreasons,accordingtoanAcquityGroupsurveyconductedamong1,000peopleacrossroughly150citieslastyear.One,greaterproductionselection.Two,theabilitytocomparepricesacrosssellers:65%ofrespondentssaidtheycomparedretailersbeforemakingapurchase.Three,convenience.Still,ecommerceisayoungindustryinChina.AlthoughmorepeopleareshoppingonlineinChina,relativetothepopulationonly14%ofChina's1.3billionresidentsshoponline,comparedabout54%intheU.S.Mainideaofthewholepassage?

2.Thestructureofthepassage?

TheboomingChineseecommercemarketanditscauses.Phenomenon:Para.1&2:Chineseonlinemarketisgrowingtobethelargestworldwide.Para.3&4:drivingfactorsa.theincreaseofChina'smiddleclass;b.broadInternetaccessc.bettershippingservice

Presentsituation:Para.6:Chineseecommerceisstillayoungindustry.

Para.5:Whypeopleshoponline?a.widechoicesb.betterpricesc.convenience段落大意及要点分析Para.1&2

Chinaispreparedtobecomethebiggestonlinemarketplaceintheworldwithinthenextfewyears,accordingtomultipleestimates.ThesizeofChina'secommercemarketisexpectedtomorethantripleoverthenextthreeyears,withsalesreaching$420billionby2015.That's20%morethanwhattheU.S.'secommercemarketisforecasttobringinthatyear.Chinahasanestimated193milliononlineshoppers,morethananyothercountry.

By2015,thoseconsumerswillbespending$1,000peryearonline---thesameamountthatU.S.'s170milliononlineshopperscurrentlyspendannually.Bythattime,ecommercecouldaccountformorethan8%ofallretailsalesinChina.说明：这两段的内容都是描述中国电子商务市场的快速发展。注意写概要时，如果不同段落表达的是同一主题内容，那么可以用一个要点来总结（如上文的这两个段落)。第一句划线部分是这两段的主题，第二段的网购者数量及网上的消费数额是用于支撑主题句的主要信息。其它部分是段落中涉及的一些数字说明、与美国的比较及破折号之后的描述都属于次要信息，概要中无需包括。Para.1&2段落大意可概括为：

China'secommercemarketisgrowingtobethelargestworldwidewiththeexpandingonline-shoppingpopulationandsales.

Chinaisestimatedtotoponlinemarketsgloballysoonwithmostonlineconsumersandagrowingannualonlinesales.

Withtheincreasingnumberofonlineshoppersandsales,ChinaisexpectedtoberankedNo.1biggestonlinemarketplaceworldwide.“不断扩大的”表达方式：growing，expanding,booming,increasing…段落大意及要点分析Para.3&4

Anumberoffactorsaredrivingthegrowth.OneistheincreaseofChina'smiddleclass,whichisexpectedtoballoonfrom200millionto800millionpeopleoverthenext20years,accordingtoAcquityGroup.Thespreadofgovernment-supported,high-speedInternetaccessandInternet-connectedcellphoneshavewidenedthepoolofpotentialshoppersto513million---orabout40%ofthepopulation.BroadInternetaccesscostsaround$10permonth,comparedto$30permonthinIndiaand$27%permonthinBrazil.Shippingpricesandreliabilityhavealsobeenimproved,particularlyinurbancoastalcities:ShippingcostsChinesecorporationsaboutasixthofwhattheirAmericancounterpartspay,accordingtoBCG.Impressively,China'smajoronlinemarketplace,Alibaba-ownedTaobao,isestimatedtoaccountforhalfofallpackagesshippedinChina.

①②③说明：这两段的内容都描述了中国电子商务市场的快速发展的原因，因此可以用一个要点来总结。红色划线部分是这两段的主题句，蓝色划线部分是三点原因：1.中国中产阶级的增加；2.快速发展的网络；3.方便安全的运输。在写概要时，我们可以用并列的方式把这三点原因写在一句话中。注意许多同学把“government-supported,high-speedInternetaccess”错误地理解成政府的支持是电子商务发展的一点原因，这里的意思其实是政府支持的网络系统。

Para3&4段落大意可概括为：

Multiplereasonscontributetoitsprosperity:theboomingofChinesemiddle-class,theevereasieraccesstotheInternetandtheimprovementofshippingservice.

Thegrowthismainly

duetotheriseofmiddleclass,moreconvenientinternetaccessandbettershippingservices.

TheincreaseofChinesemiddleclass,thehighly-developedInternetindustryandthesatisfyingshippingservicesareencouragingtheboomingofChina'secommerce/aremakingtheprosperitypossible.说明：1.

为了语言表达更简洁清晰，名词短语或动词短语的并列结构会经常被使用在概要写作中。2.因果关系是概要写作中经常表达的一种逻辑关系，平时要注意此类表达方式的积累，如上面句子中的绿色字体部分的表达。

PeopleinChinashoponlineforthreemainreasons,accordingtoanAcquityGroupsurveyconductedamong1,000peopleacrossroughly150citieslastyear.One,greaterproductionselection.Two,theabilitytocomparepricesacrosssellers:65%ofrespondentssaidtheycomparedretailersbeforemakingapurchase.Three,convenience.段落大意及要点分析Para.5

说明：红色划线的句子为该段的主题句。蓝色划线的句子为三点原因，是解释主题句的关键信息，概要中需包含。其它部分的内容属于次要信息。

Para.5段落大意可概括为：

Chinesepeoplefavoronlineshoppingforitsvariouschoices,morereasonablepricesandconvenience.

Widercommoditychoices,easierpricecomparisonandconveniencedrivemorepeopletoshoponline.

Chinesepeopleshoponlinemainlybecauseofitsdiversechoices,betterpricesandconvenience.

Still,ecommerceisayoungindustryinChina.AlthoughmorepeopleareshoppingonlineinChina,relativetothepopulationonly14%ofChina's1.3billionresidentsshoponline,comparedabout54%intheU.S.段落大意及要点分析Para.6

说明：红色划线的句子为该段的主题句。蓝色划线的句子是解释主题句的关键信息，概要中需涉及。其它部分的内容属于次要信息。

Para.6段落大意可概括为：

Nevertheless,ecommerceinChinaisstilldevelopingatitsearlystagewithalowpercentageofonlineshoppers.Theonlineshoppers'proportion,however,isrelativelylow,whichmeansitisjustthestartoftheindustry.However,thepercentageofChina'sonlineshoppersisstilllow,meaningthatitsecommerceisjustgettingstarted.完成概要写作:用恰当的衔接词把每段的要点连接在一起。注意词数，不超过80词。通读一遍，看要点之间是否独立，内容是否连贯，逻辑是否通顺。检查语言的表达是否准确，有无语法、拼写及标点的错误。Possibleversion1:

China'secommercemarketisgrowingtobethelargestworldwidewiththeexpandingonline-shoppingpopulationandsales.(要点1)Multiplereasonscontributetoitsprosperity:theboomingofChinesemiddle-class,theevereasieraccesstotheInternetandtheimprovementofshippingservice.

(要点2)Chinesepeoplefavoronlineshoppingforitsvariouschoices,morereasonablepricesandconvenience.(要点3)Nevertheless,ecommerceinChinaisstilldevelopingatitsearlystagewithalowpercentageofonlineshoppers.(要点4)

(72words)Possibleversion2:

Chinaisestimatedtotoponlinemarketsgloballywithmostonlineconsumersandagrowingannualonlinesales.(要点1)Therapidgrowthismainlyduetotheriseofmiddleclass,moreconvenientinternetaccessandbettershippingserviceinthiscountry.(要点2)Widercommoditychoices,easierpricecomparisonanditsconveniencedrivemorepeopletoshoponline.(要点3)Theonlineshoppers'proportion,however,isrelativelylow,whichmeansitisjustthestartoftheindustry.(要点4)

(74words)Possibleversion3:

Withtheincreasingnumberofonlineshoppersandsales,ChinaisexpectedtoberankedNo.1biggestonlinemarketplaceworldwide.(要点1)TheincreaseofChinesemiddleclass,thehighly-developedInternetindustryandthesatisfyingshippingservicesareencouragingtheboomingofChina'secommerce.(要点2)Chinesepeopleshoponlinemainlybecauseofitsdiversechoices,betterpricesandconvenience.(要点3)However,thepercentageofChina’sonlineshoppersisstilllow,meaningthatitsecommerceisjustgettingstarted.(要点4)

(73words)浙江省新高英语写作

概要写作真题剖析2

Englishweather-speakSummarywritingprocess:Step1:Readforthemainideaofthewholepassage

Step2:Analyzethestructureofthewholepassage

(What'stherelationshipbetweeneachparagraph?)

Step3:Locate(确定)themainideaofeachparagraph

Keepimportantdetails/LeaveoutunimportantinformationStep4:Writethesummaryinyourownwords(language)请阅读下面的文章，确定文章的主题及结构：

HowcanyoustartaconversationwithanEnglishperson?Theanswerisquitesimple.ManypeoplewilltellyouthatanyEnglishconversationbeginswith“theweather”.Suchafixation(迷恋)withtheweatherfindsexpressioninDr.Johnson'scommentthat“whentwoEnglishmenmeet,theirfirsttalkisofweather”.ThoughJohnson'sfindingisalmostthesameasitwasovertwohundredyearsago,mostcommentators(评论员)failtocomeupwithaconvincingexplanationforthisEnglishweather-speak.BillBryson,forexample,concludesthat,astheEnglishweatherisnotatallexciting,theobsessionwithitcanhardlybeunderstood.HearguesthatthemostimpressivethingabouttheEnglishweathertoanoutsideristhatthereisnotverymuchofit.Simply,thereasonisthatthoseexciting,unpredictableanddangerousweatherphenomena–tornadoes,monsoons,blizzards,hailstorms–arealmostwhollyunknownintheBritishIsles.JeremyPaxman,however,disagreeswithBryson,arguingthattheEnglishweatherisbynatureattractive.Brysoniswrong,hesays,becausetheEnglishpreferencefortheweatherisnotaboutthenaturalphenomenaatall.“Theinterestislessinthephenomenathemselves,butinuncertainty.”Accordingtohim,itisbecausetheweatherinEnglandisverychangeableanduncertainthatitattractstheEnglishaswellastheoutsider.BrysonandPaxmanstandforcommonmisunderstandingsabouttheweather-speakamongtheEnglish.Bothcommentators,somehow,aremissingthepoint.TheEnglishweatherconversationhasnothingtodowiththeweather.Englishweather-speakisasystemofsigns,whichisdevelopedtohelpthespeakersovercomeshynessandactuallytalktoeachother.Everyoneknowsconversationsstartingwithweather-speakarenotrequestsforweatherdata.Rather,theyareroutinegreetings,conversationstartersortheblank“fillers”.Inotherwords,Englishweather-speakisameansofsocialbonding.Mainideaofthewholepassage?

2.Thestructureofthepassage?

ThemisunderstandingsandtherealnatureofEnglishweather-speak.Para.1:PeoplefailtoexplainEnglishpeople'sobsessionwithweather.Para.2

Misconception1:

TheEnglishenthusiasmfortheweatherisridiculous.

Para.3

Misconception2:

ThecharmofEnglishweatherliesinitschangeability.Para.4TherealnatureofEnglishweather-speak:ameansofsocialbonding段落大意及要点分析Para.1

HowcanyoustartaconversationwithanEnglishperson?Theanswerisquitesimple.ManypeoplewilltellyouthatanyEnglishconversationbeginswith“theweather”.Suchafixation(迷恋)withtheweatherfindsexpressioninDr.Johnson'scommentthat“whentwoEnglishmenmeet,theirfirsttalkisofweather”.ThoughJohnson'sfindingisalmostthesameasitwasovertwohundredyearsago,mostcommentators(评论员)failtocomeupwithaconvincingexplanationforthisEnglishweather-speak.说明:红色划线部分是本段的重点信息：英国人喜欢谈论天气但却很少人能给出令人信服的解释其原因是什么。Para.1段落大意可概括为：Englishconversationsoftenstartwiththeweather,aculturalnormthatfewcommentatorstrulyunderstand.StartingaconversationwithweatherisprevalentinBritain,towhichmostexplanationsaregroundless.Mostcommentatorsfailtoexplainwhyweather-speakhasbeenalwaysthestartofconversationsamongtheEnglish.段落大意及要点分析Para.2

BillBryson,forexample,concludesthat,astheEnglishweatherisnotatallexciting,theobsessionwithitcanhardlybeunderstood.HearguesthatthemostimpressivethingabouttheEnglishweathertoanoutsideristhatthereisnotverymuchofit.”Simply,thereasonisthatthoseexciting,unpredictableanddangerousweatherphenomena–tornadoes,monsoons,blizzards,hailstorms–arealmostwhollyunknownintheBritishIsles.说明:红色划线部分是本段的主题句，蓝色划线部分还是解释英国天气并没什么特别的，其它内容是对英国天气情况的举例说明，属于次要信息。OneargumentisthatEnglishpeople'senthusiasmfortheweatherisridiculousasitistotallyboringandchangeless.

BillBrysonbelievesthattheEnglish

preferenceforweatherdoesn'tmakeanysensebecauseitistoodulltotalkabout.说明:

该段以BillBryson为例，陈述一种观点。写概要时，一般无需提及具体的名字及例子，但有时如果这一段内容主要是关于这个人的，则视情况而定。如这篇文章中的2,3两段就属于这种情况，那么写概要时也可提及。Para.2段落大意可概括为：SomepeoplethinkitincomprehensiblethattheEnglisharesofascinatedbythedullandnormalweather.段落大意及要点分析Para.3

JeremyPaxman,however,disagreeswithBryson,arguingthattheEnglishweatherisbynatureattractive.Brysoniswrong,hesays,becausetheEnglishpreferencefortheweatherisnotaboutthenaturalphenomenaatall.“Theinterestislessinthephenomenathemselves,butinuncertainty.”Accordingtohim,itisbecausetheweatherinEnglandisverychangeableanduncertainthatitattractstheEnglishaswellastheoutsider.说明:红色划线部分是本段的主题句，蓝色划线部分是主要信息，解释英国天气吸引人的原因。AnotherpointofviewisthatthecharmofEnglishweatheractuallyliesinitschangeabilityanduncertainty.OtherpeoplethinkthechangeableandunpredictableweathermakesitfascinatingtoEnglishpeople.Onthecontrary,Jeremy

PaxmanarguesthatEnglishpeople'sinterestinweatherisactuallybecausetheweatherchangesalotandishardtopredicate.Para.3段落大意可概括为：段落大意及要点分析Para.4

BrysonandPaxmanstandforcommonmisunderstandingsabouttheweather-speakamongtheEnglish.Bothcommentators,somehow,aremissingthepoint.TheEnglishweatherconversationhasnothingtodowiththeweather.Englishweather-speakisasystemofsigns,whichisdevelopedtohelpthespeakersovercomeshynessandactuallytalktoeachother.Everyoneknowsconversationsstartingwithweather-speakarenotrequestsforweatherdata.Rather,theyareroutinegreetings,conversationstartersortheblank“fillers”.Inotherwords,Englishweather-speakisameansofsocialbonding.说明:红色划线部分是本段的主题:英国人谈论天气是社交需要。蓝色划线部分是主要信息，说明前两种观点的错误。inotherwords,说明前后内容是一致的，写概要时无需重复。该段落的概要写作需要对谈论天气的作用进行较为笼统的总结，不要一一举例。Actually,boththeopinionslosethemainpointthatthefunctionofEnglishweather-speakistosocializeratherthantotalkaboutweather.

Infact,theEnglishweather-speakisnotabouttheweather,butawaytomakeaconversation,amethodofsocializing.However,theEnglishpeopletalkaboutweatherinaconversationfortheneedofsocializing,notfortheirinterestinweather.However,neitherofthetwoopinionsistrueastheEnglishtalkaboutweatherforsocializing,notfortheweather.Para.4段落大意可概括为：最后完成概要写作:用恰当的衔接词把每段的要点连接在一起。注意词数，不超过80词。通读一遍，看要点之间是否独立，内容是否连贯，逻辑是否通顺。检查语言的表达是否准确，有无语法、拼写及标点的错误。Possibleversion1:

Englishconversationsoftenstartwiththeweather,aculturalnormthatfewcommentatorstrulyunderstand.(要点1)Oneargumentis