读后续写主题语境01校园生活课件-高考英语一轮复习

校园生活PART01语篇演练MyBestTeachingExperienceHehadbeeninsomuchtroubleovertheyears.Heexpectedhisteacherstoknowabouthispast:abouthowmanytimeshehadbeensenttotheofficeorsuspendedfromschool.Ihadfoundthatthesesortsofreferrals(移交)werenotveryeffectiveandthatstudentswouldreturnfromtheofficebehavingworsethanbefore.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.MyBestTeachingExperienceMyBestTeachingExperience1.connectwith(sb.)2.get(sb.)involvedin...3.bycontrast4.push(sb./sth.)over 5.otherthan6.befearfulof(sth.)（一）找出词块对应的中文含义并连线A.除……之外B.使（某人）参与C.害怕/担心（某事）D.相比之下；与……相反E.把（某人或某物）推倒F.与（某人）建立良好关系，沟通（二）概括原文故事情节beensuspendedtoconnectseriouslytojoin effectiveimpolite（一）语篇表达意图（why）——故事主题阅读材料，找出最能体现故事主题的两个词。①celebration ②understanding ③friendship④change ⑤charity ⑥loyalty冲突：_________________________________________________↓行动：_________________________________________________↓解决：_________________________________________________（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事情节（1）情节结构“我”和Tyler产生矛盾，他因大闹课堂被停课。Unfortunately,everytimeIcalledonTyler,hewouldrespondwithajoke.Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.Istoppedmylessonandsaid,“Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?”Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.Ican’trememberwhathesaidotherthanthatheincludedsomeimpolitewords.IsentTylerstraighttotheoffice,andhereceivedaweek’ssuspension.（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事情节冲突：↓行动：_________________________________________________↓解决：_________________________________________________续写部分Tyler意识到自己的问题并加以改正。（1）情节结构“我”和Tyler产生矛盾，他因大闹课堂被停课。（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事情节（2）情节线索MyBestTeachingExperienceTylerenteredmyseniorclass.Aboutamonthintotheyear,IwasstilltryingtoconnectwithTyler.Oneday,TylerwastalkingovermewhileIwasteaching.TheweekTylerwassuspendedfromschool.OnthedayofTyler’sreturn...Ithoughttheworst.________________________...时间线情感线续写部分①②③在①②③三个时间点，“我”分别有怎样的情感？A.Ifeltfrustrated(沮丧的).B.Iwasdesperate(绝望的)andcouldn’tstanditanymore.C.Ifeltrelieved(如释重负的),butwasfearfulofhisreturn.ABC（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事情节（3）伏笔与呼应这三个句子表明了“我”在经历了一系列事件后意识到移交和停课之类的惩罚措施对Tyler确实没效果，所以接下来在续写部分（第一段）“我”可能会转变思路，用其他方式解决问题。分析Icanusuallygetstudentsinvolvedinclassdiscussions...Bycontrast,Tylerwasoftenloudandsometimesrude.Tyler,whydon’tyoujoininourdiscussioninsteadofhavingoneofyourown?→_________________________________________________________________________________Tothispoint,thiswasoneofmyworstteachingexperiences.→__________________________________________________________________________________（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事情节（3）伏笔与呼应练习Tyler积极参与到课堂讨论当中（第二段）。在Tyler发生改变之后，这段我之前觉得最糟糕的教学经历变成了最棒的经历（第二段结尾）。结合文中出现的以下伏笔，预测续写部分可能发生的改变。（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事人物（1）主次人物原文主要讲述了师生之间矛盾的产生和激化，矛盾的双方分别是“我”和Tyler，因此“我们”两人是主要人物。分析续写段首句可知，后续情节中主要人物（☐会☐不会）发生变化。（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事人物（2）人物特点情绪描写、动作描写。这些情节体现了Tyler目无尊长、桀骜不驯的性格特点。在续写的第一段可以通过描写“我”在门口刚见到他时，他的一些行为来印证这一点。情绪描写动作描写（二）语篇表达内容（what）——故事环境原文的故事环境属于（☐自然环境☐社会环境），地点主要设置在___________，续写部分可能出现的地点：_______________________________________。校园、课堂班级门口、课堂、办公室等校园相关的地点（三）语篇表达技巧（how）下面句子运用的修辞手法为（☐比喻☐拟人☐夸张☐排比）。Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.understandingchange时间线：Tylerenteredmyseniorclass…Aboutamonthintotheyear…Oneday…TheweekTylorwassuspended…OnthedayofTyler’sreturn…情感线：thoughttheworst…frustrated…desperate…relievedbutfearfulofhisreturn…Tyler积极参与到课堂讨论当中（第二段）。在Tyler发生改变之后，这段我之前觉得最糟糕的教学经历变成了最棒的经历（第二段结尾）。排比(Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.)

原文环境：校园、课堂续写环境：班级门口、课堂、办公室等校园相关的地点主要人物：“我”、TylerTyler：目无尊长、桀骜不驯（一）构思续写两段主要情节结合原文解读中对主题、情节、人物、环境等要素的分析以及对续写第一段、第二段首句的分析，可以构思续写第一段和第二段的主要情节。续写第一段的主要情节为：___________________________________________________续写第二段的主要情节为：___________________________________________________“我”在班级门口与Tyler进行了沟通。“我”和Tyler之间的矛盾消除，Tyler朝着好的方向转变。（二）构思续写“四点”内容根据原文解读和两个段首句推测两段首尾部分“四点”（①②③④）的内容，确保段落当中和段落之间情节连贯以及文章的主题和结局积极向上。②_______________________________________①_______________________________________……Para.1:OnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.④_______________________________________③_______________________________________……Para.2:Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.Tyler出现/“我”看到Tyler。“我”说了一些让Tyler惊讶的话。Tyler惊讶的其它表现/Tyler惊讶的原因。Tyler转变之后取得的进步/Tyler向“我”表达感谢/“我”对Tyler转变的感想。（三）构思续写段落细节确定合适的主干情节之后，接下来构思两段的具体细节。续写第一段：①HowdidTylerbehavewhenIsawhim?_________________________________________________________________________②HowdidIfeelwhenIsawTyler?_________________________________________________________________________③WhatdidIsaytoTyler?_________________________________________________________________________Tylercame,butstillshowednorespectforme.IthoughtofwhathadhappenedbeforeandfeltIshouldtryadifferentway.Iapologizedforthequarrelthatwehadintheclass.（三）构思续写段落细节续写第二段：①WhywasTylersurprised?_________________________________________________________________________②Howdidhereact?_________________________________________________________________________③HowdidIreact?_________________________________________________________________________④WhathappenedtoTylerinthedaysthatfollowed?_________________________________________________________________________⑤WhatdidIlearnfromtheexperience?_________________________________________________________________________Hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.Hefeltashamedandapologizedtome.Iwasgladtohearthatandsenthimbacktoclass.Hebehavedlikeagoodstudent.Irealizedthepowerofunderstanding.根据提示和要求，完成下列内容优化1.Tylercame,butstillshowednorespectforme.①使用动作描写（walkwithone’shandsinone’spocket）改写优化所给句子，体现Tyler目无尊长、桀骜不驯的性格特点。AtlastTylercameand________________________________.②使用分词结构作状语，改写优化句①中的动作描写。AtlastTylercame,______________________________.hewalkedwithhishandsinhispocketwalkingwithhishandsinhispocket根据提示和要求，完成下列内容优化2.Hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.①使用主语从句（itisclearthat）改写优化句子，凸显Tyler惊讶的原因。_______________hehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.②使用倒装结构改写优化句子，凸显Tyler惊讶的原因。__________________anapologyfromateacherbefore.ItwasclearthatNeverhadheheard根据提示和要求，完成下列内容优化3.Hefeltashamedandsaidsorrytome.①使用“说”的具体动作替换句中的say，体现Tyler此时的羞愧。Hefeltashamedand_________,“I’msorry.”②使用强调句型（itis...who/that...）改写优化句①，体现Tyler充分认识到了自己的错误。Hefeltashamedand_________,“___________________________.”③使用神态描写（one’sfaceburnwithshame）改写优化句②，体现Tyler的羞愧。________________________andhe_________,“___________________________.”④使用with复合结构，改写优化句③中的神态描写部分。____________________________,he_________,“___________________________.”murmuredmurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryHisfaceburnedwithshamemurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryWithhisfaceburningwithshamemurmuredItisIwho/thatshouldsaysorryOnthedayofTyler’sreturn,Istoodatthedoorawaitinghim.Atlasthecame,walkingwithhishandsinhispockets.Thatimageimmediatelybroughtbackmemoriesoftheboythrowingatantruminclasstheotherday.YetImanagedtorestrainmyangerthistime.Thesepastfewdays,Ihadbeenbuildingawallbetweenuswithblameandpunishment,soIthoughttomyselfthatmaybeIshouldtryanotherway.“Iwanttoapologizeforthequarrelthatwehadinthemiddleofclass,andI’mreallysorryifithurtyourfeelings,”Isaid,finallybreakingtheice.分词结构作状语无灵主语状语从句宾语从句定语从句状语从句分词结构作状语Asparkofsurpriseflashedacrosshisface.Thenaughtyboyfrozethere,staringatmewithwideeyes.Itwasclearthathehadneverheardanapologyfromateacherbefore.“ItisIwhoshouldsaysorry,”hemurmured,hisfaceburningwithshame.“Ishouldhavelearnedtocontrolmyself.”Withasmile,Isteppedforwardandpattedhimonhisshoulder,signalingtohimtogobacktohisseat.Inthedaysthatfollowed,Tylerdidn’tmisbehaveinclassanymoreandtookanactivepartinclassdiscussions.Ihadneverexpected“understanding”couldmakesuchahugedifference—itturnedoneofmyworstteachingexperiencesintoperhapsthebestone.分词结构作状语主语从句强调句型独立主格结构分词结构作状语宾语从句写作技能培养情景回顾词汇：（场景概括）scene,image（激起回忆）strike,recall,recollect,bringback,flashback,memory,thought句子：Seeingheragainrecalledthosememorieshewouldratherhaveforgotten.Suddenlythescene

struckmewherehefellflatandIlaughedathimcrazily.Thechancemeetingwithhimbroughtbackmemoriesoftheirviolentquarrel.Herthoughtsflashedbacktothedaywhenshehadafightwithherbestfriend.（一）主题微情节——冰释前嫌道歉词汇：（道歉动作）apologize,admit,askforforgiveness,makeanapology（道歉态度）sincerely,frankly,genuinely,truthfully（道歉事项）misconduct,mistake,misbehavior,wrongdoing句子：WhatIdidwasanaccident,andI’mterriblysorryforit.Isincerelyapologizedtohimformymisconductonthebus.Withtearsinmyeyes,Iapologizedforeverbelievingtherumors.Weigheddownbyhisguiltandregret,hemadeanapologytome.“HowcanImakeupforthewayI’vetreatedyou?”heasked,hisfaceburningwithshame.（一）主题微情节——冰释前嫌道歉词汇：（道歉动作）apologize,admit,askforforgiveness,makeanapology（道歉态度）sincerely,frankly,genuinely,truthfully（道歉事项）misconduct,mistake,misbehavior,wrongdoing句子：IwanttoapologizetoyouforwhatIsaid.Ididn’tmeanit,andI’msorryifithurtyourfeelings.IhavetoadmitthatIletalotofpeopledownwiththatmisbehavior,andIstandheretodaytoreflectonthatandtoaskforforgiveness.（一）主题微情节——冰释前嫌接受道歉词汇：（直接说明）forget,accept,forgive（间接体现）smile,pat,hug,embrace句子：Shecameuptomeandhuggedmeclose,sayingitwasallover.Iknewitwasnotyourintentiontodothat.Nowit’stimetoletitgo.Withabroadsmile,hepattedmeontheshoulderandtoldmetoforgetaboutit.Acceptinghisapology,Igentlypattedhimontheback,andhandedhimachocolatebar.Asmileappearedonherfaceassheheardmyapology,alittlebitatfirst,andthenbiggerandbigger.（一）主题微情节——冰释前嫌（一）主题微情节——冰释前嫌1.此情此景让我马上想起了前些天他大闹课堂的场景。________________________wherehethrewatantruminclasstheotherday.__________________________________________theboythrowingatantruminclasstheotherday.2.“我想为上课期间和你争吵这件事向你道歉，如果因此伤害了你的感情的话我很抱歉。”我最后打破了沉默。“________________________________________________________,andI’mreallysorryifithurtyourfeelings,”Isaid,finallybreakingtheice.3.我微笑着走上前去，拍了拍他的肩膀，示意他回到座位上。Withasmile,_________________________________________,signalingtohimtogobacktohisseat.练习SuddenlythescenestruckmeThatimageimmediatelybroughtbackmemoriesofIwanttoapologizeforthequarrelthatwehadinthemiddleofclassIsteppedforwardandpattedhimonhisshoulder结合以上所学表达翻译句子。（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程在描写某个动作场景时可以尝试将其过程细化，也就是把一些“大”的动作拆分成一系列“小”的动作，并按照时间顺序依次呈现出来，这样可以将场景描绘得更加具体、更富有画面感。过程细化之后最好保证至少有3个“小”的动作，它们在句中常见的呈现方式有以下两种：①谓语并列（V1,V2andV3）Withthat,hegotupfromhischair,pusheditoverandyelledsomething.随即他从椅子上站了起来，把它推倒然后大喊大叫。句中将“起身”“推倒椅子”和“大喊大叫”三个动作并列，形成排比，把Tyler听到老师的话后情绪失控的样子生动地展现了出来。分析（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程②谓语并列+非谓语（V1andV2,V3ing或V1ing,V2andV3）Hequicklytookoffhisjacketandofferedittome,signalingtometocovermytornjeans.他迅速把自己的上衣脱下来递给了我，示意我盖住裂开的牛仔裤。句中将“他把自己的衣服递给我”这一动作拆分成了“脱上衣”“递上衣”“示意我”三个环节，构成了一组完整的动作链，对场景的描写非常生动、具体。分析在描写某个动作场景时可以尝试将其过程细化，也就是把一些“大”的动作拆分成一系列“小”的动作，并按照时间顺序依次呈现出来，这样可以将场景描绘得更加具体、更富有画面感。过程细化之后最好保证至少有3个“小”的动作，它们在句中常见的呈现方式有以下两种：（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程完成以下细化动作过程的练习。1.我生气地走出了房间。

细化动作过程我狠狠地瞪了他一眼，冲出房间，把门砰地关上。(storm,slam)Iwentoutoftheroomangrily.→Igavehimahostileglare,_____________________,and_________________________.(V1,V2,andV3形式)→Igavehimahostileglareand_____________________,__________________________.(V1andV2,V3ing形式)练习stormedoutoftheroomslammedthedoorbehindmestormedoutoftheroomslammingthedoorbehindme（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程完成以下细化动作过程的练习。2.他不情愿地向我道了歉。

细化动作过程他不情愿地走到我的座位前，咬了咬嘴唇，咕哝着向我道了歉。(drag)Heunwillinglymadeanapologytome.→He________________________,bithislipandmumbledanapologytome.(V1,V2andV3形式)练习draggedhimselftomyseat（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程完成以下细化动作过程的练习。3.他不做声了。

细化动作过程他挠了挠耳朵，小声说了些什么，然后低下头不做声了。(murmur,droop)Hewassilent.→Hescratchedhisear,____________________________________________.(V1,V2andV3形式)练习murmuredsomethinganddroopedhisheadinsilence（二）续写微技能——动作描写之细化过程完成以下细化动作过程的练习。4.我对他说道，就让这些不快到此为止吧。

细化动作过程我示意他过来，含泪拥抱着他，轻声说道就让这些不快到此为止吧。(whisper)Isaidtohimthatitwastimetoletitgo.→Igesturedhimoverandheldhiminatearfulembrace,_____________________________________.(V1andV2,V3ing形式)练习whisperingtohimthatitwastimetoletitgoPART03语篇巩固Mondaystartedoutwell.Iwokeupontime,atebreakfastanddidsomelastminutestudyingformyfirsthourmathtest.Iwasconfidentofgettinggoodgrades.ThenIleftmyhouse.Tenminuteslater,Iwassettledwithmyfriendsontheschoolbus.Wewerebusychattingabouthowwespentourweekend.Atonestop,FatRyangotonhurriedly.Hetripped(绊倒)oversomeone’sfootaccidentallyandTHUMP!Hefellflatontothefloor.Everyoneofusonthebuslookedonandlaughedcrazily.Ryanstruggledtohisfeet,dusted(擦灰)offhisjacketandmadehiswaytoanemptyseat.Hetriedtolaughwithus,buthisfacewasburningwithembarrassment.Therestofthemorningflewby.Ididwellinmymathtest.IreadtwomorechaptersofToKillaMockingbirdinEnglishclass.Itwasn’tlongbeforeweheardthelunchbell.Imetmyfriendsfromthecheerleadingteaminthedininghall.ThenIcouldn’thelpbutnoticeRyanafewtablesaway,sittingallalone.Hecaughtmelooking.Ismiledathimquicklyandlookedaway.AGreatMondayWhenwehadfinishedeating,weheadedouttothecourtyardtopracticeacheerwewoulddoatthatnight’sfootballgame.Aftermuchpractice,wefinallymanagedtodothecheerperfectly.Wedecidedtopracticeitagainonelasttime.Again,justliketherestofmydaysofar,thecheerwasgoinggreat.Iraisedmylegforonelasttoetouch.RIIPPP!Ifeltmyjeanssplitdownthemiddleofmybackside.Ifroze.Ihadnoideawhattodobutstandstill.ThenIheardpeopleburstoutlaughingandIsawthempointingatmytornjeans.Tryingtocovermyselfwithmyhands,Itriedtolaughtoo,butIfelttearsbegintowellupinmyeyes.AGreatMonday续写要求：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thatnight,afterthecheeratthefootballgame,IfoundRyan.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AGreatMonday第一章节本文主题关键词为______和______。主要讲述了“我”在排练时牛仔裤裂开，在“我”感到无助之际，之前被“我们”嘲笑的Ryan伸出援手，之后“我”向Ryan道歉并获得原谅的故事。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧帮助谅解故事情节结构为：冲突：_________________________________________________↓行动：_________________________________________________↓解决：_________________________________________________原文主要呈现了“冲突”部分，续写部分应该围绕“行动”和“解决”展开。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧“我”在排练时牛仔裤裂开，遭遇窘境。之前摔倒被“我们”笑话的Ryan向“我”伸出援手。“我”向Ryan道歉并获得了原谅。故事的情节线索为_________________________________________。故事设置了两个让人感到尴尬的场景（Ryan摔倒和“我”的牛仔裤裂开），续写时可以通过回忆将两者联系起来，同时通过Ryan和“我”在两个场景中举动的对比引出“我”的情感变化，凸显Ryan的正面形象。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧“我”在遭遇窘境及获得帮助前后的情感变化_____________是故事的主要人物，其他同学是故事的次要人物。原文中通过对“我”在牛仔裤裂开之后的动作、心理、神态等描写，体现了“我”___________________________的性格特点。而帮“我”摆脱尴尬处境的Ryan应该是一个善良、体贴、乐于助人的人，在续写部分可以通过动作、神态、语言等描写来体现这一点。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧“我”和Ryan遇到问题容易紧张、不知所措“我”排练时牛仔裤裂开是发生在校园广场。根据续写两段的段首句可知，续写的内容属于该事件的延续，地点______（会/不会）有大的变化。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧不会故事采用第______人称视角叙述，语言平实自然。续写时应注意使用相应的表达技巧，如细节描写和修辞。故事解读续写构思参考范文主题情节人物环境表达技巧一故事解读续写构思参考范文从情节结构来看，续写第一段属于故事的“行动”阶段，应重点写Ryan向“我”走来之后如何帮助“我”以及“我”的感受、想法和行动等。续写第二段属于故事的“解决”阶段，应着墨于“我”向Ryan道歉以及Ryan接受道歉的过程。分析第一段：我看到Ryan朝我跑过来→我突然想起自己嘲笑他摔倒的场景，以为Ryan会嘲笑我（尴尬）→Ryan没有笑我，反而脱下自己的衣服，帮助我摆脱了窘境（惊讶、羞愧）→我想表达感谢，但没能鼓起勇气（感激）→我默默离开第二段：那天晚上我找到了Ryan→我把衣服还给他并感谢了他（感激）→我鼓起勇气为自己之前的行为道歉（羞愧、后悔）→Ryan大度地接受了我的道歉→我意识到Ryan是一个非常棒的朋友（轻松、愉快）参考思路①故事解读续写构思参考范文从情节结构来看，续写第一段属于故事的“行动”阶段，应重点写Ryan向“我”走来之后如何帮助“我”以及“我”的感受、想法和行动等。续写第二段属于故事的“解决”阶段，应着墨于“我”向Ryan道歉以及Ryan接受道歉的过程。分析第一段：我看到Ryan朝我跑过来→Ryan在我面前停下来，把自己的外套递给了我→我愣了一下，接过了衣服（惊讶）→我急匆匆地离开了（尴尬）→我的脑海中不断回想起校车和广场上发生的事情（羞愧）第二段：那天晚上我找到了Ryan→我把衣服还给他，Ryan转身准备离开→我叫住了他，向他道歉并表达了感谢（后悔、感激）→Ryan大度地接受了我的道歉→我和Ryan因为这件事成为了好朋友参考思路②故事解读续写构思参考范文Paragraph1:ThenIsawRyanrunningtowardsme.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________