读后续写亲情类一碗阳春面讲义高考英语作文复习专项

高考读后续写|亲情类阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn'thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofthescolding(责骂)

fromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,

watchingthemiddleagedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighed

(叹气)

andhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestand(摊位)

noticedtheyounggirlandasked,"Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?""Oh,yes...butIdon'thavemoneyonme,"shereplied.“That'snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,"saidtheman."

ein."Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,

Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?"

askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!"

saidJenny."

Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.

Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomerciless(残忍的)

paredtoastranger!"Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,"Girl,

doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitude（感激）toher?"Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother'sfamiliarfaceandweathered(饱经风霜的)

hands."

WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme."Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1:Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Paragraph2:Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.故事解读：Jenny和她母亲大吵一架之后，生气出走，在路上闲荡，饥饿难耐地看着路边的小贩做着面条生意，因为没钱只能叹息离开，善良的小贩却叫住了她并免费请Jenny吃了碗面条，Jenny甚是感动，觉得陌生人都对自己这么好，而自己的母亲却是经常斥责她。小贩点醒了Jenny，是她自己的母亲每天都在为她做饭，是她自己的母亲抚养她长大，却从未向母亲表示过感激之情，Jenny倍感羞愧，决心为自己的态度向母亲道歉。内容上：大部分同学能做到情节设定合理，符合故事发展的逻辑顺序。亮点内容有，在续写第一段写到Jenny回到家中，看到桌上放着母亲已经做好的一碗面条；补充了Jenny和母亲争吵的原因。在第二段Jenny为表示感激之情，为母亲下了一碗面条，最后情感升华。而个别同学存在的问题，第一段结尾和第二段段首衔接不上，Jenny思绪既没飘走，母亲也出现在了第一段中，这样的情节设置稍有不当，且篇幅有限，不好创设新的情境。写作思路：

梳理人物情节情绪时，引导学生关注Jenny从“生气”到“羞愧”的变化，使之理解母爱的真正含义，推知故事主题（understandingmother’slove）和写作目的（improvingtherelationshipbetweenparentsandchildren），进而推断故事结局。

通过问题帮助学生搭建第一段写作思路。例如：

(1)WhatwouldJennydonext?

(2)WhydidJennytakeadeepbreath?

(3)WhatdidJennythinkinhermind?

问题(1)(2)主要根据第一段提示句进行推断，问题(3)根据第二段提示句推导Jenny的思绪，三个问题为学生搭建续写第一段结构框架即内容要点——knockedatoropenedthedoor/whatshesaw/whatshethought。范文一Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.

Notknowingwhat

wouldhappennext,Jenny,gatheringhercourage,pushedthedoor

open,

onlytofindtherewasnobodyhome.Anxietybegantocreepuponher."WhereismyMom?Isshestillstillangrywithme?",Jennycouldn'thelp

thinkingaboutallthese.Havingwanderedoutsideforawholeday,Jenny

feltabittired.Sittingonthesofa,shebegantoshedtearsofregret,lostin

deepthought.Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.

Raisingherhead,Jenny

foundhermotherstandingbehindher."Mom,Iamsorry.Ishouldn'thave

beensorudetoyou.Iknowfullywellallthatyoudidwasforme."Jenny

said,withtearsalreadyfallingdownhercheeks."It'sfinethatyouareback!I

havebeenlookingforyoueverywhere."mothersaid.Deeplymoved,Jenny

threwherselfathermotherandtheyhuggedtightly.Itwasnotuntilthat

momentthatJennyrealizedthatwhateverhappened,hermotherwould

alwaysbethereforher!范文二Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Whenshepushedthedooropenandenteredthehouse,shefoundhermotherwasnotin.Tiredandsad,shesankdownontothesofa.“Wherecouldmymotherbe?”shewondered.“Wasshestillangrywithme?”Again,thesceneofthequarrelappearedinhermind.Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother.Realizingthatallthescoldingfromhermotherwasduetothefactthathermotherreallycaredalotabouther,sheratherfeltashamed,andtearsbegantorolldownhercheeks.Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.

sheraisedherheadandsawthefamiliarfaceofhermother.“Hereyoue!I'vebeenlookingforyou.”shesaid,tiredandrelieved.Jennycouldn'thelpthrowingherselfintohermother'sarms.“Mum,I'msosorryandthankyouforallyouhavedoneforme.”Sheexpressedhersincereapologyandgreatgratitude.Hearingthis,hermothersmiled,pattingherbackgently.

范文三Approachingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.

Withpalmssweatingandthroattightening,sheopenedthedooratlast.“Mom,”shesaidweakly.However,nobodyanswered.Shecouldn’tfindhermotheranywhereathome.Whathermotherdidforhersprangupinhermind,likecookingforher,washingherclothesandsoon.Heartbeatingpainfullyandbangingagainstherribs,shewasstruckdeadwithregretduetotakingMother’sloveforgrantedandforgettingtoconveytimelygratitude.Theideathatit’snevertoolatetomakeasincereapologyhither.Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.

Raisingherheadup,Jennycaughtsightofafamiliarface.Itwasherbelovedmotherthatlookeddirectlyintohereyeswitharadiantsmile.Urgedbytheforcetorightthewrong,shespokeupwithafirmtone,“Mom,I’mdeeplysorryformyrudeness.Itwon’thappenagain!Ipromise!Wouldyouforgiveme?”Shecouldfeeltearswellingupinhereyes.“Youarealwaysmylittlegirl!”MomeyedJennytenderly.Asthesettingsuncastagoldenglowonbothoftheirfaces,theyembracedeachothertightly.Andthen,handinhand,theysteppedintothehouse.范文四Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.Notknowingwhatwouldhappennext,Jenny,gatheringhercourage,pushedthedooropen,onlytofindtherewasnobodyhome.Anxietybegantocreepuponher"WhereismyMom?Isshestillstillangrywithme?",Jennycouldn'thelpthinkingaboutallthese.