四级作文-漫画作文课件

四六级作文—漫画作文1•People

arecrossing

thestreet

lookingat

their

cellphones

andusing

walkingsticks

to

see.23开头难出现问题：１.有些同学第一段太过冗长，不少同学直接引用漫画原话。２.描述漫画时，有些同学时态使用错误。

３.有些同学只是描述了漫画但却没有引出漫画的内涵。4学生佳作

Nowadays,more

and

more

people

usemobile

phones

without

restraint（无所忌惮地）.They

often

use

it

in

all

occasions.

Inthe

comic,they

use

the

mobile

phoneswhilecrossing

the

road.

It’s

toocrazy.（顾薇薇）5

From

the

drawing

we

can

easilyidentify

what

the

author

intend

toconvey.

The

increasing

use

ofmobilephones

can

do

harm

to

ourlives.(吴佳凤）6

As

the

drawing

presents,there

is

a

manwalking

across

the

street

absorbedly（全神贯注地）

focusing

on

his

cell

phone

withoutnoticing

the

surroundings.This

sort

ofphenomenon

is

not

uncommon

insomemetropolis（大都市）,especially

among

theyoungsters.You

should

start

your

essay

with

abrief

description

of

the

picture

and

then

express

your

viewson

the

importance

of

doingsmall

things

before

undertaking

something

big.

You

should

write

atleast120

words

but

no

more

than

180

words.Dad,

I

am

a

bitworriedabout

disposing

ofnuclear

weapon.If

you

canemptythe

dustbin,youcan

doanything.78The

Importance

of

Doing

Small

Things

BeforeUndertaking

Something

BigPara

1This

is

a

thought-provoking（引人深思的）cartoon:a

young

guy

tells

his

father

that

he

is

a

bit

worried

about

disposing

ofnuclear

waste;however,his

father

informs

the

guy

of

a

truth:if

one

can

empty

the

dustbin,

he

can

do

anything(用自己的语言重新陈述）.For

this

part,

you

are

allowed

30

minutesto

write

an

essay,

you

should

start

youressay

with

a

brief

description

of

the

picture

and

then

express

your

views

on

theimportance

of

learning

basic

skills.No

offense,

but

by

thetime

we’re

in

the

jobmarket,

won’t

thatstuff

be

outdated910

With

the

development

of

society,some

students

think

basic

knowledge

isnot

useful.

The

picture

reflects

that

some

students

begin

to

questionthesignificance

of

learning

basicknowledge

and

skills（用自己的语言总结）.11语言问题词性使用错误搭配错误句子成分残缺中式英语12问题一：分不清一些单词的词性We

enjoy

the

technology

which

bringusconvenient.(改为

convenience)As

far

as

I

am

concern(+ed),

playphonein

the

class

must

make

students

notpay

attention

to

what

the

teacherssaid.When

you

are

boring（改为bored),youcould

chat

with

your

friends.13问题二：搭配错误

With

the

development

of

scienceandtechnology,more

and

more

mobile

phonesarising（arise一般和problems

搭配）改为

have

beenproduced.We

must

focus

on

reduce

use

cell

phoneeverywhere.（改为focus

onreducingusing)Focus

on

doingReducing

doing14问题三：句子成分残缺

But

many

people

think

thatmobilephone

（is)

harmful,

also

some

peoplethink

that(mobile

phone

is)

good.

(By)Using

the

phone

we

can

read

thenews,

messages

and

playgames.15问题四：中式英语

old

persons---改为oldpeople

或

the

elderly16其他问题more

and

more

fast

more

and

more（不建议使用）people=an

increasing

number/amountof

pepople

a

growing

number/amount

of

people（推荐使用）17提高篇：用词应具体生动With

the

booming(蓬勃发展）

ofinformation

technology,

variouselectronic

products

have

beenubiquitous(无处不在）.18大学英语四级写作中常用的形容词替换词。1明显的：obvious=apparent=evident=manifest2优秀的：excellent=eminent=top=outstanding3惊人的：surprising=amazing=extraordinary=miraculous4消极的，不良的：bad=detrimental=baneful=undesirable5美丽的：beautiful=attractive=gorgeous=eye-catching6积极的，好的：good=beneficial=advantageous7贫穷的：poor=needy=impoverished=poverty-stricken8有活力的：energetic=dynamic=vigorous9健康的：healthy=robust=sound=wholesome10富裕的：rich=wealthy=affluent=well-to-do=well-off11流行的：popular=prevailing=pervasive19Grammar

句子开头不用动词原形而用动词ing形式(祈使句除外）情态动词后用动词原形介词后用名词或动词ing形式（in,on,at,by,for,with，about，into,against…)20论证中出现的问题1.论证太单薄，缺乏论据。2.论证逻辑模糊。提高篇：论证应生动形象，具有内涵关于basic

skills

重要性的漫画范例：

We

can’t

live

without

basicskills.The

building

without

foundation

willcollapse.Basic

skills

usually

reflect

the

wisdomofpeople.(这些范例用词不难但却生动有力）21