2023学年完整公开课版作文讲评Howtolivewithpressure

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------HowtoLivewithPressure作文

你校英语俱乐部开展“ProblemSolver”的活动，就解决学习生活中一些问题交流自己的体验和感想。你们这次交流的话题是“Howtolivewithpressure”.请根据此话题写一篇英语短文，介绍你在学习上所遇到的压力及其相应的对策，以及你的感想。注意：

1.要求结构完整，语意连贯，观点正确。

2.词数：不少于120.作文较好的同学（18分以上）：C227:罗湘华张思思陈丽君朱荆璞黄玉C228:罗伟煌陆建云王荣李金鑫李雅如李芸张昌锡

请思考：第二篇语言和第一篇语言差不多，为什么得分会更低呢？

第一篇字迹更清楚，卷面更整洁。第二篇太马虎了。

此次书面表达中出现的其它问题速度问题25分钟完成的有：彭磊谢佳佳刘拓飞王荣童辉30分钟完成的有：罗湘华张思思张斌张丹丹李雅如（考纲要求：阅读填空，阅读回答问题和写作三大题型总共45分钟.）总结：六步作文法：一审—审题文章到底要求我们写什么。二分—分段一般为3-4段。三表—表达力求语言地道，句子正确，可用一些高级句型。四统—统一统一时态，人称等。五检—检查检查要点是否齐全、字数是否符合要求、格式人称是否正确、是否有语法拼写错误。六誊—誊抄注意字迹清楚、卷面工整、段落结构清晰。

Correctthemistakes:1.Theyaresohardworking.2.Wealwaysfeelcan’tbreathe.3.Onlyinthiswaycanwesuccess.4.Althoughthepressureisaroundourlife,butweshouldn’tgiveupourselves.5.Thereismuchpressurecomefromstudying.6.Idon’tthinkaboutthethingswhataren’tconnectedwithstudy.7.Thisisnodenyingthateveryonehavepressure.8.Youshouldfoundsomewaystolivewithpressure.9.IwanttocrythinkinghowcanIsostupid.10.OnlyifIsolvetheseproblemsproperlyIcanmakegreaterprogress.11.Onlyhaveapositiveattitudecanweachievesuccess.12.IwillstarttobenervousandhavenoideawhatshouldIdo.佳句、佳作欣赏1.Onlyinthiswaycanwelearnwell.（张斌）2.OnlyinthiswaycanIhaveconfidencetofacetheproblems.（屈淼鑫）3.Thereisnodenyingthatweshouldalwayskeepoptimisticandconfident.（罗湘华）4.Attitudeisaltitude!态度就是高度！（陈丽君）5.Lesspressure,moresuccess.（童辉）6.Onlyinthiswaycanwegetsuccess.（张鸿浩）7.Inaword,everybodycan’tavoidpressureinanything.Buttheattitudeisthemostimportant.（邓苏平）8.Thereisnodenyingthatthereismuchpressureamongusstudents.（黄梓煜）9.OnlyinthiswaycanIwinthebestsuccess.（王侨亚）10.Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.（李金鑫）11.Thekeytodevelopingsuchskillsistoenjoylearning.(汪泊林）12.Thereisnodenyingthateverybodyhaspressureinlife.（李芸）13.Onlyinthiswaycanyougetridofthepressure.（张昌锡）14.Itisknowntousallthatthepressureexistseverywhereinourlife.（张昌锡）15.Pressureshouldnotbeanenemy,butbeafriendwhichcanhelpusmakemoreprogress.(王荣）范文：Howtolivewithpressure

Iusedtofeelpressuredtodowellinexams.IwassoafraidoffallingbehindthatIkeptthinkingaboutstudyingeveryminuteoftheday.Thepressuremademeoutofbreath.Tomydisappointment,themoreworriedIwasaboutmystudies,thelessefficientIbecame.Later,IrealizedIjusttookpressuretooseriously.SoItriedtakingthingseasybytakingpartinvariousactivitiesoutofclass,enjoyingmusicandevendaydreamingaboutfunthings.Tomydelight,thisworked!Gradually,Ibecamelessanxiousaboutexamsandbegantotakepleasureinmystudies.

Pressurecannotbeavoided.Whatcountsishowtodealwithitproperly,andaboveall,howtoturnitinto

pleasureorchallenge.

Practice:1.她想知道会议什么时候举行。2.不可否认自信是取得进步的关键。3.只有用这种方式，我们才能实现我们的梦想。4.只要我们正确处理好了压力，我们就能把压力化为动力（drivingforce)。5.虽然我这次失败，但我相信高考我一定会成功。Answers:1.Shewantstoknowwhenthemeetingwillbeheld.2.Thereisnodenyingthatconfidenceisthekeytomakingprogress.3.Onlyinthiswaycanwereal