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WritingWriting1Leavingschool（毕业时分）Growingpainsandgains（成长的烦恼与欢乐）Ihaveadream（我有一个梦想）ThingsIhatetodo（我不喜欢。。。）Lovearoundme（我身边的爱)Iwanttodosomethingformyschool(我为学校做件事）I’mproudofmyself（我为自己感到自豪）与生活相关与“我”相关Leavingschool（毕业时分）与生活相关2Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)Writeatleast60wordsabout3内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合4Whatshouldwewriteabout?Whatshouldn’twe(only)writeabout?Freetalk1.Myschoollife2.Mydreamteacher3.ThethingIhatetodo4.Myopinionsofkeepingpetdogs5.ThebestwaytomakemehappyWhatshouldwewriteabout?Wh5内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合6Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)Writeatleast60wordsabout7

Thebestwaytomakemehappyisachievinggoodmarks.IthinkthiswayisthebestonetomakemehappybecauseitistheeasiestwaysanditcanimprovemyabilitysoIthinkitisthebestway.Inthisway,Icangetsomeprizes,soIwillfeelhappy,what’smoreitcanalsomakemyparentshappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全Thebestwaytomakemeha8therearealotofwaystomakemehappy.Thebestwaytomakemehappyistoplaybasketball.Toplaycomputergamesisalsoawaytomakemehappy.EverydaywehavePElesson.Thesearealotofinterestsinit.SoIfeelhappyinthisway.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全therearealotofwaysto9

thebestwaytomakemehappyistohelpanother.WhenIfeelsad,Icanhelpanother,becauseIhopetheothershappy.Icanhelpoldpeoplecrosstheroadandplaywithsmallchildren.InthiswayIfeelanotherhappy,thenIalsowillhappy.Helpothersnotonlymakemehappy,butalsomakeothershappy.Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)内容不全thebestwaytomakemeha10ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’ThemostunforgettablethingI11MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’MyspokenEnglishusedto12Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）内容得分4’Theenvironmentisimport13ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?内容不全1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingholidaysintheyear.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysismakingabirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherboughtthethingsweneededfromthesupermarket.Wemixedtheflourandeggs,thenaddedsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheoven.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilymembers.Itwasreallydelicious.Iwillneverforgetthatday.内容得分5’ThemostunforgettablethingI14MyspokenEnglishusedtobeverypoor.Itriedtoimproveit,butfailed.SoItoldittomyEnglishteacherandwishedhimtogivemesomeadvice.HetoldmethatIcouldimprovemyspokenEnglishbyspeakingmoreEnglish.Hesaid,‘ThemoreyoupracticespeakingEnglish,themoreprogressyouwillmake.’ThenIfollowedhisadviceandspokeasmuchEnglishaspossible.Atlast,myspokenEnglishimproved.MytroubleWhatismissedinthisarticle?Whatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)内容得分5’MyspokenEnglishusedto15Theenvironmentisimportanttousall.Weneedfreshair,cleanwaterandsoon.Thereusedtobemanytreesaroundus,theairwasfreshandtheriverwasclean,butnowtheydisappearedforonereasonoranotherandwerereplacedbydirtywaterandpollutedair.Becauseoftheterriblepollution,people’shealthisgettingworseandworse.What’smore,thegreenhouseeffectischangingourclimate,whichmayleadtoevenmoreserioussituation.EnvironmentaroundusWhatismissedinthisarticle?1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）内容得分4’Theenvironmentisimport16Nowadays,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworse.Ourbadhabitscausemanyproblemslikeairpollution,landpollutionandwaterpollution.Tomakeourenvironmentbetter,Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector.WecanplanttreestomaketheaircleanbecausetreescantakeinCO2andreleaseO2intotheair.Weshouldbuyanduseenvironmentallyfriendlygoods.Finally,wemustn’tleavealotofrubbishintotheriver,pondorsea.Solet’sbeenvironmentprotectorsandenjoylivingabetterlifeontheearth.IwanttobeanenvironmentprotectorNowadays,ourenvironmentisb17内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）*重点写什么(提示问题）内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合18

Nowadays,therearemanyproblemsofourenvironmentsuchasairpollution,waterpollutionandlandpollution.Peoplecutdownandburntheforest.Peopleusethingsonceandthrowthemaway.Peopleusechemicalstoproducemanythings.Becauseofthesereasons,ourearthisingreatdanger.Weliveontheearth,it’sourdutytoprotectit.IwilldoalotofthingssothatIcanprotecttheearth.Forexample,Iwillreusetheplasticbags.Therearealotofwaystobegreenconsumers.IwanttobeanenvironmentprotectorUsethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?Nowadays,therearemany19

Everybodyhasmanywaystomakehappy.SodoI.First,Ilistensomefavoritemusic.Second,Ireadsomebooksandmakesomenotes.Ithinkitisgood.Third,Iplaybasketballwithmyfriends.Inmyopinion,playbasketballisthebestwaytomakemehappy,becauseIfondofit.Becauseofthose,Ibecomehappyandstrong.1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)Everybodyhasmanywaysto20内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合理*写什么(题目，参考问题）*重点写什么(提示问题）*时态(参考问题）”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?内容（7分）+语言（8分）+文采（3分）一、认真审题，结构合21MytroubleWhatwasyourtroubleinyourstudy?(2’)Howdidyoufacethetrouble?(3’)Howdidyoufeelaftersolvingit?(2’)ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.1.Whatwasthethingyoudidinthewinterholidays?(1’)2.Givesomedescriptionsaboutit,suchaswhere/when/how/who,etc.(4’)3.Whydoyouthinkit’sthemostunforgettablethingyoudid?(2’)Environmentaroundus1.Whatdoyouthinkoftheenvironmentaroundus?（4’）2.Asstudents,whatshouldwedo?（3’）MytroubleWhatwasyourtroub22二、理清思路，列出提纲Writeapassageofatleast60wordsonthetopic”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector(保护者)”(以”Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)Usethefollowingpointsasaguide.(下列要点仅供参考）1.Whataretheproblemsofourenvironment?2.Whydoyouwanttobeanenvironmentprotector?3.Whatwillyoudotoprotecttheenvironment?二、理清思路，列出提纲Writeapassageof23Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic"Thebestwaytomakemehappy".(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)Thefollowingpointsareforyourreference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.Whatarethewaystomakeyouhappy?2.Whichwaydoyouthinkisthebestonetomakeyouhappy?3.Whydoyoufeelhappyinthisway?(giveatleasttworeasons)Writeatleast60wordsabout24三、连词成句，初步成形四、检查修改，内容无误Environmentisveryimportantforus.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.Iwanttobeanenvironmentprotector三、连词成句，初步成形四、检查修改，内容无误Environm25Thewinterholidaysareoneofthemostexcitingdaysintheyear.Ididalotofthingsthiswinterholidays.themostunforgetablethingistomakemybirthdaycakewithmymotheronmybirthday.Mymotherbuythethingsweneedfromthesupermarket.Wemixedthefloorandeggs.Thenaddsomespecialthingstomakethecakesoft.Finally,weputitintotheiron.Isharedthecakewithmyfamilynumbers.Itwasreallydelicions.IwillneverforgetthatdaybecauseIlearnedtomakecakesaswellassharemyhappinesswithothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Whatdoyouthinkofthisarticle?错误太多10’Thewinterholidaysareo26Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.1.Iclimedslowlyandwasverytried.2.IthinkitisanunforgetablethingbecauseIhelpedsb.climbedtiredunforgettablesomebody3.Onafridayafternoon,Iwentshoppingwithmymother.Spelling（拼写）（others)Friday4.Ican’tforgetthatday.Becauseitisthelasttimewecancelebrateherbirthdaytogether.Ican’tforgetthatdaybecause5.Whatacrazydayitwas,Iwillrememberitforever.!Capitalletter（大小写）Punctuation（标点符号）Findoutthemistakesinthef276.Iwillrememberedthatdayforever.remember7.Ithoughtitishungry.was8.Mygrandmotheralwaystidyupmyroom.tidies9.Howunforgettablethisthingsis!thingFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Tense（时态）Verbagreement(主谓一致)Wordform(词形）6.Iwillrememberedthatday2810.Inmyfather’shelp,Ibecamemorepatientthanbefore.Withmyfather’shelp,11.Tocutalongstorytoshort,….Tocutalongstoryshort,…12.IwenttoShihuabyabuswithmymother.bybus13.Mymothertoldmedon’tgiveitup.toldmenottogiveitupFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Phrases(短语和固定搭配）14.Isawanoldladylayinthemiddleoftheroad.sawanoldladylying…10.Inmyfather’shelp,Ibec2916.Weplayedsnowinfrontofhouse.playedwith15.Isatonaseat,listeningmusic.listeningto17.Thenaladyaskedwhohadbrokenherwindow.Weallwereafraid.wereallFindoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.Missingwords（漏词）18.Weshoulddothingsbyourownhands.withthehouse19.Itistiredwork.tiringWords’order（词序）Usingwrongword（选词错误）16.Weplayedsnowinfrontof3022.Heencouragedmetolookforthewatchbyheart.carefully21.OneSundaymorning,IwenttoShihuabybusandsatbesidemewasagirl.IwenttoShihuaonabusandtherewasagirlsittingbesideme.Findoutthemistakesinthefollowingsentencesandcorrectthem.ChineseEnglish（中式英语）Inmylife,manythingshappened.20.Inmylifehavemanythingshappened.22.Heencouragedmetolookf311.Environmentisveryimportantforus.2.Inourlife,theproblemsofourenvironmentareveryimportant.3.Wehavehurtittoomuchbycuttingdowntreesandpollutewaterandland.4.Iwanttobeaenvironmentprotectorsothatsaveit.5.I’dsuggestmyparentstotakebusinsteadofdrivecar.7.Iwillprogressmyhabbitssuchasuseabasketorapaperbag.8.Ifeverybodycandosomethingstoprotecttheearth,ourenvironmentwillbemuchbeautiful.6.Iwillpreventpeoplethrowrubbisheverywhere.topollutinginordertosaveit/sothatIcansaveittakeabusinsteadofdrivingacarfromthrowingdevelopgoodhabitsusingsomethingmuchmorebeautifulserious

anenvironment1234.2567.18.14.17.28.21.Environmentisveryimportan321.是否有大小写错误(capitallettersorlowercaseletters)是否有拼写错误(spellingmistakes)是否有标点错误(punctuationmistakes)4.是否有语法错误(grammarmistakes)主谓是否一致动词的时态语态的使用是否正确词组的搭配是否合乎习惯

…CommonErrorsinEnglishwriting1.是否有大小写错误(capitallettersor33Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.Checkandcorrectthisarticle.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,soDuringthewinterholiday34Duringthewinterholidays,Ithappenedalotofthings.Oneofthethingswashelptasmallgirltofindhermother.Whenmyfriendsandmeshoppinginashoppingmall,wesawasmallgirlcriedinacorner.Weaskedwhathappenedonher.Shesaidshecuond’tfoundhermother.Sowestartedtohelptshetofoundhermother.Luckily,wefoundhermother,theywereveryhappyandwewerehappy,too.IthinkitwasthemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidaysbecauseIfoundIalsocanhelpothers.ThemostunforgettablethingIdidinthewinterholidays.alotofthingshappened.helpingIwereshoppingcryinghappenedtocouldn’tfindhelpherfind.Theycouldalso,so=9’7’+2’+0’Commentonthisarticle.1.What?(1’)

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(2’)Duringthewinterholiday35Howshouldwecheckthepassage?1.查主题，文章是否符合题目要求，内容是否完整。(checkthetheme)

2.查语法，是否有时态错误，是否有主谓不一致，是否有语态问题，是否有词形错误，是否有不合乎搭配的词组。(checkthegrammar)３．查标点，是否有标点错误(checkthepunctuation)4.查拼写，是否有拼写错误和大小写问题（checkthespelling)5．查表达，是否有不合乎英语惯用的表达，是否有中国式英语表达