利用教材资源进行读后续写训练3（十四中许洁敏）

武昌教育欢迎您！充分利用教材资源开展读后续写训练武汉市第十四中学许洁敏ContinuationWriting考查方式评分原则材料特点读后续写的考查特点和重点评分原则读后续写的考查特点和重点考查方式：提供一段350词之内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。材料特点：故事性强，主题有一定的背景，材料有趣味性，内容能延伸，能激发学生的想象力和续写冲动。阅读材料难度适当，易于理解和模仿。评分原则：与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度，内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况，应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性，上下文的连贯性。考查维度考查维度读后续写的考查维度评分原则判断语篇中的显性或隐性的逻辑关系，根据段首句、段尾句等安排并调整新、旧信息的布局与承接关系。发现并借鉴语篇中既有的语言表达方式；灵活准确地选用符合一定语言风格的词汇、句式；关注语言使用的准确性、得体性和丰富性。清晰梳理语篇结构或脉络，根据行文线索确定续写内容要点信息及逻辑语义关系；抓住语篇中的关键细节或概念，判断后续信息的合理性。准确判断并确定语篇主题，根据主题意义预测后续信息。读后续写的考查维度内容结构语义连贯语言表达主旨主题内容结构阅读理解不到位，文章基调和主题把握不准学生完成本题型时出现的问题情节设置缺乏逻辑性，续写的内容发散太宽语法问题突出——句子结构和时态错误多表达粗糙，用词不准且单一，句式简单，口语化严重部分同学书写较差，大小写、标点使用随意针对学生问题的训练重点ThoughtTrainingSkillsTraining谋篇布局行文逻辑遣词造句句法句式语言表达读什么想什么写什么考查维度ThoughtTraining评分原则思维训练Whattoread?读背景(When,Where)读语言(Style)读人物(Who)读什么读事件(What,Why,How)阅读是续写的基础和前提——读什么

Whattoread?阅读是续写的基础和前提——读什么

TwostrangeneighborsMakeloudnoiseNotcommunicatewithothersKidsentertheroom?SolutionPara1：

Unexpectedly,thekidsbothexperiencedajourneytotheirownfuturethere.________?___________Para2：

Afterreturningfromtheneighbor'shouse,thetwokidschangedtotally.__________?__________AtroubledfamilySon:

addictedtogamesDaughter:lovesstudyonlyParents:

complainonlyProblem/SuspenseWhattoconsider?想故事逻辑想人物交集想什么想文章主题构思是续写的核心和关键——想什么

HowdidtheychangeWhydidtheychangeVisitedthefuturetimeChangedgreatlyAtroubledfamily'slifewasdisturbedbytwostrangeneighboursLogicTopic&CharacterJohnandEmily

changed

afterthevisittotheirfuture.构思是续写的核心和关键——想什么

BeforethechangeWhattowrite?写思想写故事写什么写人物行文是续写的落实和产出——写什么

TwostrangeneighborsAtroubledfamilyMakeloudnoiseNotcommunicatewithothersKidsentertheroom

(where)Problem4persons

whowhenP1P2

inthefutureSon:addictedtogamesDaughter:lovesstudyonlyParents:complainonlyBeginningDevelopment(What,Why)Consequence(How)Whatdidtheyexperienceduringthejourneytothefuture?Inwhichaspectsdidtheychange?How?Whattowrite?考查维度SkillsTraining评分原则技能训练B3U2Reading——ComeandeathereHighinenergy-givingfoodfewercustomersWangPeng'sResturantWeaknessLowinprotectivefoodStrenghthesLowinenergy-givingfoodHighinprotectivefoodmorecustomersStrenghthsSolutionWeaknessYongHui'sResturantV.S.解构文本，围绕主线，谋篇布局，展开续写WeaknessStrenghthesWeaknessesYongHui'sResturantWeaknessesStrenghths?行文逻辑B1U3Reading——AnightintheMountain行文逻辑 __5__wewenttoYosemiteforourfirstvacation.__4__mymotherandfathersatoutsidethecabin

Atoybearwasmybestfriend:Itookhimeverywhere,couldnotfallasleepatnightwithouthim.__2__thecurrentswepthimoutofmyhands.“Daddy,hurry,Bear'sgonedowntheriver.”__3__,he'dtossedhisnewspaperasideandfollowedmetotheplacewhereIlastsawBear.......finallydisappearingfromview.__1__,drenchedanddisheveled,hehadBearinhishands.__6__Ihadneverbeenconsciousoflovingmyfather.

1.Whenhereturnedanhourlater2.Suddenly3.Inamatterofseconds 4.As5.WhenIwasfive6.Untilthemoment行文逻辑B5U3Reading——LifeintheFuture行文逻辑Nervously

Alice___________theroomand____________ahuge___________machine.Justasshe___________,shefoundanoldwomanwholookedexactlylikeher_____(seat)bythetable.She_________felt________

terrified.Justatthatmoment,anassistant__________,_______(show)herintoalargeandbrighterroom,and________begantoexplain________________.__________(hear)theoldwoman’sstory,Aliceknewitwasherselfinthefuture,_____finallyaccomplishedhergoalandbecameawell-knownprofessor.But__________,shewasphysicallyand________unhealthybecauseofa_________ofexerciseandcommunication.enteredcaughtsightofwalkedbyimmediatelyextremelyapproachedshowedwhathadhappenedHearingwhothenstrange-lookingseatedunfortunatelymentallylack遣词造句B2U4——LearningaboutLanguage遣词造句B5U2——LearningaboutLanguageaskedsmiledshoutedbegged行文逻辑B7U3——Reading遣词造句遣词造句Choosetheverbsfromtheboxtocompletetheparagraph.Fillintheblankswiththeirproperformsandtrytofigureoutwhateffectstheseverbshaveproduced.

walk see smooth decide stop beat stick knock

I___1___bytheclockofthecityjailthatitwaspasteleven,soI___2___togotothenewspaperimmediately.OutsidetheeditorsdoorI___3___tomakesuremypageswereintherightorder;I___4___themoutcarefully,___5___thembackinmypocket,and___6___.Icouldhearmyheart___7___asI____8____in.遣词造句

Oneevening,mymomwasdownstairsdoingthelaundry.Asusual,shewastryingtodo10jobsatoncewhenshegrabbedthewetclothesfromthewasherandtossedthemintothedryer.Sheslammedthedryerdoor,turnedthetimer,andstartedtorunupstairs.

1（加一个表示事发突然的短语）,awhiningsoundstoppedherinhertracks.Thesoundwascomingfromthedryer.She__2__（用一个生动的动词表示妈妈的紧张）."________3___________（用直接引语表达妈妈此刻的心情）"AsI___4___

(用一个生动的动词表示我的反应)downstairs,thesoundgrewlouderandlouder.Iflungopenthedryerdoor.Theretooursurprisewas_____5_____

(用一个名词揭晓谜底).AllofasuddenyelledOh,mygod!Something'swronghere!rushedMica,ourcat充分利用教材的修辞素材（B3U1）（B4U3）（B1U4）（B1U3）遣词造句——修辞Carsontheroadfarawaylooklikeantshurryinghome.B6U2——Workbook遣词造句——修辞1.Thesmogcoveringthecitywasasthickas_______________.(simile)2.Thechildracedthroughthehouse________________________.(simile)3.Thesun__________yourskinwithglowingwarmth.Theflowers________inthespringbreeze.(personification)4.Goodpaintingis_________________;itcanbetasted,butnotexplained.(simile)5.Readingistothemindwhat__________istothebody.(metaphor)6.Timeis_____________________________________.(simile)kissesnodlikegoodcookingexerciselikelighting——shortandpassingfastafurcoatlikeagustofwind句法句式B2U5TheBandThatWasn't句法句式B5U2——UsingLanguage1.BecauseL.P.Ywasworriedaboutthetimeavailable...2.Shewasdelightedtovisitthetower.3.ShewasverysurprisedthattheQueen'sjewelswereguardedbyspecialsoldiers...语言表达B3U2——Comeandeathere个人感悟、主题升华B1U5B1U5B2U3B3U1B3U4

B1U3 Anight