读后续写：人与动物-拯救鳟鱼讲义-高三英语写作专项

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。JuliaalwaysenjoyedrunningthroughTheDarkWalktowardsthelightattheendofit.Itwasadark,damptunnel(隧道)madeofsmoothbranches.Thisyearshehadtheextrajoyofshowingittohersmallbrother,Stephen,andterrifyinghimaswellasherself.Onedaytheyfoundaholeononesideofthewalk.Insidetherewaswater,inwhichtheyperceivedapantingtrout(喘息的鳟鱼).Theywerebothsoexcitedthattheywerenolongerafraidofthedarknessastheybentdownandpeeredatthefishpantinginhistinyprison,hissilverstomachgoingupanddownlikeanengine;otherwisehewasmotionless.Juliawonderedwhatheateandthoughtofhishunger.Shefoundhimaworm.Heignoredthefood,andjustwentonpanting.Bendingoverhim,shethoughthowhehadbeeninthere.Allthewinter,inthedarktunnel,allday,allnight,floatingaroundalone.Nobodyknewhowthefishgotthere.Hermothersuggestedthatabirdhadcarriedtheegg.Herfatherthoughtthatinthewinterasmallstreammighthavecarrieditdownthereasababy,andithasbeensafeuntilsummercameandthewaterbegantodryup.Beforetheywenttobed,Stephenaskedhismummythewholestoryofthetrout,notreallyinterestedintheactualtrout,butinthestorywhichhismumbegantomakeupforhim,andJulia,inherbed,presentedherbacktothemandreadherbook.Butshekeptoneearcocked.“Andso,intheend,thisnaughtyfishgotbiggerandbigger,andthewatergotsmallerandsmaller...”Passionately,sheturnedaroundandcried,“Mummy,don’tmakeitahorribleoldmoralstory.”Hermomevenbroughtinafairy(仙子),whohadmadeitrainandfilledthehole,sothatthetroutcouldfloatawaydowntotheriverbelow.Staringatthemoonsheknewtherewasnosuchthingasafairyandthattrout,downinthetunnel,waspantingforhislife.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.

Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.

与其说是解析，其实是今天在文科+理科班讲课文字版实录：上课

解析：

来，同学们，我们今天看一篇《人与动物》：划重点：（并不全是这样，只是为了吸引学生注意力）（1）遇到大动物（你打不过的）---拔腿咱就跑（2）遇到小动物（你打得过的）---和它做朋友

Juliaalwaysenjoyed

running

through

The

Dark

Walk

towardsthe

light

attheendofit.Itwasadark,damptunnel(隧道)madeofsmoothbranches.Thisyearshehadtheextrajoyofshowingittohersmallbrother,Stephen,and

terrifying

himaswellas

herself.Julia特喜欢穿越"黑暗的路”去寻找光明through

The

Dark

Walk

towards

the

light，（黑夜给了我黑色的眼睛,我却用它寻找光明--顾城《一代人》），今年，她带上她的弟弟一起去黑暗隧道，既能吓着她自己，也能吓着傻弟弟。注意：伏笔黑暗--光明？究竟是什么？

隧道的黑-----尽头的光“人生”暂时的黑----“脱困”后的光

Onedaytheyfounda

hole

ononesideofthe

walk.Insidetherewas

water,inwhichtheyperceived

apantingtrout

(喘息的鳟鱼).Theywerebothso

excited

thattheywere

nolongerafraid

ofthe

darkness

asthey

bentdownandpeered

atthefishpantinginhistiny

prison,hissilverstomachgoingupanddown

likeanengine;otherwisehewas

motionless.

Juliawonderedwhatheateandthoughtofhishunger.Shefoundhimaworm.Heignoredthefood,and

justwentonpanting.Bendingoverhim,shethought

howhehadbeeninthere.Allthewinter,inthedarktunnel,allday,allnight,

floatingaroundalone.有一天，姐弟俩在黑暗隧道里，发现一个坑，坑里有点水，水里有只喘息的鳟鱼（），姐弟俩瞬间被这倒霉鱼吸引住了，甚至忘记了黑暗带来的恐惧。姐弟俩弯身，盯着鱼儿看。鱼儿肚子一胀一憋，像机器一样呼吸，要么就呆着不动。姐姐就想这鱼儿是怎么来的呢？？（长长的黑暗隧道，鱼儿还能是自己走进来，跳进这小坑里？）整个冬天，日日夜夜，孤独的小鱼儿就在坑里漂着。注意：看到这段，脑子炸了一下：

这条喘息的鱼是什么？就是鱼被生活困住”的人生进入4月冲刺期，迷茫焦灼的高三考生脱不下”孔乙己的长衫“的人(prison囚笼）像机器/引擎一样呼吸的鱼-----”行尸走肉？（有的人活着他已经死了--臧克家的诗《有的人》）

伏笔：看到鱼儿，忘记黑暗恐惧的姐弟-----续写第一段为了救鱼克服恐惧的姐姐弯腰看”热闹“的姐姐------为了救鱼儿跪着/趴着的姐姐像机器/引擎一样呼吸的鱼-----救鱼儿时拼命lash拍打尾巴（从麻木--到奋发自救）的苏醒Nobodyknew

howthefishgotthere.

Hermothersuggestedthatabirdhadcarriedtheegg.Herfatherthoughtthatinthewinterasmall

stream

mighthavecarrieditdownthereasababy,andithasbeensafeuntilsummercameandthewaterbegantodryup.回家后，父母得知鳟鱼后进行的猜测（鱼儿是如何进入坑里的）

冬天小溪带进鱼，夏天干涸鱼被困（这真的不是气候变暖产生影响的环保类文章？？？？）没人知道鱼儿是怎么进入隧道的？所以这像不像高中生在高一--高二--高三过程中，有些同学“跟不上”进度了，“落在了”黑暗中，而同学们已经往前走了很远，只留下他一个人？？Beforetheywenttobed,

Stephen

askedhismummythewholestoryofthetrout,

notreallyinterestedin

theactualtrout,butinthestorywhichhismumbeganto

makeup

forhim,

睡前弟弟Stephen让妈妈讲故事，妈妈开始编造鳟鱼的故事

伏笔notreallyinterestedintheactualtrout弟弟其实不关心真的鱼（黑暗--未启蒙）andJulia,inherbed,

presentedherback

tothemandreadherbook.Butshekeptoneearcocked.“Andso,intheend,thisnaughtyfishgotbiggerandbigger,andthewatergotsmallerandsmaller...”Passionately,sheturnedaroundand

cried,

“Mummy,don’tmakeit

ahorribleoldmoralstory.”Hermomevenbroughtin

afairy(仙子),whohadmadeitrainandfilledthehole,sothatthetroutcouldfloatawaydowntotheriverbelow.

伏笔姐姐Julia【背对着母子】：

后背是dark,脸是Light,身后两人是“局外人”，姐姐勇敢face"困境”解救鳟鱼，获得light姐姐听到妈妈编故事：哭了，（真性情、真觉醒）：“别再编造哪些《心灵鸡汤》了”：（小仙子来了，下雨吧，下雨了，鱼儿得救了）Staringatthemoonsheknewtherewas

no

suchthingasa

fairy

andthattrout,downinthetunnel,

waspantingforhislife.伏笔盯着月亮（也是一种光），姐姐知道：仙子是没有的，鱼儿只能呆在隧道里，苟延残喘。续写第二段：姐姐救了鱼儿---说也许真得是小仙子救了鱼儿吧官方范文：ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.Shetiptoedout,quietlyliftedalargepotofwaterandrantotheopeningofthetunnel.Insidewascompletedarkness!Scaredbutdetermined,sheracedin,kneltdownbythehole,andputherhandintoit.Thetroutlashedandtheywerebothmadwithfright.Stillshemanagedtoshovehimintothepotandracedoutofthetunnelanddownthesteeppaths.Allthewayh