专题05 纯干货-5招使续写中的动作描写富有电影镜头感

纯干货——“5招”使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”？

Learningobjectives:1.Learnwaystodescribevividlyincontinuationwriting.2.Promotewritingskillsthroughpractice.本专题包括：第一部分：输入——夯实基础

（一）“看”的精彩描写

（二）“跑走”的精彩描写（三）“手”的动作描写第二部分：学会“5招”使续写“灵动”第三部分：句子操练——熟能生巧

第三部分：语篇输出——学以致用

输入演示你会“看”——1.look看(指注意或有意识地看)；2.see看(强调看的结果)；3.watch观察；聚精会神的看；4.gaze凝视；注视；5.stare凝视；盯着看；6.glare怒目而视；7.peek偷看；“通过孔隙窥视”8.glance一瞥，看一眼；9.peep窥视，偷看；10.gape目瞪口呆地凝视。夯实基础catchaglimpseof偷瞄一眼takeaquicklook

瞥见；不注意看到look

into

向里看，调查look

up

抬起头向上看

gazeat

凝视stareat

盯住glareat

怒目而视peepat

偷窥glimpse/glanceat

瞥一眼gapeat

吃惊地看blinkat

朝…眨眼peepinto

偷窥one’seyesfallonsomeplace某人的目光落在..lookatsbstraightintheeye直视某人的眼睛one’seyesfix/focus/concentrateon某人的目光紧盯着......one’seyesscan......某人的眼睛扫视......夯实基础——看catchaglimpseof偷瞄一眼takeaquicklook

瞥见；不注意看到look

into

向里看，调查look

up

抬起头向上看

gazeat

凝视stareat

盯住glareat

怒目而视peepat

偷窥glimpse/glanceat

瞥一眼gapeat

吃惊地看blinkat

朝…眨眼peepinto

偷窥one’seyesfallonsomeplace某人的目光落在..lookatsbstraightintheeye直视某人的眼睛one’seyesfix/focus/concentrateon某人的目光紧盯着......one’seyesscan......某人的眼睛扫视......夯实基础——看你知道英语怎么“跑走”

吗？

tiptoe

蹑手蹑脚

stride

大步走

sneak

鬼鬼祟祟地走

limp

瘸着走

stumble

跌跌撞撞地走

stagger

蹒跚

slipintotheroom溜进房间

stormoutofthedoor冲出房门dashback

冲回

rush/hurrytothestation冲到车站Pacerestlessly

不安地走动wanderaimlessly

无目的地漫步夯实基础熟记英语各种“跑走”——tiptoe

蹑手蹑脚

stride

大步走

sneak

鬼鬼祟祟地走

limp

瘸着走

stumble

跌跌撞撞地走

stagger

蹒跚

slipintotheroom

溜进房间

stormoutofthedoor

冲出房门dashback

冲回

rushtothestation

冲到车站pacerestlessly

不安地走动wanderaimlessly

无目的地漫步夯实基础夯实基础演示各种“手”的动作graspatsth

尽力抓住某物seizesth

(fromsb)（常指通过暴力突然）夺取drag

拖拽；吃力地往前拉reachforone’shand

伸手抓住某人raiseone’shands

举手slidone’shandsinto

将手插进......catch/holdofone’sarm

抓住某人的手臂cupone’shandover

捂住......withone’sheadinone’shands

双手抱着头......foldone’sarms

某人双臂交叉catch/grabone’sarm

抓住某人的胳膊oone’sarms

拉某人进怀夯实基础熟记各种“手”的动作——graspatsth

尽力抓住某物seizesth

(fromsb)（常指通过暴力突然）夺取drag

拖拽；吃力地往前拉reachforone’shand

伸手抓住某人raiseone’shands

举手slidone’shandsinto

将手插进......catch/holdofone’sarm

抓住某人的手臂cupone’shandover

捂住......withone’sheadinone’shands

双手抱着头......foldone’sarms

某人双臂交叉catch/grabone’sarm

抓住某人的胳膊oone’sarms

拉某人进怀

提升表达提升读后续写技巧——让续写中的人物变得“灵动”语言表达“空乏平淡”是学生们在读后续写中存在的典型问题，究其原因就是：不会根据文章主题和情节发展进行精彩生动的动作描写。

今天，学会5招，让续写故事中的人物”灵动“起来！学会“灵动5招”让你的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”!1.三联动——连续使用三个动词并列做谓语2.非谓动——非谓语动词与主句的谓语搭配使用3.副助动——句子前后或动词前后使用恰当的副词增强语效4.介宾动——介词短语修饰限定，尤其是with复合结构5.无主动——无灵主句

Suddenly,Amovingdot(点)onthehorizon

wasspotted.

Exhaustedbuthopeful,Janejumpedtoherfeettocatchaclearsightofit."Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.

Thistimeshe

wasspotted,whichmadeherfeelmoredelighted.

Eyesbrimmingwithtears,

JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom

likeaflyingarrow,

hugging

tightly

inhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"非谓动三联动副助动介宾动

仿写造句句子训练：1.Helefthistent________________________.他一头雾水地离开他的帐篷2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,we______________________.听说他得救了，我们松了口气。3.Helookedatme______________________________.他以可怕的眼神看着我。4.Theyleftthecave_______________________.他们惊慌地离开了那个山洞。5.Shestared_________________________atthestranger.她惊愕地盯着那陌生人。inconfusion/confusedsighedin/withreliefwithfrighteningeyesinapanic/,panickedinastonishment/astonishedly6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jack________________________________________________.

一看到那条蛇，杰克跳起来、抓起一块石头就扔过去。7._________________________,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,_____________.飞机急剧下降，机上的人们开始恐慌,全都尖叫起来。8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,_________________________.我们终于回到了营地，又渴又饿筋疲力尽。9.______________,fearoverwhelmedme,__________________.夜幕降临，我感到极度害怕，使我浑身哆嗦。10.________________________,weran____________.恶狼在后面紧追，我们拼命地逃跑。jumpedtohisfeet，graspedaWiththeplanefallingrapidlyallscreamingstoneandthrewatitNightsettingincausingmetotrembleWithafiercewolfchasingusdesperatelyhungry,thirstyandexhausted

语篇

输出Back阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021·江苏如皋第二次适应性考试)Onedarknightduringthesummerholidays,IwalkedovertomyfriendJeremy'shousetostayover.Weweregoingtohaveamoviemarathonofourfavoritesci­fiadventurefilmseriesandstayuplatewithsomesnacksanddrinks.Ihadnotbeentohishousebeforebecausehehadonlyrecentlymoved,soIaskedhimtotextmeoverhisnewaddress:64CherryTreeRoad.Jeremy'snewstreetwasanicepartoftown,linedwithtalltreesandmostofthehouseshadahedgeorfenceatthefront.Someofthehouseshadtheirnumbersonthegate,someonthehouse,andsomedidn'tseemtohaveanumberatall.IthadstartedtocloudoverasIleftmyhouse,andasIturnedontohisroad,itbegantorain.Astheraingotheavier,Irushedtofindnumbersixty­fourandeventuallyfoundit...orsoIthought.IwalkedpastBacknumber62,soassumeditwasthenextone,whichappearedtohavenonumber.Yousee,usuallytheoddnumbersareononesideofthestreet,theevennumbersontheother.Iwalkedquicklyupthedrivewaytothefrontdoor.Itwasverydarktooandtherewerenolightsoninsidethehouse,whichdidseemstrange.However,Iwasgettingdrenched(湿透的)andwantedtogetinside!Irangthebell,butnobodycame,soIrangandknockedagain.ThenInoticedtherewashousenumberafterall.Aridiculoussmallonethatsaid63.Therewasasuddenthud(呯的一声)insidetheapparentlyemptyhouse,andamomentlaterthefrontdooropenedviolently.Ahooded(戴兜帽的)manwithabeardandblueglasseshurriedpastmeandranintothestreet.Therewasashoutfrominside:“Waitforme,Rob！”Anothermanrushedout,buthedroppedwhathewascarryingandtrippedonthedoorstep.Theothermanshoutedfromtheroad“C'mon,Kev！”hepickedhimselfupandlookedatmebeforeracingafterhisfriend.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.___________

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“Youwerebravefortryingstopthem，”saidtheofficer.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

本文是一篇记叙文,讲述了作者去朋友家玩，却走错房子，看到有两个男人从房子里跑出来。当看到掉落的珠宝后，作者作何反应？后来事情结果又如何呢？

学生原作学生原作：

Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.

Allatonce,Irealizedwhathadhappened.Theywereburglars.“Stop!Burglars!”Iyelledloudly,chasingthemw