高一英语作文 【核心考点+能力提升】读后续写课件

读后续写高一（1）/(4)班读后续写试题说明提供一篇350词以内的语言材料，原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右)，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。

命题特点

读后续写文章题材选择以记叙文为主。文章信息完整，既可以提炼出要点，又要给续写留出余地，此类文章故事性强，情节有起伏，内容连贯，逻辑性强，结构清晰，结尾处有结局或者感慨、总结等。段落要求：给定的段落开头能引导故事延续，又防止天马行空的想象。评分标准

Jennywastheonlychildinherhome.Shehadaquarrelwithhermotherthatafternoonandsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn’thelpweepingwhenshethoughtofthescoldingfromhermother.Havingwanderedinthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastandforawhile,watchingthemiddle-agedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shesighedandhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?””“Oh,yes...butIdon’thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.“That’snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman.“Comein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing,actuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJenny.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomercilesscomparedtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,thesellersmiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyourgratitudetoher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumbwithshock;sherememberedMother’sfamiliarfaceandweatheredhands.“WhydidInotthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelgrateful,butIhaveneverthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme.”Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakeanapologytohermotherforherrudenessassoonasshearrivedhome.Paragraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath.______________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback._______________________________Task:acontinuation(续写)ofthestoryReadwhathappened____in__thestoryWritewhathappened______thestoryParagraph1Nearingthedoorway,Jennytookadeepbreath._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________afterWhat/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhyThekeyelementstoexploreinastory“4321”模式下的读后续写思维“4321”Method4Reads-Readforelements

,emotionalchange,conflict,theme3Principalsaction-responseconflict-solutionnegative-positive2Givensentences1Goodending研读文章意识-细节+大意情节推进意识:结局反推情节意识show,don’ttell意识衔接意识主题意识写作方法三大原则原文一致原则正能量原则曲折性原则写作小技巧1.双线并行情节线情感线写作小技巧2.巧用过渡➪地点过渡➪逻辑过渡因果：thus、therefore➪时间过渡atfirst/earlyinthemorning/when.../onarrivingat...(一到...)/withouthesitation(没有迟疑)/havingdone...(做完...)/finally/intheend02、写作方法写作小技巧3.换词大法简单词→高级词see--catchsightofhappy--delightedsad--depressedsay--murmur/interrupt/insist/whisper/add/shout...02、写作方法写作小技巧4.万能句式过渡词，with/without...+介短/doing(主动)/done(被动),人did...,doing...,feeling...eg:After10minutes,withabookinherhand,enjoyingherfavoritesongs,shesteppedintotheclassroom,feelingdelighted.5.记叙性语言与描述性语言结合，避免流水账。02、写作方法两个雷区×太过离奇×对话、长句过多Step1ReadingFastreadingWhat'sthestyleofthepassage?Narration(记叙文)B.Exposition(说明文)C.Argumentation(议论文)

讲述人物经历、事物变化FastreadingWhichoneistrueaccordingtothepassage?Theauthortellsthestoryinthefirstperson.Theauthortellsthestoreinthesecondperson.Theauthortellsthestoryinthethirdperson.

YouHeSheItinthefirstperson.IWeWhattenseshouldweuseifwewillcontinuetowrite?Thesimplepasttense一般过去时B.Thesimplefuturetense一般将来时C.Thesimplepresenttense一般现在时

Fastreading

Task1Readforelements

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whyIDavidthedayofthebigcross-countryruntheracespot(aplacewiththickevergreenforest)Davidhesitatedandsaidhedecidednottorun.BecausethecoachwasafraidhewouldbelaughedatbythekidsfromotherschoolsaspecialeducationteacherofDavid’sschoolaten-year-oldboywithabraindisease;unabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids;rockfromsidetosidewhilewalking

Task2Readforplot

&Emotions

Thoughunabletowalkorrunlikeotherkids,Davidwastreatedequallyasaregularkidandusuallylivedahappylifeintheschool.Hedecidedtotakepartinthecross-countryrunandpracticedveryhard,nevermissingasinglepractice,thoughhewasalwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheothers.Hewasaskedtodecidebyhimselfwhethertorunornotontherundaybecausethecoachwasafraidhewaslaughedatbythekidsfromotherschools.

Hewasstandingbyhimselfoffthesidebyafencebuthisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent.HappyDeterminedHesitantDepressed/LostanddownPlot&EmotionsAsaspecialeducationteacher,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.IfoundDavidstandingalonebyafence,notwarmingupandwalkingtheroutelikeotherrunnersbeforetherace.Iaskedhiscoachandlearnedthereason.

AftermakingsureDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme.AdmiredSurprisedFrustratedDetemined读故事Step2Writing两种构思方法“四到一行”“线索呼应”看听想说做找出线索，前后呼应“两法六句”第一步依据首句，构思框架两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。(1)读懂两段首句第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句、第二段首句后的衔接句。即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。(2)写好三个衔接句(3)写好一个升华句动作描写增加细节所见所闻、所说所思所做环境描写人物描写语言描写心理活动描写第二步增加细节，展开续写续故事Conflicts1.最终David参加比赛了吗？是什么让他改变了主意？2.比赛过程中，其他学校的孩子嘲笑David了吗？为什么有或没有嘲笑他？Theme读后续写一般都用正能量结尾。所以其他学校的孩子们应该没有嘲笑David，反而会很敬佩他，会为他的身残志坚和不畏困难坚持到最后的精神而鼓掌。-----所以根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，Conflict1就是第一段要解决的内容，第二段就解决Conflict2.续故事Clues----首句线索Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Why?Whatwashedoingthen?Howwashefeelingthen?WhatdidIdecidetodo?WhatandhowdidIsaytohimthen,makinghimdeterminedtorun?----ImanagedtopersuadeDavidtojoinintherace.----ThoughDavidfinishedtherunlongaftertheotherchildren,hewasadmiredandrespectedbyotherkids.Howdidheperformintherace?WhatdidIfeelwhenseeinghimperformthatway?Whatwastheotherkids’responsetohisperformance?续故事Clues----原文线索1.