【公开课课件】建议信讲评公开课

昨天已经过去，明天还没到来。只有今天是一份礼物。Yesterday

ishistory,tomorrowisamystery,buttodayisagift.Welcometoourclass建议信写作讲评

假如你是李华，你的美国笔友James来信告诉你，他打算明年到你所居住的城市游玩一个星期，并向你请教相关事宜。请你就此给他回信，提供一些旅游建议。要点如下:出行的最佳时间；值得游览的景点；适宜住的酒店。其他。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可恰当增加细节，以适全文连贯。3.开头语和结束语已为你写好。

典题例练开门见山，表明写作意图。在本段中，写信人应该先简单介绍自己，然后陈述事由，表明写信的目的及原因。委婉地提出建议及改进措施，或提出忠告。礼貌地总结并期盼对方的回复。

佳句赏析Inaddition,youaresupposedtotakemoreclothesincasetheweatherisgood.

---刘锦莉AsfarasIamconcerned,threelanesandsevenalleysisworthytobevisitedandsomefamouspeoplelivedthereatonetime.

----杨琼Whatcallsforspecialattentionisthatyoushouldtakesunglassesandsunscreencream.

---杨琼Finallyandmostimportantly,sinceyouwanttocomehere,Irecommendyoutotakethedeliciousfoodhere.Itwilldefinitelymakeandeepimpressiononyou.

---陶京

Step1典型错误1.Youareworthvisiting.Theplaceisworthvisiting.2.Theweatherisnothotandcold.Theweatherisneitherhotnorcold.3.Herearesomeadvicestoyou.Herearesomesuggestionstoyou.4.Youmusttakesomethickclothes.Youmusttakesomewarmclothes.5.Therehaveverygoodenvironmentandservice.Thereisaverygoodenvironmentandservice.Step2典型错误6.YoumusthavefuninFuzhou.YouwillhavefuninFuzhou.7.Itwillcoldatnight.Itwillbecoldatnight.8.Idobelievethatyouwilllikethiscityandhaveagoodtimeinhere.Idobelievethatyouwilllikethiscityandhaveagoodtimethere.9.Thespringisoftenrains.Itoftenrainsinspring.10.Finallyandmostimportantlyisthat…Finallyandmostimportantly,Whatmattersmostisthat…常用句式Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbeofhelptoyou.Itisagoodideatodosth.Youhadbetterdo…Whynot?Istronglyadviseyoutodo.Isuggestthatyoushoulddo.Iholdaviewthat…Itisnecessary/importanttodo.Step3重点短语既不。。。也不。。。值得做某事给。。。留下深刻印象名人参观来自国内外在于，位于对某人来说做某事是方便的。对。。。高度评价我坚定地认为玩得开心景点名胜古迹Neither…norBeworthdoingMakeadeepimpressiononCelebrityPayavisittoFromhomeandabroadLieinItisconvenientforsbtodosth.ThinkhighlyofIdobelievethatHaveagoodtimeScenicspotsPlacesofinterestStep4看图说话

neither…norStep5Beworthdoing,celebrity

fromhomeandabroad

makeanimpressiononLiein

itisconvenientforsb.todosth.Localdishesthinkhighlyof谋篇布局Iamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillbeofsomehelptoyou.Firstofall,_____________comehereinspringorautumn,foritisneithertoocoldnortoohotatthistime.Besides,____________________payavisittoThreeLanesandSevenalleys,whichiswellworthvisitingandhasattractedmanypeoplefromhomeandabroad.Manycelebritiesusedtolivethere.Itslonghistoryanduniqueculturewillcertainlymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Whatismore,______________livein

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.Itliesinthecitycentersoitisconvenientforyoutogoeverywhere.Finally,____________trysomelocaldishesinFuzhou.Youwillthinkhighlyofthem.Iamfirmlyconvincedthatyouwillhaveagoodtimeinmycity.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.YouhadbetterIstronglyadviseyoutoitisagoodideatoWhynotStep6

如何算是一篇好文章？－覆盖了所有的要点－应用了较多的语法结构和词汇－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。要点全词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道连接词自评互评

AWelcometomycity.IhopethatIcanhelptoyou.Tobeginwith,ourFuzhouisverygood.Itisverycool.IthinkyouwillcometoFuzhouinspring.Whatismore,ifyoucometoFuzhou,youwillstayin…hotel.Finally,youshouldvisittheThreelanesandsevenalleys.IwilltakeyoutothexiLake.Iamlookingforwardtohearingfromyou.Goodluck！(74words)6Step7_______________________________________________________________BIamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.SoIwillgiveyousometipsthatIhopethefollowingsuggestionswillhelpfultoyou.Firstofall,theweatherisveryimportant.IthinkOctoberisthebest.Becauseitneithercoldnorhot.Inaddition,Irecommendsomescenicspotsforyoutovisit,suchasthethreelanesandthreealleys,MountGu.Theseplacesareworthvisiting.Finallyandmostimportantly,acomfortablehotelisthekey.Ithinkmycitywillgiveyouadeepimpression.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.Iamlookingforwardtoyourarrival.(90words)13__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________CIamverydelightedthatyouarecomingtomycityforavisit.Ihopethefollowingsuggestionswillhelpyou.Fuzhouisasuitablecitytovisit.Theweatherhereisgood.Andyoucanchoosespringorfalltocome.Thesetwoseasaren’ttoohotortoocold.Besides,Fuzhouhassomanyplacesofinterest,SuchasThreelanesandsevenalleys.Itisworthvisiting.Longtimeago,thereweremanypeoplelivingthere.Itcanhelpyoutoknowaboutthelocalculturehere.Third,Fuzhouhasmanyhotelstochoose,eachofthemcanofferyouthebestservice.Sodon’tworryaboutit.Finallyandmostimportantly,sinceyouwanttocome,Irecommendyoutotastethedeliciousfoodhere.Itwilldefinitelymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseideasuseful.(125words)20_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________最后检测

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wellworthvisitingandhadattractedmanypeoplefromhomeandabroad.Manycelebritiesusedtolivingthere.Itslonghistoryanduniqueculturewould

certainlymakeadeepimpressiononyou.Whatismore,itisagoodideaforyoutolivein

Shangri-laHotel

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