读后续写lucky charm课件 【基础梳理+考点探究】高三英语二轮复习

读后续写What'syourluckycharm?NUMBER？FOOD？COLOR？GESTURE？文本分析Mikelickedthelastofthemintchocolatechipicecream.Itwasalmosttimetoleave.HejumpedintothecarwithhisparentsandheadedofftotheOlympic-sizedpoolforthebigswimmeet.Whenhisracecameup,Mikewasconfident.Hewasstrongandswift.Mikeclimbedoutthepool,smiling.Hehadjustwonfirstplace,makinghimthefastestboyinhisagegroup.0102"Congratulations,son,"hisfathersaid.Hismomgavehimahug,eventhoughhewassoakingwet.Aweeklater,itwastimeforanotherswimmeet.Likebefore,Mikedecidedtoenjoyhisfavoriteicecreamflavor.Mikerememberedthatthelasttimehehadwonarace,healsoatemintchocolatechipicecreamfirst.Maybehe'dwinagain.0304He'stakenfirst

placeagaininhisrace.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Asitturnedout,MikedecidedtohavesomemintchocolatechipIcecreambeforeeveryoneofthenextfewswimmeets.Hebegantothinkofitashislucky

charm.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Andhewouldn'tadmitit,butallthaticecreamwasaddingafewpoundstohisathleticswimmer'sbuild.05Itdidn'ttakelongafterthatforMiketostartcominginsecondplace-andthenthird-andthenlastplaceinhisraces.Theluckymintchocolatechipicecreamhadlostitsmagic.Onthedayofhisnextswimmeet,hismothersatdownatthetablewithhim."Mike,weallloveicecream,butit'snothealthyforyourbodytoeatsomuchofit.Maybeit'stimetoquitthesweettreatsforawhile,especiallybeforeyougoswimming.0607Mikeunwillinglyagreed.Hewenttotheswimmeet,anddidn'tperformwell.Hisfatherofferedtogorunningwithhimafewdaysaweektohelphimfeelbetterandstrengthenhismuscles.Theextraweightsoondisappeared,andMikefoundhimselfbreathingeasieratswimpractices.Itwasthelastmeetoftheseason,andMikewasn'tsurewhattoexpect.Hefelthealthyagain,buthedidn'tknowifhestillhadanyspeedinthepool.0809写作要求注意：1.所续写短文的字数应为150左右；2.至少使用五个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语Paragraph1:Paragraph2:Ashedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Hisjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelsetoo.词汇积累词汇积累v.舔;舔吃n.舔;lick词汇积累n.魔力;吉祥小饰物;魔法v.吸引;迷住;charm写作构架Analyzethestory5Rs1.Readforcharacters3.Readforplot4.Readforemotionalchanges2.Readforconflict/problems5.Readfortheme1.Readforcharacterssb：sth：Mikehisparentsteammatesicecream2.Readforconflict/problemsIcecreamandMike'sperformanceWhetherisitaLuckycharm3.Readforplot4.ReadforemotionalchangesWhenhisracecameup,Mikewasconfident.Mikewasfeelingprettygood.Afterseveralmonthsofplacinginthetoppositionsofeveryraceheswam,Mikewasfeelingunbeatable.Mikeunwillinglyagreed.5.ReadforthemeWhatcontributestoMike'ssuccessinswimming?diligence四步定框架Step1:先把最后一句写好，即：主题句Step3:第一段的提示语句写角色的情感：Step4:第二段的提示语句写角色的情感：Step2:再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：Step1:先把最后一句写好，即：主题句icecream=luckycharm?Mike意识到一个人的幸运符不是冰淇凌而是勤奋。Mikerealizedthatone'sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.Step2:再把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句：Ashedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Hisjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelsetoo.Hedashedtothefinishline.Step3:第一段的提示语句写角色的情感：Ashedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Step4:第二段的提示语句写角色的情感：Hisjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelsetoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.三大原则Action-ResponseNegative-PositiveConflict-SolutionAction-Response角色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的一系列反应的。每段对话1-2句，不一定两个人都要说话，无声的动作也是一种回应。Conflict-Solution一般而言第二段会有问题的solution，但本文和高考的读后续写文章出题不一样，因为solution所给文章中就已经有了。同时思考：能否在第一段出现一个问题，然后把它解决了或者没有解决。一方面是增加看点，另一方面也是给第二段铺垫。Negative-PositiveAshedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.出现一个新的问题，并解决。Wheneverhecameupforabreath,hecouldseehewasgainingontheaheadofhiminthenextlane."ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace."thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward."ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace."hethoughtconfidently.情绪状态身体表征润色修改Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast,whichstartledhim.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast.Itstartledhim.简单句复杂句润色修改Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank.Heisafraidoffallingbehind.

非谓语动词单一状语多样状语润色修改Ashedroveintothewater,hekickedhislegsandstretchedhisarmsasfarashecould.1.Itstruckendlessenergyandmotivationintohisbody.（心情）2."ThisiswhereIbelong.Icanwintherace."thoughthe,histeethclenchedandhiseyesfixedonthefinishlineforward.（内心独白）3.Suddenly,twofigureswhizzedpast,whichstartledhim.（心情变化））4.Fearingtofallbehind,hefelthisheartpoundedfranticallyandhismindwentblank.（解释心情变化和问题）5.Justthen,hethoughtofhissweatandhisfather'sencouragingsmile.（问题的解决方法）6.Gradually,hisworrygavewaytohisconfidenceandthelast5minutessawhimdashtothefinishline,followedbytheendoftherace.（衔接句）Hisjawdroppedasherealizedhehadbeatenhisownbesttime,andeveryoneelsetoo.Theflowersinhisheartwerealreadyinbloom.ItwasthatdaythatMikerealizedthatone'sluckycharmwasnothingbuthisdiligence.次要角色的回应：父母？观众？冰激凌？Hisparentscameupandgavehimahighfive,grinningfromeartoear.Hisparentscameupandgavehimahighfive.Theygrinnedfromeartoear.

非谓语动词单一状语多样状语润色修改“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebratesaidhisfather,pattinghisontheshoulder.Hisfatherpattedhisshoulderandsaid,“Hey,whynottryyourfavoriteicecreamandcelebrate.”

非谓语动词单一状语多样状语润色修改"Thanks,Dad,butIhavegivenuptheicecream.It'snotsuchaluckycharmatall."Hiseyesshonewithwisdom."Thanks,Dad,butIhavegiven