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1、Emily Whites story Emily White was born seventeen years ago with so many birth problems in her body. Some of her organs, bones and muscles were out of shape. No one expected her to survive. She did make it but with her strange body figure, everyone could recognize her, even from a distance. In Emily
2、 Whites hometown, there was a yearly outdoor performance in the school auditorium(礼堂). It had been performed for so many years and actually had become one of the most important events of the Christmas season for many of the towns people. Many people tried out each year for it, but so many were turne
3、d away. It can only include the most excellent people in the field. Emily had a beautiful singing voice. Last year she went to Mrs. Owens- her music teacher to ask to join in the performance. Without letting her sing, Mrs. Owens took a look at Amys body and said, Child, you just dont fit. Everyone w
4、ould stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable. It would make them uncomfortable, too.” Without singing a single note, Emily was sent back through the door of the choral room. Hurt and upset, she decided never to try out again. But Mrs. Owens then retired. This year, there came a new music
5、teacher, Mr. Buttler. He heard about Emily and suggested that she have a try. Emily didnt want to be rejected again, so she hesitated a little about it. As Emily struggled, the door was pushed open and Mr. Buttler called, “Emily, youre next. Although kind of nervous, Emily did as Mr. Buttler told he
6、r to do. Mr. Buttler sat by the piano to keep Emily company. When Emily finished her testing performance, she thanked Mr. Buttler and knew the result would be posted on the door of the choral room the next day. Emily couldnt sleep that night. She was suffering from the feelings that she didnt fit an
7、d the great need to be accepted. By the next morning, her stomach was even in pain because of stress.characters: Emily White: a 17-year-old girl born with disabilityMrs. Owens: Emilys former music teacherMr. Buttler: Emilys latter music teachertime:During the Christmas season when a grand yearly per
8、formance was in preparationplace:In Emilys schoolevent:Emily wanted to take part in a yearly performance but was rejected by Mrs. Owens for her noticeable physical disability. It was Mr. Buttler who encouraged her to try out for it. Basic informationPara.1Para.23the eventPara.4Para.7Continuation par
9、a.1resolutionContinuation para.2falling actionrising actionPara.56turning point?Emilys physical conditiona yearly performancebe rejectedanother chance(try again)waiting for the resultlooking for her name on the listgiving a performanceinterested & eagerhurt & upsethesitantnervousrestlessstressedanxi
10、ousnervoussurprisedthrilledembarrassed, uneasy?calm, confident?grateful, confident Plot & FeelingssettingclimaxMrs. OwensMr. Buttlerwords/actions“Child, you just dont fit. Everyone would stare at you and that would make you uncomfortable. It would make them uncomfortable, too”Sent her back without e
11、ven letting her singing a single note.Suggested Emilys having a try“Emily, youre next”Kept her companyattitudesnegative and disapprovingconcerned and caringencouraging and supportiveinfluences on EmilyHurt and upset, she decided never to try out again.Though hesitant and struggling, she took the cha
12、llenge .A sharp contrastset a major conflict for Emilys storyWhats the function of the role of “Mrs. Owens” ?lead to Emilys self-denial / lack of confidence in herself and in people around her.How will the conflicts be solved?Paragraph1: The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door
13、of the choral room. stagesfeelingsmental or physical responses1. 如果续写情节比较清晰,可放慢叙事节奏,或添加合理冲突,凸显主题。before finding her nameon spotting her nameafter confirming her namenervous, anxioussurprisedthrilledThroat tightenedChest burnedHeart pounded/beat wildlythroat, chest, heart, eyesblood, heart, hands, ey
14、esface, mouth, jump, cry2. 以人物情感情绪变化为线索,添加心理描写及对应的physical responses, 人物形象更立体饱满。 “searching for her name”Being teased by others? Self-doubted?Eyes brightened/lit up/sparkled with joyBlood flushed in the veinPalms sweating being appointed as a lead singer in the performance?TipsContinuation analysis1
15、. did she find her name?2. how did she feel?3. then what did she do?Paragraph2: Finally, the day of performance came.1. how was the performance? 2. how did Emily feel? and others?3. What did Emily learn from the experience?stagesfeelingsMental or physical responsesbefore the performanceduring the pe
16、rformanceafter the performanceThroat tightenedChest burnedHeart thudding/pounding/beating wildlyPalms sweatingFace flushing red/lit upMind blankEyes dizzyBody clumsyFeel butterflies in her stomach nervousembarrassed, uneasy-calm, enjoyabledelighted, grateful1. Which part of narration could be slowed
17、 down?2. What conflicts could be set? How to solve?So shocked was shetellnervousness filled her heartto believe合理冲突:自我怀疑冲突解决:Mr. Buttler再次鼓励并帮助练习情绪走向:上台表演前的“紧张” ,开始表演后的“惊艳”,及表演后的“欣喜”学生考场作文点评it was her turn,nervousnessroseShe regained her confidence.Paragraph 1 The next day, Emily nervously glanced a
18、t the list on the door of the choral room. Worried that she might be rejected again, she felt her throat tighten standing among a crowd of students, anxious to know the result. Hardly had her eyes settled upon the very top of the list when the name “Emily White” abruptly popped into her sight. It wa
19、s so incredible that she rubbed her eyes over and over again to ensure it was the right “Emily White” she was looking for. Realizing there was not a second “Emily White” in the school, she jumped up and let out a cry of excitement. What made her even more surprised was that Mr. Buttler told her she
20、was the lead singer in the performance. Paragraph 2 Finally, the day of performance came. When all the performers did the last rehearsal in the choral room, Emily seemed to be quite confident about the upcoming performance. However, as she stepped onto the stage, spotlight fixed upon her, a sense of
21、 embarrassment and uneasiness flashed across her again. Gradually she found herself clumsy and even dizzy standing in the center of the stage. Just at that moment, she got a glimpse of Mr. Buttler in the corner of the hall, who shot Emily a determined look and then clapped loudly to give her a cheer
22、. Taking a deep breath, Emily, with her eyes closed, started to sing. Immediately, the whole auditorium erupted into applauses. Their performance turned out to be a great success.老师下水作文Paragraph 1 The next day, Emily nervously glanced at the list on the door of the choral room. She was not rejected
23、this time. Her name was posted at the top of the list. She, Emily White, was chosen to be the leading singer! She would sing alone in the performance. Emily couldnt believe her eyes. There must be some mistake. But Mr. Buttler said to her with determined eyes, “Emily, I choose you because you should
24、 perform the partyour voice is unusual. Believe in yourself.” Greatly encouraged, Emily practiced really hard. Paragraph 2 Finally, the day of performance came. Standing in front of the line, Emily felt her throat tighten and her palms sweating. When the curtain opened up, the eyes of the whole audience fell upon Emily. “Emily White!” Someone whispered. Then, along with the first note of music, Emily began to singer her heart out. Her voice was like a nightingale ringing in the auditorium. Applause! Emily felt so happy and comfortable. She was shining on the stage. Emily
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