09广东高考读写任务

1、第二节 读写任务（共1小题，满分25分）阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。Jackie is perhaps the most easily annoyed koala（考拉）at the Featherdale Wildlife Park in southern Australia. All the koalas there are unhappy and complaining. You would be too if you were used to night activities and someone kept waking you up all day w

2、hile you were trying to sleep it off. Thats rightsleep it off. The average koala is always half asleep because it feeds on the leaves of a special kind that makes it sleepy. The reason Jackie and her fellow koalas are repeatedly awoken from their deep sleep is so they can be hugged and photographed

3、by tourists，who make the trips to Featherdale and an increasing number of other national parks for just that special experience. Whatever department in the Aussie government in charge of such things is now moving to make the practice illegal，which is understandable. How would you react，my friend，if

4、you were trying to sleep off a dozen times and some round，furry creature smelling of grass kept waking you?* 考拉即树袋熊178words 写作内容1. 以约30个词概括这段短文的内容；2. 然后以约120个词就“该不该禁止游客和动物拍照”进行议论，内容包括: （1）人们在参观动物园时为什么喜欢和动物拍照；（2）假如你处在那些动物的处境，你会有什么反应；（3）你认为是否应该禁止游客和动物拍照。 写作要求1. 在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引

5、用原文中的句子；2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。 评分标准概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。2009年普通高考广东卷英语试题参考答案（A卷）读写任务Koalas in wildlife parks cant fall asleep because tourists keep disturbing them. The government is thinking to make the tourists behavior illegal to protect the animals.When people are visiting wildlife parks, they like

6、 to take photographs with animals. Reasons for this are varied. Some people may think taking photos with animals are funny in contrast with taking photos with other persons. Others may think that it will be an interesting experience to take photos with animals during their visit.If I were an animal

7、in the wildlife park, I would feel annoyed when people keep photographing with me. My life would be greatly influenced and I wont feel happy at all! I think I should have some private space and time to relax myself.However, I dont agree if it is announced illegal to take photos with animals. Tourist

8、s pay for tickets to visit the wildlife part and it will be a pity for them if they cant have a photo with an animal. Perhaps wildlife parks can set some special time, during this time, tourists can take photos with animals. It can both satisfy tourists and protect the animals.本文得分24分。得分点：总体上说这是一篇达到

9、较高评分档次的作文。1.第二段Reasons for this are varied. 这句表达恰到好处，即简明，又起到了上下文的组织衔接作用，接下来some, others则与之有效呼应，使得段落结构井然。2.in contrast with (也作in contrast to)使用准确，道出了游客的行为动因。3.I think I should have some private space and time to relax myself. 这句话很精彩，它以动物之口委婉道出，不仅述说了动物们该有的权利，同时也是在间接对游客们行为进行谴责。4.最后的观点以However引出，“Howev

10、er, I dont agree if it is announced illegal to take photos with animals.”虽则游客行为影响了动物，但政府除了一纸禁令之外就别无他法了吗？游客的游兴也不能不照顾到，对吧？协调好时间，可两全其美也。作者观点明确，阐述清楚。失分点：1.概括部分太简略，省去了一些必要的信息。比如没有讲清楚游客的具体什么行为干扰了考拉熊的睡眠，读者读来就会糊里糊涂。2.funny疑为fun之误，fun意为enjoyable and amusing，而funny意为causing laughter or amusement；strange; pecu

11、liar。观此语境，作者想表达的应为fun。3.influence和affect汉语都解释为“影响”，实际它们的意义是有不同的，influence意为to have an effect on the character or behavior of someone or something；affect表示have an effect on or make a difference to someone or something；作者这里要表达的“影响了动物们的生活”显然要用后者,表示造成了动物们作息的改变。4.最后一段中Perhaps wildlife park can set some s

12、pecial time, during this time, tourists can take photos with animals.是一个run-on sentence (a sentence that has two main clauses without connecting words or correct punctuation)，可以在during this time前加上连词and予以纠正。启示与提升：1. 写作中准确的选词，恰当的用词是保证文章质量的重要因素。这就需要同学们在平时的学习中重视积累，特别是那些看似熟悉、已经懂得其汉语对应表达的课标基础词汇，要多从课本里出现的

13、上下文语境中去洞察它们的真正含义，领悟其搭配习惯，达到熟练掌握的程度才能在需要时运用自如。2. 概括和话题表述部分之间要有自然的衔接，就必须保证概括部分有恰当的信息量，必要内容不可随意省略。读写任务20-24分档作文评点综述梁厚富本分数段的作文各有其得失，但总的概括起来，有如下成功之处：1. 按照题目要求较好地完成题目规定的任务。不跑题，没有偏离主题的废话。2. 概括部分角度好，有读者意识，有全文的篇章意识。没有概括归概括，评述归评述两相分离的现象。3内容选择紧扣主题，涵盖题目所列要点。4. 观点明确，有理有据。分析合乎逻辑，段落过渡自然，篇章流畅。4. 句式表达丰富多变，词汇选择准确到位，语

14、言表达干净利落，无意义的套话较少。5. 较好地控制了字数。而失当之处则有：1. 没有读者意识，由于遗漏必要信息，首段显得突兀。2. 行文之中的前后指代问题。3. 词语使用问题主要在对一些词的习惯搭配和句型结构记得不准确，使用起来似是而非。4. 汉语式表达5. 叙述逻辑问题，段落间的过渡问题6. 对阅读文章理解不够准确7. 拼写和词形问题。8. 字数超出太多。提升要点：作文水平与这个档次相当的同学要进一步提高自己的作文得分，必须更加精益求精，不放过每一个细微的地方。1. 备考期间要通过广泛阅读积累词语和表达句式，并提高自己的语言感觉。在词汇学习中以搭配、词组和惯用表达句式为单位进行学习和记忆。2. 写作要有读者意识，目的意识。在平时练习时重视审题，特别要考虑读者和写作目的，就能够恰当选材，合理取舍，概括精准到位。心中有读者，知道为什么而写，就能够选项合适的表达形式和语气。