第8讲开放作文的写作练习

1、网络课程 内部讲义开放作文的写作练习教 师：宋焕然爱护环境，从我做起，提倡使用“名师” 资料室 免费资料任你开放作文 3开放作文的写作练习1、开放作文的基本篇章结构篇章结构:描图：What can you see?What is he / are theyng? (What do they represent?)议图：How do you understand thcture?What does the writer want tol us by giving us thcture?圆图：Whatcan you draw from thcture?2、学生在开放作文中出现的主要问题（1）审题：

2、看不懂图，造成立意错误；（2）写作技巧：*只有描图，没有议论；或是只有议论，没有描图。描图和议论脱节。议论时表述不清，逻辑。（3）语言基本功：* 语言无法支持意思表达* 时态、单词拼写错误多3、动手写- 描图：（1）全面 （2）生动 （3）简洁（4）为服务常用句型：What anFrom theresting /funny picture!cture I can see a who / which isng As can be seenhcture,A whi. Obviously,A stands for who whirepresents those who 第 1 页 址：（9：0021

3、：00 everyday）“名师” 答疑室随时随地提问互动Writing by yourself:123 第 2 页 址：（9：0021：00 everyday）“名师” 资料室 免费资料任你4（开放作文 2的Picture 2）5（开放作文 2的Picture 5）- 议图+ 圆图：（可分两段，也可不分）描写和议论要一致，不能脱节；议论要顺一个思路展开（表明一个观点），观点一定要明确；方法：A、解释或引申画面+ 得出结论（参 2008、2009、2010 高考范文）B、开门见山点名观点+分析+升华Example （开放作文的Picture 2）Ay need “a pair of sciss

4、ors” to make sureost cases, we definied and well-educatedt young peopleewell-bes. However, not all people can fithe same pattern perfectly. If wetreat them inay, many talented people will be destroyed when they are young.Only by leaving room for different kinds of people, can we build a society of d

5、iversity.Our students need more wiser gardeners!Biour is totally wrong. As is known to all, everyone has his own speI think the gardeners belcharacter and ability, whiakes them stand out from others. Ignoring this, many teachers want theirstudents to be the same. No doubt, this will grey damage stud

6、ents spel talents.Every student is a different individual. Teachers should give them enough room sodevelop their abilities to the fullest.t they can 第 3 页 址：（9：0021：00 everyday）“名师” 答疑室 随时随地提问互动常用句型：Th申图画cture conveys us an important message+ why he is wrong/ right)（t 一句话点名）. Just as is shownhcture,

7、(引Thcture reminds me of whappens in our daily life. We doe some people who (联系实际举例+分析 why they are wrong/ right)I think the writer is trying to criticize those who They are alwaysng (同上)Soy opinion, Onlyhis way / byng this can we , just like hcture.点名常用句型：- We should do/ We shouldnt do- Its importan

8、t/ nesary for us to do- Its wrong of us to do- We should ketindt sible main ideas：1、应该保持 与 之间的平衡 （ keep a good balance betn .）2、应该重视（环保）/爱护环境、动物 （pay attention to environmental protection）3、应该学会同别人合作/ 要有团队（cooperate with ;e a team work spirit）4、应该尊重他人5、学会适应环境（learn to adjust olf to the .）6、面对和绝不应该放弃

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10、12、不能总依靠父母、老师，要学会独立处理问题 （rely on sb.deal withby ourselves/independently）13、要有乐观的生活态度 ( hold an optimistic attitude towards life)14、要自信 （be confident in ）15、要学会发扬自己的长处 （make full use of ones own advantage）16、要学会和来自不同文化、家庭 的人交流 （ learn how to communicatewith people fromdifferent .）17、要努力工作/空谈 （ refuse

11、 empty talks）学习，18、别人的意见、建议 （learn from listen to/ accept ）要向他人学习、Add More by Yourself 第 5 页 址：（9：0021：00 everyday）“名师” 答疑室随时随地提问互动Writing by yourselfPicture 2Picture 3Picture 5 第 6 页 址：（9：0021：00 everyday）“名师” 资料室 免费资料任你参考描图1What a meaningful picture! There are two bowlshcture. One is full of water

12、 while the otherholds only a little water. However, they are equally.2The rain is pouring down, but the old man is still watering his garden wi What a stuman!3n umbrella in his hand.hcture, a giraffe is trying his best to reach for the leaves high uphe tall tree. At the same time,however, there are

13、also many lower trees with green leaves around him, but he chooses to ignore them. Whata stugiraffe!4big pair of scissors he is cutting the plants, hohcture we can see a gardener. Wito maketheme an equal height. I think the gardener isrfect example of some teachers while the plant standsfor us stude

14、nts.5cture, a big tree is broken by the strong wind, while at the same time the smallAs can be seenhgrass is still standing bravely against the wind.议图+圆图2The rain is pouring down, but the old man is still watering his garden win umbrella in his hand.What a stuman!I think the pa er is trying to crit

15、icize those who can not change his ideas according to the changing situations. Of course, nobody in our real life will water flowers in a heavy rain. But, looking around, we can find many people who make similar mistakes. They are not clever enough to use the rightway in a different situation. No do

16、ubt, most of the time theyll end up wiRight ways vary according to situations.3 Afailure.hcture, a giraffe is trying his best to reach for the leaves high uphe tall tree. At the same time,however, there are also many lower trees with green leaves around him, but he chooses to ignore them. Whata stug

17、iraffe!Obviously, the writer is criticizing those who cannot judge the surroundings correctly, but waste alot of time and energy on the goals he can not reach. This reminds me of whappens in our life andstudy. We often find the people who are always setting goals wicomplete failure.So,y opinion, the

18、 best way to get what you want is totheir ability. Of course, they will end upe a goal within your reach and do 第 7 页 址：（9：0021：00 everyday）“名师” 答疑室 随时随地提问互动something for it today.3 Bhcture, a young giraffe is making a great effort to reach for the leaves high up in a gry and desperate ，for its swea

19、ting all over. You may say the animal is stuAs can be seentall tree. It looks reallybecause there are so many lowers trees around him from which he can easily get what he wants. But myis just the opite.Of course, its easy for the giraffe to follow others to get enough food from the lower trees. But hechooses to do thingshis ability. With every move, his neck will get longer and longer. No doubt, oneday he will be sucsful. We cwhich can survivehis world.so imaginet when hard time comes, he ire one of the few animalsAre you able to try agai