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1、IELTS WritingNina酱酱 With the increasing globalization in business and trade, long-distance air transportation is often used to export types of fruit and vegetables to other countries where those plants cannot grow or are out of season. Some people think it is a positive development while others cons

2、ider this use of air transport unjustified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.Overall 5-5.5（因为不是专业考官，打分只给出可能区间）（因为不是专业考官，打分只给出可能区间）TASK ACHIEVEMENT 5-5.5观点堆砌，缺乏拓展。文段给出倾向性，但是论述缺乏倾观点堆砌，缺乏拓展。文段给出倾向性，但是论述缺乏倾向性。向性。COHERECE AND COHENSION 5太依赖简单句。逻辑连词单一切文段之间逻辑性缺乏。太依赖简单句。逻辑连词单一切文段之间逻辑性缺乏。LEXICAL

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5、不足。足。EXICAL RESOURCE 6词汇较单一，但是缺乏准确的词语。小错误较多。词汇较单一，但是缺乏准确的词语。小错误较多。GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY 5.5语法的语法的range还是不错的，但是错误比较多。对于一些语法的使用还是不错的，但是错误比较多。对于一些语法的使用还不熟悉。还不熟悉。 It sounds ridiculous that one can eat watermelons and mangoes while watching the snow-covered landscape before the international tra

6、de was opened up for the long-distance air transportation of fruit and vegetables. Although different opinion have been raised by people, my personal view is that this should be encouraged as long as it is needed. Some people believe that it is great development, which has been brought in a win-win

7、situation for both the exporting and importing countries. There is no doubt that people in the importing countries can enjoy wider range of fruits and vegetables that may not be available without air lines. In other words, it has helped to improve their wellbeing. In the mean time, the economy of th

8、e exporting countries could be developed due to the increased amount of trades. This can be witnessed in countries in south-east Asia like Thailand and Vietnam where the trade surplus from tropical fruit is the important revenue. However, there are still some voices from other people who regrade thi

9、s long-distance trade as a social hazard. For ordinary citizens, most of the imported food are too expensive and may pose a threat to their own business since the exotic foods bring competitions to the local market, making it difficult to gain profits especially in this global economic downturn. In my opinion, I believe that this should be encouraged because whether to import or export food is depended on the comparative advantages, the hi