写作技巧：我对自己习作的点评-写作技巧

1、写作技巧：我对自己习作的点评-写作技巧                我对自己习作的点评    我的习作，期待大家的点评。         ssue     "Colleges and universities should offer more course

2、s on popular music, film, advertising and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."     Essay     Few people, if asked, would deny that colleges and universities should offer

3、art and literature courses to students. Yet when it comes to whether other courses like popular music, film, advertising and television should make up a greater portion in the curriculum, there is hardly a consensus. I, however, hold the opinion that the classical classes should always be most impor

4、tant.     Before trapping myself into needless arguments, let me first make an analyis of what role our higher education plays in this modern society. Universities, different from the career training courses, are supposed to teach great values to people, especially young people,

5、so that these values will take roots in their minds and mode them into truely gentle and kind men and women. In a sense, what universities preach are "useless" knowledge, in the light of practical uses. Here, I by no means refer to the word "useless" in a negative way, rather, I

6、believe it is just the so- called useless knowledge that makes human beings true human beings. It teaches us to cherish kindness and tolerance to othes; to take care of all kind of people, be them our parents or strangers; to seek ultimate truth of the mystery of nature,and so on. In a word, arts an

7、d literature courses of the past aim to build men and women into liberal and kind persons.They are looing further than their own merits. They are possibly commercial leaders, policy makers, NGO founders; But most importantly, people trained in this way will keep all people's welfare in their min

8、ds rather than thier own.     On the contrary, career training only focuses on survival skills. People can turn out to be very efficient or handy after they have taken up these courses. Unfortunately, there is little hope that they can learn real values to be a man, not a manager

9、 or an engineer .     In the similar way, offering more courses on popular music, film, advertising and television will have the same effect. Admittedly, they are more relevant with our daily life and are prone to attract more attention from the mass, I still cast doubt on the &q

10、uot;relevant values". A true artists should not act by catering to his audience. He or she is destined to say what he or she wants to say, even if none will echo it. Time is their belief. They are working for Time and audience thousands of years later. Relevance of reality will extort the serio

11、usnes of their works to a large extent .     I do not look down upon practical entertainment. But I believe there are already plenty of popular music, funny films, attractive advertisments and soap series. They are produced more in a manufacturing way rather than a art-creating w

12、ay. Music and film are more and more taking on a look of products in this post-modern society, which reaveals a sharp contrast with what they used to be.     Colleges and universities should resume the responsibility to guard our classical values and the "useless" knowl

13、edge. While career training courses are accomplishing their aim of making attractive things, higher education should stick to their tough goal for they are the paradise for human's thoughts.     In summary, I strongly suggest college and universities remain classical arts and

14、 literature courses and leave those relevant with contemporary culture to other schools.     (553字)     我的点评和感想如下： 1。由于审题太匆忙，而且这个题目与我喜欢的话题比较相近，我竟然偏题了。把arts and literature of the past理解成了以前的大学生所学的art and literature，也就是古典 艺术和文学。所以我文中出现的都是classical云云。还好这样的理解，也勉强说

15、得通。所以 不算太偏题。但是很明显，我和范文的立意走的是不同的路。范文强调的是古代的知识和现 代的知识对现代人的影响，而我强调的是，大学应该保留“无用的知识”以维系人类之所以 为人的尊严，这是大学和一般的职业教育区别所在。     2。范文比较balanced,既说现当代的好，也说以前的好，最后还总结学生既应学习现代的， 也应该学习古代的。而我的作文里，虽然也提到两方面，但是对古代的情有独钟，花了很多 笔墨。另外，我还提到了职业教育。不知道这样是不是扯得太远。相比之下，我的倾向性很 强。（当然，反对世俗的文化教育，是我一贯的态度。）  

16、0;  3。在旁征博引方面，我显然逊色多了。其实我今天写的太急，忘了应该举例（我一碰到喜欢 的话题就滔滔不绝的说理，只有写不出大道理时才会想起举例子。其实这样真是扬短避长， 因为毕竟我们要用英文说理，并不是很得心应手的）。但是范文的例子，虽然我可以为之击 掌，却觉得用不上。即使那些例子我都知道，也不知道相应的英文怎么说。尤其是人名地 名。所以我觉得这方面嘉文博译有些疏忽了。他光顾着把文章写的漂亮，忘了对普通学生的 借鉴性。     4。我觉得我在句式变化方面做的还好，但是动词的生动性显然不如范文，这也是我要努力的 地方。     我暂时想到的就这么多，很希望各位给我一点意见，多多批评指正！