高考英语书面表达分析-ppt课件

1、2019年高考英语书面年高考英语书面表达阅卷分析表达阅卷分析2019年与年与2019年高考书面表达阅卷情况比较年高考书面表达阅卷情况比较 一样点一样点不同点不同点20192019年平均分为年平均分为11.56 11.56 3535分满分满20192019年平均分为年平均分为11.46 11.46 3535分满分满平均平均分低分低评分评分规范规范一致一致20192019年、年、20192019年评分规范均为：年评分规范均为： 1. 1.以要点内容定档次。以要点内容定档次。 2. 2.以言语质量定分数。以言语质量定分数。 20192019年可看上下文决议能否缺要点，年可看上下文决议能否缺要点，20

2、192019年只看几个关键词没有就视为缺要点。年只看几个关键词没有就视为缺要点。2.20192.2019年开放作文三判规定为年开放作文三判规定为2 2分以上，分以上， 2019 2019年开放作文三判规定为年开放作文三判规定为3 3分以上。分以上。情情 景景 作作 文文 假设他是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一假设他是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为校刊英语园地写一篇题为篇题为 “Our Spring Outing 的英文稿件。请根据以下四幅图的先的英文稿件。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，表达上周他们班从预备春游到春游终了的完好过程。后顺序，表达上周他们班从预备春游到春游终了的完好过

3、程。 留意：词数不少于留意：词数不少于60。 提示词：游乐园提示词：游乐园 amusement park 渣滓箱渣滓箱 bin 情 景 作 文情 景 作 文给分档次给分档次n一档文：一档文： 18-20分分n二档文：二档文： 15-17分分n三档文：三档文： 12-14分分n四档文：四档文： 6-11分分n五档文：五档文： 1-5 分分n六档文：六档文： 0 分分n注：情景作文字数少于注：情景作文字数少于60, n 扣分。扣分。情 景 作 文情 景 作 文内容要点及细节内容要点及细节n要点：讨论要点：讨论n细节：细节：n去游乐去游乐园园n划船划船n爬山爬山n决议去决议去爬山爬山情 景 作 文情

4、 景 作 文内容要点及细节内容要点及细节n2. 要点：爬山要点：爬山n细节：细节：n携带吃、喝携带吃、喝n天气天气 n风景风景n进展竞赛进展竞赛-n看谁先到山顶看谁先到山顶情 景 作 文情 景 作 文内容要点及细节内容要点及细节n3.要点：要点： 捡拾渣滓捡拾渣滓可捡拾本人的也可可捡拾本人的也可捡拾他人的捡拾他人的n细节：细节：n一路走，一路捡，一路走，一路捡，要有对局面的描写要有对局面的描写情 景 作 文情 景 作 文内容要点及细节内容要点及细节n4. 要点：投放渣滓要点：投放渣滓n细节：细节：n渣滓分类：可渣滓分类：可回收回收n和不可回收和不可回收情 景 作 文情 景 作 文评卷给分的细节

5、要求评卷给分的细节要求n1. 阅卷中不要经过找单词去找要点， 一定要从上下文来找要点。n2. 阅卷重点放在用完好、准确的句子去表达思想上，满篇没有正确句n 子，一样打0分。n3. 一切要点齐全的进三档12分以上，要保证要点和细节相互支撑。n4. 少一个细节的进三档上线14分，可以视其言语情况+1或-1分n 阐明该学生最高可得15分，最低可得13分。n5. 少两个细节进三档下线12分，可以视其言语情况+1或-1分阐明该n 学生最高可得13分，最低得11分。n6. 行文中图的先后顺序有误或人称错误的直接进四档6-11分。n7. 文章不能以投放渣滓作为终了，要加上一个合情合理的结尾，否那么要n 在所

6、得分数中扣-1分。n8. 一档或二档文确实定要依文章的上下文衔接、紧凑，以及言语质量来决n 定。n9. 要点和细节可出如今一句话中。n10. 写落款、标题或称谓的都忽略不计，按照正常情况给分。情 景 作 文情 景 作 文n Last week our Class1 Senior 3 in Red Star High school had an unusual spring outing.n The day before we left, our classmates had a heated discussion about the destination of the outing. Som

7、e students suggested the amusement park, while others preferred boating and mountain climbing. When it came to practice, we were having a good time climbing at last. However, at the top of the mountain, we were angry rather than shocked to find out that loads of rubbish were discovered everywhere .

8、Meanwhile, it came to our mind that we had to clean this mess up. Thus, after recycling the rubbish in different bins, we were all very cheerful that we not only returned the beauty back to the mountain, but also had a wonderful spring outing.漏掉了第二幅图这个要点，只能进四档，但其言漏掉了第二幅图这个要点，只能进四档，但其言语较好故语较好故+1+1分，总

9、分为分，总分为1212。情 景 作 文情 景 作 文nLast week, the students in my class decided to go out for a spring outing. Some of us wanted to go to the amusement park. Some wanted to go boating and some wanted to climb the mountain. Finally we decided to climb the mountain. nI was a shiny day. All of us were happy. Bu

10、t when we reached the top of the mountain. We found that rubbish everywhere! We picked the rubbish and threw them into the dustbin. n I think, we shouldnt threw the rubbish everywhere and we should do our best to protect the environment. The more we do, the more beautiful the earth will be!情 景 作 文情

11、景 作 文第二幅图少要点第二幅图少要点, , 第四图少细节第四图少细节, ,言语表述缺言语表述缺乏准确性和逻辑性，影响了对所写内容的了乏准确性和逻辑性，影响了对所写内容的了解。解。9 9分分nLast week our class organized a spring outing. To make this memorable activity more wonderful, we discussed the destination carefully and finally decided to go mountain-climbing instead of other choices l

12、ike playing in an amusement park and going boating. nWith high spirits, we started our spring outing on a fine day. Flowers presented us with their sweetest smiles and we were soaked up in the warm sunshine. However, we were shocked when we reached the top of the mountain. Wasted bottles and used pa

13、ckages were thrown everywhere which totally ruined the beauty of the nature. Feeling a great pity for the tourists, we picked up the rubbish and carefully divided them into two groups：recycle ones and the non-recycle ones. After that, we put the rubbish into the bin differently. nWe call on awarenes

14、s on protecting our environment which is of great importance. Though clearing up the rubbish was a tough task, our hearts were filled with joy and we will remember this outing for ever.内容要点齐全，描画语句丰富，上下文衔接，有效地运用了语句间的链接成分，只需个别用词错误，表达了较强的言语运用才干。19分情 景 作 文情 景 作 文n Last week, there was a heated discussio

15、n on where to go for our spring outing. Some students wanted to go to amusement park, some considered to go boating and others gave their ideas for climbing. Eventually, we decided to take a climb.n The next day, all of us prepared well. With our enjoyment, each of us climbed the mountain full of en

16、ergy. However, when we got to the top of the mountain, what covered our eyes first was the mass of rubbish. It was really a pity that the rubbish destroyed a beautiful scenery. At last, we made up our mind to pick up the rubbish. After a while, with everyones effort, the rubbish was cleared off imme

17、diately and we put them into the recycled and unrecycled bins.n In my eyes, this spring outing not only gave us lots of pleasure, but also gave us a meaningful lesson. Only to protect our environment, can we get a beautiful society. Therefore, I hope everyone can join us to make our home clean and t

18、idy.情 景 作 文情 景 作 文覆盖了一切内容要点覆盖了一切内容要点 ，语法和用词可以满足，语法和用词可以满足义务要求，篇章较为衔接，有少许言语错误。义务要求，篇章较为衔接，有少许言语错误。1616分分nLast week, our class had a spring outing, which the whole class think was quite meaningful.n When getting prepared for the activity, we had a heated discussion about where to go . Opinions divided

19、 among the students. Some students suggested we go to the amusement park to get relaxed, while others recommended that we go boating. Finally, most of the students agreed to go hiking. On a sunny day, my class gathered at the foot of the mountain, and everyone looked so exited. While hiking in the m

20、ountain, we all had a happy smile. But when reaching the top of the mountain, we are so surprised to find that lots of rubbish was left there. Then we decided to collect them with the bags we bought. Everyone sport no effort to do a good job. At last, when we got down the mountain, we threw all the

21、rubbish into the proper bins. n How meaningful was our spring outing!情 景 作 文情 景 作 文覆盖了一切的内容要点， 但有个别细节缺失，全文行文流畅，内容衔接，有少许错误。14分 In the last week, teacher tell us “we will be go to spring amusement we were very happy students thinks we will go to park. It has mouter, hill, river, boat and so on. We wer

22、e asked on noon. The last is come on! Tomorrow, teacher and us gone to amusement park, we were played very happy we were gone there that we were went to go to! Monter. Hill, river, boat. In the noon, we were have food, we all kinds of food, We are very like then. In the afternoon. We will go out com

23、e back we were out had food go to the bin. We were very happy come back.0分分情 景 作 文情 景 作 文Possible version Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with where to go for our spring outing. We came up

24、 with several choices, such as going boating, climbing a several choices, such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally we mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally we decided to go mountain climbing.decided to go mountain climbing. The next day, we set

25、off early in the morning, while The next day, we set off early in the morning, while climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view. However, when we reached the and a beautiful view. However, when we reached the top, we w

26、ere shocked to see litter here and there, such top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and bananas peels. Then we started to pick up as bottles and bananas peels. Then we started to pick up the litter. Afterwards, we put the rubbish into the the litter. Afterwards, we put

27、the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively. We were tired but happy. We were tired but happy.情景作文出现的主要问题情景作文出现的主要问题n1. 1.审题不仔细，漏掉要点。审题不仔细，漏掉要点。n2.2.缺乏细节观念，不能使文章衔接严密。缺乏细节观念，不能使文章衔接严密。n3.3.人称和时态观念差，文章直接降档。人称和时态观念

28、差，文章直接降档。n4.4.言语根本功差，破绽百出。言语根本功差，破绽百出。n5.5.缺乏交际观念，很难出色地完成写作义务。缺乏交际观念，很难出色地完成写作义务。情 景 作 文情 景 作 文开开 放放 作作 文文n请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。n In an English speech competition, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to the judges how you understand it.开放作文开放作文给分规范给分规范n一档文

29、：一档文：13-15分分n二档文：二档文： 9-12分分n三档文：三档文： 4-8分分 n四档文：四档文： 1-3分分 n五档文：五档文： 0分分 n注：开放作文字数少于注：开放作文字数少于50，扣，扣1分。分。开放作文开放作文评卷给分的细节要求评卷给分的细节要求n1. 必需有一段描写看到什么：圆规、铅笔，要留意到表情。必需有一段描写看到什么：圆规、铅笔，要留意到表情。 n 对图片的描写要有细节，看到他的描写，可以把图片浮现出对图片的描写要有细节，看到他的描写，可以把图片浮现出n 来，同时要记住图片的描写一定要为观念效力，使二者严密结来，同时要记住图片的描写一定要为观念效力，使二者严密结n 合

30、在一同。这点很重要，开放作文重点调查学生的逻辑性。合在一同。这点很重要，开放作文重点调查学生的逻辑性。n2. 了解必需建立在描写的根底上，必需把两个方面都说到，要体了解必需建立在描写的根底上，必需把两个方面都说到，要体n 现两者的关系由于图中画了两个元素：圆规和铅笔。现两者的关系由于图中画了两个元素：圆规和铅笔。n3. 只需议论为第三档，只说铅笔或圆规为第三档只需议论为第三档，只说铅笔或圆规为第三档4-8分，只分，只n 有描画最高得有描画最高得5分。分。n4. 描画和议论部分没有很好的结合只能进三档。视其言语可给描画和议论部分没有很好的结合只能进三档。视其言语可给n 最高分最高分8分。分。n5

31、. 进入一档文的条件是，不仅有对铅笔和圆规的正确了解和交进入一档文的条件是，不仅有对铅笔和圆规的正确了解和交n 代，还要有升华，如：可以联络到做人就更好了。代，还要有升华，如：可以联络到做人就更好了。n6. 看其观念能否可以自圆其说，言语要可以跟上本人的逻辑。看其观念能否可以自圆其说，言语要可以跟上本人的逻辑。n7. 圆规可以有变通的表达。写成什么样都能接受，看文章质量圆规可以有变通的表达。写成什么样都能接受，看文章质量n 打分打分开放作文开放作文nAs we can see from the picture, a pencil is running to draw a straight li

32、ne, while the other stationary is drawing a circle easily. nThe pencil is trying its best to do it with its soul and heart. The other one is very proud of itself, though its skill is really good. nEvery one has their own advantages and disadvantages. We should have confidence in ourselves and make o

33、ur effort to do everything. If so, I believe everyone can be successful. Peoples perseverence and effort will count. nAt the same time, everyone have to be clear to know youll never be the best for you can be better respecting everyone and believing in yourself, the bright future is around the corne

34、r. 开放作文开放作文 对图片有根本描画，且描画与下文的讨论有一定相关对图片有根本描画，且描画与下文的讨论有一定相关性，但论述中表达不够到位，逻辑联络交代得不够清楚。性，但论述中表达不够到位，逻辑联络交代得不够清楚。第二段的阐明与第三段的描写没有必要的联络，描写部第二段的阐明与第三段的描写没有必要的联络，描写部分说的是勤劳努力，第三段却说各有各的优点。逻辑混乱，分说的是勤劳努力，第三段却说各有各的优点。逻辑混乱，观念不明。故定为观念不明。故定为9 9分。分。nAs is shown from the picture, there are two tools which we often use

35、 them. one is used to draw circles and the other one is used to draw everything. The one which is used to draw circles is proud of its perfect circles. And the other one is making its great effort to draw lines. nIn my opinion, the one draws circles like someone who is always satisfied with their th

36、ings and the other one likes someone who never gives up and makes his effort to reach better. nI have learned a lot from the picture that we should make our effort to do everything although we have got a little mark in some areas. Dont be addicted to the great past. 开放作文开放作文对图片有根本清楚地描写，与下文的讨论之间有对图片有

37、根本清楚地描写，与下文的讨论之间有一定联络，但讨论部分言语表达不够清楚，且过一定联络，但讨论部分言语表达不够清楚，且过于简单。于简单。8分分 描画较为详尽，但描画较为详尽，但议论过于简单，不能表议论过于简单，不能表达清楚本人的想法。达清楚本人的想法。nWhat an interesting picture! In the picture, we can see that a pencil keep drawing hard and a circler only draws a circle but is proud of itself. nWe can learn a lot form the

38、 picture. I think we should do more, like the saying goes. “No pains, no gains. Only we do things can we get what we want. And at the same time, wed better not think highly of ourselves. Thats a good way for us on not only our study and work, but also our lives. 开放作文开放作文描画过于简单，无法对下文起到充分的铺垫，描画过于简单，无法

39、对下文起到充分的铺垫， 使使得文章看起来有些空穴来风。得文章看起来有些空穴来风。6 6分分 描画过于简单，无描画过于简单，无法对下文起到充分的铺法对下文起到充分的铺垫作用。垫作用。nAs can be seen from the picture, the modern math tool is drawing the circle easily and the traditonal pencil is running to draw the lines with sweat falling from its face. nI think this picture reflects an unu

40、sual social phenomenon that people with modern knowledge can solve problems in a more effective way and are more welcomed by the companies. I think it attempts to tell us that possessing and stubburn method can not keep the pace of the society. nAs far as Im concrened, in order to meet the need of s

41、ociety, we must learn knowledge as much as we can from now on. Only in this way, can we be the leader of the society. 图片描写根本清楚，论述部分与描写部分之间没图片描写根本清楚，论述部分与描写部分之间没有令人服气的有机逻辑联络，了解比较牵强，但有令人服气的有机逻辑联络，了解比较牵强，但思索到言语质量还可以，因此给出第三档中的高思索到言语质量还可以，因此给出第三档中的高分数。分数。8分分开放作文开放作文图画的描写与下文了解图画的描写与下文了解很牵强。很牵强。nAs we can

42、see in the vivid picture, one is drawing a cirle happily, meanwhile, the other is drawing lines and tries its best. nIn my opinion, they stands for the two kinds of people in our contemperoy society, one stands for the persons who always do little and somethings and are satisfied with what they have

43、 done. The other one stands for the persons who try their best and make more progress. nNo doubt, well think highly of the second kind of persons. Because its them that make ourlifes were convenient and easier and make the society developing. While the first kind of persons, I think are too selfish.

44、nThis is my opinion about the picture. 开放作文开放作文言语逻辑不够好，描写与议论没有多大的逻辑性，言语逻辑不够好，描写与议论没有多大的逻辑性，第三段与上下文无太大联络，逻辑性不强，交代第三段与上下文无太大联络，逻辑性不强，交代的不太清楚，虽然言语流畅，但没有一个平台来的不太清楚，虽然言语流畅，但没有一个平台来支持前面的图。支持前面的图。8分分图画的描写与议论部分图画的描写与议论部分未能有机地结合。未能有机地结合。nIn the picture, we can see a cartoon pencil is running with great effor

45、t to draw a square. While a tool used in drawing circles is doing his job in an easy way, feeling quite proud and looking down upon the “silly little pencil. nThis is quite a common scene in the society. Some people are talented and can learn a subject in an easy and perfect way. They can easily get

46、 proud and look down upon those who have to make great efforts to do it. In their opinion, those people are too silly to achieve goals. nHowever, these “talented and proud people dont understand that even though they can do well in one subject, there are still many jobs, they dont know how to do, ju

47、st like the tool used in drawing circles, he can never draw a square that easily. nWhile those “silly people, though with great, can achieve their dreams in many subjects because of their self-awareness and perseverance. Just like the little pencil, who can draw various shapes. nSo dont be proud whe

48、n you can do something well. Be patient and work hard, youll achieve more goals, especially in studying. 开放作文开放作文 图片描画清楚，议论部分与描画部分有机自然图片描画清楚，议论部分与描画部分有机自然地结合，且论述比较充分言语流畅，无严重影响地结合，且论述比较充分言语流畅，无严重影响表达意思的错句。表达意思的错句。13分分nAs we can see in the picture, there are two familiar materials which we often use in our daily life. The one is used to draw circles, the other can makes lines. The one making effort to finish its wor