评分与范文解析

1、Lecturer: Roy Lecturer: Roy 2.1 2.1 思路：有效，切题思路：有效，切题 Effective addresses the topic and task简化切题化2.1 2.1 思路：有效，切题思路：有效，切题Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games and sports teach people lessons about life. 同意 理由：多做运动会让人们保持健康Games and sports show people that life is always in motio

2、n. Increasing number of people could understand the value of being healthy.2.1 2.1 思路：有效，切题思路：有效，切题Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games and sports teach people lessons about life.同意理由：人们通过运动会结交更多朋友People can learn how to cooperate in playing games and sports. Teamwork spirit

3、is highly regarded as one of the most important personalities.2.1 2.1 思路：有效，切题思路：有效，切题Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to understand truly world event, some people think news from newspaper is better than television news. 不同意 报纸和电视新闻的区别：123Compared to news from newspap

4、er, television news provides audiences more images and videos, where social events are where social events are presented to them in a relatively objective presented to them in a relatively objective way.way.2.2 2.2 结构结构：固定，充分：固定，充分 Is well organized and developed, using clearly appropriate explanati

5、ons, exemplifications, and/or details.2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分 文章理由需要保持平行 e.g. the advantages of the Internet 理由段内需要包括解释和例子 e.g. the impacts of human activitiesOne of the main effects of human activity on an area is water pollution. The untreated factory waste water is detrimental to our health and

6、surrounding environment. According to an influential report, some chemical factories dump waste water which contains various toxins into rivers, and two convincing reasons can be offered. One reason is that wastewater disposal costs much, and another root cause is that majority of merchants are lack

7、 of the awareness of significance of environmental protection. When this waste is dumped into rivers, the water downstream becomes undrinkable and usable for agriculture, and also kills plant and animal life in the rivers.2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分 e.g. water pollution 段落分析(1) water pollution(2) facto

8、ry waste water(3) various toxins(4) a. expensive waste disposal b. no awareness of environmental protection2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分 e.g. for the young, what is the advantage of living in a big city? more job opportunities a better economic conditions a brilliant career future more companies and corp

9、orations 3 31 14 42 2Another damaging effect of human activities is air pollution. Such pollution may pose a threat to crops and ordinary people. One compelling example is the increase in the number of cars. Due to the quickening pace of our daily lives, the cars which render our lives convenience a

10、nd enhance our work efficiency become popular. The vehicles burn fossil fuels and pour polluting chemical waste into the air. This makes the air much less healthy to breathe. The air-borne pollution also falls back to the earth in the form of acid rain, which is detrimental to plant life and human b

11、uildings.2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分如果华佗再世 崇洋都被医治外邦来学汉字 访我民族医师马钱子 决明子 苍耳子 还有莲子黄药子 苦豆子 川楝子 我要面子用我的方式 改写一部历史没什么别的事 跟着我念几个字山药当归枸杞 go 山药当归枸杞 go看我抓一把中药 服下一帖骄傲- 本草纲目Another serious long-term effect of humans behaviors is global warming. Such a phenomenon exerts a detrimental influence on the lives of people

12、living at the seaside. A recent survey which conducted by a famous international organization reveals a disturbing rise in the average temperature of the earth caused by the rise of greenhouse gases, air pollutants created by burning fossil fuels, in the atmosphere. Scientists believe that if humans

13、 continue to increase the amount of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere, the temperature of the earth will continue to rise. Eventually, this could melt the polar ice caps and cause devastating coastal flooding all over the world. Major cities like Hongkong, Shanghai, and Dalian might be totally dest

14、royed.2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分 e.g. what is the advantages of protecting old and historic buildings?educational resource culture the Forbidden City the Great Wall Yuelu Academy2.2 2.2 结构：固定，充分结构：固定，充分 文章理由需要保持平行 理由段内需要包括解释和例子2.3 2.3 论证论证：一致，渐进：一致，渐进 Displays unity, progression, and coherenceOne of l

15、iving independently is that people can fully develop their creative potential. When people are forced to different situations, they can surprise us with outstanding abilities and values that otherwise remained hidden. A good example are blind people, these persons show a remarkable ability for art a

16、nd music. In a similar way, their parents are absent or too away for help, individuals manage to survive and be successful.Moreover, it is more efficient to communicate to use the telephone or voice-messaging than mails. Time is always precious for us, especially when many assignments come. As a res

17、ult, efficiency is vital for anyone to resolve problems. There is no doubt that using telephone or voice-messaging is more efficient, for it can deliver more information in a shorter time. Can you imagine how terrible it is when emergency happens but your cell phone has just powered off?2.4 2.4 语言：准

18、确，多样语言：准确，多样 Displays consistent facility in the use of language, demonstrating syntactic variety, appropriate word choice, and idiomaticity, though it may have minor lexical and grammatical errors2.4 2.4 语言：准确，多样语言：准确，多样Widespread literacy is fundamental to both social and economical development of

19、 any society.economic: of or relating to economy or economics; based on the production, distribution and consumption of goods or serviceseconomical: operating with little waste or at a saving; marked by careful, efficient and prudent use of resourceseconomic2.4 2.4 语言：准确，多样语言：准确，多样The three main dea

20、d diseases in todays society, heart disease, cancer and stroke, can be largely prevented with lifestyle changes. deadly: aiming to kill or destroy; suggestive of death especially in dullness or lack of animationThe situation is becoming deadly serious.deadly2.4 2.4 语言：准确，多样语言：准确，多样The effect globali

21、zation has had on culture is immense and diversity.diverse.2.4 2.4 语言：准确，多样语言：准确，多样It is no possibility that in multi-culture society, people talk openly about their nationality.orThere is no possibility that in multi-culture society, people talk openly about their nationality.impossible2.4 2.4 语言：准

22、确，多样语言：准确，多样Watching television has become a way of life, therefore, its effects on viewers have drawn much more attention than ever before.therefore: for that reason; consequentlyWatching television has become a way of life, and hence its effects on viewers have drawn much more attention than ever before.; therefore, 2.4 2.4 语言：准确，多样语言：准确，多样A flexible timetable can make employees less likely to be stressful.stressed=stressed-out sbstressful: full of tending to ca