2021届高考英语一轮复习第三部分写作专题提升篇层级一审题准表达清第二讲准表达_把内容表达清楚学案新人教版

1、第二讲准表达把内容表达清楚写作中一旦出现较多错误，会导致语意不清、表达不明，阅卷老师潜意识中会认为该考生基本功较差、能力较弱，给阅卷老师留下不好的印象，作文有可能要比想象中的低一档。写作中考生常犯两类错误：一是惯性错误，就是考生在不经意间习惯性犯的错误，这类错误不但常犯而且还是阅卷老师比较敏感的错误，一旦出现这类错误，往往会被“放大”；另一类就是由于使用高级表达而导致的错误。(一)惯性错误要避免1动词类错误动词的种类有很多，从不同角度可分为实义动词、系动词、助动词和情态动词，也可分为谓语动词和非谓语动词等。(1)实义动词又可分为及物动词和不及物动词。写作中常出现的错误有：及物动词后加了介词；不

2、及物动词后少了介词。(2)系动词be在写作中非常活跃，但要用好be动词却不是一件容易的事。常见错误有：不及物动词用be动词构成了被动语态；该含有be动词的句子出现遗漏be动词的情况。(3)助动词和情态动词不能单独作谓语，写作中常见错误主要是倒装句中少用了助动词或情态动词。(4)谓语动词与非谓语动词的误用是考生最易出错的地方。需注意：谓语动词作谓语，包括时态、语态、主谓一致、虚拟语气；非谓语动词可作除谓语以外的其他成分。典例(2018年全国卷)你受学生会委托为校宣传栏“英语天地”写一则通知，请大家观看一部英文短片growing together，内容包括：1短片内容：学校的发展；2放映时间、地点

3、；3欢迎对短片提出意见。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_病文修改以下是一位考生的习作，其中有5处错误，请找出并修改。boys and girls，may i have your attention, please? recently, an outstanding movie will be show in our campus. welcome to join us and enjoy it! here is some relevant details about it.to begin with, the name of the movie is growing

4、 together, which is about the development of our beloved school. it is believed that the movie will be not only meaningful but also interesting. besides, please note that it will be shown in the library from 200 to 400 in the afternoon on june 9th. whats more, every one of you will welcome to take p

5、art in it, enjoying the movie, have a heated discussion afterwards and giving your own comments.hopefully, you will make it to our activity. i had the confidence that you will have a great time then.the students union第一段第二句中的show改为shown，一般将来时的被动语态为“will be过去分词”。第一段第四句中的is改为are, here be.句型中，be动词的单复数要

6、根据其后名词的单复数而定。第二段第四句中的welcome为形容词，前面需加系动词构成系表结构作谓语，故应在will后加be。第二段第四句中的have改为having，此处与enjoying和giving并列。第三段第二句中的had改为have，此处表示现在的状况，应用一般现在时。2并列连词与从句引导词类错误并列连词与从句引导词是考生容易出错的地方，下面主要介绍常见的一些错误类型。(1)考生易受汉语干扰导致状语从句中从属连词的重复使用。例如汉语中可以说“因为所以”和“虽然但是”，但在英语中用一个连词即可表示，用了though/although，就不能再用but；用了because，就不能再用so

7、，therefore等词。(2)写作中经常用同位语从句给文章增添色彩，但是引导词that的缺失却令这种色彩暗淡了不少。(3)表语从句的一个易错点是高级表达the reason why.was that.中that的误用，考生容易误用because。(4)非限制性定语从句中误用that在作文中经常会见到，用which表示人的状况也是屡见不鲜。典例(2017年全国卷)假定你是李华。你所在的校乒乓球队正在招收新队员。请给你的留学生朋友eric写封邮件邀请他加入，内容包括：1球队活动；2报名方式及截止日期。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_病文修改以下是一位考生的习作，其中有

8、5处错误，请找出并修改。dear eric，im writing to tell you the good news our schools table tennis team is looking for new members. since you are good at table tennis, so id like you to take this opportunity to join our school team. some details about the team are as follows.athletes from our school team have won

9、many gold medals of table tennis contests in recent years, of that we are very proud. guided by a professional coach team, and members of the team have regular training every friday afternoon from 330 pm. to 500 pm. when you feel like participating, you can send your information to pingpong. the dea

10、dline is july 20th.looking forward to your early reply.yours，li hua第一段第一句中的news后的句子为同位语从句，不能省略that，故news后加that。第一段第二句中的since引导状语从句，逗号后应为主句，so为多余的词，应去掉。第二段第一句中years后为非限制性定语从句，此处介词后的引导词应用which，故that改为which。第二段第二句是一个简单句，guided by a professional coach team为过去分词短语作状语，故and多余，应去掉。第二段第三句为条件状语从句，故引导词when改为if

11、。(二)高级表达中出现低级错误太遗憾在阅卷中，阅卷老师常为这样一类卷摇头叹息，无论是从要点的呈现、表达的优美还是衔接的顺畅等方面来看该类卷都近乎完美，应该给高分甚至满分，但偏偏有几处瑕疵给本应完美的习作徒添了些许不和谐的音符，甚至有点刺眼，从而影响了阅卷老师的好心情。阅卷老师为了稳妥起见，在阅卷中尽量避免争议卷的出现，会“惋惜”地扣掉一些分数。因“低级错误”而影响高级得分，岂不遗憾！典例(全国卷)假定你是李华，计划和同学去敬老院(nursing home)陪老人们过重阳节(the double ninth festival)。请给外教露西写封邮件，邀她一同前往，内容包括：1出发及返回时间；2活

12、动：包饺子、表演节目等。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_病文修改以下是一位考生的习作，其中有6处错误，请找出并修改。dear lucy，im writing to tell you that well go to the local nursing home next saturday for the double ninth festival, that is the day for us to show respect for the elderly. im wondering if or not you would like to go with us.as

13、you know it, warmth and care is elderly people need. so besides tasty dumplings and cakes, we decide to organize some wonderful singing and dancing programs for them, i believe it will make them happy. we should be back around 4 oclock in the afternoon.if you will be able to join us, please let us k

14、now and well wait for you at the school gate at 9 in the morning.looking forward to your reply.yours，li hua第一段第一句的非限制性定语从句，不能用that引导，故第二个that改为which。第一段第二句中的if or not为错误搭配，与or not连用只能用whether，故把if改成whether。第二段第一句中存在两处语法错误：as you know it中as引导定语从句且充当了从句的宾语，故it多余，应删除；elderly people need为表语从句，从句中缺少宾语，故应

15、在is后加上连接代词what，来引导该从句。第二段第二句缺少关联词，逗号不能连接两个句子，故应将i believe it改为which i believe, which引导非限制性定语从句，注意此处i believe为插入语。第三段第一句是条件状语从句，应用现在时代替将来时，故将if you will be改为if you are。即学即练下面两篇习作中都运用了一些高级句式，而且都出现了5处错误，请找出其中的错误并加以改正。a(2019届临川九校联考)假定你是李华，你的外国笔友peter打算七月来中国，特来信了解中国人的社交习俗。请你用英语给他回一封信，从以下几个方面作具体介绍：1见面时的问候

16、方式；2对赞美的回答方式；3接收礼物时的回应方式；4餐宴礼节。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3信的开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。dear peter，glad to hear from you and youre welcome to china in july._yours sincerely，li hua学生习作dear peter，glad to hear from you and youre welcome to china in july. im greatly willing to introduce some significant chines

17、e customs to you.firstly, we greet each other by say “hello” or asking such questions as “where are you going？”or “are you busy these days？” to express our care. secondly, when praising, we reply with “oh, no！” or “im overpraised.” to show good manners. additionally, when receiving a gift, we usuall

18、y say “its unnecessary.” as well as “thanks.” to show politeness and then put it away. finally, at dinner parties, we talk happy and drink to someones health or success to show that were warm.anyhow, different cultures, different customs. if you do like the romans do when in rome, youll enjoy more o

19、f your stay here.i hope whats mentioned above might be help and wish you a good journey.yours sincerely，li hua我来纠错第三句：saysaying第四句：praisingpraised第六句：happyhappily第八句：likeas第九句：helphelpfulb(2019届安徽省安庆市二模)假定你是李华，你的家乡将举行庆祝首个“中国农民丰收节(chinese farmers harvest festival)”活动，请你写封邮件，邀请你的新西兰朋友eric来参加，内容包括：1活动的时间和地点；2活动内容(民俗文化表演、美食品尝及观光活动等)。注意：1词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_学生习作dear eric，how is everything going？i am writing to invite you to participate in the celebrations of the first chinese farmers harvest f