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1、优秀作文评析（三）看图作文1看图写话 根据所给图示，以“Wang Leis Busy Day”为题，写一篇不少于50字的短文，内容必须符合图意，语意连贯，句式规范，字迹工整。（正文第一句已给出） Wang Leis Busy Day It was March 8th yesterday._ _ _ 【参考范文】 It was March 8th yesterday. It was Womens Day. Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother. He went shopping and bought much food. Then he c

2、leaned the room. He did his best to do some cooking. When his mother came back after work, she was very happy. Wang Lei was very tired, but he felt pleased. （58个词） 【名师点评】 先“看准题意”：题目是Wang Leis Busy Day。写作要围绕王雷一天中所忙碌的事情的顺序展开。描述昨天的事应该用过去时。从题意理解中即可“规范格式”：本文用记叙文格式去写。再“按点组句”： （1）3月8日为妇女节。It was Womens Day

3、. （2）王雷去商店购物。Wang Lei went shopping and bought much food. （3）王雷打扫卫生。He cleaned the room. （4）他烧饭。母亲回家很高兴。He did the cooking. When his mother came back, she was very happy. 完成组句后，“连句成段”，可加上句子间的衔接句子。如在（1）与（2）之间可加上Wang Lei wanted to do something for his mother.在最后可再谈王雷一天的感受：He was very tired, but he fel

4、t happy.把这些句子连成段后，最后“通篇润色”。 优秀作文评析（三）看图作文2【习作要求】看图组句 根据所给图画和提示词语，写出意思连贯、符合逻辑的四句话。每幅图只写一句话，所给提示词语必须都用上。（注意：只抄提示语不得分） 提示： （1）It was Tree Planting Day yesterday. （2）early, morning, I, go, in my old clothes. （3）we, help, each other, dig, hole, large enough, for, trees. （4）plant, some, along, school, pla

5、yground. （5）from now on, water, tree, often, possible. 优秀作文评析（三）看图作文3【习作要求】看图作文 根据图示，写一篇80词左右的短文。要求故事完整，句子通顺，内容与图片相符。 参考词汇：newspaper (报纸)，bird (鸟)，nature (自然) 【参考范文】 One day my uncle was reading a newspaper and learned that birds were our friends. We should get alone well with them. He looked at his

6、 nice bird in the cage, and decided to let it fly back homenature. He took the cage with the bird in it and went to a little hill near his house by bike. He went home with the empty cage. When he got back, he sat in a chair and had a rest. A moment later, to his surprise, he found the bird back in t

7、he cage. 【名师点评】 分析：该例四幅图画描述的是一位先生保护动物的故事，内容贴近考生的生活实际，有利于对考生进行保护生态平衡、保护地球环境的教育。内容要点是： （1）看报（Let Birds Fly）；（2）上山去放飞笼中鸟； （3）提着空笼返家； （4）惊奇地发现鸟儿重飞回笼。 通过观图、分析、判断，列出了要点，可写草稿，再进行润色，注意运用简单的、熟悉的句型结构，检查要点有无遗漏，注意拼写、词汇、语法及搭配上是否有误。 说明：看图作文是从直观入手，通过观察、分析、理解，运用联想，将图画语言转换成书面文字的写作过程。答题的思路和方法如下：首先，观察图画，弄清故事梗概。仔细观察每幅图画的内容，抓住图中的主要情节，把握关键的信息与联系，诸如人物、时间、地点、动作等。其次，明确信息，编拟提纲。经过认真的观察和分析，我们掌握了每幅图的主要信息。为了在表达中不漏要点，可为每幅图配上一个提纲性的句子，即用一句话表达这幅画的大意，这几句话实际上就是短文的写作提纲。有了提纲，我们在写作过程中就能做到重点突出，有条理，不会离题。再次，依据图示、提纲，连句扩写成篇。连句成文时，要按照一定的顺序和图画间的关系，中间加上一些符合逻辑关系的过渡词、句，从而使所