宝安翠园联考3写作点评.ppt

1、宝安翠园联考3写作点评,完型填空 21.wonderful: admirable /giving great pleasure 这里表示做名人在很多方面是令人愉快或令人羡慕的事情 As Da Bing once said, “Its wonderful to be a woman.” 22. join sb (in sth)/the League/the Party/ a group/ a club/ a team, etc join in +活动类名词如：a discussion/a competition, etc与take part in/participate in用法相同。 atte

2、nd+ university /school/a course/a lecture/a meeting/ a ceremony/ an exhibition ,etc,23. at the end of +过去时间用过去时 by the end of +过去时间用过去完成时 我们在10月底又举行了一次考试。 We had another exam at the end of October. 我们到10月底前举行了三次考试。 We had had three exams by the end of October. by/at the end of +将来时间用将来时 年底之前我们必须把课本学

3、完。 We are to finish learning Book 11 by the end of this year. 明年三月底你们要参加英语口试。 Youll take an oral test at the end of next March.,30.where引导表语从句，与前面的分句一致，where we should start意为：那是我们应该开始行动的地方。 You are saying that everyone should be equal, and this is _I disagree. A. why B. where C. what D. how,语法填空 36

4、.当先行词是the one或the one修饰时引导定语从句用that,而不用which。 38. The reason (why).is that One of the reasons (why).is that Another reason (why)is that 40. “禁不住”的表达 1)cant help doing sth 2)cant help but do sth 3)cannot but do sth 4)can hardly help doing sth,1)A young man had been to Wednesday night Bible Study. The

5、 pastor had shared about listening to God and obeying the Lords voice. The young man couldnt help but wonder, “Does God still speak to people?” (双语报18期语法填空） 2)As Clay anxiously awaits to find out how he played a part in her suicide he cant help but notice how a bunch of little seemingly insignifican

6、t, incidents add up to a terrible high school existence for someone else. (Teens No.15 Page 4),基础写作 写作指导： 1.这是一篇调查报告，时态用一般现在时；主动语态和被动语态交替使用； 2.如要体现较好的语言运用能力，要多用从句，如宾语从句、定语从句、状语从句； 3.这是一篇非常典型具有主题句、支撑句和结尾句的写作，结构紧凑，条理清晰。 主题句： The chart shows the average amount of time the students of the school spend o

7、n different after-class activities daily.,结尾句（你的看法） I think students should be encouraged to take more exercise after class so that they may be healthier and more energetic. 4.为避免单一的句型，在表达 “花时间做什么事”时尽量用不同的句型表达，如： 1)spend time doing sth/ on sth 2)It takes sb time to do something 3)sb uses time to do

8、something 4)Something/Doing something/To do something takes time. 5)Sb puts time into sth. 6)Time goes into sth.,写作问题： 1.很多同学没有仔细审题或没有仔细看题，把坐标图看作是百分比或者甚至用学生数来表达； 2.在表达具体时间时，很多学生表达太笼统，如：学生花大部分是做作业，花最少时间做家务等； 3.表达句型单一，如有的同学全部用spend time doing sth/on sth; 4.有的没有发表个人看法或结尾句。,And the time spent on music a

9、nd physical exercises is similar to that spent on computer.（李凯宁） As far as I am concerned, we should have more time to help our parents do our housework instead of our homework.(黄泽彬）,读写任务 标题 1.没有标题或离题的标题要扣1分.如Too much vehicle, One million private cars, Private cars, Development or Environment, Savin

10、g the World, etc 2.其实就用The best form of transportation in our city或Cycling, the best form of transportation就可以。 概括：由三部分组成： 1)advantages 2)disadvantages 3)the writers opinion,好的概括： 1.The passage informs us that the citys vehicle population has reached over 1 million and there are some advantages as w

11、ell as disadvantages on private cars, which makes the author think that China should enlarge the private car market. 2. The author introduces both the advantages and disadvantages of private cars and gives his opinion that we should take advantages of private cars and make them serve us better.,有问题的

12、概括： 1.只提到advantages和disadvantages没写the writers opinion的扣1分。 e.g. Shenzhen has reached over 1 million and 80% of the vehicles are private cars which have both advantages and disadvantages. (2分) 2.要点达到但表达错误多，给2分。,离题概括或低分概括 1.A reasonable conclusion can be developed from the passage that more and more

13、private cars impact the economic growth as well as traffic, while the ideas of the influence of too much private cars vary from person to person. 2.With over 1 million citys vehicle population, cars play an important role in our life while they will also lead to air pollution, which will do harm to

14、our health.,主题写作： 此写作要紧扣主题“the best form of transportation”,如： In my opinion, the best form of transportation in our city is cycling. Firstly, cycling is an environmental-friendly action, which will not pollute air or do harm to the environment. Besides, cycling will save a lot of energy. Secondly,

15、it is a much safer mean compared with other forms of transportation and will not lead to traffic jams. Last but not least, we can go wherever and whenever we like without waiting. There is no doubt that cycling is a convenient means of transportation. In a word, cycling does good to the environment

16、and is cheap and convenient way for us in our daily activities. (徐文彦/18分),这次很多低分的学生主要是离题，主要体现在： 1.全篇写太多私家车的利弊或全部弊端； 2.有的写了一大堆私家车的弊端，最后用一句话说：I think the best form of transportation is riding a bike. 3.有的写了几个交通工具，一会讲take a bus,一会说cycle,或者同时：如：In my opinion, the best form of transportation in our city

17、is bus and bike, 没有自己的倾向性。 4.有的同学开始用大篇幅来写私家车和公车的利弊，然后用小篇幅写骑自行车的好处，这样给阅卷老师的感觉也是离题，因为很多老师只看开头几行，这样显然很低分。,典型的离题范例 1： As is known to all, every coin has two sides. While we enjoy the advantages the cars bring, we are suffering a series of problems they bring as well. Although we can live a more comforta

18、ble life with the cars, our environment is facing a more dangerous situation. In a way, having more cars means putting more harmful gases to our environment, leading air pollution, water pollution and so on. It is known that we cant live without the earth. So the most important thing we should do is

19、 to protect our environment away from the danger. But as a matter of,fact, we are harming our motherland again and again, including having more care. Dont you think something must be do to quiz the earths sufferings. All in all, I think we shouldnt increase the amount of cars but make a better prote

20、ction to our environment. (6分),Many students devote most of their spare time to doing their homework, they spend only less than 30 minutes doing housework and exercise. Also, it accounts to 30 minutes or so for students to play computer hands and listen to music. From the chart, we can safely reach

21、the conclusion that students do not spend their spare time in relatively reasonable ways. In spite of their homework, they dont spend enough time doing sports and housework. Thus, we should get into the habit of doing something useful in our spare time and live a better life.,典型的离题范例 2 Whats the bes

22、t form of transportation in Shenzhen? The private cars or city buses? I think both of them are needed. Private cars are always a convenient means of transportation. City buses always are cheap and less pollution. By car you go anywhere you like, but private cars will bring the pollution problem and

23、traffic jams, the waste of energy and so on. What more, private cars make a lot of traffic accident every year. Instead of private car, buses own a lot of advantage indeed, but unconvenient. So, both of them have two sides. (12分),Bikes are the best form of transportation Narrating us the advantages and negative problems of private cars, the author intends to acquaint us with the idea that cars are a better form of transportation. When it comes to the issue of the best form of transportation in our city, people have spilt opinions. It is acknowledged that private cars have b