建议英语作文写作.ppt

How to write a letter for advice,QIN 2011.9.8,如何算是一篇好文章？ 覆盖了所有的要点 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。,要点全,词汇,句型 （高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道,连接词,假如你叫孙军，是恩施高中的学生，要给市长写一封信，反映学校门前交通拥挤现象，包括以下要点：,参考词汇: 穿行 thread ones way 天桥 overpass,第一步: What must we pay attention to when writing an article ?,题材： 人称 Person (The first/ third person) 时态：Tense (the simple present tense) 要点：,a letter,第一步：审题 养成重视审题的习惯。虽然基础写作题是半封闭性的，但审题仍然十分重要。现以样题为例，谈谈如何审题：,第一人称,一封信,建议政府采取措施舒缓交 通拥挤的状况,说理逻辑性,一般现在时,建议信篇章结构, 说明建议的内容； 提出具体建议的原因； 指出采纳建议的益处。 注意事项：语言要委婉、礼貌，顾及对方感受。,适当运用模板,Dear Bob, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to (引出主题). Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to . Then, it also helps to . Besides, it should be a good idea to . You can also . (此三句不同的句式提出建议) As to , I suggest (有时根据需要具体到某一反面). In addition, (其他建议). Im sure (预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心). Im looking forward to (表达愿望). Sincerely yours, Li Hua,Dear_, You have asked me for my advice with regard to _, and Ill try to make some conductive suggestions here. In my humble opinion(以我拙见), you would be wise to take the following actions: _. I hope youll find these proposals useful and I would be ready to discuss this matter with you to further details. Good luck with you. Yours, XXX,第二步：搜索相关词组或句型,学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小, 家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。,学校与一所小学毗邻,对着大街,stand next to primary face/be faced with the main street,Theres a primary school near our school, and both schools face the main street.,Our school stands next to a primary school, faced with/facing the main street.,推荐句型：There be+并列句,非谓语结构,Standing next to a primary school, our school is faced with/faces the main street.,润色小建议,Next to a primary school,将介词短语提前（全倒装）,stands/lies/is our school , faced with / facing a main street.,可将stand next to替换为高级词汇/短语,be located next to (near/beside/by),border/adjoin vt. be adjacent to与毗邻,在对面 be opposite to,The traffic is busy during the rush hours.,高峰期交通繁忙,traffic. during the rush hours,During the rush hours, there are so many cars and buses going on the road that,During the rush hours, there is a lot of traffic.,so. that,with结构,With so many cars and buses going on the road, ,润色小建议,“高峰期”可意译:,at peak time， a large current of cars and people,“交通繁忙”可译为:,traffic jam congestion 交通堵塞 be choke up with be crammed with 被堵塞/塞满,加之孩子小,家长接送,交通更拥挤,sendto, fetch. ,非谓语结构.,Many parents send their young children to school and fetch them home, which makes the traffic heavier.,Many parents send their young children to school and fetch them home, making the traffic heavier., which.,making the situation more serious.,making the traffic heavier可意译为：,so. that.=tooto,The children are so young that parents have to send them to school and fetch them home, which makes/making the traffic heavier.,making 可替换为：,causing, leading to, resulting in,“sendfetch” 可替换为短语：,pick up,润色小建议,学生过街在车辆中穿行危险,thread ones way，when doing,It is dangerous for the students to thread their way among buses and cars when crossing the road.,固定句型It is +adj. for to do.,Students are risking their lives to thread their way among cars.,润色小建议,2. Some are exposed to danger when crossing the ocean/ sea of cars.,灵活运用其它的短语进行意译：,适当增加形容词和副词：,it is extremely dangerous，it is of great/ tremendous danger,政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。,suggest/suggestion, take steps/ measures/ action to do such as,My suggestion is that the government should,表语从句,固定句型 It is high time that(虚拟语气),It is high time that relevant authorities took some measures like building,I suggest that the government should take steps such as building an overpass.,简单句,1. In order to release the stress of traffic problems, ,润色小建议,2. Aimed at solving these problems, the government should,A. 适当添加一些意思（过渡句）,The government should pay more attention to it and try to solve it.,B. 语义的意译,3. Seeing these matters, never will I stop urging our government to take some measures. For the sake of improving the quality of traffic, it is significant to build,C. 添加形容词和副词,I strongly suggest, active/effective measures,第三步. 连句成文,但要注意：篇章的连贯性,Next to a primary school stands our school, facing a main street. _, its crammed with cars during the rush hour. _ children have to be picked up by their parents owing to their young age. _, its of great danger for the students to go through the traffic. _, it is high time that relevant authorities took some measures like building an overpass.,A. As a consequence,B. According to the phenomenon stated above,C. When it comes to traffic jams,D. What makes things worse is that,A.,C.,D.,B.,反面范例,反面范例,反面范例,反面范例,不推荐字体,优秀作文范例1,优点：考生能灵活地处理各个信息点，大量运用非谓语，介词短语，从句，连词等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显个性和语言功底。,优秀作文范例2,优点：考生的书面整洁，字体美观，运用there be句型，介词短语，从句，非谓语，套用句式等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。,优秀作文范例3,优点：考生运用倒装句，so that句式，精彩的表达以及虚拟语气等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。,优秀作文范例4,优点：该考生最大的特色是运用了大量的高级词汇等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显深厚的语言底蕴。,优秀作文范例5,优秀作文范例6,Congestion n. 阻塞, 拥挤, 充血,适当运用模板,Dear_, You have asked me for my advice with regard to _, and Ill try to make some conductive suggestions here. In my humble opinion(依我拙见), you would be wise to take the following actions: _. I hope youll find these proposals useful and I would be ready to discuss this matter with you to further details. Good luck with you. Yours, XXX,Dear Bob, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to (引出主题). Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to . Then, it also helps to . Besides, it should be a good idea to . You can also . (此三句不同的句式提出建议) As to , I suggest (有时根据需要具体到某一反面). In addition, (其他建议). Im sure (预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心). Im looking forward to (表达愿望). Sincerely yours, Li Hua,假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写回信。 要点： 参加中文学习班； 看中文书刊、电视； 学唱中文歌曲； 交中国朋友。 注意：可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；开头语已给出。 Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice no how to learn Chinese well._ _ Best wishes, Li Hua,Dear Peter, Im glad to receive y