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模板22读后续写之结尾模板
•本节导航——•・
鹤,题型解读真题分析+关键词+命题预测/技巧解读
朗•模板构建答题模板+技巧点拨
模板01主旨升华句|模板02精彩结尾句
逋•模板运用真题示例+思路点拨+规范答题+举一反三
话•模板演练最新模拟、预测考向
侈强蟹篌
年份卷别话题
2024新高考I&II卷诚信回报陌生司机相助
浙江卷1月卷突破自我脑图定位找目标
2023新高考I&II卷在老师的鼓励下参加作文比赛
浙江卷1月卷“我”与蜂鸟的神奇邂逅
2022新高考I&II卷鼓励身残志坚男孩继续参加越野赛
浙江卷6月卷为无家可归的人们发放食物
浙江卷1月卷与“最不合拍”搭档成为好友
题型真题示例
【新高考I&II卷】Paragraph1:
IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebad
读后续写news.__________________________________________
Paragraph2:
Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.___________________
读后续写的语篇类型一般是记叙文,或叙议结合。故事通过设置较为真实的问题情境,考查考生
考点揭秘能否运用英语基础知识准确理解文章故事情节,并结合所给文本材料及两个段落首句,分析篇
章结构、情节脉络,发挥其独立思考能力,展开合理想象。运用英语词汇、语法等基础写作知
识技能,完成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。读后续写题型创造性地将
“阅读,,与“写作,,深度结合,能够更加有效地考查考生的综合语言运用能力、思维能力、学习能
力和书面表达能力。反映考生在面对生活实践或学习探索问题情境时,能否在正确的思想价值
观念指导下合理运用思维方法,有效整合英语语言学科知识,具备高质量地认识问题、分析问
题和解决间题的综合素质。这个新题型能较全面容观地反映高考评价体系中“四层”的考查内容
和“四翼”的考查要求。
从选材上来看,语篇选材情节曲折,逻辑性强。读后续写所提供的语篇材料一般是具有正能量
而且故事性比较强的文章。一般来说,文章内容通俗易懂,故事线素的逻辑性较强,写作要求
续写的部分多是故事的高潮或结局。例如2022年全国新高考I卷的读后续写,所给文章讲述
了作者在一次越野赛跑前发现学生David打算放弃比赛。续写部分内容大致为了解清楚原因之
后,在作者的鼓动下,David勇敢地参加了比赛。
从语言特点上来看,读后续写原材料一般是记叙文,或夹叙夹议类体裁,叙述性语言和描写性
语言相结合。语言生动、细腻、富有感情,简洁朴素,画面感强。因此,考生在续写过程中,
应该体会原材料故事中的语言特点,继而完成语言风格契合度高的短文。
(一)把握故事主题
续写故事应符合积极的世界观和价值观取向,逻辑合理,情节连费。要阅读语篇,从人与自我、
人与社会、人与自然三个主题语境进行分析,把握故事主题,防止主题跑偏和故事情节离奇荒
诞。
(二)学会分析情节
分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手,即who,when,where,what,why,howo然后理顺故事情
节发展线和主人公的情感变化线。这样,故事的人物、事件和主要人物的心理变化就会一目了
然,为接下来的续写做好准备。
技巧解读(三)构思续写情节
1.分析段首句,根据段首句的关键信息,提出问题,预设故事情节发展走向。
2.关注段首句和续写部分的衔接,思考续写第一段和第二段的衔接,思考故事如何结尾,如何
与前文做好首尾呼应,逻辑性应强,体现故事主题。
(四)优化语言表达
1.教学过程中,教师应该重视故事阅读,重视优质文本材料的开发和解读,引导学生积累有效
的语言素材。
2.语言提升可以从场景描写、人物动作描写、情感情绪描写、人物心理活动描写、神态肖像刻
画等方面分类整理,进行微情境训练,提升语言表达的质量。
◎根磔)建
【模板01精彩主旨升华句】
一、成长突破
1.Thecrackedballetshoes,ribbonsfrayedlikewoundedwings,whisperedatruth:trueflightbeginswhenwestop
countingthefalls.
(舞鞋破损一失败与成长)
2.Histremblingfingersfinallyreleasedthecrumpledspeechdraft,settingfreenotjustpaper,butthecripplingfear
ofimperfection.
(揉皱的演讲稿一克服完美主义)
3.Sweatblurredtheequationsonthechalkboard,transformingthemintohieroglyphsofperseveranceonlythe
bravecoulddecipher.
(黑板汗渍一坚持的意义)
4.Themarathonmedalleftanicyimprintonherchest-awintersunmeltingthefrostofself-doubt.
(奖牌冰凉触感一自信觉醒)
二、亲情温度
1.Grandpa'spocketwatch,itscrackedglasscloudedwithage,tickedlouderthanwords:loveoutlivestimeitself.
(怀表裂痕一永恒亲情)
2.Mom*sapronpockets,perpetuallystuffedwithband-aidsandcandy,becamelivingproofthatsuperheroeswear
floralprints.(围裙口袋一母爱伟大)
3.Thehalf-carvedwoodenduck,abandonedontheworkbench,grewtruerwingsinDad*sunfinishedlovethanany
finishedcraft.(未完成木雕一父爱无言)
三、勇气力量
1.Thewheelchair'schromerimscaughtsunsetfire,forgingwheelsofphoenixrisingfromashesofdespair.
(轮椅反光一逆境重生)
2.Herstutteringshadowonthedebatestagestretchedtallerwitheachdeepbreath,paintingcourageinsilhouettes.
(影子变化-自我超越)
3.Therescuedog'schewedleash,teethmarksscoringleather,becamebattlescarsoftrustreclaimed.
(狗绳牙印一治愈创伤)
四、自然哲思
1.Mapleseedshelicopteringdownwardtaughthertheparadox:sometimessurrenderisthebravestformofflight.
(枫树种子飘落一生命哲理)
2.Tadpoleswrigglinginthejarcastmoonlithieroglyphsonherwall-livingproofthatmagicthrivesinordinary
containers.(蝌蚪游动一平凡中的奇迹)
3.Thesnappedsaplingbenttowardsunlight,itsscartissueformingawisersmilethanstraighttrunksevercould.
(断树向阳T创伤与成长)
五、友情微光
1.Sharedearbudsdanglingbetweendeskswoveinvisiblethreads,provingfriendshipneedsnogranddeclarations.
(共用耳机-默契友情)
2.Herdoodle-coveredcastbecameacanvasofsolidarity,eachmarkerstrokeasilent2'mhere".
(石膏涂鸦一陪伴力量)
3.Thehalf-meltedcrayonsintheirsecretboxblendedcolorsbeyondrainbow-theexacthueofchildhoodpromises
kept.
(融化蜡笔一纯真约定)
六、文化传承
1.Great-grandma'sembroideryhoopheldcaptivestarlight,eachstitchaconstellationoffadingtraditions
demandingresurrection.(刺绣绷架一文化延续)
2.Thecrackedclanledger'stea-stainedpagesbreathedancestralsighs,turninggenealogyintolivingpoetry.
(族谱茶渍一家族记忆)
4.Grandpa'sdentedharmonica,rustedbutresonant,playedtunesthatrebuiltbombedcitiesnotebynote.
(口琴锈迹T历史回响)
七、自我和解
1.Frecklesreflectedinthepondmultipliedintostarmaps-shefinallysawcelestialbeautyinearthlyimperfections.
(水中雀斑T外貌接纳)
2.Theabandonedpiano*sdustykeysbloomedunderhesitantfingers,composingredemptionsonatasinminor
scales.
(钢琴积灰T重拾初心)
3.Razor-scarredwristsnowborehennavines,paintransformedintogardenswherehopetookroot.
(纹身遮盖伤疤—自我疗愈)
八、生命顿悟
1.ICUmonitors'greenwavesmirroredthewillowoutside,bothwhispering:fragilityisjustintensityindisguise.
(心电图与柳树一生命真谛)
2.Grandma'slastknittingneedlestillheldunraveledyarn-notunfinishedbusiness,butlife*sinsistenceon
open-endedmiracles.
(未完成毛线一生死哲思)
3.ThehospicebutterflyperchedonherIVpole,itsbriefvisitrewritingendingsaswingedbeginnings.
(蝴蝶停留医疗设备T生命轮回)
九、社会关怀
1.Thehomelessman'slibrarycard,wornsmootherthancoins,provedpovertycan'tcensorhungryminds.
(破损借书证一精神尊严)
2.Protestplacardsabandonedinrainbledcolorsintogutters-paintbecomingtheveinsofchange.
(褪色标语牌―社会变革)
3.Braillemenusatthecafefolded/unfoldedlikeorigamiswans,givingflighttoinclusion.
(盲文菜单折痕一平等包容)
十、平凡光辉
1.Thejanitor'skeychain,heavywithclassroomghosts,unlockedmorewisdomthananytextbook.
(钥匙串声响一平凡伟大)
2.Fadedlunchboxstickerschronicledamigrantworker*sjourney-eachcartooncharacteramilemarkerof
resilience.
(饭盒贴纸T奋斗历程)
3.Thebusdriver'srain-streakedwindshieldframedathousandlifestories,eachdropaliquidchapter.
(车窗雨痕一>人间百态)
【模板02高分结尾句】
精彩结尾01:画面定格一一人物动作的画面定格
01
Theystoodthereforamoment,sidebyside,waitingfortherushingholidaycurrentandfortheirplaceinit.Then
thedaughterglancedoverandmomentarilyregardedhermother.Andslowly,almostreluctantly,sheplacedherarm
withapparentlyunaccustomedaffectionaroundhermother'sshouldersandgentlyguidedherbackintothedeluge.
她们并肩站在那里,等待着节日的浪潮,等待着她们在浪潮中的位置。然后女儿扫了一眼,立刻注视着她
的母亲。慢慢地,几乎是不情愿地,带着明显不习惯的爱她把胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上,轻轻地引导她回
到洪水中。
02
Hishardworkpaidoff!Holdingthesodatinfirmly,Reubenrushedfortheshoptobuythebrooch.Themomenthe
gotthebeautifulbrooch,heburstthroughthefrontdoorandplaceditinDora'shand.NeverhadDorareceived
suchagift.Speechlessandhappy,sheheldhersontightlyintoherarms,withtearswellingupinhereyes.
他的努力得到了回报!鲁本紧紧地握着汽水罐,冲向商店去买胸针。他一拿到那枚漂亮的胸针,就冲进前
门,把它放在朵拉的手里。多拉从来没有收到过这样的礼物。她高兴得说不出话来,紧紧地把儿子抱在怀
里,眼泪涌了出来。
03
Thebutterflycleanedhertearsontheface,"No."Godfeltabitrelievedandsaid,"Tomorrowyoucanbecome
humanagain."Butsheshookherheadandsaid,"No,Iwanttobeabutterflyfortherestofmylifb...”Thenthe
butterflywouldstaytogetherwithherloverforever.Onthetopofthemountain,sheseemedtoenjoythesunrise
andthesunsethappilywiththem.
蝴蝶擦干了脸上的眼泪,说,“不。”上帝松了一口气,说。“明天你就可以变回人类了。”但她摇了摇头说,
“不,我想做一辈子蝴蝶…”然后蝴蝶就会永远和她的爱人在一起。在山顶上,她似乎和他们一起快乐地享受
着日出和日落。
读后续写精彩结尾02:画面定格——特殊寓意的写景画面
01
Theskywasabillionpureeyesoflightandthegrassgreenunderfoot,itwasasifnightanddayhadbecomeone
beautifulmoment.Dawnhadcome.
天空像是十亿只纯净的眼睛拼接在一起,脚下是青草,仿佛黑夜和白昼已成为一个美丽的时刻。黎明已经
来临。(黎明到来的画面)
02
Dawnsentshimmeringraysovertheplacidocean,bestowingagoldenpathfromtheshoretothehorizon.
黎明在平静的海面上放射出出闪闪发亮的光线,留下一条从海岸到地平线横亘而过的金色道路。(黎明到
来的画面)
03
ThecrystalandceruleanwaterwasgentleasIwadedthroughit,thesunsetlikeorangepaintonabluecanvas.
当我涉过水晶般天蓝色的轻柔的水时,日落就像蓝色画布上的橙色颜料。(美好日落时的画面)
04
Thelingeringsunlightwasobliteratedbytherapidlyfallingnight,resemblingapitch-blackcurtaindrapedoverthe
sky.
逗留在天际的最后一缕阳光被迅速落下的夜幕擦除,就像是天空被一层漆黑的幕布覆盖。(日落时的画面)
05
Themoonundersiegebystarsseemedtolightenthenightbringingforthstarsthatshoneandhungintheblackness.
Theneverendingblacknessconsumedeverything.
被群星围困的月亮似乎照亮了黑夜,带来了在黑暗中闪耀和悬挂着的群星。无尽的黑暗吞噬了一切。(描
写夜空的画面)
06
Lookingup,IsawthesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore.Isawatreeinthedistanceglistengentlyasit
reflectedthesun'srays.Myconsciousnessebbedawaywiththeheat.ItookafewblinksbeforeIlandedwitha
thud.
抬头一看,我看到太阳比我以前所知道的还要明亮。我看见远处有一棵树反射着太阳光,发出柔和的光辉。
我的意识随着热度而衰退。我眨了眨眼,然后摔倒在地才猛然回到现实中,恢复了知觉。(特殊寓意)
07
Dottedwithglitteringstars,thesky,midnightblue,gavethesceneafairytalequality.
缀满星光的天空,午夜的蓝色,给了这一场景一个童话般的质量。(神话般美丽的夜空画面)
08
Theraindrummedonthewindow,biddingfarewelltothelastbeamofsunlight.
雨水打着窗户,向最后一缕阳光告别。(雨水来临的画面)
Kissedbytherainandglistening,thewetgroundiscoldunderfoot.Adenseearthlysweetsmellrisesfromthe
ground,envelopingeverythingwithinitssoftembrace.
潮湿的地面走起来很冷,被雨水亲吻后闪闪发光。一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起,把一切都包裹在
它柔软的怀抱里。(雨后清新的画面)
09
TheleavescrunchedbeneathmyfeetasIstrolleddownthestreet.Occasionally,onewouldfallpastme,lightly
swayingastheairgentlycarriedittotheground.
我在街上漫步时,树叶在我脚下嘎吱作响。偶尔,有叶子会从我身边掉下来,轻轻地摇晃,缓缓落到到地
面。(描写落叶的画面)
读后续写精彩结尾03:对话结尾
01
Chestersaidhisfathertoldhimhehadtriedtosearchforhimandhisbrother,butbothbrothershadchangedtheir
lastnames."Hedoesremembermeandmyolderbrotherandhetoldmethathe'sbeenlookingforuseversince
welostcontact,hesaid.ChestersaidhisbrotherhassinceflowntoColombiatobereunitedwithUrreaaswell.
Whenaskedhowthereunionwithhisfatherwillchangehislife,Chestersaid,“Igotfamilyeverywhere,soit
mightleadtomanymoretripsnow.”
Chester说他父亲告诉他,他曾试图寻找他和他哥哥,但两兄弟都改了姓。“他确实记得我和我哥哥,他告
诉我,自从我们失去联系以来,他一直在找我们,”他说。Chester说他哥哥也飞去哥伦比亚和Urrea团聚
了。当被问及与父亲的团聚会如何改变他的生活时,Chester说,“我的家人无处不在,所以现在可能会有
更多的出行。”
02
WhatwasmostfascinatingaboutthereunionisthatShavialsomovesothers.Nina'sfamilyhadmovedtoabigger
apartment.’Tveheardamazingstoriesaboutdogs'loyalty,butIneverimaginedthissortofthingwouldever
happentome.Evennow,Icanhardlybelievethisdogtraveledsuchalongdistancetofindus,“saidNina,"I
wouldnevergivethiskindoffriendawayagain.Inevergrowtiredofrepeatingthis一animalsarethemostdevoted
andlovingcreatures.Theyneedourloveandcare.”
这次重聚最吸引人的地方在于,沙维也打动了其他人。妮娜的家人搬到了一个更大的公寓。"我听说过狗
狗忠心耿耿的故事,但我从没想过这种事会发生在我身上。即使是现在,我也很难相信这只狗走了这么远
的路来找我们,”妮娜说,“我再也不会放弃这样的朋友了。我总是不厌其烦地重复这句话一一动物是最
忠诚和最可爱的生物。他们需要我们的爱和关心。”
03
HerhusbandspoketothedirectorofHeightvale,DoloresHaworth.Soonsheofferedhimajobworkingforthe
company.Shesaid,“Hejusthadabrilliantworkingattitudeandisdefinitelythetypeofemployeewearelooking
for.Iwastold,'Ifhedoesthisforfree,imaginehisjobsifhewasbeingpaid.'Imethimandhewasalovelyand
politeyoungmanandhehasalreadystartedworkingforus.”
她丈夫和Heightvale的主管DoloresHaworth谈过了。很快她就给了他一份为公司工作的工作。她说,“他
的工作态度很好,绝对是我们要找的那种员工。有人告诉我,'如果他这么做是免费的,想象一下他的工
作是有报酬的。'我见过他,他是个可爱又有礼貌的年轻人,他已经开始为我们工作了。”
04Theyhungallthethingsbacktothewall.JackaskedPaisley,“Areyoureallywillingtoleadatoughlifewith
me?”Shepattedawaytheashesonhandsandlookedatthewallswithloadsofstuffonthemsatisfactorily,
saying,"Yes!Forme,itisnotasufferingtolive.”
他们把所有的东西都挂回墙上。杰克问佩斯利:“你真的愿意和我一起过艰难的生活吗?”她拍拍手上的骨
灰,满意地看着墙上挂满东西的墙,说:“是的!对我来说,活着不是一种痛苦。”
G思掖剧新
◎立或示例
2024年6月全国新高考I、II卷读后续写真题
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabus
toPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.Itoucheddownin
Viennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlike
crazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.Thatwas
whenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn'theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmy
pronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabout
togiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhat
seemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewe
rolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueuestillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxi
behindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.HWemadeit,“hesaid.JustthenI
realisedthatIhadinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetried
itseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthe
busqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.Thereatthe
entrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,
onlytoreadthemessage:"Outoforder.Sorry."
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1:
IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.__________________________________________
Paragraph2:
Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.
【答题思路】
1.情境分析与伏笔呼应
核心矛盾:支付失败(葡萄牙卡被拒)VS时间紧迫(只剩2分钟)
人物关系:Gunter已展现善意(冒雨送机/联系朋友),需保持其热心性格
伏笔提示:前文Gunter未听清公交站名却成功抵达(暗示文化差异或隐藏技能)
2.段落功能定位
Paragraph1:危机爆发一解决方案铺垫(需体现人物成长/关系深化)
Paragraph2:结果揭示一主题升华(善意无价/跨文化友谊)
对点答案与模板匹配
Paragraph1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.
对应模板:意外转折型+行动号召型
图@答即
IranbacktoGunter,mybreathformingtinycloudsintheicyair,tremblingasIdeliveredthenews.Hisfacepaled,
theViennasunsetcastinglongshadowsacrosshisfurrowedbrow."Stuckagain?"hemuttered,fingersdrumming
thesteeringwheel——anervousticIhadn'tnoticedbefore.Then,likeaboltoflightning,hepulledoutaleather
walletfromhissuitpocket."AustriaCard,"hedeclared,slidinghisowncreditcardthroughthemachinewith
practicedease.Myeyeswidenedasthegreenlightflashed,thesoundofcoinsclinkinginthefareboxringing
throughthechaos.
技法拆解:
意外转折:用"nervoustic”暗示Gunter隐藏的不安,与后文果断行动形成反差
行动号召:Gunter主动提供解决方案,体现"Helpwithoutexpectation”的主题
感官矩阵:"icyair"(触觉)+ngreenlight"(视觉)+ncoinsclinking"(听觉)
Paragraph2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna...
对应模板:伏笔回收型+主题升华型
还答题
Thelinehadvanishedbythetimeweboarded,thebus'sengineroaringlikeasleepinggiantawakening.Fourdays
later,asIdialedthenumberengravedonhisbusinesscard,awarmAustrianaccentgreetedme."Miss,youoweme
thirtyeurosandaproperdinner.nWelaughed,recallinghowhe'dsecretlyphotographedmyboardingpassto
ensureIreachedPrague."No,"Iinsisted,nyoutaughtmethatsomeconnectionsaren'tabouttransactions-they're
aboutpeoplewhomaketimestandstill."
技法拆解:
伏笔回收:前文Gunter"parkedthetaxibehindthebus”的细节,暗示他早有周全计划(拍boardingpass)
主题升华:用"connectionsaren'tabouttransactions”呼应首段storm中的人性温暖
文化映射:AustriaCard(奥地利主流支付方式)与Portuguese卡的冲突,暗含跨文化互助主题
高分要点总结
双重伏笔利用:
物理伏笔:Gunter的"leatherwallet”(商务人士身份)
情感伏笔:前文他"smiledwidely"预示其乐于助人的本质
结尾升华技巧:
将个人经历(错过会议)转化为普世价值(人与人联结的重要性)
使用"maketimestandstill”呼应开篇storm营造的时间紧迫感
率一反三
(2025・重庆•一模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Iclosedmyeyesandliftedmyfacetowardsthesun.Ibreatheddeeply,expandingmylungswithfreshspring
air.Iwasalive.
Ihadn'tbeenabletowalktheentiredistancearoundthelakeacouplemonthsbefore.Iwasjustfinishingup
withtreatmentsforstagethreebreastcancerwhenwestartedthesewalks.Mybodywasweakandpainful.My
mindwasfoggyandforgetful.Iwouldgetlosteasilyifmyhusbandwasn'ttherewithme.
Myhusband,whoheardmybigbreathintake,askedifIwasokay.Iopenedmyeyes,lookedatthe
concernedexpressiononhisfaceandsmiled.IreassuredhimthatIwasindeedfine;normalinfact.Inthatmoment
Ifelthappy.
AsIwaslookingoverathim,myeyescaughtthesightoftwowomenrunning.Ifocusedontheirmovements.
Iwatchedwithgreatattentionastheirfeethittheroadinquickenedmovements.Theyworeblack,pinkandgreen
athleticwear,smilingandlaughingastheyran,theywerehappythatafternoontoo.
Walkingwasgettingeasierformenow.Itwasn'tgettingmyheart-rateupanymore.MydoctorsaidIneeded
agoodworkoutformyheart.Inthedaysthatfollowed,Icouldn'tstopthinkingaboutrunning.With
encouragementfrommyhusband,Isignedupforalearn-to-runclass.
Onthefirstdayofclasses,weweretodointervals(间隙)ofrunningoneminute,followedbywalkingfor
twominutes.Thatsoundedeasyenough.Myenthusiasmsoonturnedtoshockandpanic.About30secondsintothe
run,Icouldn'tbreathe.Iwasstrugglingtogetenoughairin.Myheartwaspounding.Icouldhearthepulsesinmy
ears.Sweatwasformingontomyforeheadandundermyarms,makingmeuncomfortable.Howcouldthisbe
healthy?Iwondered.IfeltlikeIwashavingaheartattack.Doubtfloodedinsidemyhead.Iwassooutofshape
andfeltsillyforbeingthere.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150个左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
IamnotsurewhyIwentbacktothesecondclass.
Thatraceinspiredsomethinginme.
【答题思路】
1.核心矛盾与人物关系
表层矛盾:身体病痛(癌症治疗)与运动需求(心脏康复)的冲突
深层矛盾:自我否定("feltsillyforbeingthere")与内在潜能的觉醒
人物关系:丈夫从旁观者到精神盟友的转变
2.段落功能定位
Paragraph1:
需建立“失败-坚持”的转折逻辑,体现人物韧性的萌芽
今对应行动号召型结尾模板(展现主动克服困难的姿态)
Paragraph2:
需完成“痛苦体验一生命觉醒”的主题升华
f对应意象收尾型+主题升华型复合模板
对点答案与模板匹配
Paragraph1:IamnotsurewhyIwentbacktothesecondclass.
对应模板:行动号召型+矛盾修饰法
参考答案:
Itrudgedhomethatday,mylegsburningwitheachstep.Yetasduskpaintedtheskyinamber,Ifoundmyself
pacingourlivingroom,myfingersabsentmindedlytracingtheoutlineofmyrunningshoesonthecoffeetable.
Whenmyhusbandreturned,heimmediatelynoticedthedeterminedsetofmyjaw."You'rethinkingaboutit,“he
said,placingahandonmyshoulder.Hiswordsstruckachord——areminderthatcowardicewouldn'thealmybody
orsoul.Thenextmorning,withoutwaitingforhimtourgeme,Ilacedupmysneakersandheadedtothetrack.
1.技法拆解:
行动号召型:用"pacing...table"/"lacedupsneakers"等动作细节替代心理独白
矛盾修饰法:"burninglegs"与"eterminedjaw"形成身体痛苦与精神坚韧的张力
伏笔回收:前文丈夫的"concernedexpression"在此转化为精神支持
Paragraph2:Thatraceinspiredsomethinginme.
对应模板:意象收尾型+主题升华型
参考答案:
Monthslater,asIcrossedthefinishlineofmyfirst5K,thesundippedbelowthehorizonlikemoltengold.My喘
息、echoedtherhythmofmypoundingheart,yetthistime,itwasn'tabattleagainstsuffocation—itwasa
symphonyofsurvival.Tearsblurredmyvisionnotfi'ompain,butfi'omtheoverwhelmingrealizationthatI'd
outlivedmyprognosisbyrunning.Theracehadbecomemorethanexercise-itwasmydeclarationofdefiance
againstadiseasethatsoughttostealmybreath,myjoy,myveryexistence.
1.技法拆解:
意象收尾型:
"moltengold"隐喻夕阳与重生希望的双重意象
"symphonyofsurvival"将生理反应升华为精神胜利
主题升华型:
用"declarationofdefiance"将个人经历提升至生命抗争的高度
"stealmybreath"呼应前文跑步时的窒息感,形成闭环结构
2.高分要点总结
双重线索编织:
明线:从病弱到奔跑者的身体蜕变
暗线:从自我怀疑到生命掌控的精神觉醒
感官矩阵升级:
原文:"sweatformingontomyforehead"(触觉)
升华:"tearsblurredmyvision"(视觉)+"symphonyofsurvival"(听觉通感)
文化隐喻运用:
"5Krace”象征生命马拉松
''prognosis"(医学预测)与"defiance”(人文抗争)形成二元对立
感敦型藏关
Passage1
(2025・广东肇庆•二模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Simonwasthestaroftheschoolsportsteam.Helovedthethrillofoutrunningthewindandcrossingthe
finishlinefirst.Hisnamewasalwaysonthetipofeveryone'stonguewhenitcametoschoolsportsevents.
Hislittlebrother,Charlie,lovedrunningtooandhadalwaysbeenafanofSimon.Headmiredhisbrother
fromthebottomofhisheart,hiseyeswidewithexcitementasSimonspedpasteveryoneonthetrack.Hewantedto
belikeSimonandfeelthewindinhishairasheran.Charlie?sdreamofbeingarunnergrewlikeatinyseed,but
wasovershadowedbyhisbrother'sbrightlight.HerealizedhecouldneverrunasfastasSimondid:Hisfeetfelt
heavyonthetrack,andhisheartwasevenheavierwithfear.
Astheannualschoolsportsdayapproached,Charliesawthenoticeontheschoolbulletinboard.Hisheart
didalittledance.Arunningrace!Hewantedtobeapartofit,tofeeltheexcitementthatSimonfelt.Witha
tremblinghand,Charliewrotehisnameonthelistandsignedupfortherunningrace,whichwouldtakeplacein
twoweeks.
Thatnight,hecouldn'tsleep,hismindracingwithworries.Hetossedandturned,picturinghimselftripping
andfalling.Whatifhelost?Whatifeveryonelaughedathim?Hecouldn'tcontainhimselfandsobbedquietly.He
feltasifhewasatinybirdtryingtoflyalongsideaneagle.
WhenSimonfoundCharliecryinginhisroom,heknewsomethingwasup."Heybuddy,whafsallthis?”he
askedsoftly,hisfacefilledwithconcern.Charlielookedupathisbigbrotherwithalongsighandsaid,64Iamgoing
tolose,Simon.I'mnotlikeyou.Iwillneverrunasfestasyoudo.”
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1.SimongaveCharlieapatonthebackandsmiled.
Para2.Twoweekslater,Charliestoodatthestartingline.
Passage2
(2025・湖南长沙•一模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
ItwasNewYear'sDay.Imadearesolutiontofindmystray(走失的)dog,Puppy-Rocky.Inthemorning,I
couldhearicyrainknockingthewindows.IsaidaquickprayerforPuppy-Rocky.Hewasouttheresomewherein
thestorm,andIcouldjustfeelit.Sure,ithadbeenthreemonthssincehe'dgonemissing,butIstillhadfaith.Itwas
theseasonformiracles(奇迹).
Thatfall,Puppy-Rocky,mysweetdog,haddisappearedfrommyparents'houseinCalifornia.Hehadbeen
stayingwiththemwhileIwasbetweenapartments.Atthetime,IlivedandworkedinNewYorkCity.Iwasstaying
withfriendsuntilIsignedmylease(租约)onanewplace.Puppy-Rockyhadgottenoutofmyparents5housetwo
daysbeforeIwassettoflybackhometopickhimup.
MymomandIspentthatentirevisitsearchingforhim.Momwasthefamily'sresident"realist”,which
meantshespentawholelotoftimetryingtopreparemefortheworst."He'seitherbeenhitbyacarorbeentaken
inbysomeonewhofoundshesaid.Irolledmyeyes.Momalwayssupportedme,butthistimeshedoubted.
Shecouldhavedonewithalittlemorefaith!
Besides,thoughIcouldn,texplainit,IbelievedI'dseemyPuppy-Rockyagain.Hisbarksneverfadedaway.
He'dbeenhomelesswhenIfirstmethim,anaughtylittledogthathadsurvivedallonhisown.Ifanydogcoulddo
theimpossible,itwasmyPuppy-Rocky.EvenafterIreturnedtoNewYorkCitywithouthimandtheweeks
stretchedintomonths,deepdownIhadthisfeelingthatwe'dbereunited.
Now,homeagainfortheholidays,Iwasdeterminedtopickupmysearch.IgrabbedPuppy-Rocky'scarrier,
loadeditintothecar,andthenaskedmymomtodrivemetotheshelterforthehomelessdogs,hopinghe'dbeen
found.
“Dave,youhavetoberealistic,mymomsaidasweheadedtothegarage."He'sbeengonetoolong.You're
notgoingtofind
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“Don'tyoubelieveinNewYearmiracles?”Iasked.
WhenIsteppedintothelastroomoftheshelter,afamiliarbarkcameintomyears.
Passage3
(24-25高三上•广东深圳•期末)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完
整的短文。
Jeremy,at75,hadbecomeusedtolivingaloneinhisquiethometownwithhiswifegonefor10years.He
filledhisdayswithhousework,withoutanycompany,notevenapet.Inwinter,heoftensatbythefireplace,
wrappedinablanketanddrinkinghotmilk,withlonelinessfillingeverycornerofthehouse.
Warnedbythegovernment,asnowstormwasapproaching.Jeremywasjustabouttogotobedwhenhe
heardastrangenoisefromhisbackyard,cuttingthroughthequietevening.
Confused,Jeremyputonhisthickestcoatandwenttowardsthebackya
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