2025年高考英语复习应用文写作与读后续写精讲精练25.读后续写微技巧3(精炼语言确保首尾照应)

精炼语言确保首尾照应

【真题再现】

(2023·浙江1月高考)

Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend’sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycar

outsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmany

years.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鸟),

desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛网)andwasbarelyabletomove

herwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.

Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebroken

windowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,

closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.

WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbright

eyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempt

tofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoo

thirsty?

AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,she

begantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.

Hovering(悬停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,this

tinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutof

sight.

Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthe

window.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhena

hummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersonto

personuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcall

andwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosay

goodbye.”

注意:续写词数应为150个左右。

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain._____________________________

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【解题策略】

第一步根据续写第一段第一句推出首段续写“三要点”

首句Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.

MythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthehummingbird.Icouldn’t

梗概

helpwonderinghowshewasgettingonnow.

AsmycarneareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescuedthe

第二句

hummingbirdfromspider-webs.

Hadshemanagedtofindherwayhome,orwasshestillouttheresomewherestruggling

尾句

tosurvive?

第二步根据续写第二段第一句推出第二段续写“两要点”

首句Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.

梗概Iturnedaroundtoseethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.

...IwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedasIclimbedintomycaranddrove

尾句

away.

第三步根据“情感线”和“情节线”列出写作关键句

情感线Iwasingreatcomfort→Ifeltasurgeofreliefandawe

Iwenttothefarmagain→mythoughtsdriftedbacktothepastmoment→Irushedto

thedesertedhouse→itwasagreatcomfort→Iwonderedhowshewasgettingon;

情节线

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared→itseemedthatshewas

waitingforme→Iclimbedintomycaranddroveaway

第四步谋篇成文,文字流畅

考场高分作文续写高分亮点秀

Afewweekslater,Iwenttothefarmagain.Asmycar①使用when引导定语从

neareditmythoughtsdriftedbacktothemomentwhenIrescued句。

thehummingbirdfromspider-webs.①Irushedbacktothe②使用benowheretobe

desertedhouse.Itwasagreatcomfortthattheoriginalholeinthedone,语言准确、地道。

windowwasnowheretobefound.②Leavingthehouse,I③句中包括动词-ing短语

couldn’thelpwonderinghowshewasgettingonnow.③Hadshe作状语;动词-ing形式作宾

managedtofindherwaybackhome,orwasshestilloutthere语及how引导的宾语从

somewherestrugglingtosurvive?④句。

Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared.④句中or并列连接两个疑

⑤Aflashofmovementcaughtmyattention.Iturnedaroundto问句。

seethesamehummingbirdhoveringintheair.Itseemedthatthe⑤句中使用了句型“be

birdwaswaitingforme,herbeadyeyeslockedonmineasifabouttodo...when”,意思是

tryingtoconveysomedeep,unspokengratitude.⑥Ifeltasurge“正要做……这时……”。

ofreliefandaweatthesightofthissoundandgratefulcreature,⑥使用了句型Itseems

andIknewthatIwouldalwayscherishthememorieswesharedthat...。

asIclimbedintomycaranddroveaway.⑦⑦句是一个复杂的句式,

第三个and并列连接了两

个句子,其中后句是复合

句,包括宾语、定语和状语

三大从句形式。

【技巧分析】

一、开头6大设计技巧

开头形式真题回放

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolute

副词

darknessruledtheforest.

形容词短Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.AfraidthatImighthurtthe

语lovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalong

非谓语

thestreamtofindthewayout.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Isaidgentlyand

对话式

quietly,“Noonecanchangeyourmind,exceptyourself.”【新高考Ⅰ卷2022】

问答式Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.Theywereworried

thatIwastooselfishtogive.【浙江高考2021】

Thepayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasverytiring,Iwasveryhappyinmy

因果式

heartforIgotsomethingfrommywork.【浙江高考2021】

二、收尾3大设计技巧

收尾形

真题回放

式

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanning

首尾呼forMother’sDay.(首句)

应Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.(尾句)

【新高考Ⅰ卷2021】

Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravel

名言警

farther.(尾句)

句

【浙江高考1月2022】

情感、Itwashisbraveheartandstrongfaiththatcouldmakesomethingunusualhappenfinally.

思想升(尾句)

华【新高考Ⅰ卷2022】

【拓展演练】

1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Laughterissaidtobethebestmedicineinourlife.Nothingworksfasterormore

dependablytobringyourmindandbodybackintobalancethanagoodlaugh.Laughterlightens

yourburdens,inspireshope,connectsyoutoothers,andkeepsyoumorefocusedonthepositive.I

liketolaughandbehappywheneverthereisareasonforit.Crackingjokesusuallymakesus

happyandlight-heartedafteradayofhardwork,andsodomanyfunnyincidentswhichwemay

sometimesexperienceinourdailylife.

However,today,Iwouldliketotalkaboutafunnyincidentthathappenedtomeafewyears

ago,whenIwasstillastudentatprimaryschool.Thatveryincidenttookplaceatabirthdayparty

heldatmyaunt’shouse.Infact,itwasabirthdaypartyheldforoneofmylittlecousins.

Onthatspecialoccasion,everybody,includingallofmyfamilymembers,closerelatives

andsomeofthelittlefriendsofmycousin’s,wasinvitedtothepartyonalovelysummerevening

inordertoenjoytheparty.Bytheway,thepartywassupposedtobeconcludedasearlyas

possible,becauseallthelittleguests,friendsofmycousin’s,neededtoreturntotheirhomessafely

beforeitwasgettingtoolateatnight.So,afterseveralhoursofbusypreparations,theparty

formallystartedataround8pm.Theadultsandthekidsallcameuptothetableandgentlyopened

upthevariouscolorfulgiftboxesonebyonewithaformalceremony.Onceweweredonewith

openingthegiftboxes,thetimecameforustosingthe“HappyBirthdaytoYou”songinchorus,

andweallsangthesonginordertowishaveryhappybirthdaytomylittlecousin.Finallycame

themomentweallhadbeenwaitingforeagerly.Andwewerereadytoopenthecakeboxandcut

thebirthdaycake.

注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Tooursurprise,thecakehadalreadybeencut!

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Hearingwhatmyauntsaid,weexpressedourwillingnesstogiveoursharetothehomeless.

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2．阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasthedayoftheclasselection,amomentIhadanticipated（期待）forweeks.Thistime,

IwasdeterminednottoexperienceanotherdefeatasIhadhadtheyearbefore.Ihadmademore

postersandwrittenabetterspeech.Ihadbeenthroughawholeyearofhighschool,metmore

peopleandmademorefriends.Byworkinghardonclasscommitteeactivitiesallyear,Ihad

provedmyworthevenwithoutajobtitle.

Imademywaytothecenteroftheroom,feelingarushofgrowinganxietyasIpreparedto

addressmylargeclass.Introducingmyselfwithasmileandlistingmyachievements,Ihoped

nobodycouldtellthatmycalmexterior（外表）didnotmatchhowIfeltinside.

AsIdeliveredmyspeech,thewell-preparedtwo-minutetimelimitfeltlikeanhour.

Finishingmyspeechwithaslogan,“Pleasebelievemeandvoteforme,”Ialmostshrank,

realizingitmightnotbeasmartmove.

Imademywaybacktomychair,tryingtorememberhowtositgracefullyinaskirt.My

handswereshakingsomuchthatIhadtroubleholdingontomyspeech.Ibarelynoticedthe

teachercallthenameofmyopponent（对手）,whowasnowwalkinguptoreadhisspeech.Itried

tolisten,tocompare,topredictmychances,butIhadtoomanyotherthoughtsflyingthroughmy

head.

Ilookedatthefacesoppositeme.Myfriendssmiledatmeandgavemeanencouraging

thumbs-upsignwhentheycaughtmyeye.Aseachofthenextcandidatesreadtheirspeeches,I

debatedmychancesinmyhead.

Irememberedmylossthepreviousyear.Iwasdepressedforanentireweekend.Thistime,

Iwouldnotgetmyhopesup.

Finally,itwastimeformetoheaddowntotheofficetoheartheresults.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Astheteacherstartedtoreadthelist,Istoodstill,anticipatingthefinalitem.

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Thenextyear,Ichangedmystrategy.

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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Oneday,mynine-year-oldyoungerbrotherJeffcamehomefromschoolearlierthanme.

WhenIreturnedhome,Ifoundhewasshoutingatourmom—whowasbusycookinginthe

kitchen—abouttheclothesthatneededwashing.

“Mom,whyhaven’tyouwashedmyclothes?”heasked,pointingatthedirtyclotheshehad

takenofftwodaysbefore.“Iwanttowearthemtomorrow,”Jeffadded.However,theclothesthat

hewaswearingstilllookedclean.“Dear,I’llwashitaftercooking,”MomtoldJeff,looking

anxiousandupset.Withoutreplying,Jeffunhappilywenttohisbedroomandclosedthedoor,with

alongface.

IwasshockedaboutJeff’sbadbehaviortowardsMom.Howunsympathetichewas!Our

washingmachinehadbeenoutoforderfortwomonths.Becauseourparentswereonatight

budgetandweretoobusy,theystilldidn’tbuyanewone.Sorecentlyourfamilyhadtowashour

clothesbyhand,whichwastime-wastingandtrulyhardwork.

JustwhenIdecidedtoscold(训斥)mylittlebrother,Dadcamehomefromwork,andItold

himwhathadhappened.

DadwasupsetandfeltsorryforMom,knowinghowhardsheworkedallday.Shewasa

saleswomaninasupermarketanddidallshecouldtosupportourfamily.Often,Dadtriedtohelp

withsomeofthehousework.Hedidn’twantMomtohavetoomuchburden,knowingherheavy

workasasaleswoman.Ialsotriedtosparetimetohelpdohousework,sharingsomeofthefamily

burden.However,Jeffwasalazyandnaughty(淘气)boy,whohardlydidhousework.

Now,ourdaddecideditwashightimetoteachhimalesson.“Jeff,comehere,”Dadcalled

out.“I’vesomegoodnewsforyou.”Jeffimmediatelycameandaskedexcitedly,“What,Dad?”

“YourmomandIaretoobusyrecently.Tonight,Iwantyoutowashyourownclothes,”Dad

smiled.Jeffimmediatelyrefused,shakinghishead.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

“Then,youwon’tgetyourpocketmoneynextweek.I’mserious,”Dadreplied.

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At9pm,Jeffwasstillstrugglingtorinse(漂洗)theclothes,realizingtheworkwasn’teasy

atall.

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4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Shewastheprettiestpuppywehadeverseen,andthewholefamilyimmediatelyfellin

lovewithher.WenamedherOnyxbecauseofherblack,shinyblackcoat.Shespentherfirst

vacationwithuswhenshewasonlytenweeksoldandhadherfirstbathandswimintheSt.

LawrenceRiver.Wehadnocluethatthisamazinglittleballoffurwouldendupbeingourhero.

Asshegrewolder,Onyxbecamemoreandmoreinvolvedinourfamilyactivities.On

hotsummerdays,Onyxenjoyedfloatingontheriverwithusinherownrubbertube(橡皮圈).

Amazinglystandingonthetopofthetube,shesmiledwhileshowingoffherperfectbalance.

Restingherfrontlegsandpawsovertheedgeoftherubbertube,shekepthereyesshutasshe

floateduntilshe’dhadenoughofthewarmsunonherblackcoat.

Oneday,oureighteen-year-olddaughter,Margie,announcedshewasgoingtoswimacross

thebay.Nooneinthefamilywasfreetogoswimmingwithher.Theunwrittenrules,regardlessof

swimmingability,wastohaveacompanioninthewaterwithyou,especiallywhenswimmingthe

widthofthebay.Iwasnotagoodswimmer,soIsaidtoMargie,“TakeOnyxwithyou.”Having

heardhername,Onyxwokeupfromanapandwasreadyforaction.Margiesignedthedogto

followher.Onyxrantothewaternexttoher.Theyenteredthefreezingrivertogetherandswam

sidebysideacrossthebay.

Iwatchedfromthebankastheyreachedthesandbar(沙洲)onthefarshore.Theyresteda

fewminutesbeforedivingintothewaterforthereturntrip.Ifeltuneasyforsomereasonand

continuedtowatchthepairswimsidebyside.

SuddenlyIheardMargiecallingout,“Ihaveacram(痉挛)intheleg!”

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Seeingthepairapproachingtheriverbank,Ibreathedasighofrelief.

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参考答案

1.

Tooursurprise,thecakehadalreadybeencut!What’sworse,almosthalfofthecakewas

missing!Withoutaclueastowhatexactlyhadreallyhappened,weallstartedtolookateach

other’sfaceingreatshock.Thenwesuddenlynoticedmyauntsmilinginacorneroftheroom.

Onceapproachedbyus,shesparednotimeinlettingouthersecretaboutgivingher“fairshare”

ofthecaketoahomelessmaninthestreetjustnow!

Hearingwhatmyauntsaid,weexpressedourwillingnesstogiveoursharetothehomeless.

Weallfeltasenseofwarmthandkindnessspreadingamongus.Wedecidedtojoinmyauntand

cutmorecaketogivetothoseinneed.Aswehandedoutthepiecesofcake,smilesfilledthefaces

oftherecipientsandus.Itwasabeautifulmoment,showingthatevenasmallactofkindnesscan

makeabigdifference.Werealizedthatthisunexpectedturnofeventshadturnedintoa

memorableandmeaningfulcelebration.

【写作分析】本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者参加小表弟的生日聚会，发生了一些意外，生

日会还没开始蛋糕的一半就不见了，大家都很吃惊。得知原因后笑声在蔓延，温暖在增加。

笑声减轻了你的负担，激发了希望，把你和其他人联系起来，让你更加关注积极的一面。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“令我们惊讶的是，蛋糕已经被切开了！”可知，第一段可描写大家看到

切开并且少了一半的蛋糕时的心情、表情以及猜疑，阿姨的微笑揭开谜底。

②由第二段首句内容“听了阿姨的话，我们表示愿意为无家可归的人出一份力。”可知，第二

段可描写得知缘由后，大家愿意帮助更多的无家可归的人，温暖在蔓延，微笑更温暖。此次

生日聚会意义非凡。

2.续写线索：参加生日聚会——一半蛋糕不见了——震惊——揭秘：分给无家可归的人——

更多的人出一份力分发蛋糕——温暖在蔓延——生日聚会意义非凡

3.词汇激活

行为类

①产生重大影响：makeabigdifference/haveabiginfluence

②注意到：noticed/observed

③揭露，泄露：letout/reveal

情绪类

①非常震惊：ingreatshock/ingreatsurprise/withashock

②出乎意料的：unexpected/unpredicted

【高分句型1】Withoutaclueastowhatexactlyhadreallyhappened,weallstartedtolookat

eachother’sfaceingreatshock.(使用了what引导的宾语从句)

【高分句型2】Aswehandedoutthepiecesofcake,smilesfilledthefacesoftherecipientsandus.

(使用了As引导的时间状语从句)

2.

Astheteacherstartedtoreadthelist,Istoodstill,anticipatingthefinalitem.WhenIheard

thenameofmyopponent,allIwantedtodowasgetoutoftheoffice.Tearsrolleddownmyface.

Iwasquitedisappointedandupset.Ihadputinsomucheffort,andcampaignedtirelessly,butstill

failed.Backintheclassroom,Ibowedmyheadinsilence.Myfriendsgatheredroundtocomfort

me.Theyencouragedmenottogiveupandtotryagainthenextyear.Theirwordsbroughtme

strengthandcourageandhelpedmerecognizethatalthoughIlosttheelection,Ihadmade

progress.Icoulddobetternexttime.

Thenextyear,Ichangedmystrategy.Insteadofmerelyfocusingonmyownachievements,I

decidedtolistentotheconcernsandideasofmyclassmates.Onthedayoftheclasselection,I

deliveredaspeechthatnotonlyhighlightedmyqualificationsbutalsoaddressedtheissuesthat

myclassmatescaredabout.Finally,Iwontheelection!Itwasareminderthatperseveranceand

understandingtheneedsofotherscanleadtosuccess.Winorlose,Ihadgrownthroughthe

process,andthat,initself,wasavictory.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述的是作者在第一次参与班级竞选时做了很多的海

报，写了一个很好的演讲，结果却落选了，后来在朋友的鼓励下作者决定继续参与第二年的

竞选，作者意识到必须要考虑到同学们的需求，而不仅仅是列举个人的优势，所以作者决定

改变策略，重新竞选，结果竞选成功，从这件事情中作者意识到坚持不懈和理解他人的需要

可以带来成功。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“当老师开始阅读清单时，我站着不动，期待着最后一项。”可知，第一

段可描写竞选名单公布，我落选，以及落选之后我内心的感受和朋友们对我的鼓励。

②由第二段首句内容“第二年，我改变了我的策略。”可知，第二段可描写我是如何改变策略

以及最终竞选成功及我的感悟。

2.续写线索：名单公布——落选——难过——决心再次竞选——改变策略——竞选成功

——感悟。

3.词汇激活

行为类

①专注于：focuson/concentrateon/becenteredon

②处理：address/dealwith/handle

③突出；强调：highlight/emphasize/stress

情绪类

①失望的：disappointed/discouraged/frustrated

②伤心的：upset/unhappy/unpleasant

【高分句型1】Onthedayoftheclasselection,Ideliveredaspeechthatnotonlyhighlightedmy

qualificationsbutalsoaddressedtheissuesthatmyclassmatescaredabout.(运用了that引导的定

语从句)

【高分句型2】Itwasareminderthatperseveranceandunderstandingtheneedsofotherscanlead

tosuccess.(运用了it作形式主语，that从句作真正主语的结构)

3．

“Then,youwon’tgetyourpocketmoneynextweek.I’mserious,”Dadreplied.Annoyed,

Jefffinallysaid,“Allright.Anyway,washingclothesisapieceofcake.”“Sure,”Isaid,knowing

he’dsoonregrethiswords.Then,Jeffbeganhiswashingwork.Sincehehadseenuswashing

clothesbyhandseveraltimes,heknewthesteps.Afteraddingmanydropsoflaundrydetergent,

heusedhishandstowashtheclothesandsaiditwastrulyeasy.However,whenhebeganrinsing

theclothes,hemetachallenge.Afterherinsedtheclothesseveraltimes,thewaterstilllooked

dirty,havinglotsofbubbles.

At9pm,Jeffwasstillstrugglingtorinse(漂洗)theclothes,realizingtheworkwasn’teasy

atall.“Doyoustillthinkwashingtheclothesapieceofcake?”Dadasked.Jeffshookhishead,

embarrassed.Then,Ihelpedhimfinishtheremainingworkofrinsinganddrying.Afterthat,

inspiredbymeandDad,JeffshamefullyapologizedtoMomforpreviouslyshoutingather.Mom

smiledatus,gladaboutJeff’schange.Afterthatday,wecontinuedtoencourageJefftodo

housework.Now,heloveddoingit;wewereproudhegrewtobeanunderstandingkid.

【写作分析】本文以事件发展为线索展开，讲述了一个家庭故事，其中九岁的弟弟Jeff对母

亲态度粗鲁，不愿意洗衣服，父亲和哥哥决定教育他，让他自己洗衣服，从中体会到家务的

辛苦。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

由第一段首句内容“‘那么，你下周的零花钱就没了。我是认真的’爸爸回答”可知，第一段可

以描写父