福建省2024中考英语话题写作话题五职业与梦想课件

话题五职业与梦想考情分析1写作指导2实战演练3考情分析1写作指导五步写作法——审列扩连查第一步细审题定要点[2022台州改编]毕业之际，学校英文报将举行以“Mydreamjob”为题的征文比赛。

审人称：第一人称2请你根据自己的理想，从下面两个职业中选择一个你所喜欢的理想职业，写一篇英语短文，向校英文报投稿。审主题：自己喜欢的职业审文体：说明文审时态：一般将来时Items(条目)AteacherAscientistReasons⁠

⁠begoodatcommunicating⁠

⁠lovekids⁠

⁠beinterestedinscience⁠

⁠inventnewproductsItems(条目)AteacherAscientistHowtodo⁠

⁠getagoodeducation⁠

⁠learnhowtoteachchildren…⁠

⁠studysciencehard⁠

⁠doscienceresearch…1.Whatdoyouwanttobewhenyougrowup？定要点1：介绍理想职业2.Whydoyouhavesuchadream？定要点2：有此理想的原因3.Howareyougoingtodothat？定要点3：实现理想的做法提示：1.文中必须包括所给的内容要点，可适当发挥；2.文中不能出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息；3.词数80左右(开头已给出，不计入总词数)。MydreamjobWeallhavedreamjobs.

⁠注意事项：

第二步分段落列要点首段：引出主题：介绍理想职业是什么。中间段：陈述选择这一职业的原因并逐条阐述理由。结尾：如何实现梦想：具体做法。第三步扩句子精加工首段：介绍理想职业是什么<错误句>IwantbeascientistwhenIwillgrowup.<一般句>IwanttobeascientistwhenIgrowup.<高分句>1.

Asforme，IwanttobeascientistwhenIgrow

up.

⁠Asforme，IwanttobeascientistwhenIgrowup.

<错误句>Ihavebecameveryinterestinginscience.<一般句>Ihavebecomeveryinterestedinscience.<高分句>2.

Ihavebeenveryinterestedinscienceforalong

time.

⁠Ihavebeenveryinterestedinscienceforalongtime.

中间段：逐条阐述选择这一职业的理由<错误句>Iwantinventnewproductandhopediscovernewthings.<一般句>Iwanttoinventnewproductsandhopetodiscovernew

things.<高分句>3.

Iwanttoinventnewproductstoimprovepeople’s

lifeandIalsohopetodiscoverthemysteriesofthe

world.

⁠Iwanttoinventnewproductstoimprovepeople’slifeandIalsohopetodiscoverthemysteriesofthe

world.

结尾：实现梦想的具体做法<错误句>I’mgoingtostudyhardly.<一般句>I’mgoingtostudyhard.<高分句>4.

I’mgoingtostudysciencereallyhard.

⁠<错误句>Iwillreadmanybookaboutscience.I’mgoingtostudysciencereallyhard.

<一般句>Iwillreadmanybooksaboutscience.<高分句>5.

I’llreadasmanybooksaspossible.

⁠I’llreadasmanybooksaspossible.

<错误句>MydreamwillcometrueunlessIworkhard.<一般句>MydreamwillcometrueifIworkhard.<高分句>6.

IbelievemydreamwillcometrueifIworkhard.

⁠IbelievemydreamwillcometrueifIworkhard.

第四步连句子成短文Mydreamjob<优秀范文>

首段点明自己的梦想职业时使用Asforme，使叙述自然流畅Weallhavedreamjobs.Asforme，IwanttobeascientistwhenIgrowup.Ihavealwaysbeeninterestedinscience.Iwanttoinventnewproductstoimprovepeople’slifeandIalsohopetodiscoverthemysteriesoftheworld.Tobeascientist，Ineedtotakeactionrightnow.First，I’mgoingtostudysciencereallyhard.Second，Iplantodoscienceresearch.Andmostimportantly，I’llreadasmanybooksaspossible.IfIbecomeascientist，IwillliveinBeijingwhereIcancommunicatewithmoreexperts.

IbelievemydreamwillcometrueifIworkhard.正确使用定语从句，句式丰富多彩介绍实现梦想的做法时使用First，Second，和Andmostimportantly进行分条阐述，使文章层次分明第五步查全文得高分依次检查：人称、时态、文体、主题是否正确，要点是否齐全；然后检查句型、单词拼写、标点是否正确。实战演练［2023广东]

假设你叫李明，你打算向某学生英文网站投稿，分享你做过的一个有趣的梦。请你根据以下思维导图内容提示用英文写一篇短文。31.可在思维导图内容提示的基础上适当拓展信息。2.不能照抄原文；

不得在作文中出现真实校名、地名和考生的真实姓名。3.语句连贯，词数80左右。作文的标题和开头已经给出，不计入总词数。注意事项：AnInterestingDreamByLiMingIhaveaninterestingdreamtosharewithyou.

Inmydream，Ihavebecomeascientist！Inmydream，

Ihavebecomeascientist！

WhydidIhavesuchadream？Ithinktherearelotsofreasons.Firstofall，Iusuallytakepartinlotsofscienceweekactivities.Second，afterIwatchedsomevideosaboutChinaSpaceStationandtheChineseastronauts，Ibecamecrazyaboutscienceandspace.Third，myfatherisalsoasciencefan.

Suchadreamhasmadememoreinterestedinscience.Toachievemydream，Ipromisetoworkhardatallmyschoolsubjects.Ibelievemydreamwillcometrue.

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WhydidIhavesuchadream？Ithinktherearelotsofreasons.Firstofall，Iusuallytakepartinlotsofscienceweekactivities.Second，afterIwatchedsomevideosaboutChinaSpaceStationandtheChineseastronauts，Ibecamecraz