专题12 读后续写十句五定法写大纲+四步设计补全情节（原卷版）-2025年高考英语写作常考题型全面突破

专题12读后续写十句五定法写大纲+四步设计补全情节一、两段十句五定法的思路Para1.Para2.定句1:衔接提示句--心理/动作链定句6:衔接提示句--心理/动作链句2:句7:句3:句8：句4:定句9:紧贴原文，交代结局定句5:过渡到P2首句定句10:点睛其中第一段中的句1与句5，第二段中的句1，句4和句5共五句话基本是固定的，其他的句子安排根据具体情况可作轻微调整。【2023年新高考全国Ⅰ&II卷】WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章主要讲述一个学生参加了一个写作比赛并获奖的故事。两句提示分别如下：Para.1

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,

therecamethenews.Para.2

Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeafter

theaward

presentation.根据这两句话可以基本定位，第一段讲自己听到比赛获胜消息后的场景，第二段写将这个好消息与老师分享。因此大致思路会如下列出：Para.1句1：衔接-

令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。句2：主角动作+心理：我欣喜不已。句3：配角动作+心理：我的老师为我感到骄傲句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。句5：衔接Para.2:参加颁奖典礼。Para.2句1：衔接：老师在等我。句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。这两个场景其实具有很大的相似性，区分在于一个沟通是远距离的，一个是面对面的。在打好大纲后，会扩句是写漂亮的必备条件。Para.1句1：衔接-令我意外的是，我在这个写作比赛中荣获了第一名。Tomysurprise,

Iwonthefirstplaceinthecontest.

或WhatsurprisedmemostwasthatIwonthefirstplaceinthecontest.

句2：我欣喜不已Informedofthegoodnews,Iwasveryhappy.

扩句：将心理描写换成其他高级表达。Informedofthegoodnews,a

waveofdelighttaking

holdofme,

joydancedallthewaytomyheart.句3：我的老师为我感到骄傲。My

teacherfeltproudofme.

扩句：加入衔接NosoonerhadI

putdownthecallthanI

calledmyteachertosharethegoodnews,whofelt

extremelyproudofme.

(句式:nosoonerhad+主+done...than...一...就...)句4：主角动作+心理：感谢老师。Ithanked

him

forallthehelphehadoffered.

扩句：套用应用文感谢信的写法(withoutone'shelp,...wouldn'thavedone...)Ithankedhimforallthehelphehadoffered,withoutwhichIwouldn'thaveachievedsuchabigsuccess.句5：衔接Para.2:参加颁奖典礼。Finallycametheaward

presentationday.扩句：加入在颁奖典礼上会做的事情。Finallycametheawardpresentationday,whenIgratefullydeliveredaspeech

withexcitement.

Para.2句1：衔接：老师在等我。Myteacherwaswaitingforme.扩句：增加动作与神情描写。When

Iopenedthedoor,Ifoundmyteacherwaswaitingforme,whoseface

wasglowinglikeadiamond.

句2：主角动作+心理：再次感谢老师I

expressedmygratitudeagaintohim.扩句：加入动作与眼神Lookingintohiseyes,

Iexpressedmy

heartfelt

gratitudeagaintohim,

withtears

mistingmy

eyes.

句3：配角动作+心理：老师恭喜并激励我Hedeliveredhiscongratulationstome

andencouragedme.

扩句：动作拆成三连，加入神情。He

patted

mybacksoftly,deliveredhiscongratulationstomeagainandencouragedmewith

pride,smileonhisfacelightingupthewholeroom.

句4：交代结局：我爱上了写作。Fromthenon,Ifellinlovewith

writing.扩句：补充点内容。Fromthenon,Ifellinlovewithwriting,whoisnowafamouswriterwithhundredsofworks.

句5：点睛：老师的信任与激励成就了我的今天。It'smyteacher's

trustandencouragementthatcontributes

toallmy

achievementstoday.

扩句：套用个“我相信”的句式.Iholdthefirmbeliefthatit'smyteacher'strustandencouragementthat

contributestoallmyachievementstoday.

注意续写时以第一人称描写的文章，其他人物的心理活动不能直接描写，只能通过神情、动作与眼神表达。所以这篇文章中，心理描写只有作者，老师的心理通过动作与神情传达。另外，若想作文获得相对高的分数，要尽可能的避免写对话描写。Onepossibleversion:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.“Iknewyou’dwin!Iamproudofyou.Youmadeit!”hesaidexcitedly.Thencamethebigday.WhenIwasinvitedtothestagetoreceivetheaward,Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.Isaid,“It’syouwhomakemefallinlovewithwriting,mysocialstudiesteacher.Withoutyourrecognitionandguidance,Icouldn’thavewrittenthisarticle.Againthankyouverymuch!”Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Myteacherwaswaitingforme.Holdingmyhands,hesaid“Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”“YouknowIdidn’tlikewritingbefore,butnowIamcrazyaboutit!Iwilltrymybesttocreategoodworks.”Isaidseriously.Sincethen,IhavewrittenmanygoodworksandnowIamafamouswriter.Iowemysuccesstomysocialteacherwhoisabeaconinmylifeontheroadtowriting.二、NSDD四步设计补全情节“NSDD”:N需求D困难+S方法+D结局“评卷员说”情节设计原则优先等级:简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性情节构思-“需求法”(NSDD)(1)N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局(2)历年真题，情节设计分析3.情节设计素材:原文三处(1)串联大意5W1H+P1P2首句，定事件走向，(2)划关键词(角色特点、关键情节)(3)各类描写占比，学写比例与其一致2.“听评卷人说”评卷标准1.“语法、时态、拼写、标点、大小写、叙述连贯性等方面的错误率都与学生读后续写的成绩存在不同程度的正相关性。”2.“普遍存在情节不严密，词汇较低级，句式变化少等情况”3.“...续写内容要与原文融洽，连贯...”4.“阅卷实际操作评分标准，主要依据为是否有正确的句子，原则上就高不就低。20分:内容通顺，细节比较多，允许些许错误。18分:内容通顺，细节少些，语言有些许错误。15分:内容可读，语言错误多。10分:内容基本完整，基本没什么完整的句子。3.续写情节设计，优先顺序原则:“严密、融洽、连贯.简单·稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性(优先)(重要)(挑战)(尝试)总结:情节设计的任务为:简单稳妥其他维度可通过词汇、句式、连接词、各类描写来实现；紧凑型:情节推进+连接成分(逻辑连词+副词+介词短语)；丰富性:各类描写、词汇、句式；故事性:多读英语小故事，了解文化，熟悉常见情节【读原文:5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比】第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定事件走向(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度(列出所有角色)(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)(1)划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词;(2)划出矛盾/需求，关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华”。3.观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致；(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句；(3)占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节走向。构思前:读原文3件事(5WP1P2+角色+描写)Who关键词动作：v情绪/心理：adj.特点：n./phrase角色1角色2角色3What关键词P1P2关键句3W1H故事情节:shortstoryplotsStoryElementsStoryelementsarethepieces,oringredientsthatwhenputtogethermakeupanarrativestory.Identifyingandrememberingstoryelementswillhelpyouunderstandastorybetter.StoryElementscharacters:people/animalsinthestorySetting:when/wherethestorytakesplaceProblem:theconflictormainproblemthatthecharactershaveSolution:howtheproblemissolved续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)Needs需求→Difficulty困难、障碍→Solution行动、方法→Denouement结局(需求解决)续写情节构思:需求法(NSDD)---线索Needs(需求)重点看:首尾段+P1P2给定句2.也可理解为:写作者要写到的内容Difficulties(困难)设置困难，原文找冲突、障碍(5W1H+角色特点)Solutions(方法)1.大转机:通常在P1/P2首句2.原文:所有角色/事物Denouement(结局)1.需求被解决(符合价值观结局)2.升华感悟(按需要来写)【历年真题情节:需求-被解决】年份主题需求Needs结局Denouement困难Difficulties方法和媒介Solutions2024.全国I&II卷陌生司机相助钱包丢失需要钱再次去老地方感谢无法支付车费陌生司机的信任让我感激2023.6全国I&II卷老师鼓励“我”参加写作比赛写作不是我的强项写作比赛获奖无数次修改稿件老师的鼓励让我终身难忘2023.6全国浙江卷救下一只蜂鸟蜂鸟被困废弃房屋中蜂鸟记得再次相见的我人与自然的和谐相处源于救助2022.6全国I&II卷残疾孩子参加越野跑比赛比赛前信心动摇坚持完成比赛学生丧失信心老师的鼓励让他坚持完成比赛2021.6全国I&II卷母亲节惊喜做早餐不会做，厨房乱爸爸帮忙父亲的辛劳和担心，触动了我【2020年浙江卷】写作思路点拨N需求:首尾1-2段+P1/P2给定句->脱险:对抗熊30分钟->我们:拍照->熊:吃到食物S方法:P1/P2给定句+角色事物->等直升机->Ei11行动->喷雾+面包D结局:需求解决+呼应原文->脱险:登直升机->我们拍照->熊冲破栅栏吃食物【最大化利用原文，情节仅需补2-3句】N需求:脱险，对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在:5W1H+角色特点)S方法:等直升机;Ei11行动;喷客+面包(线索在:P1/P2给定句+角色事物)D结局:登机脱险;熊破栅栏吃食物;我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)P1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.1.接着P1(心理/动作链)--意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠6.接着P2(心理/动作链)2.我害怕，不知咋办7.登直升机脱险3.其他喷雾+扔面包8.俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕4.行动有用，熊跑去吃面包9.结局(需求解决)--熊终于冲破栅栏吃食物5.根据P2--熊吃完又折回，惊险时刻10.升华(归类+总结共性）--我拍照，心想:“熊得逞了”OnepossibleversionPl:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Thenwerealizedthatthesprayhadonlyangeredhimevenmore,forheseemedmuchfiercerthistimeandviolentlypushedthefencelikemad.Myheartracedwildly,notknowingwhattodo.Atthiscriticalmoment,Elligrabbedseveralpiecesofgarlicbreadandthrewthemoverthefence.Itworked!Thebearstoppedtheattackandrantothebread.Butitwasn'tlongbeforeheateupallthebreadandcamebackagain.P2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopter.arrived,"Thankgoodnesswearesaved!"Ellicriedout.Oncethehelicopterlanded,wegotontoitinnotime,excitedandrelieved.Whenweweresafeonthehelicopterupintheair,Iwasamazedtospotthatthebearhadfinallytorndownthefenceandrantowardsthefoodweleftbehind.Iquicklytookoutthecameraandphotographedtherarescene-wewererobbedbyapolarbear!【辽宁省2024-2025学年高三上学期10月大联考】InabusystreetofNewYorkCity,twostrangers,EmilyandJack,foundthemselvesonanunexpectedjourneyofkindnessandconnection.Emily,ayounggraphic(图案的)designer,washurryinghomeafteralate-nightshiftwhensheaccidentallydroppedherbag,scattering(散落)itscontentsontothesidewalk.Thescattereditemswereherworklaptop,herlatestdesigndrawings,hermother'smedicationandsomeotherthingsthatwerecrucialtoEmily.Thewindwassostrongthatitcouldhaveblownherbelongingsawayatanymoment.Tiredout,shekneltdown,tryingtogatherherscatteredbelongings.Justthen,Jack,amiddle-agedmanwithagentlesmile,approachedher.“Letmehelpyouwiththat,”Jackoffered,hisvoicewarmandreassuring.“Oh,thankyousomuch!”Emilyrepliedwithembarrassment.Astheypickeduptheitemstogether,theystruckupaconversation.Emilysharedherstoryofabusyweek,mentioninghowhermotherhadalwaysbeenapillar(支柱)ofsupportforherandherten-year-oldsistersincetheirfather'searlypassing,asourceofunconditionalloveandwisdomthathadshapedtheirlives.Jack,inturn,talkedabouthisrecentretirementandhisdreamsofhostinghisownphotographyexhibition,showcasingthebeautyhehadcapturedthroughhiscameraovertheyears.Suddenly,Emily'sphonerang.Itwashersister,panic-stricken,informingherthattheirmotherneededimmediatemedicalattention.Emily'sfacepaled,andherhandsstartedtoshake.Jackasked,“Iseverythingalright?”“Mymother...sheneedsme,butIdon'tknowhowtogettothehospitalquickly.Ihavenocar.”Emilysaid,tearswellingupinhereyes.Withouthesitation,Jacksaid,“I'lltakeyouthere.Mycarisparkednearby.”Whenthey