2-09-续写段落的8种首句接话技巧

2023年新高考英语读后续写提分技能2.09续写段落的8种首句接话技巧背景背景回顾1如何写好读后续写在高考中博取阅卷老师的眼球获得梦寐以求的高分？如何让学生的作品在高考中脱颖而出获得高分？这是很多老师和学生一直在不懈努力的课题。那么，读后续写的开头如何写呢？可以使用哪些写作技能和手法？我们知道，一个好的故事开头就好比是一堂成功的课的导入，能够迅速抓住学生和老师们的兴趣，并且愿意听下去，跟着授课老师的思路走。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定会让读者大倒胃口，恹恹欲睡。“wellbegunishalfdone！”可见，写好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么，在时间紧迫的考场上如何写出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从语法手段和写作涉及的内容来探索。方法策略方法策略2续写段落的8种首句接话技巧1.用副词显现做出动作反应时的时间特征等例如：(2016.10浙江卷)Para1：Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.【分析】用时间时间副词承接所给首句中的“itgettingdarkagain”，同时衔接后文的环境描写“thedarknessruledtheforest”。副词衔接自然、顺畅。2.用形容词（短语）凸显人物的情感情绪例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.【分析】用形容词短语“Desperateandhopeless”凸显了人物的情绪状态，与后面的动作“kneltdown”一起再现了情境中的人物的精神状态。（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Weakasshewas,shestruggledtoherfeet,continuingsearchingforassistance.【分析】用“状态形容词+as/though引导的倒装句”结构体现了人物早上起来后的精神状态。（3）(2018.06浙江卷)Para1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.AfraidthatImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature,Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse.【分析】用“情绪形容词+从句”结构阐释了人物见到兔子后的心理反应。（4）(2018.06浙江卷)Para2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.【分析】用并列的表示心理状态的形容词，体现了人物心力交瘁的状态。3.用分词（短语）体现人物的心理变化等例如：（1）(2016.10浙江卷)Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.【分析】用“现在分词+情绪形容词”结构体现了人物失望的心理状态。（2）(2016.10浙江卷)Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Feelingrefreshed,shecontinuedtowalkalongthestreamtofindthewayout.【分析】用“现在分词+状态形容词”结构传递了人物早上醒来后的精神状态。4.用直接引语增强情境效果例如：(2017.06浙江卷)Para1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim."Getintothecar."PaulshoutedatMac.【分析】用含有祈使句的直接引语与首句提示中的“abruptlystopped”形成呼应，进一步烘托了紧张的情境。5.添加背景描写以烘托场景例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para2:Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Ilookedoutofthecarwindow,windingrivers,loftymountains,sunnybeachesanddeepvalleysholdingmeentirelyintheirfascination.【分析】用“视觉+环境描写+拟人修辞”结构与首句提示语中的“lotsofgreatsights”遥相呼应，再现了美丽风景对视觉的冲击效果。6.引入新动作创造新的情境例如：(2017.11浙江卷)Para1:Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Dadexchangedaglancewithme.WhynotcamptosatisfyMom?【分析】用“动作描写+问句衔接”结构承接首句提示语创造了一个新的情境，即“露营”。7.借助声音效果增强描写功效例如：BOOM,CRASH!Thewindwashowlingoutsideofmyhouse.Wewerehavingaterriblethunderstorm.Iwasveryscared.【分析】用“howling”这一声效进一步拓展了首句所设定的情境效果。8.用疑问句引出新的话题或对事件的新的看法例如：Whydoestroublealwaysfollowmearound?DoIhavea"kickme"signonmybackorsomething?【分析】用一般疑问句承接首句的特殊疑问句，进一步凸显了作者对“trouble”的看法。实践强化实践强化31．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Iwastenthesummermydadhelpedmebuymyfirstten-speedbicyclefromasecond-handstore.Iputup$60ofmygrasscuttingandsnowshoveling(铲)money,andmydadputuptheotherhalf.Iwouldpayhimbackininstallments(分期付款)overthenextsixmonths.Althoughitwasabitoutofstyle,itwasmytickettotheadultworld.Ispentthatsummerandautumnriding.Iwasabletoridetoeverycorneroftown.However,mysisterLiz,aprisonerofherfive-speedbicycle,neverhadachancetokeepup.JustbeforetheChristmasdeadlinetopaymydadback,wewerehitwithseveralsnowstorms.Thisallowedmetoshovelenoughdrivewaystopayoffmydebt.Iwasnowofficiallyabikeowner;itwasafeelingunlikeanyother.Whilemymomanddadwerefantasticparents,theyalwayspassedoffgloves,sneakers,andshirtsas“presents”.ThencamethatfatefulChristmasmorning,myfathergavemeausedportablerecordplayer.Iwasexcited.However,myexcitementwasshort-livedaftermydadtookmysistertothegarage.There,onthesteps,stoodabrandnewten-speedbicycle.Ididn’thearherscreamsofjoy-allIcouldhearwasthenoisyengineofthelawnmower,theendlessscraping(刮擦声)ofthemetalsnowshovelonconcrete.I’dgonethroughfartoomanyhoursofhardworkformyusedbikewhileLizgothershinnynewmachinelessthanaweeklater.“Let’sgoforaride,Rob!”Lizsang,mydadholdingthebikeuprightasshegotontheshiningleatherseat.“Toosnowytoride,”Irefused,pushingtherecordplayerfartherawayfromme.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Iseethed(生闷气)fortherestoftheday._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Reflectingonmydad’swords,Ifiguredoutwhathemeant._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Iseethed(生闷气)fortherestoftheday.

Ilockedmyselfinmybedroomandavoidedtalkingwithmyfamily.Noticingmylowspirits,mydadpulledmeasideandasked,“Everythingokay?”Actually,itwasthelastthingIwantedtotalkabout.Withalltheangeranddisappointmentexplodinginmyheart,Ifinallycried,“It’snotfair.Iworkedsohardformybike,andit’snotevennew.HowcouldLizgetabrandnewbikewithoutdoinganythingforit?”Hearingmywords,mydadpattedmyarmgentlyandsmiled.“Wegaveherthebikesothatshecouldridewithyou.Actually,it’sagiftforyou.”Reflectingonmydad’swords,Ifiguredoutwhathemeant.Afterthesnowmelted,IpushedmybikeoutonceagainbutthistimeIinvitedLiztoridewithme.Wereallyspentawonderfuldayonbike.IhadneverimagineditwouldbesoexcitingandjoyfulwithherridingbesidenowthatLizcouldkeepup.Fromthenon,werodeallovertowntogethereveryday.GraduallyIrealizedthatwealmostdideverythingtogether!LizandIbecametruefriends.ThatbrandnewbikewasnotagiftforLiz—itwasagiftforme.Myfatherhadgivenmethegiftofmysister’scompany,whichI’vetreasuredeverydaysince.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，主要讲述作者通过半年辛苦的劳动挣到了一辆二手自行车，而他的妹妹却只用了不到一周的劳动就得到了一辆新的自行车，这让作者感到很不公平。1.段落续写：①根据第一段首句内容“那天剩下的时间我一直在生闷气。”可知，第一段可描写作者生闷气之后父亲对他的开导和解释。②根据第二段首句内容“反思父亲的话之后，我明白了他的意思。”可知，第二段可描写作者认真思考了父亲的话之后的做法。2.续写线索：生闷气——父亲开导——理解父亲的话——和妹妹一起骑车——感谢妹妹的陪伴3.词汇激活行为类①注意到：notice/see②爆发：explode/erupt情感类①令人兴奋的：exciting/thrilling②高兴的：joyful/happy【典型句式】【句式1】Actually,itwasthelastthingIwantedtotalkabout.（由省略连词that引导的定语从句）【句式2】Wegaveherthebikesothatshecouldridewithyou.（由sothat引导的目的状语从句）【句式3】Afterthesnowmelted,IpushedmybikeoutonceagainbutthistimeIinvitedLiztoridewithme.（由After引导的时间状语从句）【句式4】IhadneverimagineditwouldbesoexcitingandjoyfulwithherridingbesidenowthatLizcouldkeepup.（由省略连词that引导的宾语从句）【句式5】GraduallyIrealizedthatwealmostdideverythingtogether!（由that引导的宾语从句）【句式6】Myfatherhadgivenmethegiftofmysister’scompany,whichI’vetreasuredeverydaysince.（由which引导的非限制性定语从句）2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。AsIsatonthebuswaitingtoarriveatschool,thesunshining,Ijustsattherefullofexcitementreadytoenjoythefirstdayofspring.Atlast,thebusstoppedandIstartedmyday.ThewholedayIwaswaitingforonething,noonbreak.Asthedaypassedby,Iheardthebellrangandeveryonerushedoutofthedoor.Ihurriedandatelunchjusttogetoutside.AssoonasIwasout,myclosefriend,Rileycalledmeovertoplaybasketball.Weallstartedplayingandtimeflewbyasweheardthetimekeeperyell,“10moreminutes.”Fromthatpointon,thegamespedup.Scoreafterscore,thecompetitionprocesswasmoreintense.Ipassedittomyteammate,Austin,andhedisheditbackasIpulledupashot.Ifeltasiftheworldaroundmewerebarelymoving,andallIconcentratedonwastheballgoingtothehoop(篮筐).NotknowingIwaspushedbackhard,Ihittheground.Ahugepainenteredmyleftankle.Iwantedtoscream,butIdidn’t,hearingthepeoplearoundmeshoutforhelp.IjustlaythereasRileycameovertopickmeupandAustinfetchedawheelchairfromtheschoolclinic.Bothofthemhelpedmesitonthewheelchair.ItseemedlikethewholeschoolcircledaroundmeasIwasbeingpushedaway.ThemomentweenteredtheclinicwhereIalwaysfeltnervous,Ididn’tthinkmyanklehurtasbadlyasitdidjustnow,soIsaid,“I’mokay.”Thentheyhadtosendmebacktoclasswithoutanytreatment.TherestofthedayIfeltmyankleswelling(肿)upandIthoughtofhowstupidIwastosaythatmyankledidn’thurtintheclinic.“Ishouldhavegonehome.”IthoughttomyselfasIwasthrownthroughthisterriblepain.Afterschool,Iworriedhowtogobackhome.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。JustthenIfoundRileycomeinwithanicepackinhishand.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Aswewentout,weweresurprisedtofindAustinholdingsomemedicinaloil.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】JustthenIfoundRileycomeinwithanicepackinhishand.Fromhislook,Icouldeasilyreadhisconcern,whichinstantlybroughttearstomyeyes.Heaskedifmyankleswelled,hisvoiceobviouslyfullofcareandanxiety.Inoddedhelplessly,eyesautomaticallysettlingonmyachingankle.Handingmetheicepack,hetoldmeitcouldhelprelievethepainandreduceswellingattheearlystage.SomovedwasIthatIextendedmyheartfeltgratitudetohim.Hejustsmiled,sayingthatweweregoodfriendsandofferingtosendmehome.Aswewentout,weweresurprisedtofindAustinholdingsomemedicinaloil.“IusuallyusethiskindofoilwhenIgethurtanditdoeswork.Youcanhaveatry.”hesaidwithsincerity.Allofasudden,IfeltIwasthehappiestpersonintheworld.Ihuggedmyfriendstightly,joyfultearsrollinginmyeyes.Blessedwithsuchfriends,IfeltIhadsomuchtobegratefulfor.Jokingaboutmybasketballskill,theysentmehome.【写作指导】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在中午吃完午饭后走出去，好朋友Riley叫作者过去打篮球，比赛很激烈，作者在比赛中被推倒，左脚踝一阵剧痛，Riley过来扶作者，Austin从学校诊所拿了一辆轮椅，把作者推入了诊室，作者认为自己没事，后来脚肿了，作者担心自己该怎么回家。1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“就在这时，我发现Riley手里拿着一个冰袋走了进来。”可知，第一段可描写Riley对作者的关心和帮助。②由第二段首句内容“当我们出门时，我们惊讶地发现Austin手里拿着一些药用油。”可知，第二段可描写Austin给作者药用油以及作者的感想。2.续写线索：关心地询问——给冰袋——给药用油——感想3.词汇激活行为类①询问：ask/inquire②递：handsb.sth./passsth.tosb.③拥抱：hugsb./embracesb.情绪类①感动：moved/touched②感激：begrateful/bethankful【典型句式】[句式1]Fromhislook,Icouldeasilyreadhisconcern,whichinstantlybroughttearstomyeyes.(由关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句)[句式2]SomovedwasIthatIextendedmyheartfeltgratitudetohim.(部分倒装句)3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整短文。Tinawasseventeenyearsoldandalwaysworeabrightsmile.Thismaynotseemthatunusualexceptthatshesufferedfromaconditionthatlefthermusclesstiffand,forthemostpart,unmanageable.Becauseshehadtroublespeaking,itwasthisbrightsmilethatreflectedhertruepersonality—agreatkid.Tinausedawalkermostofthetimetohelpherthroughthecrowdedschoolhallways.Alotoftimespeopledidn’tspeaktoher.Maybeitwasbecauseshelookeddifferentandtherestofthestudentsdidn’tknowhowtoapproachher.Tinausuallybroketheicewithpeopleshemetinthehallswithabig“Hi.”Oneday,theassignmentwastomemorizethreestanzas(诗节)ofthepoem“

Don’tQuit.”IonlymadetheassignmentworthtenpointssinceIfiguredmostofmystudentswouldn’tdoitanyway.WhenIwasinschoolandateacherassignedaten-pointhomeworkassignment,Iwouldprobablyhaveblownitoffmyself.SoIwasn’texpectingmuchfromtoday’steenagerseither.Tinawasintheclass,andInoticedalookonherfacethatwasdifferentfromthenormalbrightsmile.Thelookwasoneofworry.“Don’tworry,Tina,”Ithoughttomyself,“it’sonlytenpoints.”ThedaytheassignmentcameduearrivedandasIwentthroughmyroster(花名册)myexpectationsweremet,asonebyoneeachstudentfailedtorecitethepoem.“Sorry,Mr.Krause,”wasthestandardreply.It’sonlyworthtenpointsanyway...right?“Finally,infrustrationandhalfkidding,Ideclaredthatthenextpersonwhodidn’trecitethepoemperfectlyhadtodroponthefloorandgivemetenpush-ups(俯卧撑).注意：1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式作答。Tomysurprise,Tinawasthenext.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Whenshefinished,astudentasked”Tina,whydidyoudothat?It’sonlyworthtenpoints!"________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Tomysurprise,Tinawasthenext.Sherose