作文 03 甘肃卷 - 三年(2019-2021)中考英语满分作文解析

作文03甘肃卷2021年真题在线学习一门新的语言不是一件容易的事情，不过万事都有规律可循。请根据思维导图提示的语言学习经历和经验，以“Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?”为题，写一篇英语短文。要求：1.应包含思维导图提示中所有要点，可适当进行拓展；2.词数：80词左右；3.书写工整规范；4.标题、首末段已给出，不计入总词数，无需抄写在答题卡书面表达作答区域；5.文中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?Whatmakesagoodlanguagelearner?Therearesomethingsthatgoodlanguagelearnersdoandsomethingstheydon’tdo.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Don’tforgetthatit’snevertoolatetobecomeagoodlanguagelearner.考题解析【详解】1.题干解读：题目要求根据思维导图的提示，写一篇题目为“Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?”的短文。2.写作指导：本文时态为一般现在时为主，人称主要为第三人称。根据思维导图所给的要点提示进行写作，可适当发挥，注意表达清楚自己的观点，并给出合理的理由和建议来支撑观点，写作时注意语句通顺、语法正确、条理清晰。满分范文Howcanwebecomegoodlanguagelearners?Whatmakesagoodlanguagelearner?Therearesomethingsthatgoodlanguagelearnersdoandsomethingstheydon’tdo.First,don’tbeafraidofmakingmistakes.Peopleoftengetthingswrong.Goodlanguagelearnersnoticetheirmistakesandlearnfromthem.Then,dogroupactivities.Peopleuselanguagetocommunicatewithotherpeople.Also,besuretouseadictionary.Goodlanguagelearnersoftenusedictionariestocheckthemeaningofwordstheydon’tknow.What’smore,goodlanguagelearnershavefunwiththelanguage.Watchafilm,listentosongs,playvideogamesorreadabook.Atlast,thinkinthelanguageyou’relearningoutsidetheclassroom.Don’tforgetthatit’snevertoolatetobecomeagoodlanguagelearner.2020年（甘肃兰州市）真题在线假如你是李明，你的英国朋友Peter得知你即将初中毕业，来信询问你的一些情况，请你给他写一封回信，要点包括：1.感谢关心；2.收获与感受；3.期待共同努力，实现梦想。要求：1.80词左右；2.条理清晰，行文连贯，书写规范，内容上可适当增加细节；3.信中不得出现具体的校名、人名等信息；4.开头和结尾已给出，但不计人总词数。提示词语：usedto；makeprogress；develop-habit；growup；makeeffort；beproudofDearPeter,I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Yours,LiMing考题解析【详解】1.

题干解读：题目要求根据提示词语和问题，写出自己初中三年的收获以及感受，以及自己对未来的期待，可以适当的发挥，写作时要运用正确的英语表达，要选用恰当的词汇和短语。

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写作指导：写作时要与已给出的开头融合起来，用第一人称和其他人称相结合来写作，时态以一般现在时为主，要做到要点齐全，无单词拼写和语法错误。满分范文DearPeter,I’mverygladtoreceiveyourletter.Thankyouforyourconcern.Iwillsoongraduatefromthejuniorhighschool.Inthesethreeyears,Ihavelearnedalot.Iusedtogetpoorgrades.Butwiththehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,Ihavemadegreatprogress.Myparentsareproudofme.Now,Ihavemanygoodlivinghabits.Myparents,teachersandclassmatesallhelpmealot.WhenIgrowup,Iwanttobeateacher.BecauseIhopeIcanhelpthosechildrenwhoneedhelp.Iwillmakeeffortstorealizemydream.Wehopewecanworktogetherinthefuture.Yours,LiMing2020年（甘肃金昌、武威市）真题在线父母是我们最亲的人，但我们有时会在与父母沟通时遇到困难。请根据所给思维导图的提示，以"HowtoCommunicatewithOurParents"为题用英语写一篇短文，谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法。要求：1.文中需包含思维导图中的主要内容；2.句子及篇章结构准确、连贯、书写规范；3.需做适量拓展；4.词数：80词左右。(标题和第一段已给出，不计入总词数；无需抄写在答题卡对应作答区域)HowtoCommunicatewithOurParentsCommunicationwithparentsisoneofthefirstthingswehavedonesincewewereborn.Aswegrowolder,we'llfindit'snoteasytocommunicatewithourparentsopenlyandeffectively.Sowhatshouldwedowhencommunicatingwiththem?Herearesomeofmyideas.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考题解析【详解】题干解读：这篇作文要求以HowtoCommunicatewithOurParents“怎样和我们的父母交流”为题，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈与父母沟通的技巧和做法。题目中给出了一个思维导图，学生们写作前，应先仔细观察思维导图，明确图中展示的内容以及文章的结构，然后组织语言，并对细节进行适当拓展，用正确的英语表达出来。审题可知，这篇短文应用一般现在时态、第一人称叙述。例文点评：这是一篇优秀的作文。首先短文内容完整，包括了题目中要求的所有信息，没有遗漏要点。结构清晰，短文第一段是题目中给出的，然后作者写了一段，这一段中用了比较好的词体现文章的层次，如Firstly,Secondly,Besides和Finally，条理清晰，而且上下文衔接比较紧密。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范，用词准确。句式结构完整，符合英语表达习惯。除简单句外，短文中还使用了状语从句、定语从句等复合句以及非谓语动词、祈使句等结构。整篇文章表达流畅，意思连贯。高分亮点：短语：makealistof；findout；disagreewith；littlebylittle；besure；carefor。句型：why引导的定语从句；If引导的条件状语从句；动名词作主语；that引导定语从句；inwhich引导定语从句；祈使句；一般现在时的被动语态。满分范文HowtoCommunicatewithOurParentsCommunicationwithparentsisoneofthefirstthingswehavedonesincewewereborm.Aswegrowolder,we'llfindit'snoteasytocommunicatewithourparentsopenlyandeffectively.Sowhatshouldwedowhencommunicatingwiththem?Herearesomeofmyideas.Firstly,wecanmakealistofthingsourparentsandwedisagreeaboutmost.Trytofindoutthereasonwhywedisagreewitheachother.Accepteachother'sideaslittlebylittle.Ifwestillhavedisagreements,we'dbetternotgettooangry.Secondly,weshouldtalkwiththemmore!Sharingideascanmakeuscloser.Besides,weshouldalsolearnhowtoreallylisten.Listeningisaskillthatmustbelearnedandpracticed.Finally,besuretobepolite.Weareafamilyinwhicheveryoneislovedandcaredfor.2020（甘肃天水市）真题在线“绿水青山就是金山银山。”请你结合自己平时保护环境的一些做法,以“HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautiful"为题,写一篇英语短文。写作要求:1.表达清楚,语法正确,上下文连贯;2.80词左右(开头已给出,不计入总词数);3.文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名等信息。参考词汇:environment;pollution;reduce;sorttherubbish(垃圾分类)Thecleanwaterandgreenmountainsareourtreasures.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________考题解析【详解】1.题干解读：文章是一篇话题作文。主要以“HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautiful”为主题展开描写，主要从保护环境，节约资源，垃圾分类等方面做详细的描述，写作时要注意文章的层次感和语言的逻辑性要合理。2.例文点评：文章分三段描写。第一段引出绿水青山很重要，我们应该如何做；第二段给出一些具体的做法，第三段给出自己的一些观点，从生活出发要怎么做。整个文章结构完整思路清晰，语言表达流畅，意思明确，通俗易懂。3.高分亮点：短语：dealwith；takeactions；avoiddoing；forexample；inmyopinion；pickup。句型：because引导的原因状语从句；when引导的时间状语从句；if引导的条件状语从句。满分范文HowtoMakeOurHometownMoreBeautifulThecleanwaterandgreenmountainsareourtreasures.It’sourdr