高考英语专项复习之读后续写：个人成长类-丢手机的孩子抓住机会成长变化

读后续写：个人成长类--丢手机的孩子，抓住机会成长变化

读后续写

第二节（满分25分）2024学年第一学期浙南名校联盟第一次高三联考

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ava,afifth-grader,longedforacellphonelikeherpeersbuthadtowaituntilshewas

thirteen.Topersuadeherparents,shepennedanessay,demonstratingshewasmatureenough

foracellphone.Herparents,impressed,gaveheranoldphone.

"Ava,"herdadsaidseriously,/zacellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames.It'sasignificant

responsibility.Youmustkeepyourphonesecure.Youmustsilenceitinpublicspaces.You

must...”Helistedallofthewaysthatshehadtoberesponsiblewithherphone.ButAva,too

busywithchoosingtheperfectwallpaper,downloadingappsandchattingwithherbestfriend

Sarah,onlyhalf-listened.

Overtheweekend,Sarah'smomtookthegirlstoamovie.NormallyAvaavoidedhorror

films,butSarah'spleadingwordswithfunnymemes（表情包）hadsomehowconvincedAvathat

themoviemightactuallybeenjoyable.Beforethemoviestarted,Sarah'smominstructedthe

girlstosilencetheirphonesoutofrespectforothers.Asthemovie'stensionbuilt,Avafound

herselfgrowingincreasinglyuncomfortable.zzlneedtogotothebathroom/'Avawhisperedto

Sarah.

Afterthemovie,whilewaitingforSarah'smomtofetchthecar,Avafeltasinkingfeeling.a\

can'tfindmyphone!”sheshrieked,pattingdownallofherpockets.Panic-stricken,Ava

searchedherbag,yetherphoneseemedtohavevanished.Avagotintothecar,herstomachin

knots.

“Areyougoingtotellyourparents?"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback.Avawas

silent,hermindracingwiththeconsequences.Shecouldenvisionherparents'disappointed

facesandharshwords.Shefearedthatthisincidentmightleadtoherparentstakingawaythe

privilegeofhavingaphonealtogether

Astheyarrived,Avaclimbedoutofthecarandtrudgedhome,herheartheavywithwhat

hadhappened.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右：

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Paragraph1:ThemomentAvawalkedin,herparentsgreetedherwithasmile.

Paragraph2:ThenherparentsdroveAvabacktothecinema.

析•重视原文的素材整理

01原文精致赏析，必须积累素材

原文分析：红色定从/定语；蓝色宾从；黄色状从，只标连词；下划线标黄单词为需掌握积

累单词；从句类会用别於标注；需积累都分黑体加粗下划线、（定语从句1）

第二节（满分25分）

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Ava,afifth-grader,longedforacellphonelikeherpeersbuthadtowaituntilshewas

thirteen（状从）.Topersuadeherparents,shepennedcmess。%demonstratinjshewasmature

enoughforace〃p/）oae（非谓语动词短语+宾从做伴随动作）.Herparents,impressed,gaveher

anoldphone.

“Ava,"herdadsaidseriously,/zacellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames.Itsasignificant

responsibility.Youmustkeepyourphonesecure.Youmustsilenceitinpublicspaces.You

must..."Helistedallofthewaysthatshehadtoberesponsiblewith/7urp6oae（定语从句）.But

Ava,toobusywithchoosingtheperfectwallpaper,downloadingappsandchattingwithherbest

friendSarah,onlyhalf-listened（此处不是句子、是主语的补充说明）.

Overtheweekend,Sarah'smomtookthegirlstoamovie.NormallyAvaavoidedhorror

films,butSarah'spleadinawordswithfunnymemes（表情包）hadsomehowconvincedAvathat

themoviemightactuallybeenjoyable.Beforethemoviestarted,Sarah'smominstructedthe

girlstosilencetheirphonesoutofrespectforothers.Asthemovie/stension状语从句），

Avafoundherselfarowinaincreasinqlv非谓语动词）“Ineedtogotothe

bathroom,“AvawhisperedtoSarah.

Afterthemovie,whilewaitingforSarah'smomtofetchthecar（状从的省略）,Avafelta

sinkinafeelina."Ican'tfindmyphone!”sheshrieked,pattinadownallofherpockets（mE谓语

动词做伴随动作）.Panic-stricken,Avasearchedherbag,yetherphoneseemedtohave

vanished.Avagotintothecar,herstomachinkr70ns（独立主格）.

“Areyougoingtotellyourparents?"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback.Avawas

silent,hermindracinawiththe（?0〃5£。1/6〃「2$（独立主格）.Shecouldenvisionherparents/

disappointedfacesandharshwords.Shefearedthatthisincidentmightleadtoherparents

takingawaytheprivilegeofhavingaphonealtogether］宾从）

Astheyarrived（状闪,Avaclimbedoutofthecarandtrudaedherheartbeai/ywith

whathad6aMe（独立主格+宾从）.

02原文所涉及的高中语法现象

语法现象：

-时态使用：全篇以一般过去时描述过去发生的事件，并用一般现在时表达普遍事实，

如掌握时态切换与一致性对高考英语阅读和写作

"Acellphoneisn'tjustforfunandgames."0

都很重要。

-从句：文中有许多宾语从句，^rr"Avafoundherselfgrowingincreasinglyuncomfortable"

中的“自己越来越不安〃的发现表述；"SarahwhisperedtoAvaontheirrideback”中“在回程中

悄悄告诉她〃的句式等。

-情态动词：如"must"表示责任感，强调手机的使用规则；"might”表示不确定性和对电

影的期待。

-非限定动词结构:如"tosilencetheirphones"表明要"把手机调成静音〃;"choosingthe

perfectwallpaper〃表达进行的动作，用作描述。

03原文中涉及的词汇整理

常见搭配：

-longfor+名词：表示对某事的渴望。如"Avalongedforacellphonelikeherpeers”。

-asinkingfeeling:指内心的一种不祥之感，适合表达心情起伏。

-patdown/searchpockets/bags:指对物品的寻找。

-trudgehome:指在疲惫或心情沉重下走回家。

可积累的词语短语：

-demonstrate*(v.)*表达，展示

-近义词：show,illustrate

-反义词：hide,conceal

-例句：Shedemonstratedherabilitytohandleresponsibility./Theexperimentdemonstrated

thenewmethod'seffectiveness.

-convince*(v.)*使信服

-近义词：persuade,assure

-反义词：discourage,dissuade

-例句:Herwordsconvincedhimtojointheteam./Theyfinallyconvincedheroftheir

sincerity.

-significant*(adj.)*重大的，有意义的

-近义词：important,meaningful

-反义词：trivial,insignificant

-例句：Thisisasignificantmomentinhislife./Herdecisionhadasignificantimpactonthe

outcome.

-responsibility*(n.)*责任

-近义词：duty,obligation

-反义词：irresponsibility,neglect

-例句：Responsibilitycomeswithtrust./Hehasaresponsibilitytohisfamily.

续写思路的构建和思考

01构思的步骤

在完成读后续写时，要先思考文章的情节发展与情感主线，本文中Ava丢失手机后可能

产生的心理变化和行动可以作为续写的重点。

构思步骤：

1.情节推演：想象Ava回家后是否会告诉父母？她如何面对父母的反应？

2.心理描写：Ava的内心挣扎和压力，可以通过细腻的内心描写表现出她对父母失望的恐

惧。

3.情感升华：续写可以加入她因误解或自责而成长的心路历程，最终可能主动承担责任或

重新赢得父母的信任。

02实施要点

实施要点：

-情绪表达：善于使用情绪性词汇，比如"nervous,”"regretful,”"conflicted”来展现心理过程。

-关键动词：用"confess,""admit,""reveal”等表示坦白的词。

-环境渲染：用“silencefilledtheroom”表现紧张气氛，"thecomfortingglowofhomelights”

呈现家庭温暖。

03情绪、动作、心理和环境描写的推荐短语

-情绪:anxioussmile,heavy-hearted,amixtureoffearandhope

-动作:hesitatedbeforeknocking,slowlyapproached,nervouslyglancedaround

-心理：asurgeofguilt,tornbetweenhonestyandfear,mentallypreparingfortheworst

-环境：dimlylithallway,thequiethumofthecar,distantlaughterechoingfromthestreet

续写范文欣赏及分析

开放式续写练习及语法点分析、思路分析

AsAvaslowlyopenedthefrontdoor（状从），shecouldfeelherheartpoundina.

Shewantedtoconfessaboutthelostphonebutdreadedherparents'reaction.

Wit/）ste。,herauiltgrewheavier.Finally,hermothernoticedher

unusuallyquietdemeanorandaskedgently,"Honey,iseverythingokay?"

/i/alookeddown,tomeethermover'sryes（形容词短语做补语）.

Afterabriefoause,shemurmured,"Mom,I...Ilostthephone.I'msosorry."Her

wordstumb/edout,filledwithrearetandwo/r，（filled非谓语动词做后置定

语）."Iwascareless,andIdidn'tlistentoDad'sadvice.Kmreally,reallysorry."

Hermothor'sexoressjonsoftened,andshe。/creedacomfort/皿hando/i

Ava'ss力ou/der・"Thankyoufortellingusthetruth//shesaid.Ava'sdad,who

hadoverheard（是从joinedthem.Thouqhhisfaceshowedahintof

如。。。。用1/7?6/?七（状从）,hemanaaedareass人"皿sm〃e.

“Wetrustedyouwithaphonebecausewebelievedyouwerereadyforthe

responsibility（宾以）.Mistakeshappen,andwhat'simportant（主从）isthatyou

learnfromthisexperience（表从）；'hesaidgently.

Avafeltealimmerofreliefbutalsoareneweddetermination.Shepromised

tobemoreresponsibleinthefutureandtookextrachorestosaveupand

eventuallyreplacethelostphone.Overtime,herparentssawherovowM。sense

ofresponsibility,andmonthslater,onherbirthday,theysuco/7sedherwitho

new0

Thistime,however,Avamadesuretofolloweveryruleherparentshad

set■（表从）.Shekeptherphonesecure,silenceditwhennecesrary,andhandled

itwithcare.Throughthisexperience,Avalearnedthatresponsibilitywasn/tjust

aboutowningsomething,butaboutrespectingherparents/trustandherown

commitments.

1.宾语从句

-句型示例："Iwascareless,andIdidn'tlistentoDad'sadvice."

-分析：宾语从句用作动词的补充说明，如"listentoDad'sadvice〃作为

“didnf的宾语。

2.非限制性定语从句

-句型示例:"Hermother,whohadoverheard,joinedthem."

-分析：“whohadoverheard”作为定语修饰mother,提供补充信息。

3.动名词作主语

一句型示例:"Mistakeshappen,andwhat'simportantisthatyoulearnfrom

thisexperience."

-分析：动名词短语“learnfromthisexperience”作为句子补充，强调经历对

成长的重要性。

4.不定式作宾语补足语

-句型示例："Theybelievedyouwerereadyfortheresponsibility."

-分析：“tobereadyfor”用作"believed”的宾语补足语，表明信任。

常见搭配与可积累语料

1.Feelone'sheartpounding-形容紧张和内疚感

-例句：Asheapproachedthestage,hecouldfeelhisheartpounding.

-例句：Thenewsmadeherheartpoundwithexcitement.

2.Makeapromisetodo-承诺做某事

-例句：Shemadeapromisetoherselftoworkharder.

-例句：Hepromisedtobemorecarefulnexttime.

3.Throughthisexperience-表示通过某经历学到某事

-例句：Throughthisexperience,helearnedthevalueofpatience.

-例句：Shematuredalotthroughthisexperience.

生词短语

1.Responsibility

-词，性：noun

-词义：责任

-近义词：duty,accountability

-反义词：irresponsibility,neglect

-例句：Takingcareofapetisabigresponsibility.

-例句：Heacceptsresponsibilityforhisactions.

2.Determine

-词性:verb

-词义：决心，决定

-近义词：resolve,decide

-反义词：hesitate,doubt

-例句：Shedeterminedtoimprovehergradesthissemester.

-例句：Aftercarefulthought,hedeterminedtochangehiscareerpath.

3.Relief

-词性：noun

-词义：宽慰，解脱

-近义词：comfort,consolation

反义词：distress,anxiety

-例句：Hefeltahugereliefafterthetestwasover.

-例句：Herwordsbroughthimgreatrelief.

4.Significant

-词，性：adjective

-词义：重要的，显著的

-近义词：importan3noteworthy

-反义词：insignificant,trivial