2024-2020年上海高考英语作文试题汇编 （解读及范文）

上海卷

2024年高考英语作文真题

【上海6月秋季考】

Directions:

WriteanEnglishcompositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.

你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你们学校英语报开设了一个“排忧解难”专栏，你的校友Lynn发出

求助，请根据她的来信写封回信：

写作要求：1.提出你的建议；

2.说明你的理由。

Lynn的来信大意内容如下：

I'mahighschoolstudent.1wanttodosomecooking,butmyparentsdon'tallowmetodoso.Howcan

Ichangetheirmind?

【文本解读】

这篇应用文写作任务是一个典型的“问题解决型”作文，旨在通过具体情境模拟，考察学生如何针对实际

问题提出合理建议并阐述理由的能力。题目设定在明启中学这一具体环境中，通过“排忧解难”专栏的设

立，为学生提供了一个表达自我、帮助他人的平台。Lynn的求助信则直接引出了作文的核心问题——

如何在父母反对的情况下实现自己的烹饪愿望。具体来说，Lynn渴望学习烹饪，但她的父母却不同意

她这么做。她的主要诉求是希望找到一种方法来改变父母的看法，从而获得烹饪的机会。

【思路点拨】

此考题写作要求明确，内容上基本不会离题，结构上可分为四段完成写作。

第一段：介绍段，简述已了解情况，并引出下文；

第二段：提出你的建议1+理由；

第三段：提出你的建议2+理由；

第四段：总结段，概括你的建议，并表达祝福。

提出的建议方向可以根据家长反对做饭的理由来逐个应对：

家长反对理由1：安全上的顾虑

建议1：按照菜谱，从简单菜开始做起，学会正确使用刀具。

家长反对理由2：浪费学习时间或者浪费食材

建议2：利用视频或网文向他们解释做饭的好处：提高独立生活能力；释放学习压力；获得满足感和成

就感。

写作背景他ndnotallowedtocookbyparents

Introduction

写信目的offersuggestionstochangemind

建议1talktoparentsaboutthehobby

Mainbody1理由屐开(蹴)parentshaveconcernsoverpersonallife

理由展开儆法)explain:1)whyyoulikecooking,2)whatbenefitscookingbrings,3)thatyouwillbesafe

2024秋考作文建议2cookwithparents

parentscanteachcooking(tofurthermakesureyouknowwhatyouwillbedoing)

Mainbody2理由展开

achancetobondwithparents(tomakethemtrustyouinyourchoiceastheirchild)

理由展开actionsspeakslouderthanwords

理由展开effortandpatiencewillhelpwinparentsover

Closing

祝愿goodluckwithcooking

【满分范文】

范文一

DearLynn,

Fmwritinginresponsetoyourletterseekingadviceonhowtoconvinceyourparentstoallowyoutocook.I

completelyunderstandthefrustrationthatcomeswhenyou'reunabletopursueyourhobby,andI'dliketooffer

somesuggestions.

Firstly,youcouldhaveaheart-to-hearttalkwithyourparents.Theymayhavetheirownconcerns,suchasthe

impactofthishobbyonyouracademicperformanceorpotentialsafetyissues.Itwouldbebeneficialtoexplainto

themwhyyouwishtocookandhowitcanbeavaluablelifeskill.Assurethemthatyouwillmaintainabalance

betweenleisureandstudy,andtakeallnecessarysafetyprecautionstoeasetheirworries.Additionally,consider

invitingyourparentstocookwithyou.Thisservesadualpurpose:theycanprovideguidanceandassistancein

thekitchen,andsharingthemealcanserveasawonderfulopportunityforfamilybonding.Seeingyourdedication

firsthandcouldbethekeytogainingtheirapprovalandsupport.

Ibelievethatwithabitofeffortandpatience,youwillbeabletopersuadeyourparents.Afterall,they

undoubtedlycareaboutyourwell-being.Goodluckonyourculinaryjourney!(198)

Yours,

LiMing

范文二

DearLynn,

I'msorrytohearaboutyourworriesandIunderstandhowfrustratedyouare.Hereissomeofmyadviceonhow

toconvinceyourparentstoallowyoutocook.

Firstofall,communicateisoneofthebestwaytosolveaproblem.Youaresupposedtotalktoyourparents

honestlyinsteadofkeepingsilent.Itwouldbebeneficialtoexplaintothemthereasonswhycookingappealstoyou

andtellthemyourfeelingofsatisfactionwhenyouseethedishesmadebyyourself,whichwillmakethem

empathizewithyou.Meanwhile,youcanmakeapromisethatyouareoldenoughtotakeallnecessarysafety

precautions,allayingtheirconcernaboutyoursafety.Furthermore,youcanhighlightthehealthylifestyle.Tolive

healthilyandhappily,cookingisabasicskillforteenagersashomemadefoodismoredeliciousandnutritiousthan

takeawayfood.

Onlythenwillyouavoidarguingwithyourparentsandletyoudowhatyoulike.Ibelievepatientconversationwill

contributetotheirunderstanding.Ihopemysuggestionsarehelpfulandyouwillenjoycookingsoon.

Warmregards,

LiMing

范文三

DearLynn,

Iunderstandyourfrustrationwithyourparentsnotallowingyoutocook.Theyareprobablyconcernedaboutyour

safetyorperhapstheyworrythatitmightdistractyoufromyourstudies.However,Ibelieveyoucanchangetheir

mindswiththerightapproach.

Firstly,youcouldassurethemthatyouwilltakeallnecessarysafetyprecautions.Explaintoyourparentsthatyou

understandtheirconcernsaboutsafetyandthatyouwillbeverycareful.Youcanpromisetousesafecooking

techniques,keepthekitchenclean,andalwayshaveanadultsuperviseyou.Additionally,showingthemthatyou

havedoneyourresearchonkitchensafetyandpropercookingmethodscouldhelpalleviatetheirworries

Secondly,youcanhighlighttheeducationalbenefitsofcooking,patientlytellingthemthatcookingisnotjustalife

skillbutalsoawaytolearnaboutnutrition,culture,andevenchemistry,andthereforeitcanbeaneducational

hobby.Ibelievethatbydoingso,yourparentswillrealizethatcookingactuallycomplementsyourschoolwork

insteadofoccupyingyourstudytime

Inconclusion,byaddressingtheirsafetyconcernsandemphasizingtheeducationalbenefitsofcooking,youmight

beabletoconvinceyourparentstoletyoucook.Ihopemysuggestionsarehelpfulandthatyou511soonbeableto

enjoycookingathome.(219words)

Bestregards,

LiMing

范文四

DearLynn,

It*sgreattohearthatyou*reinterestedincooking.Herearesometipstohelpyoupersuadeyourparents.

Startbyshowingthemthatyouunderstandtheirconcerns.Theymightworryaboutyoursafetyorthemessitmight

create.Acknowledgethesepointsandassurethemthatyouwilltakeallnecessaryprecautionsandcleanupafter

yourself.

Next,demonstrateyourresponsibilityinotherareas.Ifyourparentsseethatyouareresponsiblewithyour

homework,chores,andotheractivities,theywillbemorelikelytotrustyouwithcooking.

Lastly,youcansuggeststartingwithsimple,no-cookrecipes.Thisway,yourparentscanseethatyouarecapable

ofhandlingfoodsafelyandthatcookingdoesn'talwaysinvolveusingdangerousequipment.

Ihopetheseideasarehelpful.Remember,patienceandclearcommunicationarekey.

Bestwishes,

LiMing

范文五

DearLynn,

I'msorrytohearaboutyourworriesandIunderstandhowfrustratedyouare.Hereissomeofmyadviceonhow

toconvinceyourparentstoallowyoutocook.

Firstofall,communicateisoneofthebestwaystosolveaproblem.Youaresupposedtotalktoyourparents

honestlyinsteadofkeepingsilent.Itwouldbebeneficialtoexplaintothemthereasonswhycookingappealstoyou

andtellthemyourfeelingofsatisfactionwhenyouseethedishesmadebyyourself,whichwillmakethem

empathizewithyou.Meanwhile,youcanmakeapromisethatyouareoldenoughtotakeallnecessarysafety

precautions,allayingtheirconcernaboutyoursafety.Furthermore,youcanhighlightthehealthylifestyle.Tolive

healthilyandhappily,cookingisabasicskillforteenagersashomemadefoodismoredeliciousandnutritiousthan

takeawayfood.

Onlythenwillyouavoidarguingwithyourparentsandletyoudowhatyoulike.Ibelievepatientconversationwill

contributetotheirunderstanding.Ihopemysuggestionsarehelpfulandyouwillenjoycookingsoon.

Warmregards,

LiMing

【上海1月春季考】

假如你是明启中学的高三学生李华。你们学校将邀请文学教授TomJohnson为学生做讲座，你负责

与他联系。他给你发了一封电子邮件（内容如下），请根据他在电子邮件中提出的要求写一封回信。

DearLiHua,

Thankyouforinvitingme.Formylecture,I'dliketoknowaboutwhatliteratureinterestsChinese

studentsmost.Pleasegivemetwoquestionsyou'dlikemetoanswerandtellmewhyyouchoosethese

twoquestions.Lookingforwardtoyourreplyandhopingtoseeyousoon.

Yourssincerely,

TomJohnson

【文本解读】

该题目要求学生思考并选择两个具体的话题，话题需要是中国学生感兴趣的。本文拓展度高，对文学

有所了解的同学，可以选择具体一些的话题，比如文学研究热点或者中外作品对比等。也可以从相对

宽泛的角度切入，讨论语言学科和文学的关联、文学在学习生活中扮演的角色等。

本文是写给教授的邮件，格式和语言需要正式，结构上要有清晰的开头、主体和结尾。可在主体部分

的论证中加入一些具体的例子来增加论点说服力，也可以加入个人对所选话题的看法和兴趣，让文章

更真实、更具有个性。

【思路点拨】

开头部分：

礼貌地回应教授的邀请，并表达对他即将来校讲座的期待。

简要提及已收到他的邮件，并准备就他所提问题给予回复。

正文部分：

回应教授关于中国学生文学兴趣的问题：

可以概述中国学生普遍对哪些文学类型感兴趣，如古典文学、现代文学、外国文学等。

提及一两个具体的例子或趋势，以增加回答的丰富性和具体性。

提出两个问题：

第一个问题：选择与中国学生兴趣紧密相关且能引发深入讨论的话题。例如，可以询问教授关于“中国

古典文学中的经典人物形象如何影响现代文学创作”或“在全球化背景下，中国文学如何保持其独特性和

影响力”。

解释选择原因：说明这个问题为何重要，它如何与学生的学习需求、文学鉴赏能力的提升或跨文化交

流能力的培养等相关联。

第二个问题：选择一个稍微宽泛但具有启发性的问题，以便教授能从多个角度进行阐述。例如，“未来

文学发展的趋势会是什么？科技如何改变我们的阅读方式和文学创作？”

解释选择原因：阐述这个问题如何激发学生的想象力和探索欲，以及它如何帮助学生理解文学与社会、

科技之间的紧密联系。

表达对讲座的期待：

强调这两个问题对于学生们来说具有重要意义，并期待教授能在讲座中给予深入、有趣的解答。

结尾部分：

再次感谢教授的关注和即将的讲座，表达对他到来的热烈欢迎。

礼貌地结束信件，并附上自己的姓名。

【满分范文】

范文一

DearProfessorTomJohnson,

Thankyouverymuchforyourpromptresponse.InconsideringtheinterestsofChinesestudents,I

believethefollowingtwoaspectsofliteraturewouldresonatewellwiththem.

Chinesestudentsoftenshowakeeninterestinliteraturethattriggerscross-culturalexperiences.

CouldyousharesomeWesternliteraryworks,comparingthemwithChineseliterature?This

comparisonwouldnotonlyenhanceourunderstandingofthesimilaritiesanddifferencesbetween

culturesbutalsoinspireadeeperappreciationforliteratureonaglobalscale.

Besides,literaryworksthatreflectcontemporarysocietalissuestendtocaptivatestudents*interests.

Couldyoudiscussliterarypiecesthataddresscurrentsocialproblems,particularlythosethat

encourageprofoundreflectionanddiscussion?Thisapproachwouldallowstudentstoconnect

literaturewiththeirdailylivesandgainamoreprofoundunderstandingofsocietalchallenges.

Thesequestionshavebeenselectedastheytouchuponthemesthattypicallycapturetheinterestof

Chinesestudents,guidingustowardmoreprofoundreflectionswithintherealmofliterature.We

lookforwardtomeetingyou.

Bestregards,

LiHua

范文二

DearProfJohnson,

Thanksforyouremail.Havinglearntyouhaveacceptedourinvitationandthatyouarewondering

whatliteraturefascinatesweChinesestudentsmost,I,onbehalfofallthestudentsatMingqiHigh

School,amwritingtoexpressourgreathonortohaveyouandraisetwoquestionsforyourkind

reference.Accordingtomyinterviewandsurveywiththestudents,thetwomostfrequentlyposed

questionsinclude:Whatroledoesliteratureplayinourmentalandspirituallifeinthecontemporary

worldwhereweareconfrontedwithsomanydistractions?Andwhatarethecommonfeaturesofall

theliterarymasterpiecesaroundtheworldthroughoutthehistory?Thereasonswhyweoptforthese

twoquestions,itseemstome,areasfollows.Asfarasthefirstquestionisconcerned,givenweare

livinginasocietywhereweboastnumerousmeans,apartfromliterature,toentertain,educateand

informus,whyweshallresorttoliterature,whosepatternsappeardrearyanddull,isbeyondmany

ofus.Whenitcomestothesecond,despitethefactthatwehavebeenexposedtoliteraryworks

sinceourchildhood,westillcannotgraspthewholelandscapeandspiritofliterature.Lastbutnot

least,you,anauthorityonliterature,havetheveryexpertiseandknowledgetoresolveourpuzzles.

(220)

Bestregards,

LiHua

范文三

DearProfessorJohnson,

Iappreciateyourswiftresponse.IntermsoftwofacetsofliteraturethatappealtostudentsinChina,I

supposethatnovelsthathavebeenadaptedtomoviesandabriefintroductionofliteraturegenreare

themostengagingaspects.Therefore,onequestionishowtoreadandcomprehendnovelsadaptedto

moviesandTVshows.Theotheriswhatthemajortypesofliteratureare.

WithregardtowhyIproposetocovertheissueofnoveladaptation,Ibelievethatthemajorityof

studentswouldopttoreadnovelsaftertheyhavewatchedthemoviesofthesametitlessuchasLord

ofRings,Narnia,andPercyJackson.However,thesenovelshavecomplicatedstructure,profound

culturalimplicationaswellascomplexlanguageuse,whichmeansthatwithoutyourprofessional

instruction,itisunlikelythathighschoolstudentsinChinacanreadthroughandunderstandevery

detailinanoveleveniftheyhaveseenthemovieadaptationversion.Ifyoucanguidethemhowto

approachthesenovelsinthelecture,IguessthattheycanbemoreinterestedinreadingEnglish

novels,whichwillhelpimprovetheirEnglishtestscoresaswell.

AsforwhyIaskyoutointroducetheliteraturegenre,themainreasonisthatChinesestudentsare

notfamiliarwiththeclassificationofliteratureexceptnovels,inadditiontowhichthereare

biographiesandautobiographies,poetry,plays,aswellasliterarycriticism.Thesetypesofliterature

arecrucialpartsinliterature,whichiswhyitwillbebetterifyoucanincludetheintroductionof

themduringtheprocessoflecturing.Inaddition,alargenumberofstudentsarecuriousabout

celebrities9lifeandtheirstoriesofachievingsuccess.Thus,recommendingsomebiographiesand

autobiographiesthatareworthreadingwillbeahighlightinthelecture.

Thankyouforyourtimetoreadmysuggestions.

Bestregards,

LiHua

髓文四

DearProfessor,

Greetings!Wearedelightedthatyouwillbedeliveringaliterarylectureatourschool,andwe

believeitwillsignificantlyenhancestudents9literaryknowledge.Aftercollectingeveryone's

questionsandpointsofinterestinliterature,wehavesummarizedtwoquestionsthatwehopeto

receiveyourexpertinsightson.

Thefirstquestionrevolvesaroundthesignificanceofclassicalliteratureinthedigitalage.Weare

eagertounderstandhowthesetimelessworksresonatewithcontemporarysocietyamidsttherapid

developmentofourera.Doesthespiritualessenceoftheseliteraryworksstilladapttotheprogress

ofmodemsociety?Forinstance,Shakespeare'splayswerewritteninthe16thcentury,yethis

profounddepictionsofhumannatureanduniversalthemeslikelove,jealousy,power,andmorality

stillresonateintoday'ssociety.However,somenovelsmaybecloselytiedtospecifichistorical

events,andastimepasses,thesignificanceoftheseeventsmaydiminish,leadingtheseworkstolose

resonanceinlatereras.

Thesecondquestionconcernstheroleofmulticulturalisminshapingliterature.Giventhatcultural

integrationhasbecomeaprominentfeatureofourera,multiculturalismplaysacrucialandpositive

roleinenrichingplotlines,deepeningcharacterportrayals,andpromotinggreaterinclusivityand

diversityintheliteraryfield.However,thereisaconcernthatwritersmaysometimesoverly

emphasizeculturaldifferences,leadingtotheformationofstereotypes.Howshouldweapproachand

addressthisissue?

Weeagerlyanticipateyourlecture,hopingitwillprovideinsightsintothesequestions.Thankyoufor

yourtimeandexpertise.

Bestregards,

LiHua

范文五

DearprofessorTomJohnson

IhopethisE-mailfindsyouwell,andwearethrilledtohavethisopportunitytoinviteyoutodeliver

alectureonliterature.Inresponsetoyourrequest,Ihaveinquiredmyclassmatesandidentifiedtwo

questionsthatencapsulateourcollectivecuriosityandenthusiasmforliterature.

Thefirstquestionrevolvesaroundthesignificanceofliteratureonpreservingandevolvingthe

culturalidentity.Asisacknowledged,literaturesymbolizesthevalue,beliefconventionandculture

ofaparticularphaseofasociety.Sinceculturalidentitycontributestothenationalconfidenceand

prosperity,weareeagertoexplorehowliteraturecanbeinstrumentalinmaintainingandflourishing

it,thus,retainingtheuniquenessinthismulticulturalworld.Wecontendthatyourexpertisecan

provideuswithvaluableinsightintothisquery.

Thesecondquestionprobesintotheimplicationsofinterpretingliteratureonindividualgrowth.

Giventhatliteratureholdsintrinsicvalueandplaysaprominentroleinshapingourcomprehending

oftheworldandourselves,weareintriguedbyexploringthebenefitsthatdelvingintoliteraturecan

bringus.Forexample,Bookslike"WarandPeace^^byLeoTolstoynotonlytellatalebutalsobring

theNapoleonicWarstopersonalreality,whichtofeeltheallowscontemporaryreaders

reverberationsofthepastinthecomfortofthepresent,henceenhancingourunderstandingofhistory.

Nowthateveryliteraryworkchallenges,comforts,andquestionsintheprocessofbeinganalyzed,

wearekeenonscrutinizingmorewithyouandzealouslyexpectyourdeepandall-round

clarifications.

Wefaithfullyappreciateyourwillingnesstoengagewithusandeagerlyreckononparticipatingin

theInspiringdiscussions.

LiHua

2023年高考英语作文真题

【上海6月秋季考】

假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同

学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇物

品介绍，内容须包括：

（1）对该物品的简要描述；

（2）你选择该物品参展的原因。

【文本解读】

【思路点拨】

1.读题、审题一背景为英语节活动（第一段一句：背景句描述），正文核心为物品介绍（第二段内

容：介绍+原因），核心诉求是原因陈述。

2.明确结构一“引入一简要描述（如何描述：涉及到背景，时间，地点，原因，场合，外观，颜色）

—原因论证一结尾”

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writinQVc

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范文一

Uponhearingthattherewillbnan“Englishfestival“heldinourschoolandeachofusstudentsareinvited

toprovideanitemfordisplay,Ifeelquiteexcitedandinterested.Asforme,Iwouldliketopresentmy

belovedmountainbicycle.

TheridingbikewassenttomebymygrandfatherasabirthdaygiftwhenIwasnineyearsold.Withared

colorandhasacurveinline,thebicycleaccompaniedmethroughoutmychildhoodandcreatedan

amountofhappinessandjoy.

Ihemainreasonwhylselectbicycleasanexhibitisbecauseitrelatestoeverychild,forweareblessed

withpleasantmemoriesbackintheinnocentyears.Besides,byshowcasingthebicycle,Iaimtoexpress

mydeepaffectiontowardsmygrandfather,whonotonlysetanexcellentexampleformetobeabetter

man,butalsohelpnurtureandcultivatemygoodmanners.

Allinall,pettyasthebicycleis,（倒装）itisthisbicyclethat（强调句）recordsthememorableand

unforgettabletimewhichIspentwithmygrandfather.Ihopeallofyouwouldenjoymydescription

andamreallythankfuloftheceremonyheldbymyschool.

范文二

Upontheschoolauthorities9appealforanexhibitfromeachstudentfortheexhibition"Happy

Childhood",Icannotwaittosharewithyouthisclassbook,whichisfullofmychildhoodmemories.

TheclassbookisanotebookIreceivedfrommyheadmasterwhenIgraduatedfromtheprimary

schoolcontainingscoresofpagesofmemories,wishes,signaturesandcontactinformationofmy

classmateswhohadbeenwithmeforfivewholeyears.Insignificantasitseemsintermsofmonetary

value,IhavekeptitfbrsevenyearsandIshallkeepittotheendofmylife.

ThereasonswhyIwouldliketoexhibitthisitem,asfarasIamconcerned,aremultiple.Firstand

foremost,itremindsmeofmybestfriendsduringthebesttimeofmylifetillnow,withwhomI

played,laughedandsometimescriedtogether.Inaddition,itservesasabiographyofmyselfthat

relatesmyfruitfulandeventfulchildhoodthroughtheaccountsofmyclassmates.Lastbutnotleast,

throughtheexhibition,Idohopeourschoolcanpresenteachofus,justasmyprimaryschooldid,a

classbooktocollectandrecordourmemoriesofseniorhighschool.

范文三

I'mWuLei,aseniorhighschoolstudentfromMingqiMiddleSchool.Onhearingthatourschool

willholdanexhibitionwiththetheme“HappyChildhood”,IwouldliketoexhibitmybelovedLeap

Frog.Thisspecialgiftwasgiventomebymymother,whenIwasfiveyearsold.Heaccompanied

methroughmywholechildhood.Thefrog?sattractivefeature-itsglossyblackeyes,abigredmouth,

softgreenfurmadeadeepimpressiononmedespitetheyearsofwearandtear.

ThereasonwhyIhavechosenthisstuffedtoyasmyexhibitionlieinthreeaspects.Firstly,Leap

frogplayedasignificantroleinmychildhood.Hewasnotjustatoy,butanintimateanddearest

friend.WheneverIwasdepressedandcameintoconflictwithmypeers,Ifeltlikesharingmy

sadnesswithhim.Afterpouringoutmyhearttohim,IfeltasifIrelievedaheavyload.Hence,his

companymademecomfortableandrelaxed.Inaddition,LeapFrogtoldmeavarietyoffascinating

storiesassoonasIpressedtheredbutton.Throughtheexperienceoflisteningtothestories,Igot

pleasureandsatisfactionandonlythroughthesevividandinterestingstoriescanIfullsensethe

beauty,theenthusiasmandlovefrompeople,lifeandworld.What?smore,thepresentwitnessedmy

colourfulandjoyfulchildhood.NevercanIforgetthememoriesofsimplepleasureandexperience

ofspendingtimestayingwithhim.

Idon'tthinkthisgiftismorespecialthananyelse's,butitisagoldtreasuretome,beautifying

mylife.Throughthisexhibition,Iaimtoevokeasenseofnostalgiaandappreciatewonderful

childhood.

范文四

I'mWuLei.Forthe"HappyChildhood"exhibition,IhavechosentoexhibitmycherishedBarbie

doll.Thisspecialdollwasgiventomebymymother,andshehasbeenmyconstantcompanion

throughoutmyentirechildhood.Withherbeautifulblackhair,pinkskirt,andcaptivatingbigeyes,

sheexudesasenseofeleganceandcharm.Ienjoyeddressingherupandexperimentingwith

differentstyles,makingherevenmorestunning.

TheBarbiedollholdsimmensesentimentalvaluetome,assheplayedasignificantroleinmy

childhood.Shewasnotjustatoy;shebecamemyconfidanteandmydearestfriend.Duringmoments

ofsadnessorconflictwithmypeers,Iwouldturntoherandpouroutmyheart.Shepatiently

listened,providingsolaceandcomfortduringmyloneliestanddarkestdays.Herpresencewasa

sourceofstrengthandunderstanding.

Reflectinguponmychildhood,memoriesofthisbelovedBarbiedollneverfailtosurface.She

remainsasymbolofunwaveringcompanionshipandasourceofjoy.Regardlessofthe

circumstances,shewasalwaysthere,faithfullyaccompanyingme.Throughthisexhibition,Iaimto

sharethesignificanceofthisdollinmylifeandevokeasenseofnostalgiaandappreciationforthe

simplejoysandcherishedconnectionsofchildhood.

范文五

MynameisWuLei,aseniorhighschoolstudentfromMingqiMiddleSchool,andIwillbe

participatinginourschooVsEnglishexhibitionthemedon"HappyChildhood".Frommychildhood

collection,Ihavechosenapreciousitem-mymuch-belovedteddybear.

Thissoftandcuddlybearhasbeenmyconstantcompanionformorethanadecade.Itwasgifted

tomebymydearauntwhenIwasjustfiveyearsold.Thebear'sendearingfeatures-itsglossyblack

eyes,rednoseandsoftbrownfur-haveremainedunaltereddespitethewearandtearofyears.

ThereasonwhyIhavechosenthisstuffedtoyasmyexhibitisthatitevokesprofoundmemories

ofmyhappychildhoodandbringsbackafloodofdelightfulnostalgia.Thischerishedteddyhas

stoodbymysidethroughalltheupsanddownsofgrowingupandhasneverletmedown—always

providingunconditionalcomfortandsolacewheneverIneededit.Itwasnotonlymyplaymateand

comforterbutaconfidantwhoheardallofmychildhoodconfessionsandsecrets.

Inconclusion,thisseeminglysimpleplushbearisatreasuretroveofemotionsandmemoriesfor

me.ItrepresentsaninnocentandhappytimeinmylifethatIwillcherishforever.

【上海1月春季考】

Directions:WriteanEnglishcompositionin120-150wordsaccordingtotheinstructionsgivenbelowinChinese.

假如你是高三学生李华，你的英语口语课外教Tom希望改变学生上课互动不积极的情况，委托你了解同学

的想法。经过沟通交流，你了解到有些同学对课上话题不感兴趣，有些同学怕犯错，不敢开口。请你写封

信给Tom:

1.简单描述同学们的反馈

2.向Tom提出建议并说明理由

【文本解读】

作文考察的题目话题依旧是紧扣校园生活中常见的-课堂，也就是更多地考察同学们的内容展开。换句话

说，因为熟悉的常考话题相对来说同学们积累的专题词汇就相对充分，因此更加需要考生通过内容来彰显

习作的优势。

针对内容如何突出，在写作教学中最最关键的提分点就是要求在开头和结尾处凸显核心词（注:此处核心词非

主题词）-要求能够达到在开头结尾即能表达中间段的核心内容，这样既可以在开头结尾避免一味套用模板

句造成失分，二来也可以方便阅卷老师快速掌握文章核心内容，从而体现文章内容方面的优势。比如本次

的考题，应该在审题时反向思维，优先考虑如何解决thelackofinterest&fearofmakingmistakes,从这个角

度去构思全文最核心的建议核心词（也可以理解成对应的品质），并且将其在开头和结尾处进行凸显。

【思路点拨】

作文主体分为两部分，第1部分根据要求，同学们的反馈(studentsfeedback)应简要描述即写明题目背景中

的A对课上话题不感兴趣(notinterestedindiscussingthetopic/foundthetopicsnotreallyrelevant)和B怕犯

错不感开口(afraidofmakingamistakewhenspeaking)即可。这部分是来自同学的直接反馈，表达上侧重流畅，

自然，注意不要用过于繁复的表达方式。

第2部分可按照“分析问题"和“解决问题”的模式去写。问题即“互动不积极lackofengagement/social

interaction”(用engagement更好一点，强调缺乏学生的参与)。注意给出的suggestion必须要针对学生的反

馈提出，有的放矢。A:havetopicsthatarecommonandaskforstudents5opinionliketakingaballottovoteona

listoftopics.B:Talkslowly,useawhiteboardornotepadtospellthingsout;giveenoughpreptimebeforepractice

section,letstudentdomockconversationsbythemselves等等

最后注意信件是写给外教老师的，开头结尾用词当礼貌得体，结尾句最好同时addressK2两部分提到的

内容，1offermorefeedbackdetailsuponfurtherrequest2hopefulthattheclasswillimproveinthefuture.

topicsnotinteresting

1.Feedback

afraidofmakingamistake

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