新高考英语一轮复习练习考向41 读后续写之外貌性格环境描写(原卷版)

考向41读后续写之外貌、性格与环境描写在读写续写过程中，在沿用原文语言特点的情况下，围绕原文主旨，续写部分可利用恰当的词语描述人物的外貌、性格和周围的环境，丰富续写情节，从而进一步提升续写语篇的可读性。第一部分外貌性格描写一、外貌性格描写的3个原则①进行外貌描写时，可写对一个人的总体印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。如攻略3例题原文中第一段对妈妈性格的描写，采用了loving,sweet,absent­minded和forgetful等形容词，使一个可爱又健忘的妈妈的形象跃然纸上。②可以具体描述人物的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。③在描写人物片段时，可写你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。二、外貌与性格描写的高分素材（一）外貌描写(1)她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。①Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples.(倒装句型)②Sheisagirlwithapairofblueeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.(with引导的介宾结构作后置定语，补充说明人物信息)(2)李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。①MissLiisinherthirtieswithamediumbuildandhasherhairinaponytail.(由and连接的并列句；with短语用作状语，表示伴随状态)②MissLiisamedium­sizedwomaninherthirtieswhooftenwears/tiesherhairinaponytail.(定语从句补充介绍人物特征)③MissLi,inherthirties,isofmediumsize,andoftenhasherhairtiedinaponytail.(“beof＋adj.＋n．”结构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size,height,weight,build,age,shape等)（二）性格描写①SuchisMs.Han,aneasygoing,kindandwarm­heartedwoman.韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。②Thoughhecomesfromapoorfamily,heisapersonofgreatdeterminationandcourage.他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。第二部分环境描写一、环境描写的4个原则①选择与主题和情节设置一致的环境要素，以营造故事发生的特定环境。②细致深入。所选的景物一定要运用所学的词汇和句法进行细致深入的描写。③添加附加信息，如天气变化和周边的景物等，如昏暗的路灯、摇曳的树影等。④环境细节描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好地完成续写任务。例如：攻略3第一段续写中可适当描写一下在帐篷中过夜时周围的环境，突出作者内心的祥和、快乐。二、环境描写的高分素材①Itwasbeginningtosnow,andsnowflakeswereblindingmyeyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。②Thesunwasbreakingthroughtheblanketofmist.太阳穿过薄雾。③Summerseesthemountainsturnbrightgreenwithgrowingrice.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsareflashgold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。④Alittlewayoffwasalittlebrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。【典例示例】(2017·浙江高考11月卷改编)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—eq\a\vs4\al(loving)，eq\a\vs4\al(sweet)，andyeteq\a\vs4\al(absent­)eq\a\vs4\al(minded)andeq\a\vs4\al(forgetful).OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingalleq\a\vs4\al(thesights)alongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight­year­oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood­byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept.“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely­lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupthetentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.【描写刻画】1．细读原文，明确叙述意图原文基调轻松、温暖。通过介绍一次出游经历，描述妈妈健忘、心不在焉、善良、爱孩子的性格特征。第一段概括妈妈的性格特征；第二段以妈妈遗落钱包的事情来说明妈妈健忘；由第三段担心妈妈遗忘孩子的事，说明妈妈心不在焉，同时侧面反映孩子的靠谱、沉稳；由最后一段倒数第二和第三句可看出妈妈很善良。根据人物性格特征，结合续写第二段首句可推测，续写时应设计一件有趣的事来体现“快乐、母爱、温情、亲情”。2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向※根据续写第一段首句中的关键词“werememberedthebrand­newtent”可知，该段应着重描写围绕帐篷发生的有趣的eq\a\vs4\al(故事)。※根据续写第二段首句中的关键词“alongtheway”可推断第二段可描述一路上妈妈对孩子的关爱。结合首句中关键词“greatsights”，可简单进行环境描写与原文呼应。3．围绕原文主旨，进行人物性格和环境描写①在描写母亲时，以原文对母亲性格的描写为依据，描述一件小事突出母亲的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一些描述性的词语，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描写旅途中母亲所表现出的母爱。这些描写能使母亲的形象更加丰满、高大，“母爱”溢于言表。②根据原文标题中的关键词vacation，和原文第二段中的“allhersightsalongtheway”，可推断出续写部分可适当进行环境描写，体现和母亲共度假期的快乐，一家人的亲情。【参考范文】Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Mominsistedthatweshouldmakefulluseofitsincewehadbroughtit.DavidandIlookedatDad,hopinghecouldrefusehercrazyideaagain,buttoourgreatdisappointment,heagreedwithMom'sidea.Sowesetupthetentatthefootofthemountainbyariver.“Oh,Iforgotthepillows！”Momscreamedoutbeforeweslept.Finally,wehadtocollectsomegrassasourpillows.Despitetheacheofmyneck,Ienjoyedthenicenightwithfreshairandmillionsofstars.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thetentbecameaclosefriendthen.Everytimewecamped,Momreadabookorsangasoftsong.Thewarmthofherarmsletusfeelcomfortableandsafe.Thoughshewasforgetfulandabsent­minded,laughteraccompaniedusalongtheway.Finallywemetourtwosetsofgrandparentsandenjoyedfamilyhappiness.Thistripmademeexperiencemymother'sandfamily'slove.【检测训练】1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。MynameisManan,andIaminthesixthgrade.Ofallthefestivals,DiwalisaHindufestivalthatiscelebratedinautumn,ismyfavoritebecauseIcansetofffireworksandeatdeliciousfoodsduringthefestival.Oneday,Iwentshoppingforfireworkswithmygrandfather.IwaslookingatthebrightlycoloredfireworkswhensuddenlyIbumpedintoalittleboy.Allmyfireworksscatteredoutofthebag.Iquicklybentdowntopickthemup.ThenInoticedtheboy’sfacewasfullofwonderandamazementashestaredatmyfireworks.Itappearedasthoughhehadneverseenanythisclosely.Whenhebentdowntopickthemup,Isnatchedthemfromhimandquicklyputthembackinmybag.AsIstoodtherelookingathim,Irealizedtherewassomethingdifferentaboutthisboy.Hisclotheswereoldandtorn;helookedasthoughhehadnoteatenforafewdays.Onreachinghome,Ifinishedmydinnerquicklyandranouttosetoffthefireworks.Iwasfascinatedbythevarietyofcolorsthatburstopenfromthefireworksandlitupthesky,butmywonderwasshort-lived.Inoticedthatmygrandfatherhadgoneinsidethehousecoughing.Wonderingwhy,Ilookedaroundandnoticedallthesmokethatmayhavebeenirritatinghisthroat.Feelingbadforonlyasecond,Icontinuedlightingthefireworksoneafteranother.But,insideme,itfeltdifferent—Ifeltguiltyabouttakingpleasurefromburstingthefireworks.Icouldfeelmyconscienceprickingme,“Manan!Howcanyoudothis?Itjusttakesafewminutesforallthemoneytodisappearinsmoke,buttheboyyoumettodaylookedlikehedidnotevenhavethebasicnecessitiesoflife.Thechildreninorphanagesalsoneedloveandhelp.Didn’tyouseehowyourfireworkshaveaffectedGrandpatoo?Canyoustillignorethesethingsandindulgeinthiskindoffun?”Realizingtheworthlessnessofthistemporarypleasure,Ireallywantedtousethemoneyinamorerewardingway.IstartedthinkingaboutmyownwaytocelebrateDiwali.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Iwentuptomygrandfatherandtoldhimaboutmyplan.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Soonenough,theorphanagewasfilledwithlaughterjoyandcelebration.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Sometimesthingsmayseembeyondourefforts,butkeeponandyouwillfindbeautifulviewsinfrontofyou.Iwasonmysecondoutdoorexperiencetripthateverystudenthadtogoon.Thatyear,wehadachoiceofwhatdifficultylevelwewanted:onethroughfive.MyfriendsandIhadagreedthatonewouldmakeusseemlazyandthatchallengingourselveswouldmakeforagoodstory.Inchoosingleveltwo,webelievedthatitwouldstillbeafunexperience.Wewerequicklyprovenwrong.ThefurtherwedroveintotheWhiteMountains,thehigherthewallsoneithersideofthewindinghighwaygrew.IwasstillinaweofthemountainsIhadseensomanytimesbefore,butIcouldn’thelpfeelingmyheartshakingwithanxiety.SoonIwouldhavetoleavetheschoolbusthatbrought50studentsoutintothewildernesslikeeveryyearbefore.Mygroupconsistedofmyfriends,RileyandAnn,andsixextremelyathleticboys.Wearrivedatbasecamplodge(木屋)first.Afterputtingthingsasideandrearrangingourbags,wemadeourwayoutintothewilderness.Thethreeofusgirlswerequestioningifthiswasreallyaleveltwo.Thepathwasunbelievablysteep(陡峭)androckytowardthetopofthemountainwherethefirsthutwaslocated.Wewerepracticallyjogginginanattempttokeepupwiththeboysaheadofus.Beforethetrip,weweretoldtotakebreaksasoftenasweneededtodrinkwater,butthatwasn’thelpingourpoundingheartsandheavybreathingasmuchasitshouldhave.Then,30minutesintothemostdifficulthikethethreeofushadeverdone,Rileyslippedandlandedonherknee.Afterafewmoments,weturnedbackdownthemountainasitwasdecidedthatRileycouldnotmakethetripwithus.WesatonthegrassoutsidethelodgewherewehadstartedwhileRileywasbroughtinsidetojointhelevelonegroup.AnnandIexchangedbreathlessglances,ourcheeksredandwetwithsweat.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“Doyouthinkweshouldaskifwecouldjointhelevelonegrouptoo?”IaskedAnn.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenextdays,althoughextremelytired,wekepton.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。“AtthebeginningoftheCOVID-19,IwentthroughsomepainfulpersonalstuffandwouldoftengooutatnightforlongwalksbecausenoonewasaroundandIcouldn'tsleepany-way,”KellywroteonTwitter.“OnenightIwaswalkingdownmystreetandnoticedthatsomeonehadsetupafewlittleobjectsinatreeplanteranduponcloserinspection,Irealizeditwasafairygardenwithalittlenoteaboutthe4-year-oldgirl,Eliana,whofeltlonelyinquarantine(隔离期)andwantedtospreadsomecheer.”KellywroteanotetoElianapretendingtobeafairynamedSapphirethathadcometoliveinthetree.“IsaidIwouldgiftheramagicalfairydice(骰子)ifshedid3thingsforme,”Kellysaid.Kellyputthenoteinasmallbottlefilledwithglitterandplaceditinthegarden,unsureifshewouldgetaresponse.Thenextday,shefoundahandwrittenletterfromElianaexplainingshehadcompletedallofSapphire'stasks.Kellysaidsheimmediatelyburstintotears.“SoIleftabunchofmydicethathadsmallimperfectionsandleftheranothernoteandalsoalittleextranoteforherparentswithmynameandphonenumbersotheycouldcontactmeandknowIwasn'tsomebadpersonleavingnotesfortheirsmallchild,”Kellysaid.“Doingthiseverynightgavemepurposeinahorriblypainfulandlonelytime,”Kellysaid.“Ilookedforwardtomydaysagainandstartedorderingartsuppliesandlittletoystoleaveher.”“Wewrotebackandforththroughoutthelast9months,helpingeachotherfeellesslone-lyandIgottochatwithhermomviatexttomakesuremygiftswerealittlemorepersonal.”注意:1.续写的词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thegirl'smothertoldKellythattheyweremovingtoanothercity.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thegirl'smotherpreferredKellytoactasafairytosaygoodbyetoherdaughter.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。IwasbornandgrewupinthenorthofScotland,whichwasnotfarfromthesea.WhenIwaslittle,Ienjoyedtheseasidesceneryverymuch.Ioftensatontherockbytheseaandwatchedtheviewofthesea.Iwasfondofplayingwiththesandonthebeachandchasedthewaveswithmyoldsister,Alastair.Acrossthebeachtherewasatidal(潮汐)island,whichmeansthatwhenthetidegoesout,youcanwalktoit,butwhenthetidecomesinagain,youcan’tgettoit.MumandDadneverletusgothere.Theytoldusthatitwasdangerous.However,thetidalislandwasfullofmysterytome.Isaidtomyself,“Theremustbesomefascinatingsceneryworthexploring.HowIwishIhadachancetolandonit!”OnalittlecolddayinOctober,whilemyparentswereawayforafriend’swedding,mysisterwasdeterminedtotakemetothebeachnearourhouse,wherewewouldhaveagoodtime.Iwantedtobuildsandcastles.Whenwearrivedatthebeach,thetidewasout.Weranonthebeachbackandforthandenjoyedourselvesverymuch.Withthehelpofmysister,Imadeseveralsandcastlesofdifferentshapes.Feelingalittletired,Isatonthebeachforabreak.Isawthetidalislandopposite,whichlookedveryniceintheautumnsunshine.“Let’sgotoexplorethetidalisland,Alastair,”Isaidtomysister.“That’sagoodidea.ButMumandDadsaidwecouldn’t.Maybewewon’treturnsafely!”Alastairsaid.“Don’tworry!We’lltrytoreturnbeforethetidecomesinagain.”IbeggedAlastair.Finallysheagreed.Wereturnedhomeandbroughtsomepeanutbuttersandwichesandabottleofmilkwithus.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Thenwesetoffforthetidalisland.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thetidecameinandcoveredthebeachandthewaterwastoodeepandcoldforme.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Finally,thebellrang.“Don’tforgettopracticeyourclasspresentationathome!”MissBellacriedaseveryonestartedtalkingandpackingtheirschoolbags.Jessyfeltsick.Shehatedhavingtoreadaloudinclass.Shewassureeveryonegotreallyboredlisteningtoher.Once,whenJessywasreadingoutherholidaydiary,Leewasevenlookingathiswatch,asilverandblueonewhichseemedjustmagical.JessywatchedLeewalkaheadofherastheyleftschool.Heseemedsoclever,andhehadacertainsortofshiningconfidence.Hewasjustoneofthosepeoplewhoweregoodateverything.Jessysighed.Assheturnedthecorner,shesawLee’swatchlyingrightinthemiddleofthepath.Jessyknewsheshouldjustpickitupandreturnittohim,butshedidn’twanttorunafterhim.Jessybentdownquickly,pickedupthewatchandranhome.Onarrivinghome,Jessyputitonalmostwithoutthinking.Shewassurpriseditfittedsowell.Shewalkedtothemirrorandstartedpracticingherspeech.Wordsjustfloodedoutofher.“I’mgoingtotalkaboutswimming.Ihavebeenlucky.I’vewonlotsofcompetitions.ButwhenI’minarace,I’mnotreallythinkingaboutwinning.I’mjustlovingthefeelingofbeinginthewater…”Jessylaughedwithexcitement.Shewalkedacrosstheroom.Shesuddenlyseemedtohaveacertainsortofconfidence.Turningbacktothemirror,Jessysawaflashoflightfromthewatchintheglass.Theflashesofsilverseemedalmostmagical.SomaybeLee’swatchreallyDIDhavesomethingmagicaboutit.Thenextday,asthelessonbegan,MissBellaaskedwhowasgoingtobebraveandgofirst.Nobodymoved.Jessyslowlyraisedherarm.BeforeMissBellacouldsayanything,therewasashoutfrombehind.“She’sstolenmywatch!”Leesaidangrily,“Itwentmissingatschoolyesterday.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。EverybodywasfixingtheireyesonJessy,waitingforanexplanation.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MissBellasmiledandaskedtheclasstolistentoJessy’sspeechfirst.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwastheswimseason,butElizabethdidn’tlikeswimmeets.Shegothorriblynervousbutnotbecauseshewantedtowin.Hernervescamefromthepossibilitythatshewoulddosomethinghorriblywrongandleteveryonedown.Thedayofameet,shewouldbescaredallday.Recently,Elizabeth’steamannouncedaspecialswimnight:Members11andolderwouldswimatimed50metersinallfourstrokesandthenhavepizza.Itwasn’texactlyameet,becauseitwouldinvolveonlyteammembers.Elizabethcounteredthatitabsolutelywasameetbecausetherewouldberacesandtimersandsoon.Buthermotherreallywantedhertogo.Shefoughtbackfuriouslybutfinallyagreed.Whenthedayofthespecialswimnightarrived,Elizabethwasnervous.Whenshegottothepoolwithherparents,shebecameevenmorenervous.Herfirstracewasthe50-meterfreestyle.Sheswamherbackstrokeandbreaststrokewithoutincident.Itwasn’tfunforElizabeth.Herbutterfliesjustkeptflapping.ThenitwastimefortheT-shirtrelay,whichworkslikethis:OnepersonfromeachrelayteamputsonaT-shirt,apairofsocks,andaswimcap;swims50meters;andgetsoutofthepool.Shetakesofftheclothesandputsthemonthenextperson,whothenswims50meters.Thiscontinuesuntileveryoneontheteamhascompletedalap.Forsomeunknownreason,Elizabeth’srelayteamchosehertoswimtheanchorleg（最后一棒）.TheteamdressedherinsocksandaT-shirt.Andthenshewasoff.SheseemedtoswimfasterintheT-shirtandsocksthanshedidwhenshewasn’twearingthem.Approachingthehalfwaymark,shewasstillinthelead.ThensomebodynoticedthatoneofElizabeth’ssockshadfallenoffandwasfloatinginthepool.“Shehastogetthatsockonbeforetheendoftherace,”aswimmingofficialtoldElizabeth’steam,“oryouwillbedisqualified.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Everybodyonherteamstartedscreaming,“Elizabeth!Elizabeth!Stop!Getthesock!”______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Bynow;thegirlinlanetwowasabouttopassElizabeth.__________________________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