2022年新高考I卷读后续写David's run公开课课件-高三英语一轮复习

ContinuationWriting读后续写之

重生我是编剧madebykitty上一世，你只是一个酷爱追剧的小孩；看得正高兴的时候，什么！编剧居然把你最爱的角色写死了！什么！编剧居然把你最磕的cp拆散了！一气之下，一口气没过来，还好重生一世，你变成了一个编剧；这一次你要夺回你的一切......假如你是一个编剧，那么，读后续写对你来说，等同于丢给你一个没写完的剧本，让你创作Afterthisclass,youwillbeableto:1.Readandunderstandthestory;2.Analyseanddesigntheplot;3.Writeandpolishyourstory.LearningObjectives:LeadinReadforthebasicinformationWhen:thedayofthebig

.Where:

.(aplacewiththickevergreenforest)Who:“I”---a

ofDavid’sschool.David---aten-year-oldboywitha

.What:Davidwantedto_________takingpartintherace.Why:Davidworriedthatotherstudentswould

him.cross-countryruntheracespotspecialeducationteacherbraindiseaselaughatgiveupAlthoughDavidhada___________(who),hehadn'tmissasinglepracticeandtriedhisbestinordertotakepartinthebigcross-countryrun.However,on_______________________________________(when),Ifoundhimstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafenceandnotwarminguplikeothercompetitors.SoIwalkedovertoaskhimforthereason.Davidtoldmehewantedto__________participatingintherace(what)becausehewasafraidof________________(why).Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Retellthestorybraindiseasethebigdayofthebigcross-counbtryrungiveupbeinglaughedatAndthenwhatwillhappen?ThinkforthethemeWillDavidovercomethefearofbeinglaughedat?YesorNO#3:Continuationwritingalwayspasspositivemessage.Writingprinciples:negative-positiveproblem-solutionThinkforthethemeWhichthemehasnothingtodowiththisstory?B.Self-confidenceC.FriendshipA.Perseverance(毅力）DesigntheplotPara.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidfinallychangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.两段首句定一框逆推法Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,IdecidedtotalksomethingwithhimDesigntheplotPara.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidfinallymadeittothefinishingline.Nothingisimpossibletoadeterminedheart.Justtryandignoreothers.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.两框两首正能量apositiveending+主题升华句DesigntheplotPara.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Thelastsentence:Davidfinallychangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.（衔接句）Sentence1:Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.Q1:WhatwouldIsayanddotoDavidinordertopersuadehimtoparticipate?

Q2:Afterhearingmywords,howdidDavidfeel?moredetails语言描写＋动作描写语言描写+情绪描写+动作描写神态描写细节添加法DesigntheplotPara.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thelastsentence:Davidfinallymadeittothefinishingline.Nothingisimpossibletoadeterminedheart.Justtryandignoreothers.Sentence1:Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.moredetailsQ1:SeeingDavid’sdeterminationtomakeittothefinishingline,whatdidthepeoplewatchingdotohim?Q2:What’stheresultoftherun?WhatdidhismatesandIdotocelebratehisdetermination?动作描写动作描写+情感描写环境描写GroupdiscussionsGroup1&2designtheplotofpara.1.Group3&4designtheplotofpara.2.Onepossibleversion:Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.1.看到他脸上充满了焦虑和犹豫，我决定和他谈谈。我轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀，问他为什么不跑。2.犹豫了一会儿，他轻声说“我的脑部疾病使我不能像其他孩子一样跑步，我害怕其他学校的学生会嘲笑我”3.我看着他，柔声鼓励道：“我知道你为这次比赛付出了很多努力，我多么佩服你的努力，为什么不试一下呢？”4.他陷入沉思并沉默了一会儿。然后他抬起头，脸上又露出了惯常的咧嘴大笑。5.他看着我，慢慢地点了点头，脸上露出了坚定。最终他改变主意，决定参加比赛。Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.6.他站在其他孩子中间，虽然个子小，但那种坚定不移的神情与他们无异。7.随着发令枪响，孩子们如箭般冲出去，而大卫却以他自己的步伐缓缓前行。8.他似乎并不在意自己落在后面，只是专注于每一步，目光紧盯着前方。9.看着他那充满勇气的身影，观众席上的加油声越来越响亮，鼓励着他继续前行。10.最终，当他坚持不懈地越过终点线时，全场爆发出雷鸣般的掌声。正是他坚强的决心和毅力使他克服了挑战，完成了这场比赛。Clues&details1.Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent.2.Healwaysparticiptedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.3.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepracticeandalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren.4.Davidcouldrunifhewanted.5.Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim.6.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren.7.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.可转换人称用在第一段，我说服、鼓励David去参加比赛。可转换人称，用在第一段，表明David为什么不想参加比赛的原因。适当改变，David决定参加比赛时可用这个。Clues&details1.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.2.Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.3.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.4.IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.适当改变，比赛结束时，受到在场人的鼓励时，David很可能有这个表情。可以用来描述David赛跑时的样子----动作描述可以用来描述David在比赛时的结果：他不可能跑赢别人，但仍坚持跑完全程。可用来升华文章主旨Wesatdowntogetheronsomesteps,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神态描写）Itappedhimgentlyontheshoulderandaskedwhyhedecidednottorun.(动作描写）Havinghesitatedforamoment,herepliedinalowvoice,“Youknow,________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________”.(我的脑部疾病使我不能像其他孩子一样跑步，我害怕其他学校的学生会嘲笑我）Ilookedhimstraightintheeye,saying“David,youhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.Thereisnoneedtoworryaboutsomeonelaughingatyou.Ifyoureallywant,justrun!”（动作＋语言）Davidwaslostinthoughtandkeptsilentforquiteamoment.______________________________________________________________.(然后他抬起头，脸上又露出了惯常的咧嘴大笑）(动作+神态）Finally,hechangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.（衔接句）

知识迁移--仿写mybraindiseasepreventsmerunninglikeotherchildrenandIamafraidthatstudentsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatme.Thenheraisedhisheadwithhisusualbigtoothysmilebackonhisface.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.WhileDavidcouldn’trunlikeotherstudents,__________________________________________________（他拖着他的小身体向前走，左右摇晃着）(动作描写）Ibeganshoutingwordsofencouragement.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.（动作＋语言）Whenhefinallyreachedthefinishingline,allthepeoplepresentapplaudedforhim.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(正是大卫坚强的决心和强大的毅力使他克服了挑战，完成了越野赛跑）（主题升华句）hedraggedhissmallbodyforward,rockingfromsidetoside.perseverancethatmadehimovercomethechallengeandfinishedthecross-countryrun.ItwasDavid’sstrongdeterminationandWesatdowntogetheronsomesteps,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神态描写）Itappedhimgentlyontheshoulderandaskedwhyhedecidednottorun.(动作描写）Havinghesitatedforamoment,herepliedinalowvoice,“Youknow,mybraindiseasepreventsmerunninglikeotherchildrenandIamafraidthatstudentsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatme”.(）Ilookedhimstraightintheeye,saying“David,youhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.Thereisnoneedtoworryaboutsomeonelaughingatyou.Ifyoureallywant,justrun!”（动作＋语言）Davidwaslostinthoughtandkeptsilentforquiteamoment.Thenheraisedhisheadwithhisusualbigtoothysmilebackonhisface.Finally,hechangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.

知识迁移--仿写

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.WhileDavidcouldn’trunlikeotherstudents,hedraggedhissmallbodyforward,rockingfromsidetoside.Ibeganshoutingwordsofencouragement.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.Whenhefinallyreachedthefinishingline,allthepeoplepresentapplaudedforhim.ItwasDavid’sstrongdeterminationandperseverancethatmadehimovercomethechallengeandfinishedthecross-countryrun.Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神态描写）

TurningtoDavid,Ismiled,“David,Look,whatawonderfulevent!”（语言描写）“Yeah!”Davidsmiledweakly,loweringhishead.（动作描写）

Pattingonhisshoulder,Isaidinasoftvoice,“Iknowyouhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.HowIadmireyourstrongdetermination.Whynotgiveitatry?”

（动作＋语言）“Iamafraidkidsfromotherschoolswilllaughatme.Ithinkwhatthecoachsaidisright.”m