高中英语写作公开课

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ByZhangHui2021/5/92Whatmakesagoodessay?Ⅰ.Discussion2021/5/93感知典型范例2021/5/94感知典型范例——词汇层面1adj.聪明的、脑筋好的clever→wise→smart→bright→intelligent2021/5/95感知典型范例——词汇层面2adj.令人惊奇的surprising→amazing→astonishingexactlyusedandadvancedwords准确运用词汇并使用高级词汇2021/5/96

(not…until)→He______comehere______yesterdayafternoon.

2.Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.

3.

Itwasnotuntilyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.感知典型范例——句型层面1advancedsentencepatterns使用高级句型nogrammaticalmistakes

没有语法错误Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.他昨天下午来的。didn’t

until

2021/5/97感知典型范例——段落层面Ithink,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentsthoughwearebusy.Oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemlivehappily.Wecanbuildaharmonioussocietyonlywhenallofuscarefortheaged.AsfarasIamconcerned,foruschildren,weshouldoftengohomeandstaytogetherwithourparentshoweverbusyweare.What’smore,oursocietyshouldorganizeallkindsofactivitiesfortheseniorstohelpthemliveahappylife.Onlywhenallofuscarefortheagedcanwebuildaharmonioussocietyproperlinkwords

使用恰当的连接词

varioussentencepatterns用较丰富的句式2021/5/98感知典型范例——篇章层面1卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;

得8分2021/5/99感知典型范例——篇章层面2字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。2021/5/910

poor——篇章层面3excellentneatandclean卷面整洁wellorganized结构合理thecontentiscomplet内容要完整2021/5/911Conclusion:

Whatmakesagoodessay?1.neatandclean卷面整洁

2.completecontent内容完整3.wellorganized

结构合理4.exactlyusedandadvancedwords

准确运用词汇并使用高级词汇5.properlinkingwords

使用恰当的连接词

6.varioussentencepatterns用较丰富的

句式2021/5/912假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画，同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Ⅱ.Pre-writing(2013全国卷)2021/5/913注意：1.

词数100左右2.

可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.

开头语和介绍语已为你写好。DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua2021/5/914Ⅱ.Pre-writing(teamwork)Task1:DecidethepersonandtenseTask2:DecidethestructureTask3:Writedownthekeywordsandsentencepatterns2021/5/915Task1:person(人称)tense（时态）ThefirstpersonThepresentandthefuturetensePerson:Tense:2021/5/916DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHuaBodyTask2:DecidethestructureBeginningEnding2021/5/917假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画。同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Task2:Decidethestructure告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画。同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Body2021/5/918假定你是李华。请你给笔友Peter写封信，告诉他你叔叔李明将去他所在城市开会，带去他想要的那幅中国画，同时询问他是否可以接机。信中还需说明：李明：高个子，戴眼镜航班号：CA985到达：8月6日上午11:30Task3:

writedownthekeywords

开会，带去中国画。接机。航班号到达戴眼镜2021/5/919

a.tohaveameeting/conferenceb.bringsb.sth.c.Chinesepaintingd.domeafavore.pickhimupf.flightnumberg.arriveath.wearglasses…Task3:thekeywords

2021/5/920Task3:

Sentencepatterns

I’mwritingtotellyouthat…I’dlikeyouto…Wouldyouplease…?Iwonderifyoucan…?…2021/5/921

必要的连接词表示递进：besides,aswell,inaddition表示比较：justlike,inthesameway,onthecontrary表示因果：sothat,since,inorderto/that表示强调：

aboveall,withoutanydoubt表示总结：inaword,inshort,inconclusion2021/5/922Ⅲ.while-writing(15mins)

Pleasewritedowntheletterin15minutes.Youcanusethefollowingstructure.

2021/5/923

DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthat___________________________,and__________________________.Also,I’dlikeyoutodomeafavor.Wouldyouplease_____________________________________________________________________________?Thankyouinadvance!______________isCA985,and________________11:30am.August6.Myuncleis_______________________________.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.Yours,LiHua2021/5/924Ⅳ.post-writingReviseyourcompositionsinpairs.Then,makeevaluationsforhimorher.2021/5/925写作过程评价标准表写作过程评估表注意：达到8至10项标准为优秀，6至8项为良好；4至6项为合格；4以下为需努力。□大、小写以及标点符合完全正确；□所要涉及的词汇以及单词的拼写完全正确；□固定搭配、代词、名词的数、格以及冠词的选择基本正确□句子结构符合需要，能准确应用简单句的5种基本句型;□句子结构安排合理，符合英语习惯，无汉语思维来安排句子结构；□根据需要会使用正确的时态、语态。时态、语态、概念、结构清楚；□有一定遣词组句，将基本句型串联成文的能力；□会使用恰当的连词、情态动词、修饰语，使句子前后连贯、文章顺通流畅；□能使用复杂句型及多种从句;□内容的真实性、趣味性、实用性以及写作的创新得到了展现。被评价者姓名_______班级_____日期_________授课教师________评价内容________评价:优秀□良好□合格□需努力□评价者建议：被评价者反馈及打算：

评价者签名：2021/5/926Presentation2021/5/927

DearPeter,Howareyoudoing?I’mwritingtotellyouthatmyuncleLiMingisgoingtoyourcityforaconference,andI’veaskedhimtobringyoutheChinesepaintingyou’veaskedforbefore.