读后续写微技能细节描写 【知识精讲精研】 链面结合 高三英语二轮复习

读后续写微技能指导

——链面结合

别有“动”添

Howtomakeyouractiondescriptions

vivid?ContinuationwritingWhatmakesMr.Beansofunnyandinteresting?2actions,expressions,voice.......Learnandexplore31

Strategy1:Actionprecision动作精准化generalwords→concretewords

Howtomakeactionsvivid?

WordBankgeneralwords（通用词）concretewords(具体词）rundash/rush(猛冲)lookglance(瞥见),glare(怒视),stare(凝视)say/talkchat(闲聊),whisper(耳语),murmur(低语)cryweep/sob（啜泣）eatbite(咬)，chew（嚼），swallow（吞）take（拿）grab/grasp(抓住)1.Olivewentintotheroom,tookhisbag,andwentoutagain.generalwords→concretewords通用词汇→具体词汇Olivedashed/ranintotheroom,grabbed/grasped/seizedhisbag,andrushedoutagain.

Practice:将句中笼统词替换成具体词以优化表达。1.Becauseofhislies,shelookedathim.2.Notknowingwhattodo,Iwalkedontheflooranxiously.3.Withonlytwominutesleft,he

atehismeal.4.Sheheardhermotherspokeinalowvoiceasshewalkeddownthehall,"Don'twakeyourdadup."glared/staredpacedswallowedwhisperedtiptoed

7Strategy2:ActionChains动作链使用一连串动作让画面动起来分解动作，建构画面Thestepsweshouldtaketoeathotstrips(辣条)tearthepackageopensqueezeoutonestriptakeabigbite撕开包装挤出一根大咬一口8Justnow,Tomtorethepackageopen,squeezedoutonestripandtookabigbite.Structure1:

S+V1,V2andV3He

wasoverwhelmedbyjoy

,

singinganddancing

intherain.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。Structure2:

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....

or

Doing...anddoing....,S+V31.妈妈冲了进来，静静地站着，然后突然大笑起来。(2021年浙江卷)

Mymom

,

andthen

.rushedinstoodstillburstintolaughter2.他站起来，拥抱着父母，微笑着.(2020年1月浙江卷)_________,hestoodupand________hisparents.Smilinghugged

11Strategy3:ActionScenes动作面EmotionsDialoguesInnerthought4Actions动作面IDEA=动作+心理，对话，情感被老师的话鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说(whisper)：“我来试试。”Encouraged

bytheteacher'swords,Lucy

raised

herhand,whispering:”Iwanttohaveatry.”Stucture1:Doing/done,S+V,saying/whispering......听完后深受鼓励，David伸出(holdout)双臂抱住了我,微笑着回复我说：“我可以做到！”(2022年新高考I读后续写)__________________afterhearingthis,David___________hisarmsand___________me,_________________“Icandoit！”Deeplyencouragedhuggedheldoutreplyingwithasmile又累又饿，他们终于安全到达了目的地。Exhaustedandhungry,theyeventuallyarrivedatthedestinationsafely.Stucture2:Adj,S+V(形容词作状语)Sadbutfearless,hewasdeterminedtochangetheplanimmediately.Structure3S+V+with/in+emotionalnoun（情感名词）....with/in+surprise/amazement/terrorHelooksupanger/dissatisfactionpride/joyAddprepositionalphrase（介词短语）tomaketheactionvivid.Hesteppedforward,with______________tearsfillinghiseyesActivity3Summarizeandpresent(Pairwork)18Drawamindmaptosummmerisewhatwe’velearntthisclass.vividactionactionchains动作链条化①

S+V1,V2andV3②

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....

or

Doing...anddoing....,S+V3

①Doing/done,S+V,saying/whispering②Adj,S+V(形容词作状语)actionscenes动作全面化把动作和面部表情，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面actionprecisions动作精准化Mindmap③S+V+with/in+emotionalnoun（情感名词）

分解动作，建构画面Activity3Applyandcreate(Pairwork)20Polishtheunderlinedsentences.

故事梗概：

双胞胎Jenna和Jeff期待在母亲节给妈妈制造惊喜，给她做一顿丰盛的早餐。可在厨房准备早餐时，屡遭失败还把厨房弄得一团糟。正当她们无比焦虑和沮丧时，父亲进来了。父亲耐心鼓励并指导他们做好早饭。双胞胎把饭菜端上楼送给妈妈，妈妈既兴奋又感动.Thetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①hefoundthekitchenwasinamess.Fatherwasalittleshockedandasked,“Whathappened?”（设计动作链）

ThetwinssaidthewholestorytoFather.②Totheirrelief,hecomfortedthegirls（分解动作，使用具体词）andsaid,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether”.Withouttheslightesthesitation,theycleanedupthemess,cookedtheporridgeandtoastedthebreadonceagain.③Beforelong,thetwinsmadeadeliciousbreakfastwiththeirfather’shelp.④Thoughtheyweretired,theyfelthappyandproud.

(从表情，心理，动作,感官等方面创造动作面).Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.“HappyMother’sDay!”Theysaidtogetherloudly.⑤Themotherjustcouldn’tbelievewhatshesawandcried.⑥Shehuggedandkissedthemagainandagain.(从表情，心理，动作等方面创造动作面)“Mum,haveatasteofit”,thetwinsasked.Themotherbitintothetoastandsaid“ItisdefinitelythemostdeliciousbreakfastIhaveeverhad.Iamsoproudtobeyourmother”.

Polishtheunderlined6sentences(选自2021全国卷Ⅰ

）①Hefoundthekitchenwasinamess.Fatherwasalittleshockedandasked,“Whathappened?”（设计动作链）

Seeingthemessystoveandtheblackbread,fatherfeltabitshockedandaskedthem,“Whathappened?”②Totheirrelief,hecomfortedthegirls（分解动作，使用具体动作）Totheirrelief,havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshoulder.③Beforelong,thetwinsmadeadeliciousbreakfastwiththeirfather’shelp.(从表情，心理，动作,感官等方面创造动作面)Beforelong,armedwiththeexperienceoffailureandfather’help,theymadethebreakfast,givingoffpleasantsmell.

⑤Themotherjustcouldn’tbelievewhatshesawandcried.Shestaredatthebreakfastontheplate,withtearsofjoystreamingdownherfa