高考英语读后续写 热考话题素材

高考英语读后续写热考话题素材目

录Contents01热考话题1挑战自我02热考话题2个人成长03热考话题3师生关系04热考话题4同学关系05热考话题5温馨家庭06热考话题6关爱邻里07热考话题7社会温情08热考话题8关爱动物09热考话题9遇险救援热考话题1挑战自我

[2022新高考Ⅰ]Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromseven

differentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingthe

route(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid，whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothe

sidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent

today.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitated

andthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong？Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent！

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathad

happened.＂Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，＂he

explaineduncomfortably.＂Igavehimthechoicetorunornot，andlethimdecide.＂

Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewas

doingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted，Iturnedto

findhimcomingtowardsme，hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghis

feetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeother

children，butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healways

participatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.Thatwaswhynoneof

thechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.It

justtookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice，andalthough

healwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren，hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecial

educationteacherattheschool，IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwas

proudofhisstrongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

⁠IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

⁠人物主要人物David：从文中的描述＂smallfortenyearsold＂

＂bigtoothy

smile＂

＂hadworkedsohardforthisevent＂

＂hadabraindisease＂

＂alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability＂和＂hadnotmissedasingle

practice＂可知，David身患残疾但积极乐观、意志坚强。

次要人物＂I＂：从文中的描述＂makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhe

wanted＂和＂familiarwiththechallengesDavidfaced＂

＂proudofhisstrong

determination可以看出，＂我＂是一个关爱学生的老师，也暗示了续写部

分应有＂我＂与David沟通并试图劝说他参加比赛以及David听从劝说并以

坚强的意志完成比赛的情节。原文最后一段中描述的＂hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregular

kid＂表明，同学们对David态度友好，这也为续写第二段David在赛场上

时同学们的表现埋下了伏笔。情节及情感线越野赛前得知David决定不参加比赛(David情绪低落，害怕被嘲笑)→

找教练获悉原因，回想David虽患脑疾却认真积极训练(＂我＂为他感到自

豪)→续写第二段提示语，David走向起跑线(David重拾勇气和信心)。主题根据读后续写＂结局圆满＂的原则可知，David最终应该完成了比

赛。再结合原文中David遇到的困难——行走不稳、害怕被嘲笑等可知，

文章最终的主题应该体现David直面挑战、克服恐惧、战胜自己。

续写第一段根据续写两段的提示语可知，本段主要描述David从不愿参加越野

跑，到走向起跑线参加比赛的转变过程。涉及的人物是＂I＂和David，主

要故事情节：＂我＂开导、鼓励David以及他对＂我＂的劝说的反应，侧

重人物对话、动作、表情和心理描写。尾句衔接第二段提示语：David最

终决定参加越野跑。续写第

二段根据续写第二段提示语可知，本段的故事情节应发生在越野赛跑线路

上，涉及的主要人物是David，也可以呼应原文，加入＂我＂、教练和学

生们的反应。主要故事情节：David在越野赛跑过程中的具体表现及比赛

结果，侧重人物在比赛过程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的动作、心理描写。最

终升华主题，David战胜了内心的恐惧。

1.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.①用形容词作状语改写句子，使行文更连贯。Inspired，hedecidedtohaveatry.②运用连续动作描写将David决定参赛这一过程细化。Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage，

＂Iwillhaveatry.＂2.Theycheeredhimon.①将人群具体到个人或一些人，因为＂我＂尤为关注David，所以他一摔倒，＂我＂应该是第一个作出反应的人，紧接着是他的同学们。这样使情节发展更加自然顺畅。Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.②用as引导的时间状语从句改写句①，并运用现在分词短语作状语改写cheerhim

on，使句子语法结构更丰富。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，

cheeringhimon.③为句②同学们的加油鼓励增加具体的话语，使内容更富有画面感。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.

＂Comeon，David.Youcandoit！

＂theyshoutedenthusiastically.3.Davidfinishedtherun.①使用具体的动作描写表示David完成比赛，切合当时比赛的氛围和场景。Davidcrossedthefinishline.②为句①增加对David通过终点线时人们的欢呼声和喝彩声的描写，使情节自然，

更具有画面感。Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

We

sat

down

next

to

each

other，

but

David

wouldn’t

look

at

me.Hiseyes

deliberatelyavoidedmine，withhislimbsunavoidablyshaking.＂It’snottherealyou，

David，＂Ipattedhimgentlyontheback(轻轻地拍了拍他的后背)andsaidquietly.

＂Youhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun？＂I

heldmybreath(屏住呼吸)asDavidlookedup.Inspired，hetookadeepbreathand

gatheredhiscourage(深吸一口气，鼓起勇气)，

＂Iwillhaveatry.＂

I

watched

as

David

moved

up

to

the

starting

line

with

the

other

runners.Thestarter’s

gunsounded！Davidsparednoefforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses，

buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshout

encouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.＂Comeon，David.

Youcandoit！＂theyshoutedenthusiastically.Touched，hepickedhimselfupand

startedagain.Finally，hecrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

Excitementswallowedhim(他激动坏了)andheembracedmetightly.Atthattime，I

knewhehadalreadyovercomethedarknessstuckinhismind(战胜了他脑海中的阴霾).热考话题2个人成长

[2021浙江改编]Mydad，George，onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquiet

man，hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14，heworked.And

hisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker，andI

thoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalked

acrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets，hittingabaseball，

orthrowingafootball，preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.In

poorweather，Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(长号).

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboring

farmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask，thetractorfiredupandwe

wereoff，ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashort

way，thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.

Thishappenedoverandover，butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslike

cockleburs，lamb’s-quarters，foxtails，andthekingofweeds，theprettypurple

thistle.Itwastiringwork，butIlookedforwardtothepay，eventhoughIwasn’tsure

howmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome，mydadsaid，

＂Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbe

contributingtothehousehold.＂Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmight

notbeminetodowithasIwished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks，andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework，

butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.

⁠

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.

⁠

人物主要人物George(mydad)：从文中的描述“Aquietman...Fromage

14，heworked.Andhisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedand

usedittopayfamilyexpenses”和“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothe

household”可以看出，父亲George是一个沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭责任

感的人，他认为“我”的打工所得也应该贴补家用。

主要人物＂I＂：从文中的描述＂Iwouldsurpass(超过)anythinghehad

accomplished＂和＂IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemy

money＂可以看出，＂我＂志存高远、不理解父亲，并不认可父亲将

＂我＂的打工所得＂征收＂的想法，这也是文章的冲突所在。根据文中的＂hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities＂和＂I

didn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither＂可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，这

为下文的发展埋下了伏笔。情节及情感线

＂我＂与父亲相互不理解(＂我＂想超越他)→＂我＂到隔壁农场打工

挣钱(期待能拥有这笔钱)→父亲想用这笔钱贴补家用(＂我＂感到不公，对

继续在农场打工失去兴趣)→续写第二段提示语，父亲让＂我＂自己支配

薪水(感到惊喜)。主题父亲本来要让＂我＂把打工的收入用来贴补家用，最后却改变了主

意，这应该会给＂我＂带来触动，因此，文章最终的主题应该展现＂我＂

的成长、对父亲的理解以及对家庭责任的认可。

续写第一

段根据原文及续写第一段的提示语可知，本段主要描述父亲与＂我＂谈话的内容、过程以及＂我＂的反应，可以从动作、神态描写体现＂我＂不情愿和不甘的心理状态，以及父亲在与＂我＂谈话过程中对＂我＂的理解。尾句衔接第二段的提示语：父亲让＂我＂留钱自用。续写第二

段结合原文和本段的提示语可知，本段应该描写＂我＂听到父亲的决定后惊讶、兴奋的心理状态；与此同时，在续写本段时还应呼应原文中的描述并凸显主题，将＂我＂的反思和成长感悟展现出来。

1.Iwantedtoarguewithmydad.①用具体的动作描写代替want，体现＂我＂想留着钱的决心。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad.②为句①增加条件状语从句，使文章逻辑更严谨，前后衔接更连贯。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad，

ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’t

mine.③为句②增加具体神态描写，凸显＂我＂想留着钱的渴望。Withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck，Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmy

dad，ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.2.Iwasunwillingtohandinthemoney.用具体手部动作和心理活动描写改写优化句子，体现＂我＂的不情愿。Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly，readytoargue.3.Ifeltashamed.①用面部表情代替feelashamed，

使表达更生动。Iflushedwithshame.②为句①增加原因状语，并运用现在分词短语作状语，使感情转变更加顺畅自然。Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim，Iflushedwithshame.

When

I

brought

my

paycheck

home

—

it

was

$119—

my

dad

wanted

to

talk

to

me.He

toldmetowaitinthelivingroomforawhile.Isatonthesofa，

withmyeyesgluedto

thepaycheck(眼睛盯着薪水)，

searchingmymindfor(脑海里搜索着)wordstoargue

withmydadifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.Justthen，thedooropenedandin

camemydad.Themomenthesatdownbesideme，Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly(更加牢牢地握住薪水)，readytoargue.However，hegentlyplacedhisrighthandonmyshoulder(轻轻地把他的右手放在我的肩上)andsaid，

＂Iknowyouhavegrownupalotthroughyourwork...＂Thentherewasalongpause.Hewithdrewhishand(收回他的手)andslowlycontinued，

＂Youdeservethemoneyandthemoneyisyoursnow.＂

I

was

surprised

that

my

dad

allowed

me

to

use

the

money

as

I

wished.Inamoment，

Ididn’tknowwhattosay.Withthismoney，Icouldbuyanewfootball，oranewbike.

Ilookedatmydadwithgratitude，andhesmiledawkwardly，

＂Useitwisely，son.＂

Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim，Iflushedwithshame(羞红了脸).Although

lifehadn’tbeenfairtohim，hehadtriedhisbesttomakeitfairtome.Meanwhile，I

alsorealizedtherewasaburdenthatIshouldshoulderinmyfamily.热考话题3师生关系

[2023新高考Ⅰ]WhenIwasinmiddleschool，mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmeto

enterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.Myfamilycame

fromBrazil，soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.Writingwassodifficultand

painfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingofthe

Titanicbyactingoutaplay，whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhe

did.So，whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail？His

reply：

＂BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself，Ithinkyou

haveagoodshotatthis.＂Encouragedbyhiswords，Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)in

BostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18，1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethat

Britishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Nota

brilliantidea，butfunny；andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink，ashespedthroughthenight？Didhegettired？Have

doubts？Didhewanttoquit？Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.I

wantedtoquit.But，likeRevere’shorse，Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmy

spelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooks

onPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher，hereadit，laughedoutloud，and

said，

＂Great.Now，writeitagain.＂Iwroteitagain，andagainandagain.WhenI

finallyfinishedit，thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin，Iwouldn’tcare.Afewweekslater，whenIalmostforgotthecontest，therecamethenews.

⁠

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

⁠

人物主要人物＂I＂：从文中描述的＂saidnowithoutthinking＂

＂difficult

andpainfulforme＂

＂Iagreedtogiveitatry＂

＂wantedtoquit...Ikept

going...checkedmyspelling...correctmygrammar...readafewofthem＂

＂wroteitagain，andagainandagain＂可以看出，＂我＂起初缺乏自信，但随后变得努力勤奋、信念坚定。

次要人物mysocialstudiesteacher：

从文中描述的＂Noonelaughed

harderthanhedid＂

＂Iloveyourstories...youhaveagoodshotatthis＂

＂laughedoutloud，andsaid，‘Great.Now，writeitagain.’＂可知，

＂我＂的社会科学老师乐观开朗，关心、理解、支持、鼓励学生。为续写第二段＂我＂来到老师办公室表达对老师的感激之情奠定了基础。情节及情感线社会科学老师要＂我＂参加写作比赛(＂我＂很抗拒，直接拒绝)→他

鼓励＂我＂参加比赛(＂我＂受到鼓舞，决定试试)→＂我＂选定主题开始

写作(纠结、自我怀疑，但还是继续坚持)→＂我＂一遍遍修改、润色文章

(已经不在意能否得奖)主题通过＂我＂前后对待写作的态度的强烈反差，体现了要持之以恒地努

力，克服困难并从中获得乐趣和成长的主题；同时根据续写第二段提示语

可知，本文也体现了良师益友这一主题，赞美了老师对学生润物细无声的

引导和鼓励。

续写第一

段衔接本段首句的thenews，接下来应该是得到获奖的消息、听到消息

后＂我＂的反应；衔接第二段首句，本段还应该讲到颁奖典礼上发生的事

情，尾句落脚点在回想老师对自己的帮助，与第二段首句完美连贯起来。

本段重点描写消息引发的一系列心理活动和动作。续写第二

段衔接本段首句，接下来应该是老师得知＂我＂获奖后的反应、＂我＂

对老师的回应；尾句升华主题：个人感悟，这件事对＂我＂的深远影响。

本段重点描写＂我＂到办公室后师生间的互动，可通过对话、动作、心理

描写等刻画细节。

1.Ifeltexcited.①用短语beoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief替换feelexcited，体现用词的丰

富性。Iwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief.②用so...that结构改写句①，引出＂我＂听到消息后激动的身体表现。Iwassooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.③用倒装结构改写句②，更加凸显＂我＂得知获奖时的激动心情。SooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefwasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.2.IfeltexcitedandproudwhenIacceptedtheprize.①用现在分词短语作状语改写句子并增加副词修饰，丰富句式结构。Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedtheprize.②为句①增加＂我＂的获奖感悟，照应前文＂我＂写作时的坚持和努力，使前后文

衔接更紧密。Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedtheprize，asymbolandrecognitionof

mypastperseveranceandhardwork.3.Hecongratulatedme，andIexpressedmythankstohim.①用对话形式展现＂我＂与老师的互动，使故事情节发展更加自然、顺畅。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid.＂Thankyouforyour

encouragement.＂②为句①中老师对＂我＂的获奖感到开心增加肢体动作描写；并用虚拟语气表达

＂我＂对老师的感激之情。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，

huggingmetightly.＂Thank

you.Iwouldn’tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂③为句②中＂我＂对老师的感激之情增加心理细节描写，使我对老师的感激跃然纸

上，更具有画面感。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，huggingmetightly.＂Thank

you.Iwouldn’tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂

Asenseofgratitude

welledupfromthebottomofmyheart.

A

few

weeks

later，

when

I

almost

forgot

the

contest，

there

came

the

news.Iwon

firstplace！

Sooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief(如此兴奋和难以置信)wasI

thatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.Finallycamethebigday！Whenmynamewas

announced，Iwalkedontothestageagainstwildcheersandthunderousapplause(在热烈

的欢呼声和雷鸣般的掌声中).Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedthe

prize，asymbolandrecognitionofmypastperseveranceandhardwork.Thinkingabout

this，Ishedtearsofgratitude(流下感激的泪水)，astherewasonespecialpersonwho

meantalottome.I

went

to

my

teacher’s

office

after

the

award

presentation.＂Congratulations！I

knewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，huggingmetightly.＂Thankyou.Iwouldn’tbewhat

Iamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂

Asenseofgratitudewelledupfromthebottom

ofmyheart(感激之情从我的心底涌出).Pattingmyshoulder，hesmiled，

＂Itisyour

effortsthatcountmost.＂Fromthenon，IbegantoburymyselfinEnglishwriting.With

myteacher’sinspiration，Ideterminedtokeeponchallengingmyselfandembracea

betterme.热考话题4同学关系

[2022浙江1月改编]WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning(指定)projectmatesforhis

psychologyclass，Isecretlyhopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleasta

classmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall，Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetowork

withthefiercelycompetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothes

andapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate(命运)wouldhaveit，Dr.Henderson

verydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwith

theonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughI

weren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehim

failtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn’tmeanorabusive；hejustgavemetheimpression

thathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Needlesstosay，Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff，butI

triedtomakethebestofitanddidn’tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis(假说)，setupanexperiment

totestthehypothesis，dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergrade

theteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject，Iwasuneasy.Herewasthis

challengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades—the

exactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint，butstoppedshort

becauseIdidn’twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtostick

toitnomatterwhat.Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwell-

beingofteenagers.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeantexactly，butatleastwehadatopic.Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

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OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.

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人物主要人物myteammate：文中描述的＂fiercelycompetitiveand

extremelyserious＂

＂dowhateverproject...betterifhediditalone＂和＂had

areputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades＂表明，myteammate成

绩优异、性情高傲、学习专注、好胜心强，且＂我＂和＂我＂的队友关系

冷淡，似乎互相看不上对方。

主要人物＂I＂：从文中描述的＂makethebestofitanddidn’tsay

anything＂

＂single-mindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeof

me＂和＂decidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat＂可以看出，＂我＂学习成绩

一般、性情随和、努力且不轻言放弃。两个主要人物几乎相反的性格为续写部分两人合作中的摩擦埋下了伏

笔，第五段尾句＂Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat＂也为续写部分

＂我＂在项目中起到积极作用奠定了基础。情节及情感线

＂我＂被安排与一位自己原本想避开的同学合作(感到自己很不

幸)→＂我＂主动向队友介绍自己，却被冷漠对待(感觉自己被忽视，同时

很担心俩人的合作)→＂我＂与队友会面讨论项目(面对优秀的队友，

＂我＂自惭形秽，想放弃但又不甘心，于是决定坚持)→最终确定了课题(感到一丝宽慰)主题根据续写两段提示语可知，＂我＂和队友开始逐渐进入状态，但队友

却因病住院，结合读后续写＂结局圆满＂的原则可以推测，＂我＂和队友

在合作上应该是从消极配合到积极参与，最终研究项目一定会成功。文章

最终是要体现战胜困难、精诚合作、队友情深的主题。

续写第一段根据原文中讲到的人物性格特征和续写第一段的提示语可知，本段主

要讲＂我＂和队友定期碰面推进项目、相互磨合的情景，主要通过叙述和

心理描写展现搭档在推进项目中的表现、＂我＂对此的反应、俩人关系的

发展情况。续写第二段根据续写第二段提示语以及续写＂故事曲折，结局圆满＂的原则可

知，本段应该主要讲述在得知队友生病后，＂我＂的反应、＂我＂对待项

目的态度、为了最终完成项目＂我＂做了哪些努力等。尾句可以升华主

题：＂我们＂意识到了团队合作的重要性。

1.Hetookchargeoftheproject.①增加副词，凸显队友的专权。Hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.②为句①补充as引导的原因状语从句，讲述队友专权的原因。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.③为句②补充结果，并运用现在分词短语作状语，讲述队友专权对＂我＂的影响，

体现初期合作的不顺畅。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，

leaving

medoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.2.Iwenttothehospital.①增加副词，并用hurry替换句中的go，体现＂我＂想去探望队友的急切心情。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital.②为句①增加定语从句，讲述＂我＂在医院了解到的情况，使故事性更强，情节更

完整。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，

whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalized

forquiteawhile.3.Itriedhardtodotheproject.①用putallmyheartinto替换tryhard，体现用词的丰富性。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheproject.②用原文中的表达细化句①中做项目的过程，使情节发展更加自然完整。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheanalysisandpresentingourfindings.③用with复合结构优化句②，并用副词体现＂我＂分析和呈现结果的状态，凸显

＂我＂的努力和认真。Withallmyheartputintotheproject，Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedour

findingsreasonably.

We

started

to

meet

regularly

to

draw

up

our

plans.Ashewasafiercelycompetitive

fellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，leavingmedoingnothingbutsimply

followinghisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling(尽管不情愿)，Ididmypartbut

diditinablindway.Astheprojectprogressed，Iseemedtogetthetrick，whichbuilt

upmyconfidence(增强了我的信心)andmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthis

point，westartedtoreallyworkasateam.

One

day

I

got

word

that

he

was

admitted

to

the

hospital

for

a

serious

disease.

Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalized

forquiteawhile.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhisface(看着他脸上的忧虑

和虚弱)，IassuredhimthatIwouldcarryonwithourproject.Withallmyheartputinto

theproject(我全身心投入到这个项目中)，Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresented

ourfindingsreasonably.Eventually，ourhardworkpaidoffandDr.Hendersonwasvery

satisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject，webothlearnedthatoneperson

cangofar，butagroupofpeoplecantravelfarther(一个人可以走很远，但一群人可以

走得更远).热考话题5温馨家庭

[2021新高考Ⅰ]

A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywere

planningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybrought

herbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhad

watchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactly

whattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairs

quietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapot

ofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoa

plateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next，Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime，sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenext

minute，theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully，Jeff

stayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeff

tocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shand

touchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincold

water.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhad

turnedblackaswell.

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment，theirfatherappeared.

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Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

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人物主要人物：thetwins(JennaandJeff)；次要人物：theirmotherand

father。根据原文中的描述＂theythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanning

forMother’sDay＂和＂theybroughtherbreakfastinbed＂可以看出，双胞

胎孝顺、懂得感恩。场景故事发生在母亲节当天早上，双胞胎为母亲做早餐，故原文故事情节

的地点在家里的厨房。情节及情感线双胞胎筹划在母亲节那天给母亲做早餐、制造惊喜(感到很兴奋)→准

备早餐时，刚开始一切进展顺利(感到很自信)→面包糊了，粥溢出来了，

Jeff烫伤了(惊慌失措)→续写第一段提示语，双胞胎慌乱失望时，父亲出

现了(担心父亲责备)→续写第二段提示语，早餐做好，给母亲惊喜(满怀期

待和兴奋)主题双胞胎要在母亲节早上为母亲做一顿早餐，＂thesurprise＂体现了他

们的意图，＂HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbe＂是他们希望看到的

结果。再根据续写提示语可知，双胞胎在父亲的帮助下完成了惊喜早餐，

因此文章最终应展现子女感恩父母，父母为子女感到骄傲和自豪，一家人

其乐融融的温馨画面。

续写第一段本段主要描述＂救星＂父亲出场后的场景。根据首句提示语可知，接

下来应该描述：父亲看到杂乱的厨房会有什么反应，会说什么或做什么。

尾句衔接续写第二段提示语：在父亲的帮助下，双胞胎做好了早餐。因此

中间应描写父亲了解原因、帮助双胞胎整理厨房和准备早餐等，侧重人物

间的互动，强调动作、心理、表情描写。续写